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konichiwa mina san~!
this is my original story.^_^
enjoy.Pls, criticize



http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sakura

The Site above will help educate yourself,:) IF you Don't know Anything about sakura trees...

Introduction:

Did anything supernatural happen to you?,I had.and it was awful

I am Kentaro Shiro.Everyday,I break up with a girl and sooner or later I find a new one.Its hard though, 'cause my other girlfriends find out and I end up getting dumped.But currently my "sempai" is head-over heals for me.We are currently behind our school building.Alone,In an alley.

"kentaro,Is it fine doing this?.I mean I've only confessed to you a week ago.Is it really fine?" Yuriko suggested.Yeah she only confessed a week ago.But she was all over me since last week.It was getting annoying.I had to get rid of her."of course it is,Yuriko.we'll be fine as long as were not caught." I gave her a mischievous smile.She nodded,agreeing.

When I was about to reach her lips,A man came."Hey!,what are You kids doing here!?" The man charged forward.I Shoved Yuriko aside and ditched her and escaped by the left fence.I wasn't suppose to get caught,my mom will kill me.

When I got to the other side,I bump into Sasuke Honda.Apparently he claims to be my number 1 fan.Why you say?,Probably because I've already dumped 90 women these past 2 months."Hey kentaro,Dog.So,Did you get some action?" he smiled. he is always so persistent."get lost,Honda.Its None of your buisness" I replied coldly."KENTARO-KUUUN!!!!!!" a girl's voice gave a loud hoot,Its probably Yuriko.I saw Sasuke's smile grew wider."You Dog!.you actually ditched her?" Sasuke started laughing.I gave him a grunt and ran.

When I escaped Sasuke I ran desperately."Oh,man.I'm late for my 2nd date!" I complained.My 2nd date was a totally hot 25-year old woman.Who is also head-over heals for me.I met her once in the train station,when I was cutting classes.When we rode the same train,she sat beside me then she started flirting.So I gave her a chance.I finally reached the cafe,She liked sweet stuff.It creeped me out.

"Hey,babe.sorry I'm late" I saw her eyes twinkle.Its was so bizzare."It's fine Kentaro-kun" she gave me a wink."so kentaro-kun,wanna go to a hotel?" woah.that was too fast.I only met her 3 days ago."sorry,babe.not yet" I gave her a smug.She pouted.When we where in the middle of a conversation my phone rang.

*OOkami no NODO plays(opening song of ZOmbie loan)* "Sorry babe,I have to answer this call.Can I go out for a min.?" She nodded.I walked past the counter and opened the door.I checked my phone."Oh mothe-" its my mom.I flipped my phone and answered."eh....-hi mom,haha..how are you doing?" I stuttered."Kentaro,YOU UNGRATEFUL BRAT!" She yelled."You better come here!"

"But MOM!"

"NO BUTS! COME HERE!"

"But"

"GET HERE! Or I'M CUTTING YOUR CREDIT CARD!"

After that,she hung up.I had to ditch another hottie or its the end of my credit card.I looked at the glass window.And waved goodbye to-err...what was her name again?.Anyway After I waved,She got up startled.I started running,she got up her chair and opened the door."Kentaro-kuuuuuuuuun!" I lost sight of her after that.

When I got to the nearest bus stop my driver Ricardo was waiting.Ricardo opened the door for me."Hello young master.Italian pizza is available in the mini-fridge" he gestured.I nodded and got inside the car.It was complete silence the past 30 minutes."Young master,were here.Your parents are waiting for you in the family room" He directed."thank you,Ricardo". I walked upstairs and opened the huge door to the family room.

When I got inside,My mom and dad were sitting on the sofa,that we recently got from Europe.My mom's forehead was crumpled, I can see her veins popping out.And my dad on the other hand was trying to calm her down."Oh come on lilith,I'm sure he has reason.He is a 17-year old." my dad comforted."oh shut up,Shingo! Its your fault that he's gone wild!" When my mom saw me,I actually saw steam come out of her ears."Sit down kentaro." SHe gave me a serious look.Then snapped."YOU DARN BRAT WHAT DO YOU THINK YOU'RE DOING?,PLAYING WITH WO-!" before my mom could say anything else,my dad covered her mouth with his hands.When my mom calmed down a bit,which took 2 hours.She started talking to me seriously,and gave me a stern look."Kentaro,I cannot allow what you are doing right now.Playing with women's hearts gah! I have no other choice."

My mom and dad changed stares.Then it happened.The event that will change my whole life.Permanently.

"Kentaro,were transfering you to the country side of japan.You are leaving Shibuya tommorow." My mom and dad shared one voice.I got stunned.
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what kind of pettern is this
a novel type or a rpg type..? cause im a story writter aswell
and what plot is this? resent.future past? what kind of genre
you must indicated complete info..cause the reader might be confused
..
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Posted 8/21/08

akai09 wrote:

what kind of pettern is this
a novel type or a rpg type..? cause im a story writter aswell
and what plot is this? resent.future past? what kind of genre
you must indicated complete info..cause the reader might be confused
..


novel.I used "first person pace"
My RPGs are usually with me telling what your about to do like...
"You ran to the next room"
something like that...

sorry.I thought it was obvious
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Posted 8/21/08

akai09 wrote:

what kind of pettern is this
a novel type or a rpg type..? cause im a story writter aswell
and what plot is this? resent.future past? what kind of genre
you must indicated complete info..cause the reader might be confused
..


and the part "did anything supernatural happen to you,I have and it was awful"
was just an introduction...because thats how everything goes...
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Posted 8/22/08
even though..they need to start w/ the proper plot..
does matter...
you write for books..i write for manga's..
patterns all differ..
good luk to your story
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