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i got this idea from AngeLiliana's post in the your opinions forum, i re-arranged it a bit and formed this ^^. here goes: best short story wins; may it be adventure, romance, horror, some combination of the three, or etc, its welcome here ^__^

+ your story should have characters
+ its okay if you include some details from certain animes but don't base it entirely on them
+ is all =P

EDIT: If I must...
I updated this thing. I don't know about judging and stuff but here were all of the entries of people that are still on the site.

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“It’s okay, Suzen, It’s not your fault.” Said Dr. Waler
“Yes it is! If I had taken ten minutes to think about my choice, this wouldn’t have happened!” I said as I stared at my stomach “I’ve probably gained ten pounds from emotional eatting over the last week.” I thought sadly
“Just calm down and tell me what happened” he said
“W-w-well, i-it all started on J-J-January the eleventh.”
**********************************************************************
I was walking down the hall when I heard my best friend, Jill, calling me. “Hey Suzen! What happened last night? I tried to call you to tell you something really important, but you wouldn’t answer!” she said, practically screaming in my ear.
“Sorry, lights out at ten,” I said, “but I’m here now, so what do you want to tell me?”
“Well you know Chanler, right?”
“Right”
“Well, he told me… Wait, I shouldn’t tell you……”
“Just spill it.”
“Well, he told me that he was going to….ask you out….”
The bell rang, I couldn’t move. My body felt heavy, and my throat was dry. Jill’s words still echoed through my head “Chanler is going to ask you out, ask you out, ask you out………”
“Excuse me Miss. Taler,” I turned around, my trance thankfully broken, only to see that my savior was Mrs. Linin (my math teacher) standing behind me with pursed lips.
“As if I don’t have enough to deal with,” I thought.
“I believe the bell has rung, Miss. Taler,” she sighed “I will ignore it today, but make sure, in the near future, that you actually go inside the classroom.”
**********************************************************************
Class was over; I looked around to see if Chanler was in the hallway. “At least he isn’t following me,” I happily thought. I stepped outside, my heart pounding like crazy, and all of a sudden, I feel a hand on my shoulder.
I knew that grip anywhere, it was Chanler! “Shoot he is following me!” I thought. I sprinted forward and ran to my next class “Why did Jill have to tell me?” I though while looking back to see a very sad friend that knew he had been betrayed.
**********************************************************************
“Why don’t you just talk to him?” Jill asked at lunch.
“You know how shy I am,” I replied. Jill gave me that I-know-your-lying look. “Okay maybe not that shy, but you know what I mean!”
“Look, he is going to follow you forever if you don’t talk to him, and I will to!” she said with a determined look on her face.
“Why can’t they just leave me alone?” I thought. “FINE!” I yelled.
“Good,” she said while handing me a note.
“Why do I feel like I’ve just been tricked?” My face went white as I read the letter.

______________________
Meet me after school
-Chanler
______________________

**********************************************************************
I couldn’t help it, I chickened out. “I didn’t think I would have to talk to him today!” I thought
When school was out, I ran outside without even grabbing my back-pack. Chanler spotted me, and chased me. “Look Suzen! I just want to talk!” he screamed
“So that’s where Jill got her speech from,” I thought “I really have to get her a hobby”
“SUZEN!” Chanler yelled. I ran through traffic right before the sign said not to walk. “That should stop him” I thought pleasantly. I started to walk home when I heard a bang. “Oh, no,” I thought.
I turned around and saw Chanler, lying face down with a pool of blood underneath him.
**********************************************************************
“He died before my eyes!” I told Dr.Waler, tears streaming down my face, “and its all my fault!”
“How did you react to this? Did you realize something?” he asked
“Aren’t you supposed to make me feel better?” I thought bitterly. Then, it hit me. At that moment, when I last saw Chanler, I realized how much I really did love him.
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okay, theres my short story.........









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“It’s okay, Suzen, It’s not your fault.” Said Dr. Waler
“Yes it is! If I had taken ten minutes to think about my choice, this wouldn’t have happened!” I said as I stared at my stomach “I’ve probably gained ten pounds over the last week.” I thought sadly
“Just calm down and tell me what happened” he said
“W-w-well, i-it all started on J-J-January the eleventh.”
**********************************************************************
I was walking down the hall when I heard my best friend, Jill, calling me. “Hey Suzen! What happened last night? I tried to call you to tell you something really important, but you wouldn’t answer!” she said, practically screaming in my ear.
“Sorry, lights out at ten,” I said, “but I’m here now, so what do you want to tell me?”
“Well you know Chanler, right?”
“Right”
“Well, he told me… Wait, I shouldn’t tell you……”
“Just spill it.”
“Well, he told me that he was going to….ask you out….”
The bell rang, I couldn’t move. My body felt heavy, and my throat was dry. Jill’s words still echoed through my head “Chanler is going to ask you out, ask you out, ask you out………”
“Excuse me Miss. Taler,” I turned around, my trance thankfully broken, only to see that my savior was Mrs. Linin (my math teacher) standing behind me with pursed lips.
“As if I don’t have enough to deal with,” I thought.
“I believe the bell has rung, Miss. Taler,” she sighed “I will ignore it today, but make sure, in the near future, that you actually go inside the classroom.”
**********************************************************************
Class was over; I looked around to see if Chanler was in the hallway. “At least he isn’t following me,” I happily thought. I stepped outside, my heart pounding like crazy, and all of a sudden, I feel a hand on my shoulder.
I knew that grip anywhere, it was Chanler! “Shoot he is following me!” I thought. I sprinted forward and ran to my next class “Why did Jill have to tell me?” I though while looking back to see a very sad friend that knew he had been betrayed.
**********************************************************************
“Why don’t you just talk to him?” Jill asked at lunch.
“You know how shy I am,” I replied. Jill gave me that I-know-your-lying look. “Okay maybe not that shy, but you know what I mean!”
“Look, he is going to follow you forever if you don’t talk to him, and I will to!” she said with a determined look on her face.
“Why can’t they just leave me alone?” I thought. “FINE!” I yelled.
“Good,” she said while handing me a note.
“Why do I feel like I’ve just been tricked?” My face went white as I read the letter.

______________________
Meet me after school
-Chanler
______________________

**********************************************************************
I couldn’t help it, I chickened out. “I didn’t think I would have to talk to him today!” I thought
When school was out, I ran outside without even grabbing my back-pack. Chanler spotted me, and chased me. “Look Suzen! I just want to talk!” he screamed
“So that’s where Jill got her speech from,” I thought “I really have to get her a hobby”
“SUZEN!” Chanler yelled. I ran through traffic right before the sign said not to walk. “That should stop him” I thought pleasantly. I started to walk home when I heard a bang. “Oh, no,” I thought.
I turned around and saw Chanler, lying face down with a pool of blood underneath him.
**********************************************************************
“He died before my eyes!” I told Dr.Waler, tears streaming down my face, “and its all my fault!”
“How did you react to this? Did you realize something?” he asked
“Aren’t you supposed to make me feel better?” I thought bitterly. Then, it hit me. At that moment, when I last saw Chanler, I realized how much I really did love him.
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okay, theres my short story.........











Holy snap that was the best short story i have ever heard it's so awesome !!!!! XD
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SO SAD!! T_T
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d3vilang3l333 wrote:


“It’s okay, Suzen, It’s not your fault.” Said Dr. Waler
“Yes it is! If I had taken ten minutes to think about my choice, this wouldn’t have happened!” I said as I stared at my stomach “I’ve probably gained ten pounds over the last week.” I thought sadly
“Just calm down and tell me what happened” he said
“W-w-well, i-it all started on J-J-January the eleventh.”
**********************************************************************
I was walking down the hall when I heard my best friend, Jill, calling me. “Hey Suzen! What happened last night? I tried to call you to tell you something really important, but you wouldn’t answer!” she said, practically screaming in my ear.
“Sorry, lights out at ten,” I said, “but I’m here now, so what do you want to tell me?”
“Well you know Chanler, right?”
“Right”
“Well, he told me… Wait, I shouldn’t tell you……”
“Just spill it.”
“Well, he told me that he was going to….ask you out….”
The bell rang, I couldn’t move. My body felt heavy, and my throat was dry. Jill’s words still echoed through my head “Chanler is going to ask you out, ask you out, ask you out………”
“Excuse me Miss. Taler,” I turned around, my trance thankfully broken, only to see that my savior was Mrs. Linin (my math teacher) standing behind me with pursed lips.
“As if I don’t have enough to deal with,” I thought.
“I believe the bell has rung, Miss. Taler,” she sighed “I will ignore it today, but make sure, in the near future, that you actually go inside the classroom.”
**********************************************************************
Class was over; I looked around to see if Chanler was in the hallway. “At least he isn’t following me,” I happily thought. I stepped outside, my heart pounding like crazy, and all of a sudden, I feel a hand on my shoulder.
I knew that grip anywhere, it was Chanler! “Shoot he is following me!” I thought. I sprinted forward and ran to my next class “Why did Jill have to tell me?” I though while looking back to see a very sad friend that knew he had been betrayed.
**********************************************************************
“Why don’t you just talk to him?” Jill asked at lunch.
“You know how shy I am,” I replied. Jill gave me that I-know-your-lying look. “Okay maybe not that shy, but you know what I mean!”
“Look, he is going to follow you forever if you don’t talk to him, and I will to!” she said with a determined look on her face.
“Why can’t they just leave me alone?” I thought. “FINE!” I yelled.
“Good,” she said while handing me a note.
“Why do I feel like I’ve just been tricked?” My face went white as I read the letter.

______________________
Meet me after school
-Chanler
______________________

**********************************************************************
I couldn’t help it, I chickened out. “I didn’t think I would have to talk to him today!” I thought
When school was out, I ran outside without even grabbing my back-pack. Chanler spotted me, and chased me. “Look Suzen! I just want to talk!” he screamed
“So that’s where Jill got her speech from,” I thought “I really have to get her a hobby”
“SUZEN!” Chanler yelled. I ran through traffic right before the sign said not to walk. “That should stop him” I thought pleasantly. I started to walk home when I heard a bang. “Oh, no,” I thought.
I turned around and saw Chanler, lying face down with a pool of blood underneath him.
**********************************************************************
“He died before my eyes!” I told Dr.Waler, tears streaming down my face, “and its all my fault!”
“How did you react to this? Did you realize something?” he asked
“Aren’t you supposed to make me feel better?” I thought bitterly. Then, it hit me. At that moment, when I last saw Chanler, I realized how much I really did love him.
-------------------------------------------------------------



okay, theres my short story.........











Holy snap that was the best short story i have ever heard it's so awesome !!!!! XD


lol, thanks
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is there a limit for the words?


nope, it can be as long as possible~ xP
Posted 8/19/08 , edited 8/19/08
MY ENTRY~!



--Uhh this is a Naruto Fiction-- And Naruto's not mine ^^ its owned by Kishimoto^^. But i own this story though

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.-'MR. DEMANDING'-.
-By: Xx_ciael_xX



in Sakura's Point of View


Sasuke’s been back for two years from the clutches of Orochimaru and the fact that his mission to kill his brother was a success.

I changed. I’m not Ms. Fan girl anymore. My feelings for Sasuke went with the wind. It's gone. My heart beats no more for that certain Uchiha.

Actually, I cant stand him! He’s being a jerk. Before, he doesn’t care. But now he’s always ‘don't do this’ and ‘don't do that’. I know I should be happy for him, coz his ‘I-don’t-care’ attitude is gone. But he’s being superior…to me. I don’t know why.

In missions, he always say “Stay here.” And if I follow, I just get scolded. Does he still think I’m still the weak kunoichi years before? I’m a Chuunin. I can even do a solo mission by myself, but I always end up being paired up with him and Naruto. Well, Naruto is not a problem but we’re not Genins anymore.

XxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxX

I and Sasuke, Naruto, Hinata and Shikamaru went on an ‘S-class’ mission sometime this year.

It was to eliminate two wanted assassins. We traveled country to country following the assassins’ route. We ended up at the green-tea country, a small country at the northern side.

We caught track of them. The last thing that we need to do, was to make the first attack, But mr. Demanding here just had to move the attack the next day. We could’ve done it that night! We camped at the woods not so close to the targets’.

At night, when everybody was asleep. I got up quietly. I planned to attack the pursuers by myself, it was a good chance to prove Sasuke that I’m not the weak kunoichi he thought I was.

I jumped from tree to tree entering the target’s base. But I got caught. The assassins were expecting us... Traps blew from side to side of the trees, I was dodging the attacks. An explosive seal boomed in front of me, I still can't see the targets. With that thick puff of smoke, who will? Fire blazing around me. But I just can’t give up now.

Declaimer’s P.O.V.

Sasuke was woken up by the smoke and the loud bangs. He got up, surprised not seeing Sakura. She’s gone! Naruto and the others were awaken by Sasuke aswell. They all hurried to the base. Sakura may have attacked them by herself, she cant do it! This is an S-class mission. Even a single jounin cant do it by himself.

The team reached the base. Sasuke saw Sakura suffocating from the smoke. He then saw the target making seals up about a high tree. With his quick moves, he attacked the attacker, electrifying him with his Chidori Nagashi. He gave the signal for the others to attack the assassins, while he’ll go get the pink-haired kunoichi.

He swiftly jumped at the puff of smoke. And the next thing Sakura knew, she was already at the hands of the raven-haired shinobi. He then laid her down at a tree, far from danger.

Back to Sakura’s P.O.V.

I woke up, with the team surrounding me. Sasuke doesn’t seem to look as good.

He then spoke. “Idiot.”

I was silent.

“What were you thinking?!” He said with a deep, angry voice as he punched the tree I was leaning on. “You’re weak, Sakura. You cant take them by yourself!” He continued.

Now, that struck me. I felt my hand rise up and my chakra focused unto it. It swifted back and the next thing I knew… I slapped him. His face turned. I knew that that really hurt.

“All you say is ‘do this’ and ‘do that’. I’m not weak, Sasuke. I’m not! You left me with faded memories. You don’t know me Sasuke and you never did! I’m not the twelve-year old girl you knew before. You’re a jerk, you’re so demanding about everything.!!” I said it with pride. “I hate you!” I yelled, as tears rolled down my cheeks. Yes I mean it, I do hate him.

I turned around, without looking back. I’ll never look back!

XxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxX

I reached back to Konoha the next evening. I recalled what he said. I recalled what I’ve said. I do hate him. I really do.

It was about midnight and I couldn’t sleep. I cant think of any reason why I cant. I then saw a shadow, not my shadow. I shut my eyes closed and didn’t bother to look. Somebody took a grasp of my hand and pulled me up.

A deep whisper echoed at my ear. “You left the window open.” I opened my eyes hearing a familiar voice.

Its him, Uchiha Sasuke! I looked sideways, not looking at his eyes. It kept me thinking. Why is he here?

“Do you really mean it?” He spoke.

My face was covered with confusion. What does he mean by, ‘do you really mean it?’.

“…Are you sure you hate me?” He spoke again.

I looked at his eyes. “Yes, I do.” I answered with pride.

He was silent. Waiting for me to say more.

“Sasuke, I’m not the fangirl whom you knew before. I’m different. I don’t have feelings for you anymore! When you left us….when you left me, my feelings for you vanished with the wind. I’m…not the same girl you left behind.” That was certain. It was for sure.

I was serious. I looked him in the eyes. He suddenly smirked. “Liar.” He murmured.

“You still have feelings for me, don’t you? You just locked your feelings up, and it’ll be back if you unlock it. I do…have the key.” He stated.

What? I don’t understand him. What does he mean? My mind was full of mere confusion.

He leaned forward and whispered at my ears. “If I kiss you now, will your feelings for me return?” I can feel his warm-breath pass through my skin.

I pushed him away. He gave me a mild smirk in reply. I don’t understand him! I don’t have feelings for him, right?

Right.

“You said I was demanding.—“ He stated.

Before he was able to finish was he was about to say, I already answered. “Yes.”

“…You said I was weak.” I continued.

“Yes.” He replied.

I gasped. Those words were still hitting me.

“..That’s why; I’ll protect you… my way.” I was surprised when he said that.

The next thing I knew, his face was an inch from mine.

He then whispered. “I demand… you to give me another chance and love me again.” After saying those confusing words, I felt his soft lips touch mine. When I opened my eyes, he was gone. My window was open as my curtains were carried by the breeze.

“…Ofcourse I will, Mr. demanding.”

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you might see grammar errors~ its cuz i only checked it once~ iiirrr... i know, its sooo long~ but i hope you liked it
Posted 8/19/08
I have the best short-story ever >:3

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Xx_ciael_xX wrote:

MY ENTRY~!



--Uhh this is a Naruto Fiction-- And Naruto's not mine ^^ its owned by Kishimoto^^. But i own this story though

xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

.-'MR. DEMANDING'-.
-By: Xx_ciael_xX



in Sakura's Point of View


Sasuke’s been back for two years from the clutches of Orochimaru and the fact that his mission to kill his brother was a success.

I changed. I’m not Ms. Fan girl anymore. My feelings for Sasuke went with the wind. It's gone. My heart beats no more for that certain Uchiha.

Actually, I cant stand him! He’s being a jerk. Before, he doesn’t care. But now he’s always ‘don't do this’ and ‘don't do that’. I know I should be happy for him, coz his ‘I-don’t-care’ attitude is gone. But he’s being superior…to me. I don’t know why.

In missions, he always say “Stay here.” And if I follow, I just get scolded. Does he still think I’m still the weak kunoichi years before? I’m a Chuunin. I can even do a solo mission by myself, but I always end up being paired up with him and Naruto. Well, Naruto is not a problem but we’re not Genins anymore.

XxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxX

I and Sasuke, Naruto, Hinata and Shikamaru went on an ‘S-class’ mission sometime this year.

It was to eliminate two wanted assassins. We traveled country to country following the assassins’ route. We ended up at the green-tea country, a small country at the northern side.

We caught track of them. The last thing that we need to do, was to make the first attack, But mr. Demanding here just had to move the attack the next day. We could’ve done it that night! We camped at the woods not so close to the targets’.

At night, when everybody was asleep. I got up quietly. I planned to attack the pursuers by myself, it was a good chance to prove Sasuke that I’m not the weak kunoichi he thought I was.

I jumped from tree to tree entering the target’s base. But I got caught. The assassins were expecting us... Traps blew from side to side of the trees, I was dodging the attacks. An explosive seal boomed in front of me, I still can't see the targets. With that thick puff of smoke, who will? Fire blazing around me. But I just can’t give up now.

Declaimer’s P.O.V.

Sasuke was woken up by the smoke and the loud bangs. He got up, surprised not seeing Sakura. She’s gone! Naruto and the others were awaken by Sasuke aswell. They all hurried to the base. Sakura may have attacked them by herself, she cant do it! This is an S-class mission. Even a single jounin cant do it by himself.

The team reached the base. Sasuke saw Sakura suffocating from the smoke. He then saw the target making seals up about a high tree. With his quick moves, he attacked the attacker, electrifying him with his Chidori Nagashi. He gave the signal for the others to attack the assassins, while he’ll go get the pink-haired kunoichi.

He swiftly jumped at the puff of smoke. And the next thing Sakura knew, she was already at the hands of the raven-haired shinobi. He then laid her down at a tree, far from danger.

Back to Sakura’s P.O.V.

I woke up, with the team surrounding me. Sasuke doesn’t seem to look as good.

He then spoke. “Idiot.”

I was silent.

“What were you thinking?!” He said with a deep, angry voice as he punched the tree I was leaning on. “You’re weak, Sakura. You cant take them by yourself!” He continued.

Now, that struck me. I felt my hand rise up and my chakra focused unto it. It swifted back and the next thing I knew… I slapped him. His face turned. I knew that that really hurt.

“All you say is ‘do this’ and ‘do that’. I’m not weak, Sasuke. I’m not! You left me with faded memories. You don’t know me Sasuke and you never did! I’m not the twelve-year old girl you knew before. You’re a jerk, you’re so demanding about everything.!!” I said it with pride. “I hate you!” I yelled, as tears rolled down my cheeks. Yes I mean it, I do hate him.

I turned around, without looking back. I’ll never look back!

XxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxXxX

I reached back to Konoha the next evening. I recalled what he said. I recalled what I’ve said. I do hate him. I really do.

It was about midnight and I couldn’t sleep. I cant think of any reason why I cant. I then saw a shadow, not my shadow. I shut my eyes closed and didn’t bother to look. Somebody took a grasp of my hand and pulled me up.

A deep whisper echoed at my ear. “You left the window open.” I opened my eyes hearing a familiar voice.

Its him, Uchiha Sasuke! I looked sideways, not looking at his eyes. It kept me thinking. Why is he here?

“Do you really mean it?” He spoke.

My face was covered with confusion. What does he mean by, ‘do you really mean it?’.

“…Are you sure you hate me?” He spoke again.

I looked at his eyes. “Yes, I do.” I answered with pride.

He was silent. Waiting for me to say more.

“Sasuke, I’m not the fangirl whom you knew before. I’m different. I don’t have feelings for you anymore! When you left us….when you left me, my feelings for you vanished with the wind. I’m…not the same girl you left behind.” That was certain. It was for sure.

I was serious. I looked him in the eyes. He suddenly smirked. “Liar.” He murmured.

“You still have feelings for me, don’t you? You just locked your feelings up, and it’ll be back if you unlock it. I do…have the key.” He stated.

What? I don’t understand him. What does he mean? My mind was full of mere confusion.

He leaned forward and whispered at my ears. “If I kiss you now, will your feelings for me return?” I can feel his warm-breath pass through my skin.

I pushed him away. He gave me a mild smirk in reply. I don’t understand him! I don’t have feelings for him, right?

Right.

“You said I was demanding.—“ He stated.

Before he was able to finish was he was about to say, I already answered. “Yes.”

“…You said I was weak.” I continued.

“Yes.” He replied.

I gasped. Those words were still hitting me.

“..That’s why; I’ll protect you… my way.” I was surprised when he said that.

The next thing I knew, his face was an inch from mine.

He then whispered. “I demand… you to give me another chance and love me again.” After saying those confusing words, I felt his soft lips touch mine. When I opened my eyes, he was gone. My window was open as my curtains were carried by the breeze.

“…Ofcourse I will, Mr. demanding.”

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you might see grammar errors~ its cuz i only checked it once~ iiirrr... i know, its sooo long~ but i hope you liked it



honestly i'm an anti sakura and anti sasuke person...

however....


when i read ur short story....



I BECAME A SASUSAKU FAN.!!!!!!!!!


(but i'm still anti sakura and anti sasuke )

Posted 8/20/08

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honestly i'm an anti sakura and anti sasuke person...

however....


when i read ur short story....



I BECAME A SASUSAKU FAN.!!!!!!!!!


(but i'm still anti sakura and anti sasuke )




yey~ well, its ok if you're an anti SasuSaku~~ atleast you liked my story --thanks^^
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I have the best short-story ever >:3



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omg this is the most tragic and heartbreaking story I have ever read..so sad *cries*
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before i start this, i would just like to say shes not pregnant in any way at alll.......what so ever!









“It’s okay, Suzen, It’s not your fault.” Said Dr. Waler
“Yes it is! If I had taken ten minutes to think about my choice, this wouldn’t have happened!” I said as I stared at my stomach “I’ve probably gained ten pounds over the last week.” I thought sadly
“Just calm down and tell me what happened” he said
“W-w-well, i-it all started on J-J-January the eleventh.”
**********************************************************************
I was walking down the hall when I heard my best friend, Jill, calling me. “Hey Suzen! What happened last night? I tried to call you to tell you something really important, but you wouldn’t answer!” she said, practically screaming in my ear.
“Sorry, lights out at ten,” I said, “but I’m here now, so what do you want to tell me?”
“Well you know Chanler, right?”
“Right”
“Well, he told me… Wait, I shouldn’t tell you……”
“Just spill it.”
“Well, he told me that he was going to….ask you out….”
The bell rang, I couldn’t move. My body felt heavy, and my throat was dry. Jill’s words still echoed through my head “Chanler is going to ask you out, ask you out, ask you out………”
“Excuse me Miss. Taler,” I turned around, my trance thankfully broken, only to see that my savior was Mrs. Linin (my math teacher) standing behind me with pursed lips.
“As if I don’t have enough to deal with,” I thought.
“I believe the bell has rung, Miss. Taler,” she sighed “I will ignore it today, but make sure, in the near future, that you actually go inside the classroom.”
**********************************************************************
Class was over; I looked around to see if Chanler was in the hallway. “At least he isn’t following me,” I happily thought. I stepped outside, my heart pounding like crazy, and all of a sudden, I feel a hand on my shoulder.
I knew that grip anywhere, it was Chanler! “Shoot he is following me!” I thought. I sprinted forward and ran to my next class “Why did Jill have to tell me?” I though while looking back to see a very sad friend that knew he had been betrayed.
**********************************************************************
“Why don’t you just talk to him?” Jill asked at lunch.
“You know how shy I am,” I replied. Jill gave me that I-know-your-lying look. “Okay maybe not that shy, but you know what I mean!”
“Look, he is going to follow you forever if you don’t talk to him, and I will to!” she said with a determined look on her face.
“Why can’t they just leave me alone?” I thought. “FINE!” I yelled.
“Good,” she said while handing me a note.
“Why do I feel like I’ve just been tricked?” My face went white as I read the letter.

______________________
Meet me after school
-Chanler
______________________

**********************************************************************
I couldn’t help it, I chickened out. “I didn’t think I would have to talk to him today!” I thought
When school was out, I ran outside without even grabbing my back-pack. Chanler spotted me, and chased me. “Look Suzen! I just want to talk!” he screamed
“So that’s where Jill got her speech from,” I thought “I really have to get her a hobby”
“SUZEN!” Chanler yelled. I ran through traffic right before the sign said not to walk. “That should stop him” I thought pleasantly. I started to walk home when I heard a bang. “Oh, no,” I thought.
I turned around and saw Chanler, lying face down with a pool of blood underneath him.
**********************************************************************
“He died before my eyes!” I told Dr.Waler, tears streaming down my face, “and its all my fault!”
“How did you react to this? Did you realize something?” he asked
“Aren’t you supposed to make me feel better?” I thought bitterly. Then, it hit me. At that moment, when I last saw Chanler, I realized how much I really did love him.
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okay, theres my short story.........











Wow! That short story was really good. It's really sad but nice work.

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d3vilang3l333 wrote:

before i start this, i would just like to say shes not pregnant in any way at alll.......what so ever!









“It’s okay, Suzen, It’s not your fault.” Said Dr. Waler
“Yes it is! If I had taken ten minutes to think about my choice, this wouldn’t have happened!” I said as I stared at my stomach “I’ve probably gained ten pounds over the last week.” I thought sadly
“Just calm down and tell me what happened” he said
“W-w-well, i-it all started on J-J-January the eleventh.”
**********************************************************************
I was walking down the hall when I heard my best friend, Jill, calling me. “Hey Suzen! What happened last night? I tried to call you to tell you something really important, but you wouldn’t answer!” she said, practically screaming in my ear.
“Sorry, lights out at ten,” I said, “but I’m here now, so what do you want to tell me?”
“Well you know Chanler, right?”
“Right”
“Well, he told me… Wait, I shouldn’t tell you……”
“Just spill it.”
“Well, he told me that he was going to….ask you out….”
The bell rang, I couldn’t move. My body felt heavy, and my throat was dry. Jill’s words still echoed through my head “Chanler is going to ask you out, ask you out, ask you out………”
“Excuse me Miss. Taler,” I turned around, my trance thankfully broken, only to see that my savior was Mrs. Linin (my math teacher) standing behind me with pursed lips.
“As if I don’t have enough to deal with,” I thought.
“I believe the bell has rung, Miss. Taler,” she sighed “I will ignore it today, but make sure, in the near future, that you actually go inside the classroom.”
**********************************************************************
Class was over; I looked around to see if Chanler was in the hallway. “At least he isn’t following me,” I happily thought. I stepped outside, my heart pounding like crazy, and all of a sudden, I feel a hand on my shoulder.
I knew that grip anywhere, it was Chanler! “Shoot he is following me!” I thought. I sprinted forward and ran to my next class “Why did Jill have to tell me?” I though while looking back to see a very sad friend that knew he had been betrayed.
**********************************************************************
“Why don’t you just talk to him?” Jill asked at lunch.
“You know how shy I am,” I replied. Jill gave me that I-know-your-lying look. “Okay maybe not that shy, but you know what I mean!”
“Look, he is going to follow you forever if you don’t talk to him, and I will to!” she said with a determined look on her face.
“Why can’t they just leave me alone?” I thought. “FINE!” I yelled.
“Good,” she said while handing me a note.
“Why do I feel like I’ve just been tricked?” My face went white as I read the letter.

______________________
Meet me after school
-Chanler
______________________

**********************************************************************
I couldn’t help it, I chickened out. “I didn’t think I would have to talk to him today!” I thought
When school was out, I ran outside without even grabbing my back-pack. Chanler spotted me, and chased me. “Look Suzen! I just want to talk!” he screamed
“So that’s where Jill got her speech from,” I thought “I really have to get her a hobby”
“SUZEN!” Chanler yelled. I ran through traffic right before the sign said not to walk. “That should stop him” I thought pleasantly. I started to walk home when I heard a bang. “Oh, no,” I thought.
I turned around and saw Chanler, lying face down with a pool of blood underneath him.
**********************************************************************
“He died before my eyes!” I told Dr.Waler, tears streaming down my face, “and its all my fault!”
“How did you react to this? Did you realize something?” he asked
“Aren’t you supposed to make me feel better?” I thought bitterly. Then, it hit me. At that moment, when I last saw Chanler, I realized how much I really did love him.
-------------------------------------------------------------



okay, theres my short story.........











Wow! That short story was really good. It's really sad but nice work.



Thanks! glad you liked it!
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Xx_ciael_xX wrote:


MSgaaRa wrote:




honestly i'm an anti sakura and anti sasuke person...

however....


when i read ur short story....



I BECAME A SASUSAKU FAN.!!!!!!!!!


(but i'm still anti sakura and anti sasuke )




yey~ well, its ok if you're an anti SasuSaku~~ atleast you liked my story --thanks^^



i even think about it at night and whenever i wake up....
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