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OMGosh!!
that's so cool!! ^^,
your dad is soOoo funny!!
and yay!!
I'm there!! haha
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rofl he's not my dad, it's ruri's dad xD
and yuppp your there! getting your debut in my fanfic! rofl
haha thnx for reading my fanfic! your friggin awesome xD
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oh yeah!!
haha!!
Ruri's dad ne?? xDDD

You're the one who's AWESOME!!
I just love everything you write!! ^-^
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ahaha..yeah ur really awesome yuuki chan!!!i guess ur right that the first part was funny..for some reason i laughed out so hard which turns out weird to me...haha..

ur dad der is soo hilarious!...by the looks of it, it seems fun to have that kind of father...
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haha i wish i had a dad like dat..haha
and thanx for commenting & reading my fanfic geh-chan!
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kyaaaaa~
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loveee it!
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next one please~
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love it!
more plz ^^
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Posted 8/17/08
next part might be..boring xD
eh..sorry if it bores you to death x__X
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I'm sure it's won't bore me!!
btw..are you going to post in now?? ^-^
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soon rofl
i needs to type it :]
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okay!!
I'll wait for it!! ^-^
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Ch. 1
Part Two

Ruri walks into the dining room.

Ruri: Dad! I’m home!
Dad: Ruri! Who’s that boy that was walking with you! I hope he’s not your boyfriend!
Ruri: Oh dad, it’s just a friend.
Dad: Ruri! Don’t lie to me!
Ruri: Fine! He’s my BOYFRIEND!!
Dad: WHAAAAT?! *falls back on his chair*
Ruri: Oh, don’t be so dramatic! Oh yea! I’m going to the movies with Yurina and Minako.
Dad: Ruri, your gonna leave your old pops all alone? With no dinner?
Ruri: geesh, you can make your own dinner, and if you can’t, I guess starve? Well, I got to go! Bye!

Ruri runs out the door.
Dad: Nooo~! *slumps in his chair*

Ruri rode the train to the 109 cinemas, and met with her friends.

Ruri: Hey guys! Sorry to invite you so sudden.
Minako: It’s okay! I had nothing to do this evening anyways.
Yurina: Yea, me too. How’s your dad Ruri? Is he doing good at his job?
Ruri: *sigh* You had to ask that question.
Yurina: huh?
Ruri: The other day, he came home crying because the criminal’s daughter yelled at him.
Minako: Hahahahahaha! Wow, your dad is sooo funny!
Yurina: Yea! *laughing*
Ruri: -_- I wish my dad was cooler, like Ryu!
Minako: Ha-ha-ha… that would never happen
Yurina: Yea, it would take about a hundred years!
Ruri: Well, lets stop talking about my dad and go watch the movie.
Yurina & Minako: Okay~!

They buy the tickets to watch “Akai Ito” and enter the 109 cinemas.

~At Ruri’s house~
Dad: *sneezes and rubs nose* I wonder if I caught a cold.

Ruri’s dad was making an omelet, but he forgot to turn the heat down, and when he came back into the kitchen, the egg was all black and burnt.

Dad: T__T RURI~!!!!!


~At the movie theater~
Ruri: *looks back* huh?
Yurina: What’s wrong?
Ruri: Oh, nothing. I thought I heard my dad calling my name. masaka ne...(That’s impossible)

While Ruri and her friends were at the movie theater, something bad was about to happen

Asuma: Ryu, can you think of a logical explanation to this murder case?
Ryu: hmm…*looking at the body* The suspect might be trying to tell us something.
Asuma: What do you mean?
Ryu: well, I got this call a few minutes ago saying “The show has just begun.” But I don’t get it. What show?
Asuma: You should be careful.

Someone walks in the room.

Goto: Asuma-san, is my husband here?
Asuma: oh, Eri-san, Mr. Asagata left a while ago.
Ryu: *thinks* Oh no! Ruri’s dad might of seen me walk her home…agh…
Goto: I see. *looks at Ryu* Who’s this young fellow?
Asuma: Oh, that’s Ryu.
Ryu: Nice to meet you. My name is Ichimiya Ryu.
Goto: Nice to meet you too. I am Goto Eri, you might know my daughter, Ruri.
Ryu: *thinking* Wow, Ruri’s mom is pretty. Yes, I am going out with her.
Goto: Oh! Really? Would you like to go out to dinner with us Sunday night?
Ryu: Uh…sure? *thinking* I guess this will make up for not going to the movies tonight.
Goto: Okay, I will tell Ruri to call you the time and place. Buh-Bye now!
Ryu: Bye…?
Asuma: Haha, your in a tough one.
Ryu: What do you mean?
Asuma: Eri-san goes out to dinner with Ruri-san and Mr. Asagata. And they always have a fight.
Ryu: *gulp* you mean, Mr. Asagata would be there?!
Asuma: Yea? Why?
Ryu: WHY DIDN’T YOU STOP ME?!
Asuma: eh?
Ryu: *holds head* Never mind -__-

Ryu’s phone rings again.

Ryu: Hello?
Voice: Hello again, Ichimiya-kun.
Ryu: *motions to Asuma to record the voice* What do you want now? And what did you mean by “The show has begun?”
Voice: That is for me to know, and for you to find out. *chuckles*
Ryu: That’s low.
Voice: Is that supposed to be a threat?
Ryu: No, but are you the suspect that killed that man last night?

Phone hangs up.

Ryu: Tch, he hung up on me.
Asuma: Well, I tracked the phone number, but it was from a public telephone booth.
Ryu: *slams his fist on the table and thinks* ow…
Asuma: Well, it’s getting late, you should go home.
Ryu: Alright.

Ryu takes his bag (like the one in tantei gakuen q) and walks out the door of the police station.
As he was walking to his house, he had many thoughts flashing through his head.

~~Next Morning~~
Ring, Ring!!
Ryu: Ugh…who’s calling at this hour? *picks up phone* hello?

Ryu sits up.
Ryu: Asuma-san got shot?!

Ryu ran to the hospital where Asuma was in.

Ryu: What happened?
Asuma: heh, I was jogging in the park this morning. And someone shot my stomach. It’s just a minor injury.
Ryu: *sigh of relief* Who would do such a thing?
Asuma: Who else?
Ryu: hmm. Could you see who did it?
Asuma: Nope.
Doctor: Mr. Asuma will have to rest now, please go home.
Ryu: Yes’sir, Asuma-san please get well.
Doctor: He will be able to go back tomorrow, but he will have to take it easy, or his injury will open.
Ryu: Okay.

Ryu leaves Asuma’s room and talks to the police officer that went to the place where the crime took place to find any clues.
Ryu: Any clues?
Police Officer: All we could find, was a dagger in the bushes, a few feet from where Asuma-sempai was shot. *shows him the picture*
Ryu: I see. *thinks* I’ve seen this somewhere.
Police Officer: What do you think?
Ryu: I don’t know, yet.
Police Officer: Alright, but the others and I will keep a close eye.
Ryu: Be careful.

Ryu walks away.

~~END~~
What did the dagger mean?
What will happen next?
find out in the next part~~ haha


Ryu: Nice to meet you. My name is Ichimiya Ryu.
Goto: Nice to meet you too. I am Goto Eri, you might know my daughter, Ruri.
Ryu: *thinking* Wow, Ruri’s mom is pretty. Yes, I am going out with her.
Goto: Oh! Really? Would you like to go out to dinner with us Sunday night?
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That part is going to change to...

Ryu: Good Evening Mrs. Asagata. My name is Ichimiya Ryu.
Goto: OMGosh! Ryu-chan?! Is that really you?
Ryu: yea?
Goto: Asuma-kun! This kid lives on my husband's block! My daughter used to play with him when she was young! You have grown to be a handsome young man!
Ryu: ano~, i'm going out with Ruri.
Goto: THAT'S WONDERFUL!
Ryu: o__O
Goto: Would you like to go out to dinner with us Sunday night?
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wow!!
I see..
they've known each other long before ne?? ^-^
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Posted 8/18/08 , edited 8/27/08
yuup~ cuz they are childhood friends...remember? fourteen years they've known each other :]
Edit: Ten years..rofl
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This is so interesting!! ^______^ I really like it!
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