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Warriors of Change (Story Title)
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Posted 4/13/07
Paragraphs and punctuation come to mind….
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Posted 4/14/07
it's gettin more and more interesting
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Posted 4/14/07
But you just kinda involved God in a world full of other gods and fantasy and energy and an accumulation of magics and sorts. It kinda clashes. At least I think so. I dunno, does anyone else agree? I don't really wanna criticize, but it's only an opinion.
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Posted 4/14/07
the Story involves God; but the people of the world see God in a different light. I'm simply saying that 80% of the people in this story believe in a divine being. what do you think of my story so far Ray? does it make any sense to you.
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Posted 4/15/07
It sounds like Naruto, Eragon, and something else put together. I can't remember what though.
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Posted 4/15/07
Thats it. Inuyasha.
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Posted 4/15/07
^u spotted something there. but still it is a good story u have to admit
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Posted 4/15/07
what I written so far is the intro to the story, and added revised material to the story. I'm trying to keep this as original possible. I'll be working on Ch.1 over the next few days. after all for any great story it takes both time, and patience.
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Posted 4/15/07
^that basically means this thread will be dead for the next few days
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Posted 4/15/07
that's not true continue to give me advice and opinions that will help me think of ways to make Chapter, one even better.
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Posted 4/16/07
Stay away from the government shmick. Change it to tradtions or elder rule or maybe evan shaman. Government is way to confusing.
Posted 4/23/07
There's a movie called Soldiers of Change. I've never seen it but that's what your story title reminded me of.
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Posted 5/13/07

Cordivine wrote:

There's a movie called Soldiers of Change. I've never seen it but that's what your story title reminded me of.


never heard of the movie was it any good?

Posted 6/9/09 , edited 6/9/09
By reading your summary it makes me think: "Hm, now where have I herd this before?"

This is nowhere near the word original. It screams Naruto, but with a recreated plot.
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Your writing reminds me of Lord of the Rings...the book. That's not a compliment.
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