Post Reply "Tenshi no Kira" by narutosasukegal44
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Posted 8/19/08 , edited 6/12/12
This is my story. Hope you like it.
It's called "Tenshi no Kira" or "Kira's Angel"

Kira was your average ordinary girl, untill she went back to her summer home in Osaka, Japan...

Chapter 1 - Meet Kira Matsume




Chapter 2 - Summer Home-ward Bound



Chapter 3 - In Japan



Chapter 4 - A Wonderful World of Mayhem



Chapter 5 - The Way It Was Meant To Be



Chapter 6 - Kira and Yuki, Together Forever



Chapter 7 Is on it's way! Hope you like my story so far!!

PS: I will also edit my chapters some more later. (Too tired tonight)
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Posted 8/19/08
principal sounds creepy indeed...stalkerish, almost. not enough for me to be afraid of him, just enough for me to want to drop an anvil on his head.
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Posted 8/20/08 , edited 8/22/08
Haha, well, He is kinda a stalker, but there's more to come. I will be sure to post another chapter soon. Glad to see someone liked it.
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Posted 8/23/08
ZOMG! Your episodes are really long! Good job!

I will read and comment on this story soon.
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Posted 8/23/08
Haha thanks. glad you liked it.
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Posted 8/25/08
This seems like it could b a great series. I like it so far.
Just a little question: Y didn't Kira knew her father's name and y didn't she answered the phone by saying "Muchi Muchi!"? Thats just it, it kind of threw me off a little, nothing else, over all I like the story a lot!
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Posted 8/26/08
Okie dokie, thanks for the feedback. Kira didn't know cuz he never told her.
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Posted 8/26/08
I'm not sure what to think of this story.

First of all, the grammar and spelling are generally correct and the events in the story are easy to follow. Those things are very important.

Second of all, I'm not sure where the story is going; at this point, I'll be attempting to make predictions. If your description of the story is to be believed, Kira will no longer be a "normal, average girl" shortly after arriving home. At this point, it would be useless to guess precisely how she will become abnormal. The only thing I can say with any degree of certainty is that it probably is linked to her school in the US. What did the principal mean when he said that the school was Kira's school? Did he mean that she was a student, or did she mean that she owned it in some way? Speaking of the principal, whatever is wrong with him, it seems implied that Kira's dad knows about it too.

Probably due to the principal, I view all circumstances and characters with extreme suspicion. I am operating under the assumption that the elemental brothers (Kaji and Yuki) are part of some sort of conspiracy, especially Yuki.
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Posted 8/27/08
Thanks for the feedback. Kaji and Yuki are just names I came up with. I didn't really intend them to be conspirators. And the principal meant that she was a student, and she had duties as a student. The principal is a weird character. He actually follows Kira to Japan, but she doesn't know. Turns out he's a demon and he is trying to kill her. And another quick hint to help all the readers, Kira's mother is dead. She died in a "tragic car accident" or so they thought. I will definately right more later, but for now, here's some things to clear it up.
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it is not so so bad i like it can not wait for chapter 7 so ya for so far i like it but i wish that u put some pic's for the main charecters so that we can imagine them keep on the good job
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So sorry for late replies to this. I kinda lost interest in the story and have made many more since then, but I just started to read my work and I think I will pick up and actually write chapter 7. As for the pictures of the characters, I will do that, I was just going to draw them, but I guess that didn't work out for me either. I have the sprites all drawn but I can't upload them for some reason. I'll try to do that soon. So again, sorry for being so late to this. I've also had a lot of personal things happen in my life outside CR, so it's been hard to write a lot.

I'll get to work right away!

Thank you all for the support.
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PS, I am also changing the story a little bit so that it makes some more sense. I'm rewriting certain chapters so do not be alarmed if it's not the same story you initially read before.

Thank you.
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