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Posted 11/24/08 , edited 11/24/08
lolz dont worry da rape thing flowed with da story^-^ very very great dialogue nd action in dis chapter!! awws!! jay jay nd johnny 4ever!!! ^o^ nd about da blood nd stuff...*shivers* very very detailed nd scary >.< nd it moved??!! *faints* x.x wells i wonder how hes gonna explain 2 his sister o.o
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Thanks~ There will be more BL stuff later on~ xDD if you like that stuff anyway.
and the whole horn thing will make sense in the next couple or so chapter.

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wow... incredible...
and his back can't believe that's even possible... anyway, what's his case? or disorder? or problem? jay i mean....
and is angela going to play a big role soon????
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yep. Angela is there the whole time. jay doesn't realize how important she is until later though. when it's too late. >< argh a spoiler. and jay's problem will become more clear as it worsens. ^^

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hey buddy, you keep and keep impressing me

I think both of the chapters were great... all of it. If you had used any more details or made the "rape part" longer it would be overwhelming. It goes excellently right now. And I really enjoy that you write one episode about Jay Jay and Johnny and one episode with Just Jay and Angela

I loved this post a lot seriously and I read it with one single breath! You really do capture me with your words and manage to keep me inside your head until I read the last word. You are one of the most talented writing skilled person I know and PLEASE!! (I am literally begging you ) please dont stop this story!! Keep writing it!


PS: Again, perfect details
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xxuseless-bulletsxx wrote:

Thanks~ There will be more BL stuff later on~ xDD if you like that stuff anyway.
and the whole horn thing will make sense in the next couple or so chapter.



ur welcome^-^ oh dear >.< wells i'll try 2 handle it b/c i dont wanna miss out on dis awesome story XP ohs okies!! :]

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I will update ASAP~~ althought right now some family have come to visit, so I probably won't update for a few days - it won't be too long. I PROMISE! Thank you guys for your kind words~~ they are what keeps me going~~ ^^

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lolz okies!! take ur time!!^-^ ur welcome as always XP
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Continued...

I heard the door slam shut and for a wild moment I thought it was a gunshot.
Spinning on my heels, I grabbed my shirt and pulled it on, heart thudding and mouth dry.
"Jay, is that you?"
I coughed and shut the bathroom door with numb fingers just as Dhi's footsteps stopped outside the bathroom.
"Yeah," I called back in a shaky voice, "I'm in here."
"Are you feeling any better?" Concern laced her voice as well as suspicion.
I leant against the basin and stared at my reflection with shell shocked eyes.
"I'm..." A wave of nausea rushed over me and I gasped, squeezing my eyes shut.
"Jay?"
I swallowed as it passed and I straightened up. "Yeah, I'm feeling a bit better."
A pause. Then: "Okay. I'm going to make dinner now, so if you're hungry I'll bring some up to you when it's ready."
"Thanks, but I'm not that hungry."
"Alright..." More silence. "Jay, you sure you're okay?"
I nodded, mentally hit myself on the head and called back: "Yeah. I'm sure. I'm just going to shower."
"Well, call out if out need anything."
I heard Dhi's footsteps disappear into the kitchen and I let out a sigh of relief. I slid to the ground and pulled off my shirt with shaking fingers. The back of the shirt was soaked with dark blood.
A million thoughts were racing through my mind. But none of them were coherent enough to make any sense.
What the fuck am I going to do?
I couldn't possibly show Dhi. She had enough on her plate at the moment, and I didn't want to scare her anymore than she was. I just couldn't burden her with anything like this. Whatever this was.
Hospital was a no go. I was no doctor or anything. but I was petty certain that there has been nothing like this in medical history before.
So where did that leave me?
Angela.

"I'm glad you could make it."
"I was going to go see you anyway," Angela smiled nervously, her face was pale in the freezing night air.
I nodded and wrapped my arms around me, shivering. I was wearing a black coat and jeans, but I still felt cold. Not from the outside conditions, but from deep inside.
"Are you sure you should be outside?" She sat down next to me on the park bench with a sigh and leaned back, her blue jacket tickling her slim neck delicately.
I nodded. "I feel better than before," I lied, "and anyway, this surpasses anything else at the moment."
"What is it?" She asked, suddenly curious.
"I..." I swallowed and looked around nervously. "I'm not quite sure what it is. But...It's scaring me, Angela."
Her eyes narrowed instantly and she straightened up. "Have you had your puberty talk yet, honey?"
My mouth twitched into a smile despite the situation and she blushed.
"I'm sorry. Go ahead."
I looked down at my hands and started again. "I think some thing's wrong with me. Like really wrong with me." I glanced up at her and licked my dry lips. "I need help Angela, and you're the only one who I can go to."
She frowned. "What do you mean?"
"I need to show you first."
"Okay then. Show me."
I coughed and shook my head. "Not here. Toilets."
We both blushed.

I hissed as I pulled off my shirt. It was still bleeding and the material stuck to the...horns....on my back. Since my back was turned I couldn't see Angela's reaction, but I could sure hear it.
"Sweet mother of Jesus!"
Then utter silence as she tried to comprehend what she was seeing.
"Jay...I...They're huge!"
I frowned. "What?"
I spun around and looked into the cracked mirror above the grimy basin.
The two stumps of bones had grown into full fledglings.
And I knew instantly what was happening to me.





I was growing wings.






































To be continued...



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Sorry for the sort chapter.

My keyboard was stuffing up so I couldn't really type out a long chapter without destroying my computer in frustration.

I promise you all that the next on will be extra specially long. Just to make up for it.

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wow that was totally unexpected...
i thought at first jay had a disease or something.... then there's the wings?????
awesome.... really.... awesome....
i want to read the next chapter fast....
but i won't be online for awhile because of the damn essay test.... how stupid could i get...????
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Era013 wrote:

wow that was totally unexpected...
i thought at first jay had a disease or something.... then there's the wings?????
awesome.... really.... awesome....
i want to read the next chapter fast....
but i won't be online for awhile because of the damn essay test.... how stupid could i get...????



Lol. Thank you!!

By now I think you would've figured out who Jay is. Or what's going to happen to him. If not, then yay cos then I can surprise you.

And good luck for the test!!!! GAMBATTE!!!

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that wassss coool! I knew it! I knew he was growing wings and I salute you for that With my all time valid compliments (such as how great your details are, how easly imaginable you make it and what an amazing story teller you are) I also want to add, you never lose the line. You always go along the story and never stray

so my favourite young author, I am looking FORWAAAARD for your next post... I hope your keyboard starts acting nice to you...

say hi to Jay Jay for me!
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elanra_moonlight wrote:

that wassss coool! I knew it! I knew he was growing wings and I salute you for that With my all time valid compliments (such as how great your details are, how easly imaginable you make it and what an amazing story teller you are) I also want to add, you never lose the line. You always go along the story and never stray

so my favourite young author, I am looking FORWAAAARD for your next post... I hope your keyboard starts acting nice to you...

say hi to Jay Jay for me!


lol thank you so much!!!! my keybord is still acting like a shithed so ill get that fixed before i post again - but it shoodnt be to long. in a day or so. :)

and jay says hi back. oh, and he want to thank u for last night.
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wows!!! wings!! O.O iz he a angel?! oh wait...he had horns on them too... a devil then??!! iz it true it hurts lyke dat? with da blood nd stuff? o.o
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