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Posted 2/3/09 , edited 2/3/09
I guess I should share some of my own poems here... ^^. Be as critical as you would like. Most of these were done years ago. ^^,

1. I wrote this when two of my friends were fighting over something so silly as...well...you don't want to know. It was so pointless. >.< And I was the middleman. Read on to see what happened.


2. This is...no, actually, was...dedicated to a dear friend of mine. I was only 11 or 12 then so it might not be too good.


3. If you haven't read "Twilight", then you should if you ever love romance. This was written from Bella Swan's perspective so yeah... Hope you like it!


That's it for now! I have to look for the others. I think I lost my original copies! >.< Anyway, I hope they're not terrible. ^^.
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I seem to recall a memory,
That seems more requited then passive,
As it’s a memory of the quarrel streets of L.A.,
Bustling with cars and people in the afternoon
Yet quiet as a silhouette of a evening center ,
In those times, things seem more open and filled with freedom,
And the streets was just a passage into another spherical world,
Where noise is called peace and night is home,
with its intrusive yet luminescent night lights,
that seems to follow the same road as I am,
All the while, hearing laughter and happiness,
In another spec of room of the car,
with a combination of night and right,
Just in those times,
I can hear my heart beat,
In the soul of the evening,
Though at those times,
I had a heart for someone,
And was simply on the good foot on road,
Still, the sound of cars passing ours,
Seems more of a lullaby now,
All the while missing the reason of that trip,
Whether it was fun or just done with a party,
The feeling was simple and lovely.

~M.M.

Here's mine, it hasn't been edited but was checked if each line works :). Critique much appreciated
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Shadows


Light And Darkness


The Savior of the Night

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farfalla_12 wrote:

Okay, here's mine.. hope you'll like it and comment. :]

Venomous Love


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wow i could feel the emotions you were trying to bring out.
nice imagery~ and i loev the title. ^^ vry creative *pats back*
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PurpleSkye wrote:

I guess I should share some of my own poems here... ^^. Be as critical as you would like. Most of these were done years ago. ^^,


gosh. thts a pretty good set of poems you have there
i love how you could use the rhyming techniques
to your advantage. ^-^
hehe & i love your twilight (edward) acrostic poem XDD
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PurpleSkye wrote:

I guess I should share some of my own poems here... ^^. Be as critical as you would like. Most of these were done years ago. ^^,


gosh. thts a pretty good set of poems you have there
i love how you could use the rhyming techniques
to your advantage. ^-^
hehe & i love your twilight (edward) acrostic poem XDD


Aww...thanks so much! I'm glad you like them... I rarely do poems without rhyme....I don't know why, though, but I prefer it with rhyme and stuff... I actually admire peopl who make poems without rhyme and yet their works are beautiful... LoL. You like the Edward Poem?? I'm so happy! I did that on a whim - I really wish I was Bella Swan though so that I could have Edward... XD
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PurpleSkye wrote:
Aww...thanks so much! I'm glad you like them... I rarely do poems without rhyme....I don't know why, though, but I prefer it with rhyme and stuff... I actually admire peopl who make poems without rhyme and yet their works are beautiful... LoL. You like the Edward Poem?? I'm so happy! I did that on a whim - I really wish I was Bella Swan though so that I could have Edward... XD


hehe no problem. :)
i know wht you mean i used to be like tht
- i had the need to make evry poem i make rhyme
but now i find it harder to find rhyming word to describe
wht im trying to say, so you could say i gave up
and wrote freestyle poems now. XDD
haha i think we all wanna be bella ><"
such a lucky girl.
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PurpleSkye wrote:
Aww...thanks so much! I'm glad you like them... I rarely do poems without rhyme....I don't know why, though, but I prefer it with rhyme and stuff... I actually admire peopl who make poems without rhyme and yet their works are beautiful... LoL. You like the Edward Poem?? I'm so happy! I did that on a whim - I really wish I was Bella Swan though so that I could have Edward... XD


hehe no problem. :)
i know wht you mean i used to be like tht
- i had the need to make evry poem i make rhyme
but now i find it harder to find rhyming word to describe
wht im trying to say, so you could say i gave up
and wrote freestyle poems now. XDD
haha i think we all wanna be bella ><"
such a lucky girl. :P


Maybe I'll get over rhyming too (or give up on it, whichever comes first)... LoL...
Well, we all dream to have Edward to ourselves! Edward was wrong... Bella isn't totally bad luck...... LoL.
Posted 10/7/09 , edited 10/8/09
I loved the poems here so far I've read,GREAT JOB GUYS!
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