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Posted 9/1/08

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Hey ppl, if u like the story, I would like to know what u think about it!
Domo!


Yeah. It would be nice if someone besides myself commented on this.
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Posted 9/2/08

The_8th_Sin wrote:


yaidoll wrote:

Hey ppl, if u like the story, I would like to know what u think about it!
Domo!


Yeah. It would be nice if someone besides myself commented on this.


Haha, I hear u on that one, and u know what's even worse that ppl r reading it! I know because everytime I come to the group the views keep going up, so I know they r reading it, but still it would b nice to know what they think. I'm glad that u always comment on it and give me pointers on how I can make it better.
Oh yeah, nice work on that last ep of your story, really good!
Thanks for commenting! lols.
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I've only read the first two chapters, and I just want to ask if there is any need to have so many new lines start when a sentence isn't even done. Also, there are huge amounts of unnecessary commas.

As for the storyline, it grabs my interest, even if the present tense narrator is sometimes confusing and feels a bit awkward. The episodes are just a tad short (though I've only read two).

I really don't know enough to say more except grammar, something which I'm sure you don't particularly want to hear about. Sorry, but I had to comment or else you'd go on saying that nobody has commented except 8th, and I felt a need to at least let you know I will TRY to read this if I get the time.
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Posted 9/4/08

Jojiro wrote:

I've only read the first two chapters, and I just want to ask if there is any need to have so many new lines start when a sentence isn't even done. Also, there are huge amounts of unnecessary commas.

As for the storyline, it grabs my interest, even if the present tense narrator is sometimes confusing and feels a bit awkward. The episodes are just a tad short (though I've only read two).

I really don't know enough to say more except grammar, something which I'm sure you don't particularly want to hear about. Sorry, but I had to comment or else you'd go on saying that nobody has commented except 8th, and I felt a need to at least let you know I will TRY to read this if I get the time.


Haha, thanks a lot! Keep on reading the story will get much better as u go along and u'll understand it better in the fallowing chapters. About the grammer, I don't mind ppl telling me about it, but thats what I have do deal with by working with a Jap software.

Anyways, glad the story grabs your interest and thanks for commenting!
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Posted 9/5/08
Hey, ppl, I'll post the next ep tomorrow. I know I was suposed to post it today, but I have ran into some technical difficulties, so I'll have to do it tomorrow. I'm really sry for making u all wait!
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Posted 9/6/08
Hey everyone, sry for making u wait, here it is, at last episode 11! Enjoy and don't forget to coment on it.
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Posted 9/13/08
Well, another delay, this time is not because of the comp, its due to some huge project at school. I apollogice to all of u who r currently reading this story. I don't like to go out of my set dead lines, but its unavoidable, I'll try my best to post the next ep at the middle of this week, or during the weekend at the latest! Gomen ne!
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Posted 9/15/08
(Update)

Ok guys, here is ep 12 of this manga, hope u read it and enjoy!
that is, if school permits it! lols.
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Posted 9/18/08
Hey minna, since this manga is the feature of the month, I've posted some character profiles, they aren't great, but at least they'll help u guys understand a little more the overall idea of the story.
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Posted 10/10/08
Episode 13


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Hey guys, after the much antisipated and delayed wait, here it is episode 13.
A little warrning to those squimish ppl, there r some pg 13 sceens in this ep, so do your best, also there is action and a nice surprice for guys who love a good car shace + a little something for the girls, I haven't forgoten any of u.


Thanks for waiting and enjoy!
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Posted 10/18/08
Hey ppl, I wont b able to post the fallowing ep of this manga this week like I promised, Its very hard for me right now to transcrive it to the comp. But I promise that by next week, or the fallowing one I'll have the new ep posted.
Thanks everyone for reading and for your support!
*hugs to all of u*
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that was sooo sweet! i love ur story!!!i'll be waiting 4 the next update
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Well after more then a year, here is season II of the series, hope u all enjoy, btw, it will now b closely related to actual rl events, so u can bet the action will b very controvertial and on high levels.
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Posted 11/12/09

Episode 14


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