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KILL OR BE SLAUGHTER
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Posted 12/2/07

In the end i did not kill anybody,
but sloughter them into pieces
Pushing me beyond all controlI
I don't give in easily to temptation


Although there may be some hesitation
In my heart you've made a reservation
But I think all you really need is liberation


I hate the reflection as I stare into your eyes
Ask me no questions and I'll slaughter you soon
No longer will I wear your disguise
With every word, ill bring your head to the front porch


I look in the mirror and you're my reflection
I try to tell you, but it's so hard to mention
You think after it all, we'd learn our lesson
Now it's all back, so I'll ask you this question


Do you even care that I slaughter your family?
Is it really all that hard to see?
I try to just set it all free
But I would love to kill you all over again!!

Posted 12/2/07
Probably the worst piece of poetry i have ever had the displeasure of reading. I hope you didn't write this atrocity and if so. It sucks....majorly. Lacks any real creativity, it's poorly written, and cliche.
This fails.

So once again I'll reiterate..if you wrote this...
.....Just stay in a dark room and play with broken glass.

Trevor (OP)

EDIT- To below....i agree on the colors...but if i were him i would have left it all black...black and bold things as dark and as uniquely topic'd as this should never be color coated...esp in bright ones...dark is always the way to go with such things.
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Posted 12/2/07
The rainbow colors really brought out your profound and ageless message, and the striking imagery made me feel like I was there. I teared up in awe.
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Posted 12/2/07
..... ......
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Posted 12/2/07
reminds me of anger management through drawing and writing. better peotry than to spray.
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Posted 12/2/07
wtf???...this sucks more dick than my aunt cathy....and she sucks ALOT
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Posted 12/2/07
umm is it like a killed or be killed kind of thing?
then i would kill
sorry but ya sorry
Posted 12/2/07
I don't see the point for this thread. Can anyone explain?
Posted 12/2/07
A forum is not a place for you to post your demented ideas you damn emo. Go cut your self in peace.

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31 / M / San Jose, CA, USA
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Posted 12/2/07
Hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha.

If reading this thread doesn't make you hate people (like the OP), I'm not sure what will.

Also, learn2tense.
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Posted 12/2/07

juntanami wrote:


In the end i did not kill anybody,
but sloughter them into pieces
Pushing me beyond all controlI
I don't give in easily to temptation


Although there may be some hesitation
In my heart you've made a reservation
But I think all you really need is liberation


I hate the reflection as I stare into your eyes
Ask me no questions and I'll slaughter you soon
No longer will I wear your disguise
With every word, ill bring your head to the front porch


I look in the mirror and you're my reflection
I try to tell you, but it's so hard to mention
You think after it all, we'd learn our lesson
Now it's all back, so I'll ask you this question


Do you even care that I slaughter your family?
Is it really all that hard to see?
I try to just set it all free
But I would love to kill you all over again!!



Fucking plagiarist. I read that in "Leaves of Grass" just the other night. You couldn't come up with anything that good on your own in a million years.
Posted 12/3/07

azrael910 wrote:


juntanami wrote:


In the end i did not kill anybody,
but sloughter them into pieces
Pushing me beyond all controlI
I don't give in easily to temptation


Although there may be some hesitation
In my heart you've made a reservation
But I think all you really need is liberation


I hate the reflection as I stare into your eyes
Ask me no questions and I'll slaughter you soon
No longer will I wear your disguise
With every word, ill bring your head to the front porch


I look in the mirror and you're my reflection
I try to tell you, but it's so hard to mention
You think after it all, we'd learn our lesson
Now it's all back, so I'll ask you this question


Do you even care that I slaughter your family?
Is it really all that hard to see?
I try to just set it all free
But I would love to kill you all over again!!



Fucking plagiarist. I read that in "Leaves of Grass" just the other night. You couldn't come up with anything that good on your own in a million years.


AZRAE-OWNED!!!

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Trevor (OP)
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Posted 12/3/07
Man, that's embarrassing.
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Posted 12/3/07
what in the world is this
Posted 12/3/07

juntanami wrote:


In the end i did not kill anybody,
but sloughter them into pieces
Pushing me beyond all controlI
I don't give in easily to temptation


Although there may be some hesitation
In my heart you've made a reservation
But I think all you really need is liberation


I hate the reflection as I stare into your eyes
Ask me no questions and I'll slaughter you soon
No longer will I wear your disguise
With every word, ill bring your head to the front porch


I look in the mirror and you're my reflection
I try to tell you, but it's so hard to mention
You think after it all, we'd learn our lesson
Now it's all back, so I'll ask you this question


Do you even care that I slaughter your family?
Is it really all that hard to see?
I try to just set it all free
But I would love to kill you all over again!!





uh.... yaaa.

it's hard to read a so called "poem of slaughter" when it's
being displayed in different colors of the rainbow.

kind of works against it there.

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