Post Reply review forum- Amuto and the embryo
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Posted 8/13/08
the link ^^ http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4409228/1/
Posted 8/14/08

adelutzys wrote:

the link ^^ http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4409228/1/


I'll put ur story on a page, then this will be the review forum...is that ok?
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Posted 8/14/08
okay xD
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Posted 8/23/08
can i comment on the grammar and others... from the 1st?
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Posted 8/23/08

micahkei wrote:

can i comment on the grammar and others... from the 1st?


nope cuz I already have a beta to do it xD U just say what you think If it sucks or if it's good xD If it deserves to be called a story or if it deserves to be thrown to the recycle bin
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Posted 8/23/08
well... its a PASS!!! haha its just grammar correction and sentence construction...
I liked it... Just the 1st part though since its the only thing i've read... ^^
I was surprised by the "Ikuto and Amu at night" part...
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Posted 8/23/08

micahkei wrote:

well... its a PASS!!! haha its just grammar correction and sentence construction...
I liked it... Just the 1st part though since its the only thing i've read... ^^
I was surprised by the "Ikuto and Amu at night" part...


I'm from Roamnia and I don't know what to think about my english It's between good and average. That was the first chapter I ever written and that's why I merged a lot of tenses...But after the first one you'll see my improving xD
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Posted 8/23/08

adelutzys wrote:

I'm from Roamnia and I don't know what to think about my english It's between good and average. That was the first chapter I ever written and that's why I merged a lot of tenses...But after the first one you'll see my improving xD


No problem with that... ^^
Not everyone is great in English, obviously not even me...
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