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Posted 8/21/08
Okay if you guys read my story then please tell me what you think. If you don't I will feel like nobody is actually reading my story and I will feel discouraged to even continue it. And if I made a grammer mistake or you don't understand something, please tell me. I will try to fix it.
Posted 8/22/08
great prologue.....good first chapter...just dont use the same words over and over again....other than that you're on your way to becoming a best-seller
Posted 8/22/08

animexcool wrote:

great prologue.....good first chapter...just dont use the same words over and over again....other than that you're on your way to becoming a best-seller


Thank you very much! And yeah I noticed that I use some words over again, but I just wanted to get the point out that she is going to start a new life. I'll try not to use the same words over again though.
Posted 8/22/08


no problem and i await your second chapter
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Posted 8/24/08 , edited 8/24/08
i just read the 1st chapter. ^_^ well done winbee524 but maybe you shouldnt list all the things. (eg. when yu listed all the rooms in the house) some things better left unsaid. its sounds very good though.
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Posted 8/26/08
It was a good story! Though the topics of their conversation were random (favorite animals?! haha...) but it's actually all right. . . . as mentioned, words were a bit repetitive. . . .! all in all, it was a nice one!
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