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Shining Night Rain Chapter One

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(Hey I found the secret to making any fan girl read your story! Add romance to it! This story didn't have any in it till I decided to add some fan sevice to it ^_< *wink* hope you in joy the story!!!)
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I want to forget.. I don't want these cursed memories any more.. I want to forget them..! A-a car..?


"A car... ?!"

Two hours later I woke up in a hospital bed.

"Ouch... my head..."
What happened...?

"Your alive!" Exclamed a green green haird, green eyed boy. "I was 10,000% sure you were dead!!"

"And for a moment I was 10,000% you were too loud!" I wispered trying not to wake the possible sleeping neighbors.

"Ha haha your so funny! My name's Riyu Satoma! What's yours!" He asked shaking the bed.

"My name's...." I paused.
My name is....

"I...."

"Don't tell me you don't know who you are! Oh I'll name you!!! Your name will be Puri-Puri!!"

"P-puri... puri?..." I chilled to the thouth of being named Puri-Puri.

"Don't give her such a strange name!" Said a nurse walking into the my hospital room.

"Fine~!~! I'll name you Yume Hana!" He sayed pulling out a paper, and started drawing on it.

Even if it is a nice name why does he get to name me....

"See this, this is you!" He yelled putting the paper so close in front of my face. (If you listen closely you can hear some elderly man yelling at us to keep down.)

"It's to close in front of me too see!" I said whispering trying to encourage Riyu to whisper too.

"Can you see now" He said moving the picture back.

It was a picture of a girl with a witch hat and a gothic lolita get up.

"Nice costume, but I'm not wearing anything like that... And it doesn't seem to trigger any memories."

"Really!?!? Well don't worry you'll find out about this sooner or later!"

"Time to go!" Said a grownupish sounding voice.

"Okay" Riyu said back in reply. "Come on it's time to go!"

"Go where? And if I go with you how will I find out anything about myself?" I said holding the picture up infront of him.

"Just come silly!" He said pulling on my sleve.

Before I knew it I was being dragged into a huge (from what it looks) ten foot house.

"Wow, I'm impressed.. I didn't think someone like you could afford something like this." I said walking half way up the stair case to get a good look of this place.

"Oh, your so mean Yume-Chan!" Laughed Riyu cheerfully. "You haven't changed at all!!"

"Wait you know me?!? Who I am I?" I asked taking Riyu seriously...

"No I mean out of your hospital outfit."

Which I found to be a complete mistake.

"Miss....-?" Said the same voice I heard at the hospital.

"Yume Hana!" Corrected Riyu.

"Miss Yume, to cut it short your now a magical girl called a Night Rain and you need to go up stair and change out of that ugly dress right away..." I was suprised by how bluntly he put it but I still did as he said.

Sure he did sound crazy but I've seen crazyer things... at least I think so...?

"Knock Knock!" Said Riyu standing infront of the door.

"Come in I'm done." I said not even thinking about what came out of my mouth.

"What cha doooinnng~!~!" He asked as annoying as ever.

"What does it look like... nothing." I said sitting on the floor.

"You know what's funny? You talk as if your older then me (of taller) but you like a year younger!" Said Riyu laughing, not trying to be offensive.

"That's because I think I'm better then you.." I said bluntly.

"Hahaha, your so funny!" Laughed Riyu.

"I'm tursty, get me something to drink... And I feel like eatting pudding... so get that for me too."

"Okies Dokies! Be back in a flash!" Riyu said running out of the room.

I just found my-self a new personally sevent. fu fu fu...

"Miss Yume, you're going to live here from now on but you will be forced to save the earth in return.." Said the same blunt man walking into the room.

"Whatever, like I care... Do I get payed?..." I replyed messing with the ribbions in my hair.

"In advanced." He said walking out of the room.

"Okay then that's final..." I said tricking him into giving me money every month.

"Hey wait-!" He said relizing I tricked him.

"Too late, it's final... remember...?" I said glaring at him.
With out a word he walked out of the room. Most likely mad because I tricked him.

"I'm back! Lookie! I got a strawberry cake for you!" Said Riyu running into my room.

"I don't want strawberry cake... go and get me apple pie with vanilla ice cream on the side." I said trying to make Riyu mad.

"Really? I don't like strawberry that much eirther! I'll get you you apple pie right now!"

Something tells me this is a begining of a very intresting life....

I smile slightly looking torward the floor.

"You look even prettyer when you smile!" Said Riyu looking into my room from the side of the door.

"Where is my pie?!?!" I yelled.

"Right here!" Riyu smiled, giving me the pie.

"Thanks...."I whisperd trying to making sure no one could hear me.

"Your welcome..." Said Riyu whispering back.

"Mmmm... This taste... okay..." I said taking a big bite of the pie.

"I'm glad you like it!" Said Riyu.

"Now get out of my room. It's to late for you to be in a maiden's room."

"Okay! See you in the morning!" He said making his way out of me room. "Good night!"

"Good night."

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lolol.... funny note for the chapter!! ..... and good idea about the fan girl thing....
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Shining Night Rain Two

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Before Making this Chapter:
So how do you like this story so far? Pretty good? Pretty Bad? It's alot better the my first story (how it is written)... After I made this I was think about how much this reminded me of Tokyo Mew Mew.... But I cheered myself up but thinking about the differentness of them. I mean does Tokyo have a shalow, mean, crule girl named Yume Hana as the main character? No, I don' think so!
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Morning already...?

A few hours later Riyu decided to barge into my room.
"Wake up-! Wow! Up already?!"

"I've been awake... for quite sometime now....." I said bruching my curly long white hair.

"Wow! I just noticed! White hair and violet hair! I've never seen that before!" Said Riyu cheerfully picking uo a hair bruch and combing my hair. "Wow! It's soft too! And it smells nice..."

"I'm hungry. What is there to eat, if I may ask?"

"Umm.. Well there alot of things! Do you want me to carry you princess?" Asked Riyu now combing my hair with his fingers.

"N-no thanks.. I'll walk down stairs my-self..." Slowly I got up, put my slippers and walked down stairs.

My insides feel funny... I must be very hungry...

"Please pass the salt!" I demanded.

"Okies! Here you go! Today Sano (that blunt guy) is taking us to meet the other Night Rains" Said Riyu happily passing it to me.

"This will be intresting....."

Later on, after we finsh having breakfest Sano returns home and brings Riyu and I to a record store.

"How absolutly filthy it is in here...." I said trying to make the manager (who was stading right in front of me) angry.

"You so funny!" Said Riyu stating to hug me.

"Woooo!" Said a girl who slipped right in front of me.

"Riyu, shall I step on her or walk over her." (Author's Note: Steping on and walking over are both consiterd very disrespectful.)

"How disrespectful!! And what's wrong with you hair?!? And your Eyes." Said the blond haired girl who slipped infront of me.

".....I wish you pain... >_>" I frownd.

"Are you okay?" Asked Riyu Me but The other girl thouth he was talking to her.

"♥Yes! I'm very okay indeed!! What about you! You look fine♥!" She said hugging Riyu.

"I'm sorry but can you not hug me..." Said Riyu with a serious look on his face.

"Are you okay....And by okay I mean is your head on right today?" I said trying to lift the mood.

"Don't worry I checked twice!" Laughed Riyu.

"This is Kiyoko Hajima, on of the Night Rains." Said Sano standing behind the blond girl.

"I feel like eating.... Riyu... bring me food..." I said
I sure like to eat alot.... I must have a high matabalizem....

I lightly touched my finger tips to the glass window. Throw the window it had a clear veiw of the ocean.

"What cha loooking at?" Asked Riyu looking throw the same glass window.

"Pretty, isn't it?" Said Kiyoko patting my head.

"Yes, it is..." I hadn't noticed till now that such little things can make me happy.

"Hi, I'm Kiyoko, what's your name." Kiyoko said sticking her hand out.

"Yume Hana." I said shaking it.

"Lookie-Okie there friends now!" Riyu said looking at Sano.

After my quick meeting with Kiyoko, we drove 5 blocks away to a small book shop. As soon as we got in, I sat down and picked out a few books to read, including two volumes of the manga Hatsumei Princess.

"...heeh.. hmmm.." I laughed, reading the romatice comedy. Every thing that happened in this comic was so unpredictable, and yet so predictable.
Maybe I read this one before... I doesn't seem to trigger anything thow...

"She's sooo cute when she smiles! Why can't she do that more!! That's the reason why she seems so imtimidating.!!" Said Kiyoko watching me read the manga.

"I think she likes being scary and intimidating...." Said Sano sitting on the floor, quite a distance from me.

"Yeah... I agree... She injoys scaring people, and hurting them, and over powering them..." Said Riyu standing behind Sano.

"Hello, and welcome to the Sejiko Bookstore! All comedy romance manga's are 50% off!!!" Said a short ligth brown haird girl.

After hearing this I instantly slammed the manga shut and stepped up, with my bangs covering my face.

"Sano, I want this... I really want this... get it for me...now!!!" I said with may face looking pale and demonic.

"Y-yes!!!!" He said to scard to come on get the book from me, so insted he got another copy of the book and ran to the chasher.

"Hi-hi! I'm Hemeda Hanazono! Nice to meet you! I like that manga too! Hey, wait I know you! you use to come here everyday!" Said the short brown haired girl.

"You know me. No you don't know me. You saw me. And I'm Yume Hana..." I said grabing the book from Sano, the one he just bought.

"Cool! How did you know that! You must be an esper.!!" Hemeda said jumping up and down.

"Just a guess...." I said starting to read the manga.

"Since your hangging out with Sano you must be a Night Rain!" Said Hemeda smiling and trying to read the manga I was reading from my side.

"Wow.. you must be an esper to figger that out.." I said playing the same game she was.

"Your right! Maybe I'm an esper!!! That's so cool!" She said no hearing the sacasem in my voice.

"Come on time to go! We'll meet the others tommoro okay!" Shouted Sona walking out of the store.

"Fine... come on Hemeda..." I said trying to sound unwilling, but I really didn't care.

"Okay let's go! Oh and you must be my older brothers friend! You know Riyu! And my uncle Sano." Said Hemeda grabing a bag and running out of the show, dragging me along.

What?!? Sano and Riyu are related!?!? How is that possible?!??! There so diffrent!!! One's blunt, one's perky, and one's stupid?!?!?

"How... is that... possible??......" I said looking out of the window of the car with a freaked out look on my face.

As soon as we got home I ate some cake and went straight to bed. I mean really... it's hard dealing with idiots for a full day.

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lol great story!! and lol u shouldn't have listened to scary music even if it was a good theme song.Its bad to scare yourself... :(

And I like this But I can't wait for the next chapter of the shuffle mix one
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lol great story!! and lol u shouldn't have listened to scary music even if it was a good theme song.Its bad to scare yourself... :(

And I like this But I can't wait for the next chapter of the shuffle mix one :D


i didnt mean to scar myself! it just happend O_O
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sgurlrox67 wrote:

lol great story!! and lol u shouldn't have listened to scary music even if it was a good theme song.Its bad to scare yourself... :(

And I like this But I can't wait for the next chapter of the shuffle mix one :D


i didnt mean to scar myself! it just happend O_O


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Shining Night Rain Three

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Sorry people but since I'm too lazy to put this in a story like way I'm going to do this the lazy way and write it as if it was a script!
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Narrator:Have you ever wondered what would happen if Yume meet Mae and Matt meet Riyu?
Well in this chapter of Shining Night Star you'll find just the answer.


IN MAE'S STORY

"Huhuh?!?!?!?!? O///O Wha!?!?!?!? Aaaaaa!!!!!!"

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Narrator:Wohohohoho if you want to know what made Mae freak out so much then wait till I post the next chapter of Shuffled Mix!

IN THE SHINING NIGHT RAIN UNIVERS

"Ow.... *rubbs head* Hey where did Mae-?" Asked Matt looking around for Mae.

"Hey, did you look up! I'm wearing a dress!!!" Said Mae falling on Matt's back.

"Uggg...." Said Matt.

"Hmm......"
Nothing happend!! He just feel on me when I was sleeping!

"Uggg... Mae get off.... please..."

"I'm to busy thinking!!! Ha ha ha ha ha!" Mae laughed in a really fake sounding way.

"Excuse me, your in my way move" Demanded Yume.

"Ya Matt! Move!" Yelled Mae.

"Please Mae... Move and spare my life..... I can't breath..." Said Matt just noticing Mae was holding all her bags.

"WHAT DO YO-!!! I can't yell... I lose all the air I have left...." Said Matt trying to escape Mae and her 10000 pound each bags.

"I never seen anyone but me inflict that much pain apond someone's soul... Please if you have no where to go stay at my place.." Said Yume witha listless face.

"Okay thanks!" Said Mae standing up, but quickly drop her bag on the place where she sat.

"Okay let's go! Hey Matt would you mind putting my bags away?"

"Wait I-"

"Okay thanks!"

2 HOURS LATER

"Wow! I really like your hair Yume!" Said Mae brushing Yume's hair.

"MAE!!!! WTH IS YOUR PROBLEM! YOU LEFT ME AND YOUR BAGS THAT WAY 1000 FRICKIN POUNDS OUT THERE!!! YOUR LUCKY SOME GUY JUST HAPPEND TO BE WORKING ON A CONSTRUCTION SITE AND HELPED ME!!" yelled Matt slamming the front door open.

"Matt! The cake here taste great! And it was 10000 pounds, silly."

"WTH DID YOU PUT IN YOU BAG ANYWAY?!?!?!" Continued to yell Matt.

"Oh that's easy, weights." Said Matt tearting him like an idiot.

"Okay, Mae let me speak slower... Why... would... you... put... weighs...in...your...bags?"

"Duuh, Weigth training... I'm the one who needs to speak slower..." Said Mae

"UGGG!!!! I.(<3). YOU...AND... YOU MUST BE TRYING TO BREAK ME!!!!"

"If you that tired then go up stairs and go to sleep!" Yelled Mae
Wow, Matt is like a fife year old! First he ask why there weights in my bag now he wants to sleep... man.. tis so hard to deal with him

BRB GOING TO CONTINUE LATER

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this was such a good chapter!!! (probly cause I love shuffle mix )
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i love it~ so awesome~ so awesome~!
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i love it~ so awesome~ so awesome~!


THANKS! I guess i should make the next chapter now!
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Shining Night Rain REAL Three

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I wasn't in a good mood but I managed to make the next chapter with out breaking down. Hope you like it!
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"Car ride~ Car ride~!" Sung Riyu as happy as ever.
"What's wrong with you?" I asked posting some replys to my Crunchroll Account.
"It's just so fun with you- everyone around!" Said Riyu rolling down the window.
"What chaa watching?" Asked Riyu watching watch an anime.
"Shugo Chara.... But I don't like the lead that much...." I sighed.
"Why?"
"She's weak and has no reason to feel alone..."
Hmm? That answer just popped out.... Maybe I felt alone...?
"You shouldn't say that! It'll lower our veiws!" Whinned Riyu.
"What veiws?"
"Oh look where here!" Yelled Riyu happily jumping out of the car.
"Whatever..." I whispered walking put of the car.
"Hemeda, Kiyoko..... I wonder what kind of personalities the others have....

As I entered the building I saw many apartment's. All of them looked new and clean.
Adcept one. Room 1- the other number was missing.
"What are we doing here?" I asked tugging on Riyu's sleve.
"Where looking for someone names- Yukoi Enma."
Flashback.

"Yukoi get over here! Yukoi! Get ovee here!"
Voices... No pictures... Just scrachy voices....

"Are you an idiot or something! I said get over here!"
Pure white hair flowing.... I know who lives here....-


R-riyu. Let's go." I said leaving the flashback.
"What's wrong?" He asked following me out the foor.
"N-nothing.... Let's go.. I havea feeling I shouldn't see this.." I said
opening the car door.
"Are you sure?" Asked Kiyoko.
"Are you-" Hemeda was cut off.
"Yes! I'm sure, you can go look if you want but I just think- know I shouldn't!"
"Okay then, you wait here. Riyu, Kiyoko go and check the place out. Hemeda stay here
with Yumi." Sano said pulling down the window.
"Y-yes..." Said Riyu bowing his head and walking into building sadly.

Seconds passed...minutes passed... They finally came back out. With there heads
down and Kiyoko sobbing.
"What's wrong!" Shouted Hemeda running to help Kiyoko.
"Sano.. Call the cops.... Someone's dead..." Said Kiyoko falling to the floor.
"Dead....?.... They couldn't find her.. so they must have been angry and.." Said Riyu
opening the car door and entering.
Diffrent... Things are going to be diffrent... diffrent... diffrent!
"R-.....k-......" I sounded starting to curl up in a ball.
"Let's go...." Said Sano phoning to police.
"Let's....." I whispered. "Go..."

I knew it... I knew it all along... I knew this would happen...
I knew something bad happened.... I just knew it... I.......
They...... Should have listened to me....


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yay!!


Okay I finshed the REAL third chapter! It is posted just abouve this one! ^w^
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very nice! and detailed
thanks for the post!!
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very nice! and detailed
thanks for the post!!


your welcome! NEW CHAP WILL BE UP 22 OR 23 OF THIS MONTH! in 2 days
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