Post Reply The Power of This Person Before Me
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Posted 11/25/08
The attack has stricken me blind.
I now know the power of this person before me.
Theres something sharp pierceing my heart, though i cant see what it is.
It feels like blade a mile long thats still pushing through me.
My body is going numb and i hear another drop hit the floor.
It must be the blood from my wound falling to the ground.
How could i not see this strike coming? Why could i not evade this blow?
It makes no sense.
Where did this blade come from and why did it choose me?
I cant worry about that now, i can still hear blood dripping.
My is heart slowing down, but still giving it all to beat one more time.
How hard it must be to do your job despite being impaled by this blade.
Each beat hurts more and more until i cant bare to feel it again.
I whisper to my fighting heart "its okay, you can stop now."
It was right then when I heard that angelic voice.
Such a beautiful voice should not carry such evil words.
My sight comes back and i see no blade,no blood,no battle.
All I see is her standing there.
She has no blade,shes just talking.
Theres no blood on the floor, just tears.
The pain starts to fade until she strikes me again.

("I just cant do this anymore").

I fall to my knees at this unbareable pain.
Not once but twice must i feel this pierce.
She waps her arms around me and tells me she's sorry.
But then i noticed something.
When she huged me i no longer felt the warm embrace i looked forward to everyday.
She was cold and evil, dark and hollow.
She stood up and slowly backed away from me.
It was then when she made the final blow.

("Its over")

Theres nothing i can say to stop it.
Theres nothing i can do to stop it.
I now know the power of this person before me.
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Posted 12/2/08
This poem has a strong emotional presence with the usage of blood and blade which has given a dark display of emotions. This was a nice read and had similar feelings with someone else, I wouldn't say I can relate just the descriptions given gives the similar feeling in my troubled moments in my past. Great poem.
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Posted 12/2/08

psyopslayerx wrote:

This poem has a strong emotional presence with the usage of blood and blade which has given a dark display of emotions. This was a nice read and had similar feelings with someone else, I wouldn't say I can relate just the descriptions given gives the similar feeling in my troubled moments in my past. Great poem.


thanx glad you liked it. i wasnt sure about this because this isnt my normal way of writting but i think it turned out pretty good.
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