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Harvester Hunting



NOTE: This story is meant to represent a situation where a governed society loses its government overnight, as well as any people that might remember the structure enough to rebuild it. It has no particular setting and the characters may be imagined to be of any ethnicity. The title, Harvester Hunting, was chosen because of its ambiguity. It can be interpreted to mean “harvester hunting” is a sport, the hunting of harvesters. Or, it can mean that there is a harvester, hunting. It is the reader’s choice to determine whether the harvester was hunting, or hunted.
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This story is really eerie, atmospheric, and in a strange way, believable. I feel that the people act like people should, and the dialogue is excellent.

The paragraph or two about the elders telling stories was fun because of the consciousness-raising. (AKA: "How could human beings, smart as they were, ever agree to trade vital objects such as food, water, and even rare objects like guns for pieces of paper?")

The way you implied that they were eating the missing family was obvious, but obvious in a clever way. It was the equivilent of you, the author winking at me while I read the part about Daniel conviniently finding more meat.

As far as a theme goes, you have taken my favorite approach; rather than stating something to be true, you merely raise the topic and leave the reader to decide for themselves. You seem to be suggesting that neither attempting to create a ruler fueled by something other than personal strength (which is nigh impossible and extremely dangerous), nor a ruler who rules my personal power (which is ultimately too weak to lead to prosperity) are really suitable choices in the long run. Perhaps there is no good approach to life in this world.

I would mention the character development, but you said that I shouldn't on the wall.

Is this supposed to be an anime? I can't help but visualize it as live action.
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The_8th_Sin wrote:

This story is really eerie, atmospheric, and in a strange way, believable. I feel that the people act like people should, and the dialogue is excellent.

The paragraph or two about the elders telling stories was fun because of the consciousness-raising. (AKA: "How could human beings, smart as they were, ever agree to trade vital objects such as food, water, and even rare objects like guns for pieces of paper?")

The way you implied that they were eating the missing family was obvious, but obvious in a clever way. It was the equivilent of you, the author winking at me while I read the part about Daniel conviniently finding more meat.

As far as a theme goes, you have taken my favorite approach; rather than stating something to be true, you merely raise the topic and leave the reader to decide for themselves. You seem to be suggesting that neither attempting to create a ruler fueled by something other than personal strength (which is nigh impossible and extremely dangerous), nor a ruler who rules my personal power (which is ultimately too weak to lead to prosperity) are really suitable choices in the long run. Perhaps there is no good approach to life in this world.

I would mention the character development, but you said that I shouldn't on the wall.

Is this supposed to be an anime? I can't help but visualize it as live action.


it was actually a school paper for the prompt "life without government," so no, i wasn't thinking of making it into a manga or anime, but i could post this up in Nirvana, I guess.
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Jojiro wrote:


The_8th_Sin wrote:

This story is really eerie, atmospheric, and in a strange way, believable. I feel that the people act like people should, and the dialogue is excellent.

The paragraph or two about the elders telling stories was fun because of the consciousness-raising. (AKA: "How could human beings, smart as they were, ever agree to trade vital objects such as food, water, and even rare objects like guns for pieces of paper?")

The way you implied that they were eating the missing family was obvious, but obvious in a clever way. It was the equivilent of you, the author winking at me while I read the part about Daniel conviniently finding more meat.

As far as a theme goes, you have taken my favorite approach; rather than stating something to be true, you merely raise the topic and leave the reader to decide for themselves. You seem to be suggesting that neither attempting to create a ruler fueled by something other than personal strength (which is nigh impossible and extremely dangerous), nor a ruler who rules my personal power (which is ultimately too weak to lead to prosperity) are really suitable choices in the long run. Perhaps there is no good approach to life in this world.

I would mention the character development, but you said that I shouldn't on the wall.

Is this supposed to be an anime? I can't help but visualize it as live action.


it was actually a school paper for the prompt "life without government," so no, i wasn't thinking of making it into a manga or anime, but i could post this up in Nirvana, I guess.


You could if you wanted to, but it just doesn't seem quite right for manga form.
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Posted 8/30/08
Wow. really good begining. I like it, very descriptive. keep it that way
And I like the rest of it, too.
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Posted 8/31/08
hrmm it's interesting whenever i read it i wisualize some indian tribe though -_-'
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very good one shot. the shortness helps magnify the impact, especially on the obvious-but-brilliantly-said plot details. if anything, the feel of the story sucks the readers in, and they act just as they would in such a situation. the only real problem here would be thing to explain why such a thing as government disappeared, but since it has already been left to conjecture, it gets away with it.
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