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Who To Chose? [My First FanFiction]
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it's not bad.. Could do better though. Need a beta or throughly edit your work. I'm a beta, so I have higher expectations. I'm currently beta-ing for 7, now 8 ppl. So a bit hard..


Oh. What do you mean by beta and stuff?
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Chapter 2- Apperances

After I got to the classroom, the sensei questioned me as expected.

"Himamori-san! Where have you been?" He questioned.

"Its Hinamori, not Himamori! Ugh, its none of your business anyway..." I said to him as I sat down and crossed my legs and arms. I noticed the sensei give me a stare.

"None of your business?! Thats so cool Amu-chan! Cool and Spicy!" I heard two girls sitting behind me shout.

I sighed.

I looked over at Tadase-kun, and he was staring at me! I automatically blushed and looked away.

The rest of the day went by normally, and like always I didn't talk to Tadase-kun, because he was always around his friends, and it wasnt my character to just go up to him to talk with him. Never...

There was no Guardian meeting after school today, so I just started to walk home alone.

I was looking around, seeing so many beautiful trees, and the sky and clouds looked real pretty too, but not that dark colored egg that flew past in the sky. Wait! Could that have been and X Egg?!

I started chasing after it, hoping to catch it this time.

"Ran, character change!"

"You got it, Amu! Hop, Step, Jump!" Ran pratically yelled.

I was chasing it for a very long time, and it wouldn't stop moving! But I can't let it get away now, I've come to far! It was starting to get dark outside.

"Shoot...Mom is going to be mad..." I said, loosing focus of the egg.

But suddenly, out of the blue, something blue flew up in the sky towards the egg.

"A big blue claw...? That looks firmiliar...Oh! Thats-"

"Hey Amu." I heard a husky, yet handsome voice call out.

"No way...Not him again...Ikuto...!" I yelled, as he wrapped the X Egg in his big, long claw that came out of his tan arm. He was standing on a thin branch of a really tall tree.

"Ikuto, no! Thats my job, let go of it!" I shouted flying towards him to get the egg back.

"Amu, come here!" He teased while he held one arm out open to me.

"Ah! Ikuto!" I blushed, already to close to him to fly back now at his stupid comment.

He then grabbed me by the waist with his arm that he held out to me, and brought me close to his chest; he was warm, and thats a fact.

I felt my heart beat increase within seconds. "I-Ikuto! Let me go!" I said to him while blushing, and struggling to get out of his arms.

"Why Amu...You just got here, you came flying towards me didn't you? Why the change of heart?" He said to me jokingly while he smirked.

It was no use, he wouldn't let go. He kept wrapping his arms around me tighter, and tighter, yet still holding that X Egg in his hand. I felt like my chest was about ready to explode!

Since I could no long move my arms because of his extremely tight grasp, I tried kicking him, but I kept missing.

"Darn you Ikuto!" I said still throwing my legs everywhere untill my right leg stomped on the brach that was supporting us hardly.

Ikuto started to laugh a bit, but while that was happening, I could have sworn I heard the branch crack.

It did. Suddenly, I found myself flying out of Ikutos warm arms. My eyes widened, as I fell from such a high place.

I saw Ikuto jumping from the bigger trees to the smaller trees that were close to me. Was he trying to save me?

I then closed my golden eyes.

I heard Ikuto shout, "Amu!"

Then I heard another firmiliar voice shout, "Holy Crown!"

I opened my eyes as I heard Tadase-kun's voice, and I felt my body bounce off something like jellow.

"Ah! Whats going on!?" I shouted, as everything in my vision was spinning.

Too many things are going on at once! I started to feel a bit dizzy.

Things started to slow down a bit as I felt like I was being carried by someone. Was it Ikuto!?

"Hinamori-san! Hinamori-san!" I heard Tadase-kun shout out to me.

It was Tadase-kun's arms I was in, and they wernt as warm as Ikuto's arms...

"Tadase...kun...?" I said.

Ikuto then finally reached the ground, a little to save me...if he was trying to.

Tadase put me down on the ground, looked up at Ikuto with angry eyes and said, "Tsukiyomi Ikuto! What did you do to Hinamori-san!?"

"I didn't do a thing but hold her tight, oh, and capture the X Egg. Amu fell on her own." He replied with a not so caring voice.

"You hugged Hinamori-san!?" He said as he looked over at me, then back at Ikuto.

"Thats right little kiddy king! Here Amu, this is for you since I couldn't save you in time, see ya." He said to Tadase-kun, then he turned towards me and tossed me the X Egg, then left.

I got up, catching the X Egg.

"Ikuto, wait!" I shouted to him, but he was gone. Wait! He said he couldn't save me in time...so that means he was trying to save me! How nice. Wait a second, why am I thinking this!? Ugh!

"Hinamori-san, are you okay?" Tadase-kun asked me.

"Yep, I'm perfectly fine, thanks for saving me. Now lets purify this egg!" I said, smiling and blushing. I then held up the egg, and winked.

After the egg was purified, and went back to its owner, Tadase-kun and I headed opposite ways to go home.

As I was walking home, all alone in the dark, I thought to myself, Tadase-kun...Ikuto...


Well thats chapter 2! I hope you all enjoyed that! Please review and comment and stuff, lol, thank you!


NICE!!!!!!!!!!!! Is this an Amuto or Tadmu?
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paigegotkisses wrote:

Chapter 2- Apperances

After I got to the classroom, the sensei questioned me as expected.

"Himamori-san! Where have you been?" He questioned.

"Its Hinamori, not Himamori! Ugh, its none of your business anyway..." I said to him as I sat down and crossed my legs and arms. I noticed the sensei give me a stare.

"None of your business?! Thats so cool Amu-chan! Cool and Spicy!" I heard two girls sitting behind me shout.

I sighed.

I looked over at Tadase-kun, and he was staring at me! I automatically blushed and looked away.

The rest of the day went by normally, and like always I didn't talk to Tadase-kun, because he was always around his friends, and it wasnt my character to just go up to him to talk with him. Never...

There was no Guardian meeting after school today, so I just started to walk home alone.

I was looking around, seeing so many beautiful trees, and the sky and clouds looked real pretty too, but not that dark colored egg that flew past in the sky. Wait! Could that have been and X Egg?!

I started chasing after it, hoping to catch it this time.

"Ran, character change!"

"You got it, Amu! Hop, Step, Jump!" Ran pratically yelled.

I was chasing it for a very long time, and it wouldn't stop moving! But I can't let it get away now, I've come to far! It was starting to get dark outside.

"Shoot...Mom is going to be mad..." I said, loosing focus of the egg.

But suddenly, out of the blue, something blue flew up in the sky towards the egg.

"A big blue claw...? That looks firmiliar...Oh! Thats-"

"Hey Amu." I heard a husky, yet handsome voice call out.

"No way...Not him again...Ikuto...!" I yelled, as he wrapped the X Egg in his big, long claw that came out of his tan arm. He was standing on a thin branch of a really tall tree.

"Ikuto, no! Thats my job, let go of it!" I shouted flying towards him to get the egg back.

"Amu, come here!" He teased while he held one arm out open to me.

"Ah! Ikuto!" I blushed, already to close to him to fly back now at his stupid comment.

He then grabbed me by the waist with his arm that he held out to me, and brought me close to his chest; he was warm, and thats a fact.

I felt my heart beat increase within seconds. "I-Ikuto! Let me go!" I said to him while blushing, and struggling to get out of his arms.

"Why Amu...You just got here, you came flying towards me didn't you? Why the change of heart?" He said to me jokingly while he smirked.

It was no use, he wouldn't let go. He kept wrapping his arms around me tighter, and tighter, yet still holding that X Egg in his hand. I felt like my chest was about ready to explode!

Since I could no long move my arms because of his extremely tight grasp, I tried kicking him, but I kept missing.

"Darn you Ikuto!" I said still throwing my legs everywhere untill my right leg stomped on the brach that was supporting us hardly.

Ikuto started to laugh a bit, but while that was happening, I could have sworn I heard the branch crack.

It did. Suddenly, I found myself flying out of Ikutos warm arms. My eyes widened, as I fell from such a high place.

I saw Ikuto jumping from the bigger trees to the smaller trees that were close to me. Was he trying to save me?

I then closed my golden eyes.

I heard Ikuto shout, "Amu!"

Then I heard another firmiliar voice shout, "Holy Crown!"

I opened my eyes as I heard Tadase-kun's voice, and I felt my body bounce off something like jellow.

"Ah! Whats going on!?" I shouted, as everything in my vision was spinning.

Too many things are going on at once! I started to feel a bit dizzy.

Things started to slow down a bit as I felt like I was being carried by someone. Was it Ikuto!?

"Hinamori-san! Hinamori-san!" I heard Tadase-kun shout out to me.

It was Tadase-kun's arms I was in, and they wernt as warm as Ikuto's arms...

"Tadase...kun...?" I said.

Ikuto then finally reached the ground, a little to save me...if he was trying to.

Tadase put me down on the ground, looked up at Ikuto with angry eyes and said, "Tsukiyomi Ikuto! What did you do to Hinamori-san!?"

"I didn't do a thing but hold her tight, oh, and capture the X Egg. Amu fell on her own." He replied with a not so caring voice.

"You hugged Hinamori-san!?" He said as he looked over at me, then back at Ikuto.

"Thats right little kiddy king! Here Amu, this is for you since I couldn't save you in time, see ya." He said to Tadase-kun, then he turned towards me and tossed me the X Egg, then left.

I got up, catching the X Egg.

"Ikuto, wait!" I shouted to him, but he was gone. Wait! He said he couldn't save me in time...so that means he was trying to save me! How nice. Wait a second, why am I thinking this!? Ugh!

"Hinamori-san, are you okay?" Tadase-kun asked me.

"Yep, I'm perfectly fine, thanks for saving me. Now lets purify this egg!" I said, smiling and blushing. I then held up the egg, and winked.

After the egg was purified, and went back to its owner, Tadase-kun and I headed opposite ways to go home.

As I was walking home, all alone in the dark, I thought to myself, Tadase-kun...Ikuto...


Well thats chapter 2! I hope you all enjoyed that! Please review and comment and stuff, lol, thank you!


NICE!!!!!!!!!!!! Is this an Amuto or Tadmu?


Yey, someone replied!
Hm...I'm kind of making it have equal Amuto and Tadamu...but I'm probably going to aim it towards Amuto XD What pairing would you like it to be?
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Haha getting better =]
Haha Make it Amu & Ikuto Lolz
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Haha getting better =]
Haha Make it Amu & Ikuto Lolz

Yey! Thanks, and I think I will! Lol!

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Muppie wrote:

Haha getting better =]
Haha Make it Amu & Ikuto Lolz

Yey! Thanks, and I think I will! Lol!



Yuppie. make it amuto! That's my opinion oni, others welcome.
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paigegotkisses wrote:


Muppie wrote:

Haha getting better =]
Haha Make it Amu & Ikuto Lolz

Yey! Thanks, and I think I will! Lol!



Yuppie. make it amuto! That's my opinion oni, others welcome.

Ok ^_^
Thanks!
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iluvshaoran wrote:

it's not bad.. Could do better though. Need a beta or throughly edit your work. I'm a beta, so I have higher expectations. I'm currently beta-ing for 7, now 8 ppl. So a bit hard..


Oh. What do you mean by beta and stuff?


Beta reader means an editer. Beta is basically online. So like another person online that is reading and editing ur work.

BTW: Do you have an account with the same name as this on youtube? Cuz I really like those videos! Especially the Crush one
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paigegotkisses wrote:


iluvshaoran wrote:

it's not bad.. Could do better though. Need a beta or throughly edit your work. I'm a beta, so I have higher expectations. I'm currently beta-ing for 7, now 8 ppl. So a bit hard..


Oh. What do you mean by beta and stuff?


Beta reader means an editer. Beta is basically online. So like another person online that is reading and editing ur work.

BTW: Do you have an account with the same name as this on youtube? Cuz I really like those videos! Especially the Crush one


Oh...Do you make fanfics?
And yes! XD
Lol! Execept paigegotkisses got deleted so now i have a new one called paigegothugs (paige GOT hugs, not thugs, lol.)
but thank you, i like that one too!
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paigegotkisses wrote:


iluvshaoran wrote:


paigegotkisses wrote:


iluvshaoran wrote:

it's not bad.. Could do better though. Need a beta or throughly edit your work. I'm a beta, so I have higher expectations. I'm currently beta-ing for 7, now 8 ppl. So a bit hard..


Oh. What do you mean by beta and stuff?


Beta reader means an editer. Beta is basically online. So like another person online that is reading and editing ur work.

BTW: Do you have an account with the same name as this on youtube? Cuz I really like those videos! Especially the Crush one


Oh...Do you make fanfics?
And yes! XD
Lol! Execept paigegotkisses got deleted so now i have a new one called paigegothugs (paige GOT hugs, not thugs, lol.)
but thank you, i like that one too!


Yeah... I do. I have one Shugo Chara fanfic with 2 chapters with 26 reviews so far. I actually have 3.

I know, it sucks when youtube deletes ur account. My first account with 3000 subscribers got deleted.
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paigegotkisses wrote:


iluvshaoran wrote:


paigegotkisses wrote:


iluvshaoran wrote:

it's not bad.. Could do better though. Need a beta or throughly edit your work. I'm a beta, so I have higher expectations. I'm currently beta-ing for 7, now 8 ppl. So a bit hard..


Oh. What do you mean by beta and stuff?


Beta reader means an editer. Beta is basically online. So like another person online that is reading and editing ur work.

BTW: Do you have an account with the same name as this on youtube? Cuz I really like those videos! Especially the Crush one


Oh...Do you make fanfics?
And yes! XD
Lol! Execept paigegotkisses got deleted so now i have a new one called paigegothugs (paige GOT hugs, not thugs, lol.)
but thank you, i like that one too!


Yeah... I do. I have one Shugo Chara fanfic with 2 chapters with 26 reviews so far. I actually have 3.

I know, it sucks when youtube deletes ur account. My first account with 3000 subscribers got deleted.

Oh really? Whats it called?
And wow, 3000?! Nice!
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paigegotkisses wrote:


iluvshaoran wrote:


paigegotkisses wrote:


iluvshaoran wrote:


paigegotkisses wrote:


iluvshaoran wrote:

it's not bad.. Could do better though. Need a beta or throughly edit your work. I'm a beta, so I have higher expectations. I'm currently beta-ing for 7, now 8 ppl. So a bit hard..


Oh. What do you mean by beta and stuff?


Beta reader means an editer. Beta is basically online. So like another person online that is reading and editing ur work.

BTW: Do you have an account with the same name as this on youtube? Cuz I really like those videos! Especially the Crush one


Oh...Do you make fanfics?
And yes! XD
Lol! Execept paigegotkisses got deleted so now i have a new one called paigegothugs (paige GOT hugs, not thugs, lol.)
but thank you, i like that one too!


Yeah... I do. I have one Shugo Chara fanfic with 2 chapters with 26 reviews so far. I actually have 3.

I know, it sucks when youtube deletes ur account. My first account with 3000 subscribers got deleted.

Oh really? Whats it called?
And wow, 3000?! Nice!


iluvshaoran... my new one is iluvshaoran2

Now I barely have 30.. Gotta reupload the animes and upload new animes to get more subscribers
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paigegotkisses wrote:


iluvshaoran wrote:


paigegotkisses wrote:


iluvshaoran wrote:


paigegotkisses wrote:


iluvshaoran wrote:

it's not bad.. Could do better though. Need a beta or throughly edit your work. I'm a beta, so I have higher expectations. I'm currently beta-ing for 7, now 8 ppl. So a bit hard..


Oh. What do you mean by beta and stuff?


Beta reader means an editer. Beta is basically online. So like another person online that is reading and editing ur work.

BTW: Do you have an account with the same name as this on youtube? Cuz I really like those videos! Especially the Crush one


Oh...Do you make fanfics?
And yes! XD
Lol! Execept paigegotkisses got deleted so now i have a new one called paigegothugs (paige GOT hugs, not thugs, lol.)
but thank you, i like that one too!


Yeah... I do. I have one Shugo Chara fanfic with 2 chapters with 26 reviews so far. I actually have 3.

I know, it sucks when youtube deletes ur account. My first account with 3000 subscribers got deleted.

Oh really? Whats it called?
And wow, 3000?! Nice!


iluvshaoran... my new one is iluvshaoran2

Now I barely have 30.. Gotta reupload the animes and upload new animes to get more subscribers


Oh, ok!
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i read a few of that was really good but im not bothered to read them all

hehe....
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