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Posted 9/15/08 , edited 9/15/08
8th Submition

Name: xlandar

23.12.2012 – Late afternoon
“Despite the sudden announcement of ‘Hades the second” from NASA (National Aeronautics and Space Administration), United Nations Secretary General Ban Ki-moon and US Secretary Condoleezza Rice asks the public not to panic....”

“So, they finally announced it, huh?” a spiky-styled-and-dyed hair young man remarked in a seemingly uncaring tone, over the soft volume of the TV, which is currently showing the news reporting by a US anchorwoman.

“It is about time,” a man with stubbed chin replied, frowning deep into his dark coffee.

“Unfortunately, that is the thing that we are lacking now,” a female replied from her position against the dirty white wall. She was leaning against the shadows, such that a stranger in this dimly-lit room will probably not notice her at first glance.

“At least they are willing to believe in our words now; it is time we move on.”

“Move on? Take a look, Prof! It is barely three weeks, and we have to complete such a feat in that deadline?” Josh turned in his lazed position from the couch and look at the professor.

“We knew it would be hard from the start... be glad we have three weeks to accomplish this ‘feat’ of yours, not to mention that we have long began preparations.”

“Three weeks is still too little, preparations or not,” Josh argued, “Do you have any idea how many people there are in this world? 6,679,493,900 people. This is impossible!”
“Miracles are not made with impossibilities, Josh.” The woman turned to the stubbed man, “you are going to meet with the secretary?”

“Ah… I hope the discussion will be a success…” he muttered.

“It will be…we have worked hard all these years.”

“Well, god knows that I am a crude man... not someone like your father… he’s eloquent…”

The female smiled sadly and gently at him at the dour man as she walked over to give him a kiss at the cheeks. “I’ll be over at the NASA. You will need me there, right?”

“Ah, thanks, Tri,” Prof breathed out.

“Welcome. Take care, Josh,” she gave a small wave. At the doorway, Trina put on her spectacles before she stepped out of the place.

Despite her words, Trina did not leave for NASA immediately. Instead, she headed in the opposite direction, where a great mansion stood in silence. Trina got out of her convertible and went straight into the house.

In the mansion, in a sun-bathed room with French top-down windows, a little boy sat before the grand piano, moving in rhythm to the sound of the keys he pressed firmly. Trina stepped into the room silently, unwilling to disturb the boy in his rhapsody. Yet, the heaviness of the issues in her mind refuses to allow her to truly appreciate the music revolving around her ears. Finally, unable to control herself anymore, Trina stepped forward and hugged him tightly. The boy stopped and turned around to face her, smiling upon seeing his sister, "Trina!"

"Tyle," she replied, smiling gently at her little brother, "this tune is nice...."

Tyle nodded, and with enthusiasm, blurted out, "it is called Separation! It is a whole new tune, and they are going to use it in the new movie!"

Trina doubted the new movie is going to be aired, her flow of thoughts returning to the cursed meteor. "I'm going to be late home... perhaps not even back tonight. Remind Lyndie to lock all windows and doors before you sleep.” Trina looked face to face with Tyle and was somewhat assured when the boy nodded seriously. She then patted the boy on the head, claiming that he is the best little brother ever in this world before leaving again in her convertible, this time heading for NASA.

24.12.2012 – Breaking dawn

NASA, unlike the rumoured-filled world outside of its compound, was a place locked in the absence of loud noises, even in times of such tensed situation. Perhaps, it is more adequate to say that it is precisely because of this sudden realisation of what is about to come that has cause a spread of silence in this normally discussion-filled facility. It was in this situation in which Trina left the airport and entered the compound, feeling the tension in each step she took.

Dressed in white rolled-up-sleeves business shirt tucked into light brown pants, Trina was a picture of seriousness as she moved about the compound of NASA. Alone and silent, she strolled the corridors of the various labs, noting that the people who were normally enthusiasm in their work were obviously lacking in spirit. Some were not even doing anything; simply sitting around in their tall lab chairs, staring into space. This place is seriously going down in mood, Trina thought. Yet, a different scene faced her when she entered her research lab, having ascended 5 levels to reach the fifth astronomy research lab of NASA. “Burlton!” a voice halted her as she entered the room. Trina kept her surprise as her eyes found the unknown caller. Gloria Hayes. One of the important people of NASA. She was not about to be taken aback by the fiercest of lions after the mental warning she had prepared herself for before entering the room. This is the important day. The timing has to be right. The situation has to be right. Every thing has to be right today. Josh had already been found out by CERN, his narrow escape yesterday marking an end to his role in the prestigious science facility. Everything now lies on her shoulders, whether or not she can successfully do what was required, Hayes or no Hayes.

24.12.2012 – Early morning

“Madm,” Trina greeted.

Gloria answered with a brief smile that clearly did not reach her heart. “Burlton, I heard that you were the one that calculated out the day in which the meteor would fall.”

“Indeed, Madm” Trina thought back to those nights she had spent working with Prof and the others to study the movement of Hades 2.

“I was just wondering if you would … share with us…. Your expertise,” she added as Trina remained silent after her words.

“It is not really an expertise, Madm,”

“Do not play humble with me, Bulton,” her voice was hard, with an edge. Game over – time for the truth, or so it said.

“You not believe me?”

“You ever heard of the Mayas? No? Oh, I see… you have heard. You do know then, that they predicted the coming of the white men in South America… and the end of the world.” Gloria Hayes continued, seeing the silence Trina continued to keep, “do you not find it … coincidental… the dates?”

Hayes’ eyes were fully on Trina now, scrutinizing her face intensely. Trina let her eyes meet those of Hayes’. “There are such things as coindental… such as you, Madm, being so interested in history and finding the connection to today. Perhaps, the Mayas are really that amazing, that they truly can predict the end of the world, or so some says. But what I said hold true. Such is the reason why NASA announced to the world with regards to Hades 2.”

“That was an obvious mistake by Professor Gullent and Mr Hoyet. This meteor might change its routine at the critical point. You know that as a scientist in that area of expertise.”

“Then perhaps I can tell you that as a scientist in that area of expertise, Hades 2 has been in motion for too long to change its route.”

“You made a mistake – that meteor did not made the turns that was predicted by this lab!” with a flush of anger, she threw the papers onto the table besides her, not caring the least when some of them fluttered to the floor. Trina recognised them as the route map that they had worked out in this very lab.

“At that point in time, if you were to come to me and said the same words, I would agree. There is a possibility. But now? Look at the map yourself, Madm – these are old records, made two weeks ago. Do you have any idea how much difference two weeks can be in determining if a route made by a meteor is fixed or not? Please do not insult this lab, Madm!”

“Insult-” Hayes’ screech of anger would be unbearable, if not for the intervention of another.

“That would be enough, Gloria,” the deep masculine voice was unmistakable.

“Mr Hoyet!”

“A good day to you too, Gloria. I see you are well.”

“Why – why would you be here, Mr Hoyet?”

“For the same reason as you, and for a different reason as you. I’m here to talk to Miss Bulton here, but not to argue with her, but to learn more from her.” With a turn of his head, his attention was transferred from Hayes to Trina. “Miss Bulton. If I were to trust in your words, and those of this lab... Say, just say, Hades 2 will land on Earth, and that it will land in 3 weeks time. What can we do?”

“Prepare to escape Earth. Or burry ourselves in the very soil of this land.”

“… care to elaborate?”

“We can either escape to the satellites or rockets that will launch from Earth and stay there, or hide ourselves in secured facilities underground.”

. . . . .

“The space or the underground is our safest options, Sir.”

“You sure of this, Duirn?” the secretary rubbed his chin thoughtfully as he considered what Duirn had told him so far.

“I would not dare to come here and lie, Sir. This is an issue of utmost importance, as I have insisted long ago.”

“Not “sir”… we have been friends long enough… “Shian-san” will be enough. You were working along side Bulton, I remember… how is he?”

“He died peacefully, Sir”

“… I am sorry. The methods you told me of… they are good… but how are we to do it in such a short time?”

“There are various research facilities in Japan which are currently into space studies, Sir… my lab has been studying it for a long time as well. There would be enough, I assure you. As for the underground facilities, Hades 2 is expected to hit in Russia, and affect the surrounding areas. We could use the current underground facilities that are strong enough in areas far away from Russia or earthquake-prone areas. ” Seeing the thoughtful look on Shian’s eyes, Duirn knew that he was on the way to success. Relief slashed down on him as he continued to convince Shian, feeling lucky that he was visiting this area at this time, and had contacted him to arrange a meeting. This is his only chance at saving lives… to atone for those that he had taken. Duirn felt more relaxed as he outlined the details one by one to the Secretary-General of Japan.

It took some time, but when they are done, 2 hours has passed. The secretary-general was to make his way to a meeting with a foreign minister. Thus ended their meeting, swiftly and hastily. Duirn watched as Shian left the room, accompanied by his secretary and bodyguards.

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Posted 9/15/08 , edited 9/15/08
( Omg..thats my story)

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The problem with that story is...that you got my taste.....lol
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wow that's long. but okay,

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comment: i like the details and the arrangement. no comments for the words. it's the plot that really matters. un just need to add more expressions/feeling in their talking.
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Aegis85 wrote:

wow that's long. but okay,

i think i pick this one too. i give 4.8 No...wait...how about 5? ih...no maybe 4.8 coz i just afraid if someone next did better


no one rated bluepharoh??

and hey,i was waiting for teh same rating system u had ofr the others.... so that i know where to improve.. sighz.. this is unfair that u din use it...
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xlandar wrote:


Aegis85 wrote:

wow that's long. but okay,

i think i pick this one too. i give 4.8 No...wait...how about 5? ih...no maybe 4.8 coz i just afraid if someone next did better


no one rated bluepharoh??

and hey,i was waiting for teh same rating system u had ofr the others.... so that i know where to improve.. sighz.. this is unfair that u din use it...


lol. i thought no one really bother. okay i'll edit my post.
Posted 9/15/08

Aegis85 wrote:

comment: i like the details and the arrangement. no comments for the words. it's the plot that really matters. un just need to add more expressions/feeling in their talking.


Omg you got her! Xlandar I know that you can do that...
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miuanna wrote:


Aegis85 wrote:

comment: i like the details and the arrangement. no comments for the words. it's the plot that really matters. un just need to add more expressions/feeling in their talking.


Omg you got her! Xlandar I know that you can do that...


ahh he got me alright.. okies, i see what i can do... more feelings?? hmm...
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Aegis85 wrote:

wow that's long. but okay,

bluePharaoh - 3.8/5
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comment: paragraph pls.



I hear you!! sorry about that..My fault
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