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This is probobly a terrible story but I am gonna write it for fun so plz enjoy....and read lol :D

Chapter 1-The Bargin


"May"yelled a voice followed by a knock

"May get up or else you'll be late for school so wake up already!!"

Hello my name is May Clog I am 13 years old and don't have any parents anymore...

At the moment I am living with my grandmother who comes from a rich family but doesn't care what so ever happens to me.

"May!!"the knocking continued,I opened my eyes which felt sore from the light that was coming from the open window.

I sat up slowly and rubbed my eyes

"what is it Marbel?"I mumbled in a ruff crackly voice

"We have to go to school,if you don't hurry we will be scolded..."their was a pause as I got up from my old warn down bed and walked to the door.

I turned the nob slowly and it burst open making me fly half the way down the room

"get ready may!!"The brown haired girl said as she placed her hands on her hips

"I just got up and you want me to get ready that fast"I mutterd as I rubbed my butt which I had landed on when the door flew open.

"well..yes!"She yelled.

"Okay,I have to change so leave"I said as I sat up

"fine"she grunted as she walked over to the door and slammed it shut.

I stared at the door,and slowly turned towards an old dresser that must have been about 50 years old.

And opened it,I grabbed a plade gray long sleeve sweater and a matching skirt next to it.I threw the pair onto my bed and searched through the dresser for a white shirt.

I found one with a small dark blue lace around the neck.

I quickly changed and brushed my light golden shoulder length hair,and rain towards the door grabbing my book bag in the procces.

I opened the door and say Marble tapping her foot impatiently at the door.

"sorry"I grimaced apologetically as I scratched the back of my neck.

She sighed and put her hand up to her forhead but didn't say anything.

She walked down the stairs of the fancy old house and opened the front door slowly.

"bye grandmother"I muttered as I heard a "humph" like noice from the dining room.Marble motioned to the door,and I did as she had showed.


AFTER SCHOOL

It was the end of the day and I was walking home with Marble she was walking quietly as I hummed a nameless tune to myself.

After I got to the front gate of my grandmothers monsturres house Marble said goodbye and I started to open the gate.

As I got into the house I heard someone talking with my grandmother.

The person didn't sound like the usual people grandmother talked to,I thought to myself.

I crept into the living room and hid behind a wall and listened to their conversation.

"Yes just sign here and the 250.000 will be yours if you keep your side of the bargine"a man said.

I heard my grandmother grunt and mutter something under her breath

"Of course I will that girl has been nothing but a pain since she came here,when her petty parents died"I had to put my hand over my mouth to stop myself from gasping.Was she...Could grandmother be selling me to someone!?

I heard a pen click and someone scribble something down onto a paper.

"When do you want her?"my grandmother asked.

"As soon as I can get her..."I could here the smile on his face.

I had to leave or else I'd be tookin away with this guy.

Not that I minded leaving grandmother but you could tell this guys no good news either!

I felt my body tense as I heard somebody sit up,I hid more deeply into the wall and watched as a young man with black hair that had DEFFINITLY had to much gell in it,and small black shadey glasses on,pass by and walk toward the door.

How terrible he must be waiting for me to get home from school.

I quickly tiptoed up the stairs toward my room and opened the door.

I the door lightly and ran towards the dresser I started to throw my favorite clothes onto my bed and grabbed a bag from the back of the closet ,I threw my clothes into the bag and grabbed my hair brush and tooth brush and other things I might need later on.

After I packed the bag to its fullest I looked around for 1 more item that I could bring.

As my eyes searched I heard someone coming up the stairs.

I gasped and quickly ran towards a small table which had a jeweraly box on it.

I opened the box and searched through it when finally I saw a small ring which was heart shapped,and had a few buetiful dimonds shimer on it.

The ring that father proposed to mother with...

I felt tears well up in my eyes I placed the ring on my wedding finger and grabbed my bag as I made a run for the window.

As I opened the window I saw the door open and my grandmother and the man from before standing their with their eyes full of shock.

Shock from not what I was doing but from,

If I died the bargin would be over...

As I got ready to jump from the second floor and into the rose bush I saw the man jump out and pull onto my shoulder which made me lose ballence on the window sill



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O and this is what the charecters so far look like...

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Chapter 2-Life Starting

As I fell backwords I felt myself land on something that cushioned my fall,I looked down quickly to see the man from before (barginer) lying under me.

I heard someone shriek and run towards us,their shoes tapping on the hard wood floor.

Of course it was grandmother.

"Ah!Sir are you all right!?"She asked in a delicate voice.Probobly because she was worried the bargin would be off and her 250.000$ would be gone I growled in my head.

The man didn't say anything he just grouned under my weight.

Grandmother quickly grabbed me by the rist and threw me towards the wall.

I yelped in pain as my head banged into it "now you listen here!"she growled as she shook her finger at me

"If you DARE try to leave,I will make your life misserable"she said,her words full of acid.

I stared in horror for a second but then snapped out of it

"to late,you already did make my life misserabel!"I yelled as I tried to unlock her grasp on my rist.

I saw steam flood from her face and her eyes have flames shoot up into the "WHY YOU!!"I saw her hand raise up to hit me,my eyes shut titley as I got ready for the hit,but someone quickly grabbed onto her arm and stopped her

"Miss Cain the deal will be off if you hurt this child" said a husky voice.

I opened my eyes to see a man with light brown hair,and dark brown eyes standing their.

My grandmother gasped and lowerd her arm.

"Fine"she sputterd "I despise this child anyway,take her away already!"she yelled at the end of her sentance

"she's just like her father,that her stupid mother had to fall in love with"she mutterd under her breath.Father?I thought quietly.


After she said that I saw the man that had saved me cring at her words.

He let go of her arm and grabbed mine and pulled me towards the door.

I tried to claw my way out of his grip but i didn't suceed once again...

He glanced back at the barginer who was giving the 250.000 to my grandmother,and grabbed my bag from the window.

The man once again started to pull me towards the stairs.

He didn't even flinch as I tried to escape even though his hand had so many scars from were I had been digging my nails in,and bighting.


OUT OF THE HOUSE

As we left the house I saw the barginer catch up and open the door for us.

The man motioned for me to get in but I planted myself into the ground were I was standing.

The man that saved me sighed and lowerd himself to my level (because he was tall)

"do you want to stay here"what he said wasn't a question it was an answer,an answer that i knew wasn't true.I pouted but didn't move from were I was standing.

Finally I heard the barginer walk over.

I felt his hands rasping around my waist and picking me up.

I kicked him a few times but he just ignored it and tosed me into the back seat and looked the doors.

"Hey!"I finally spoke,they both ignored me and got into the car and started it.

I growled but finally put a seat belt on me because the barginers driving wasn't that great...or safe.

AFTER THE DRIVE

It had been about 3 hours since I was last at home...ER Grandmothers house.

And I was in a twilight state were I was half awake and half asleep.

I couldn't really think because I was in a state were I was to weak,or too tired to think.

But I could tell that we had stopped.

I felt a light shine onto me,it was probly the car light but I wasn't fully sure.

I lied there drifting to sleep as I heard a ringing noice from the car door start to go off.

I felt someone put their arms under my head and legs to support me.

Even then I could tell I was in a bridal stance,but I was to tired to care.

I listened to the annoying ringing sound stop with the car door slamming shut.

I heard murmuring from all around me,but other than that I heard the soft sound of waves coliding to rocks,and the 'rush' sound from it.

I could tell the the sun was setting in a different direction of the car which was on would probobly be on my left were the sound of the ocean lied.

I shivered as a brease lightly paced me,and felt someone's arms tighten around me.

Just who was this person?I wondered as I felt lights gleam onto my face,and the sound of the ocean disapear....
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This is the new charecter and or updates

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May's Uniform in the begining
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This is probobly a terrible story but I am gonna write it for fun so plz enjoy....and read lol :D

Chapter 1-The Bargin


I hopes u all liked plz post what u think ^-^



um u should change when it said that she felt herself roll over cause right after it was an introdution it doesnt make sense srry for trying to correct that
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This is the new charecter and or updates

Savior Guy (name unknown)


May's Uniform in the begining


for some reason this is what the lead characters look like to me...

heh heh maybe because i was reading Fruit's basket before reading this....
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sasukeluverforeva15 wrote:


sgurlrox67 wrote:

This is probobly a terrible story but I am gonna write it for fun so plz enjoy....and read lol :D

Chapter 1-The Bargin


I hopes u all liked plz post what u think ^-^



um u should change when it said that she felt herself roll over cause right after it was an introdution it doesnt make sense srry for trying to correct that


yeah okies and don't worry about it I wasn't really paying attention when I was writin because I was writing so fast lol ty for helping though ^-^
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sgurlrox67 wrote:

This is the new charecter and or updates

Savior Guy (name unknown)


May's Uniform in the begining


for some reason this is what the lead characters look like to me...

heh heh maybe because i was reading Fruit's basket before reading this....


lol XD yeah I have I love that anime/manga XD the anime ending was kinda weird though lol but yeah its a lot different actually,well it seems alout different in my mind when u get later on in the story (which I haven't wrote yet lol)
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Chapter 3-What's going on!?

I opened my eyes slowly to a bright light pink room,and the sound of the ocean.

I'm so warm I thought to myself as I rolled over to my left were it was darker and tried to fall back to sleep,which I knew wouldn't happen...

My beds always cold I thought again,and its always hard not soft like this bed...my mind wander'd as I let my body melt into the fairly cushiond bed.

"Wait!"I gasped as my eyes,and body flew up.This isn't my room!

I stode their for a second as my memory started to kick back in.

"Thats right someone took me here when grandmother sold me to some shady guy"I mutterd as I scratched my chin.But why am in some kind of warm bed?Weren't they going to do evil things to me...?

As I thought I heard the door knob turn with a light creak,I spun around quickly to see a young girl with long dirty blond hair and blue eyes walk in,in a maids uniform.

I saw her step behind the door to hide when she saw me.

I stared at her as she started to come out of her hiding place "...ano...hello miss Clog..."she looked down at the floor as she said this and blushed

"ano..."i started but then stopped."I-.....I'm your maid for now....ano...please take care of me!"she gasped and bowed down to me,I stared at her but then answerd "uumm sure..."The room fell silent.

"Well just tell me if you need anything Miss Clog"She bowed down and quickly retreated out of the room,I put up an arm to stop her but I hesitated.

Who was she...?I wonder'd.And were the heck am I!!??I rored.

I got up and walked towards the door,I had to figure out were I was!

As I walked out the door I saw some people with the same outfits as the young girl from before.

I ducked behind a door as the walked past me.After they were gone I ran to a open door that looked empty.

As I went into the room I heard footsteps from behind me.

I looked around as a sweat drop apeered on my head.

I saw a office desk and ran over to it and hid underneath it.

I heard voice's come into the room,and the footsteps seace as they entered the room.

"Mr.Wilder you don't need to worry yourself over a 13 year old girl,she would have been fine with that old woman"A man's voice said in a hushed ergant voice

-No responce-

"Sir please your just going to bring stress to the companie and yourself.He wouldn't want taht either now wouldn't he!!??"The man continued in his please.

Were they talking about me?

There was still no answers to the mans please and the room fell silent.

"Its not just for him..."The man finally answerd "its for her too" The man that was pleaing for him before didn't say anything else.

And I heard someone walk over to the desk that I was hiding under.I heard the chair squek under the person's wait and I saw a man's legs slip under the desk.

I arched my body deeper into the desk so that he wouldn't notice me,but I couldn't go any farther in!

I heard the man type something into the computer that was on top of the desk and say under his breath "She's sorta interesting anyways....I think Natsume will be interested in her too..."

After that I heard the chair squek again and the computer key boards fell silent.

I heard the door close slowly ,and the room seemed quit enough.

So I decided to see if the people had left.

I moved my stiff body over to see if their was anyone was their.

My eyes survayed the room,and found no one there.

So I sat up and looked at the computer that the man had been typing into.And I gasped.

My hole biography was on the computer even pictures of when I was younger,and even some from just a few days ago!creepy...I thought as chills were sent down my spine.


BEDROOM
After I had seen the computer I decided to go back to my room.Beside's no one had noticed that I had been gone before.

I sat on the edge of the soft white bed and thought.

Did that guy maybe know my father and mother...?I wonder'd.As I thought I heard the door once again creak open and the girl from before apear.

She had a tray of snacks and food "I thought you might by hungry"She flushed and sat the food down next to me.

I nodded as the smell of bacon and eggs rushed through my nose.

I quickly grabbed a plate of eggs and bacon and scarrfed it down,I even licked the plate!

She watched in 'aw' as I scarffed down another plate of eggs and bacon.

After the second meal I placed the plate on a small table beside my bed.The girl was about to get up when I asked for her name,she glanced back and answer "Presea"

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Chapter 4-Answers

I nodded and said "its nice to meet"I smiled gentally,and she blushed

"Its nice to meet you too miss Clog"She smiled back shyly "please call me May"I asked,she nodded

"okay....May"I smiled again.

'I'd made a friend at this strange place....amazing...just goes to show u girls have got the power!!'I smiled at that thought.

I heard the door open and close quietly.

I glanced over and saw the man from yesturday that had saved me.

I stood up emidiatly and walked over to him "Where am I!?"I orderd.He stared down at me and answerd "my house"

I glared at him,of course I was,were else could I be but were is his house!?

"You new that your grandmother made a deal with me..."he paused "Er...my manager right?"he corrected himself.

I looked down at the floor and he continued "well she gave you to me for-"

"250.000$...right?"I mutterd as I burned a hole into the floor with all my hate

"that's correct"he nodded as he looked out at the window which was now open.

"Why do you want me?"I murmerd.

"No reason really...Just someone gave me the idea..."I looked up to see him smiling.

I glared at him

"Then I might as well go ho-"

"Is your home really with someone that sold you for some money"

-stab-

"so what if is!?"I yelled as I looked up at him,eyes full of despair.He stared back and then turned around.

"This is your new home...and you'll do what we say if you want something to eat"He said as a spark came into his eyes and his face darkened.

-stab-

I flinched back.

He got me.

He started to walk out of the room but stopped.

"Oh yes.Will you please change before lunch"He smiled and walked out of the room.

I felt heat flood my face "why that guy!!"I was ready to attack when Presea pulled me back

"calm down May-sama"She blushed as she said my name.I would have to if she hadn't added the 'sama'

"Presea you don't need to add the 'sama' just call me May"I smiled

She nodded "okay May-sama"

-falls over-

"Are you alright May-sama??"


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sry its so short this time!!but I couldn't think of anymore idea's so plz wait for a lil bit and read more later!!
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Chapter 5-Lunchtime introductions

After I had sat up and my annoyance from presea calling my May-'sama' was PARTLY gone,

She had decided to grab an outfit from the huge closet that must have had 4 rooms full of clothes.

She ended up grabbing me a long sleeved light yellow shirt with ;cuffs on the end of the arms and a light blue dress to put over top of the top,that was an adorable match.It was nee-length and came with 2 blue ribbons that Presea added to my blond hair.

After I was done being dressed up into barbie she lead me out of the room and down a row of long hallways,and people that were supposidly maids that worked for the 'family' that lives here,and 'me'.

After another hallway I saw 2 rows of stairs that lead down towards the entrance of the house.

We quickly walked down the stairs and into a huge room on the right side of the entrance.

I gasped as I saw a long table and people sitting in chairs waiting with empty plates in front of them.

I only reconised 2 faces.

One was the man that had resqued me from my grandmothers attack,and the 2nd person was the barginer from before.

The rest of the faces I didn't know.

Their was a younge girl with sandy blond pair,which had plenty of small pigtails in it,and light adorable bown eyes.

And another girl that might be around my age or a year older with tied up black hair,and dark green eyes.

They stared at me both eyes having different meaning one with excitment,and the other with curiosity.

I looked down at the floor as I tried to hide my embarresment.

I never did like being the center of attention.

I saw Presea move the chair so that I could sit down,I sighed but smiled at her as I sat down.

I looked up and saw everyone staring at me..everyone except the guy that was my savior and or else the 'devil'.

The room was silent.

Everyone looked away as they heard the entrance of the house door open,and the silence dissapear with the murmering voice's of people ecoing the huge house.

I glanced behind me to see 4 boys apeer out of no were.

One boy had a playful monkey like face that anyone would think was TOO happy....ANYONE,he wore a grey sweater and black shorts,and had brown eyes and a tenis hat that was facing the wall.

Another boy had glasses and black hair that made him look very smart and supperfishiol,he wore a white long sleeve shirt with a black tie around his neck,and black pants.

One boy had a orange hair and purple eyes,and wore a red T-shirt and black shorts.

But the only boy that seemed to catch my eye was the one that had blond hair and blue eyes that had sadness in them,he wore a light white shirt that was half undone so that you could see his skin and blue plade shorts.

The boys walked into the dining room,not noticing that the once silent room was now full of sounds from the 4 boys.

They sat themselves down,and grabbed there forks,and knives as they waited for lunch to come.

The room went silent again as the boys noticed all the weary eyes on them.

"You should ask before you invite people over"The dark haired girl muttered coldly as her gaze broke away from the other 3 boys and too the light blond haired boy.

"Sorry I'll remind myself that next time that I care"he cornered her back,as he placed his feet on the table

"Beside's I don't think anyone really cares...3 people against 1 princess...do the math"he continued as he gazed around the room at all the faces of the daily household.His gaze stopped on my face,his cold eyes observed me.

"make that 4..."he corrected himself

"I care!!"she screamed as she grabbed a fork and knife and slammed it into the table.

"Wait your a part of this family?"he smirked,as he lost his gaze on my face and closed his eyes.

The dark haired girl growled but gave in as maids started to bring in lunch.

I stared at my large portion of food in 'aw'.I had just ate I couldn't eat anymore!

"So"The blond boy started "who's she"He continued as he pointed in my direction.I gulped.

"A new member of the family..."My savior finally spoke

"If she gets on your nerves she will be punished"he added as he eyed me.

'Great...' I thought as I glared at him.

"Ah nice to meet'cha onee-chan!!My names Ami-chan"the little girl said gleefully with stars in her eyes

"Ano...Its nice to meet you Ami....my names May"I said as I tried to smile,but failed.

"My names Clara.Nice to meet you"I looked over at the dark haired girl in horror as I heard the acid in her words.

"N-Nice T-To M-meet you Clara"I studderd.

'She's gonna be trouble'

I heard someone cough "My names Kaichi,nice to meet you miss"the barginer said in a gruff voice.

"My names Darley nice to meet you May"the monkey boy said with a smile

"My names Danial"The smart glasses guy said

"My name's Kukaii nice to meet you"said the soft smiled boy

The room fell silent as everyone waited for the blond haired boy to introduce himself but the seconds passed and he didn't so I gave up

"Its nice to meet all of you...please take care of me"I smiled.

I saw Kukaii nudge the blond haired boy lightly as I finished speaking,he sighed and opened one eyes to look at me

"Names Natsume..."he paused to cover up a sigh

"Son of Erie.Wilder over their"he said as he nudged his head towards my savior.
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cool. i can't wait to find out the blond haired boy's name.. is it natsume..? anyway, i have some suggestions .. like making a new topic for each chapter and doing the paragraphing more(its kinda wordy)

wow her new family has a lot of people haha ..

whew its kinda tiring reading so much at once
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lol sry I write so much like that,I just sorta like to describe like a story but I'll try and do what you suggested and yeah his name's natsume,I'm kinda tryin to think of another name for him ^-^ lol

And I can't write a different topic for each chapter cause if people wanna write fan-fics or stories of their own,then their won't be enough room ^-^ lol
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I fixed it sort of so I hopes that helps readers plz tell me if it does ^-^
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