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Posted 10/17/08 , edited 5/30/10
I sit; the time passes slowly and I look around.
Empty; the room has nothing inside, no windows no doors no anything.
I wait; the cold air against my skin chilling, no blankets to warm.
No-one; nobody here to console me or to ever hold close.
I cry; the only warmth for my skin is the tears that roll from my eyes.
Grey; the only color the walls bring to my sight.
I cling; tightly to myself waiting hopelessly for someone, something.
Forever; alone and desperate in this hell of despair...

I really need to get out more.

I didn't know where I was going with that one, so I dropped it instead of ruining it.

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Posted 10/18/08
It's sad, but good. I like the way you set it out, with the simple but effective repitition. I'm a fan of both ur stories and your poems. Keep up the great work!
My favorite line: 'I cry; the only warmth for my skin is the tears that roll from my eyes.'
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