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Bitten
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Posted 12/1/07
I've been reading the rules and everything so im hoping I don't do anything wrong lolz. Anyway I just wanted to know if any of you think my story is good, needs work, or is comepletely dumb. You all have differnt veiws which is good because I want to see what kind of people like this lolz.

Basically my story is about a forensic photographer name Reila who is 24 years old. Her best friend, Nick, and her start to worry about their other best friend, Jannis, who hasn't shown up in ahwile as they began to find a roll of hints that something weird is going on in town. Little do they know that vampires plan to take over and more surprises unroll of their fate.

Chapter of "Bitten"

http://www.quizilla.com/users/Epilow/stories/483550/bitten+%5Bchapter+1%5D+%7Evampire+story%7E
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Sorry This is like a personal thread....
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Posted 12/1/07
Actually, for community purposes, creative work threads are allowed. I noticed that EpikLow stumbled across the creative works thread... but you didn't have to triple post at the end of it, you know...
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Posted 12/1/07
ahh sorry guys!. should i try to delete this? (if i can) lolz omg i forgot aobut the creative works thread. cna someone send me the link to it? and sorry for crowding that thread i promise i wont do that this time
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Posted 12/1/07

EpikLow wrote:

I've been reading the rules and everything so im hoping I don't do anything wrong lolz. Anyway I just wanted to know if any of you think my story is good, needs work, or is comepletely dumb. You all have differnt veiws which is good because I want to see what kind of people like this lolz.

Basically my story is about a forensic photographer name Reila who is 24 years old. Her best friend, Nick, and her start to worry about their other best friend, Jannis, who hasn't shown up in ahwile as they began to find a roll of hints that something weird is going on in town. Little do they know that vampires plan to take over and more surprises unroll of their fate.

Chapter of "Bitten"

http://www.quizilla.com/users/Epilow/stories/483550/bitten+%5Bchapter+1%5D+%7Evampire+story%7E


I wouldn't say it's dumb, it just needs to be more interesting and longer so yeah it needs alittle work but its not bad.
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Posted 5/12/08
in the middle of the night, we go out for a bite
we give them a fright, in the middle of the night.

made this one up earlier. awesome!!
Posted 5/12/08

goldengoat55555 wrote:

in the middle of the night, we go out for a bite
we give them a fright, in the middle of the night.

made this one up earlier. awesome!!


im seriousy thinkin you are a vampire i never ever see u on durein the day
(yes im your secret stalker)
Posted 5/12/08

helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:

in the middle of the night, we go out for a bite
we give them a fright, in the middle of the night.

made this one up earlier. awesome!!


im seriousy thinkin you are a vampire i never ever see u on durein the day
(yes im your secret stalker)


ha ha! one must hide from the sunlight......well actually its because i don't put on enough suncream to go out.lol
Posted 5/12/08

goldengoat55555 wrote:


helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:

in the middle of the night, we go out for a bite
we give them a fright, in the middle of the night.

made this one up earlier. awesome!!


im seriousy thinkin you are a vampire i never ever see u on durein the day
(yes im your secret stalker)


ha ha! one must hide from the sunlight......well actually its because i don't put on enough suncream to go out.lol


you live in england how do u need suncream for england it rains most of the time there
which reminds me most pack water proof clothes for my trip to london hahahahaha

Posted 5/12/08

helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:


helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:

in the middle of the night, we go out for a bite
we give them a fright, in the middle of the night.

made this one up earlier. awesome!!


im seriousy thinkin you are a vampire i never ever see u on durein the day
(yes im your secret stalker)


ha ha! one must hide from the sunlight......well actually its because i don't put on enough suncream to go out.lol


you live in england how do u need suncream for england it rains most of the time there
which reminds me most pack water proof clothes for my trip to london hahahahaha



thats true i give you that, but when its hot, its hot, i think it was something like 30 degrees or something today i was left in the middle of the street lying and dying before i even got to my car and when i did, i just ended walking back in doors. you coming to london? or as some say the most worst place in england
Posted 5/12/08

goldengoat55555 wrote:


helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:


helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:

in the middle of the night, we go out for a bite
we give them a fright, in the middle of the night.

made this one up earlier. awesome!!


im seriousy thinkin you are a vampire i never ever see u on durein the day
(yes im your secret stalker)


ha ha! one must hide from the sunlight......well actually its because i don't put on enough suncream to go out.lol


you live in england how do u need suncream for england it rains most of the time there
which reminds me most pack water proof clothes for my trip to london hahahahaha



thats true i give you that, but when its hot, its hot, i think it was something like 30 degrees or something today i was left in the middle of the street lying and dying before i even got to my car and when i did, i just ended walking back in doors. you coming to london? or as some say the most worst place in england


same here when ireland gets hot it gets really hot so hot u cant move
yeah im going to stratford in the end july or august is it really that bad cant be anyworse than limrick city hehe ??
Posted 5/12/08

helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:


helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:


helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:

in the middle of the night, we go out for a bite
we give them a fright, in the middle of the night.

made this one up earlier. awesome!!


im seriousy thinkin you are a vampire i never ever see u on durein the day
(yes im your secret stalker)


ha ha! one must hide from the sunlight......well actually its because i don't put on enough suncream to go out.lol


you live in england how do u need suncream for england it rains most of the time there
which reminds me most pack water proof clothes for my trip to london hahahahaha



thats true i give you that, but when its hot, its hot, i think it was something like 30 degrees or something today i was left in the middle of the street lying and dying before i even got to my car and when i did, i just ended walking back in doors. you coming to london? or as some say the most worst place in england


same here when ireland gets hot it gets really hot so hot u cant move
yeah im going to stratford in the end july or august is it really that bad cant be anyworse than limrick city hehe ??


stratford, im heading up there on saturday to a dinner party, but the nightclubs down there are awesome! a lot of fights happen around stratford and the bus service is quite shite*evil smile*. but yeah the nightlife is awesome and there is that shopping mall which is quite big.
Posted 5/12/08

goldengoat55555 wrote:


helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:


helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:


helena91 wrote:


goldengoat55555 wrote:

in the middle of the night, we go out for a bite
we give them a fright, in the middle of the night.

made this one up earlier. awesome!!


im seriousy thinkin you are a vampire i never ever see u on durein the day
(yes im your secret stalker)


ha ha! one must hide from the sunlight......well actually its because i don't put on enough suncream to go out.lol


you live in england how do u need suncream for england it rains most of the time there
which reminds me most pack water proof clothes for my trip to london hahahahaha



thats true i give you that, but when its hot, its hot, i think it was something like 30 degrees or something today i was left in the middle of the street lying and dying before i even got to my car and when i did, i just ended walking back in doors. you coming to london? or as some say the most worst place in england


same here when ireland gets hot it gets really hot so hot u cant move
yeah im going to stratford in the end july or august is it really that bad cant be anyworse than limrick city hehe ??


stratford, im heading up there on saturday to a dinner party, but the nightclubs down there are awesome! a lot of fights happen around stratford and the bus service is quite shite*evil smile*. but yeah the nightlife is awesome and there is that shopping mall which is quite big.


i know thats why im going there and m crazy auntie who lets me do anything i want lives there so full on party time for me and its just after my 17 th ill be going so bollox its close enough to 18 to get served
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