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Midnight Angel, Chapter 1: Another Princess

Hi, I'm Josh Ichihara and I live in LA. And to tell you the truth I HATE it here! People call it the city of angels but I call it the portal to hell.
Everyday I see thugs, drug dealers, Prostitutes, and murderous drivers. All I see is a world filled with sin and vice. A world that I want no part of.
Sure people call me a variety of insults like loser but I don’t care. From my point of view there the losers.
So until I can get out of here ill just wait till that day comes. If it ever comes at all.

The school bell rang and everyone scurried to class. Josh snuck into World History hoping the teacher wouldn’t notice his tardy. But the teacher caught him at first glance and wrote him up for detention. With a sigh Josh took his seat next to the window and watched the cars driving by.

“Listen up! Today we have a new student coming in so you animals better behave!”

“Whew, new meat!” one of the students yelled.

“ Quiet! Here she comes.”

A girl walked in. her bright yellow hair fell down to her shoulders and she walked with a optimistic aura. She was wearing a white blouse and blue skirt. And had a white bow in her hair with a blue trim. The class was surprised, to say the least. Everyone had there eyes on her but she didn’t seem to mind. Then she made her way to the front of the class with a big smile plastered on her face. “ This is Michele Tangelos. Please introduce yourself Michele.”

“HI! My names Michele and I’m glad to meet you! I’m originally from San Francisco but I moved her because my school was shut down. I hope we can all be friends.”

“Oh boy, another princess.” Josh thought to himself.
“ I bet she’s one of those rich girls with a spoiling father and a trophy mom. She’s so rich and naïve that everyone loves her. But I doubt she cares, she just lives off attention like any other princess.”

“Well Michele I hope you enjoy our school.” the teacher said
“Lets see, you can sit in that empty seat next to Josh.”

“Oh great.” Josh thought.

“Ok, turn to page 385 and do questions three to eighteen” the teacher said and then pulled out a book and headset.

The students didn’t care about school work of course. Accept the new girl. She was the only one who listened and finished her work. She finished quickly and then turned towards Josh

“Hi, its nice to meet you Josh!” she said with a smile.

Josh didn’t answer and just glanced at the girl for a second. He hoped she would get the point and leave him alone but she didn’t. She just smiled at him patiently. The smile was almost deadly and Josh found his patience running thin.

“ Err, listen could you just leave me alone I don’t want to meet or talk to someone like you” Josh said harshly.

“ Someone like me?” Michele said curiously.

“ Yes someone like you. A princess who cares more about being noticed than the people noticing her.”

“ That doesn’t sound like me.”

“ Whatever. Just leave me alone already.”

“ Hey! Lets be friends!”

“What!?”

Then the bell rang and everyone scurried out of their rooms including josh. And amongst the chaos he was able to get away from Michele.

“ What’s with her?”











I hope you enjoyed my story and expect more chapters in the future!
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O.O Why would Josh turn down such a pure and kind girl? (from first impression i'm assuming that's her personality) I loved it! Expect more replies from me in fututre chapters 2 come. A tip though. Wen u change postions to the writer from the character make sure 2 make it clear, otherwise people wuld get confused. Believe me i made the same mistake & it's better 2 kno now then l8r.
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Thank you for the comment and its always great to accept advice. I'm currently working on a revision of Midnight Angels and i'm being lazy so it might be a long wait till the next chapter.
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Mountainmax wrote:

Thank you for the comment and its always great to accept advice. I'm currently working on a revision of Midnight Angels and i'm being lazy so it might be a long wait till the next chapter.


^_^ I'll wait. Just don't take TOO long, kay?
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God, is this still up here? Maybe I should continue it. I'll have to refine it a bit though maybe change a few things. XD
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