Post Reply Falling In Love
Posted 9/20/08
Falling In Love


Lying Down,
And I just looking at you,
Holding you,
Admiring God’s intricate creation
From the tip of your hair,
Through the depths of your heart,
Till the end of your toes….
You are beautiful….


From your smiles to your laughter,
From your jokes to your tears,
I’ve never love someone through and through,
But I am telling you this…
That I’m so in love with you….


Sometimes I feel I don’t belong here,
I just don’t fit into the picture…
Made perfect by the people around you,
Made perfect by your routines,
Your rituals,
But then again, I look at you…
And the unseen is made clear…..


I love you…
Sometimes it is really hard,
But I don’t care…
Even if you broke my heart…
I rather would have loved
And lost,
Or just felt a second of your love,
Rather than wondering what could’ve been,
And never have the nerve…
But that didn’t happen,
I’ve fallen for you,
I know I’ve fallen hard.
I can only offer nothing,
Except a piece of my heart

By : sasukesrg


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Posted 9/20/08
Wow, a lot left for the mind to play with, wonderfully worded and oh so vague. Love is a wonderful thing, no?
Great Job
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Posted 10/17/08
Gosh, that was so well put! I love how u worded the ending, it wrapped everything up nicely.
I agree, love is a wonderful thing. Great, beautiful, perfect in every way.

I think that this is a poem that would either make u cry or laugh or both. That's a writers dream, is it not? To make the reader feel and see so many emotions that they are overwhelmed by feelings and thoughts and sights that they have never experianced before.
Posted 10/22/08

atatakakunai wrote:

Wow, a lot left for the mind to play with, wonderfully worded and oh so vague. Love is a wonderful thing, no?
Great Job :D



Kujin-jump wrote:

Gosh, that was so well put! I love how u worded the ending, it wrapped everything up nicely.
I agree, love is a wonderful thing. Great, beautiful, perfect in every way.

I think that this is a poem that would either make u cry or laugh or both. That's a writers dream, is it not? To make the reader feel and see so many emotions that they are overwhelmed by feelings and thoughts and sights that they have never experianced before.


Thanks for the comment...

Love is indeed a wonderful feeling...though I have yet to experience it myself....Love have never been so sweet for me as of yet....

My inspiration for this poem came mostly from novels.....not real life experience...at least not the bad ones...

Guess you can call me a bit unlucky with the opposite gender....

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