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do u think that this will turn out to be a good anime? or manga?
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Misuki 12 year old girl that have a ordinary life in daytime( going to school ,hanging around with her friends,shopping.etc. that any other ordinary girls do in everyday until she reach her home) ...at night she goes out when she feels something strange...her pet cat follows her..(without her knowing).

until she reach that certain place where there is a portal...and a monster appear on it........

the monster sees her..and charge to her ..she form a seal (kinda like hand signals.. dont want to make this an example but to explain it easily..naruto hand signals ex:before using any ninjutsu technics,)...after that a barier form circled around her, blocking the attack.

the monster tries to pierce the barrier..she make another hand signal..the barries expand quickly (and disapear after a sec.) pushing the monster backward a few meters...

misaki saw an unexpected people near the place ( a couple , walking in the road near the park)
the monster sees them..since she cant attack the little girl with a barier..of course the monster will try another victim...the monster jump towards them while preparing for an attack..the couple heard the roar of the monster..looking up they are terryfied..misuki chant a spell firing a fire attack..it hit the monster sending it flying in the center of the park..the couple run..misuki chant a spell again ..making the couple stop their movement..kinda like a time freeze (also making them forget wat they saw, a brainwash). misuki chant a short spell and teleported the couple to another place

...the monster stands up..the fire attack didnt make much damage.the monster is angry ,fire a energy blast from its mouth..misuki create a barrier ..but the energy blast is strong she struggle to keep her barrier up...the energy finally worn out.also misuki's barrier disapeared..misuki seems to be exhausted..the monster sees the opportunity ...charging to her with full strenght..the monster raise its arm for and attack..misuki saw it coming but she dont have time to make a barier and she's also exhausted her body cant move..she cant do anything but to close her eyes..a small figure appeared running so fast like a bullet..a cat figure became a light..and the light started to grow big (in a second)..a monster got a strong kick on the face..the monster falls down and slide a few meters..misuki thought that she was dead.( asking herself.).. she heard a voice saying.."hey!..open your eyes." ..as soon as she open her eyes.. it ca
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hei i tink fine as an anime but as a manga i dun noe cuz i dun read dat muc manga.

y is she only 12 n the guy 19-20... r u thinkin making couple out of dem? juz askin
n is she sum kind a witch? a girl wit power?
normally in an anime, the animator or in manga the mangaka makes sure we noe who is the main character is all about..
and bout the monster.....monstar....err....


anyway GUDLUCK mate!!!


well....u know. i guess the age. i only imagine that the guy is taller and a little mature then her.....i like cute lolis=cute girl main character hehehe....i havent think/plan about wat she is..i need more and exact info to apply wat she is to be...i type so fast so sorry wrong type
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ichido_naru wrote:

i like it, but i think it should show more explanation...
like how she got to know the hand symbols,
and she's too young. i have nothing against loli, but its either better that she's older or the cat's younger.... (20. its just kinda old.... :sweatingbullets:)
but overall, i like it.


..thats wat im missing..i need more details about it..its all just my imagination...

i like cute loli main characters.....i guess the age..i only imagine that the guy is taller and a little mature than her

thanks
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luvUgirl wrote:

That seems pretty good. tho the cat guy sounds alot like Ikuto from Shugo Chara, I just might steal it. OHHH!! Can I help and develop the story more! I got some pretty good ideas for it!


ow really!..ok...give it all u got hehehe
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DemonWithin912 wrote:

I hope you aren't looking for advice in a community like this.

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im asking wat they think....but really i dont have any plan to make it a manga or anime...its just my little imagination...but i would love to read or watch an anime that have the same story or plot
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xxlino wrote:

you know what ignore what everyone says. you have to be different. start it with action. or her sealing monsters. then after that you could explain how her life ended up like that or something


well the start of the story is not really in my mind..cuz i tried to make it look like a story...the battle and how they met is the most detailed part in my imagination
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lkmjr wrote:

Pretty good. Improve your typing a bit, though, less periods.

Personal thread??


thanks ill try....dont know...its everyone opinion/wat they think i guess
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PinkFroggie wrote:

u need some grammar classes....


sorry the grammar is not that perfect...
Posted 11/27/08
its nice =) add some more chapters plz!
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hmm i think its good but the only problem is is that it looks like the most anime's that is like this so i dun think its more special then the other Loli Magical Girl Anime
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Misuki 12 year old girl that have a ordinary life in daytime( going to school ,hanging around with her friends,shopping.etc. that any other ordinary girls do in everyday until she reach her home) ...at night she goes out when she feels something strange...her pet cat follows her..(without her knowing).

until she reach that certain place where there is a portal...and a monster appear on it........

the monster sees her..and charge to her ..she form a seal (kinda like hand signals.. dont want to make this an example but to explain it easily..naruto hand signals ex:before using any ninjutsu technics,)...after that a barier form circled around her, blocking the attack.

the monster tries to pierce the barrier..she make another hand signal..the barries expand quickly (and disapear after a sec.) pushing the monster backward a few meters...

misaki saw an unexpected people near the place ( a couple , walking in the road near the park)
the monster sees them..since she cant attack the little girl with a barier..of course the monster will try another victim...the monster jump towards them while preparing for an attack..the couple heard the roar of the monster..looking up they are terryfied..misuki chant a spell firing a fire attack..it hit the monster sending it flying in the center of the park..the couple run..misuki chant a spell again ..making the couple stop their movement..kinda like a time freeze (also making them forget wat they saw, a brainwash). misuki chant a short spell and teleported the couple to another place

...the monster stands up..the fire attack didnt make much damage.the monster is angry ,fire a energy blast from its mouth..misuki create a barrier ..but the energy blast is strong she struggle to keep her barrier up...the energy finally worn out.also misuki's barrier disapeared..misuki seems to be exhausted..the monster sees the opportunity ...charging to her with full strenght..the monster raise its arm for and attack..misuki saw it coming but she dont have time to make a barier and she's also exhausted her body cant move..she cant do anything but to close her eyes..a small figure appeared running so fast like a bullet..a cat figure became a light..and the light started to grow big (in a second)..a monster got a strong kick on the face..the monster falls down and slide a few meters..misuki thought that she was dead.( asking herself.).. she heard a voice saying.."hey!..open your eyes." ..as soon as she open her eyes.. it caught glimpse of guy..he have black hair.(she can also see his back).he said "its okay now" then he turn around his face a little..exposing his cute/handsome face..his eyes are yellow that looks like an eye of a cat..he said " im here" he gave her a smile...making misuki blush

(well thats almost like episode 1 or chapter 1).

chapter 2 or episode 2 :

im out of time...so i will make it really a short summary
first its show the memory of her pet cat...that her parent gave to her..when she was 5 years old..when she was sad,,crying ,having a problem..her pet cat was always there to comfort her,(her pet cat is the only one she can talk to..her parents are always away cuz of work,she lives with his grandpa the one who trains her..but she dont want to make her granpa worry..so she only shared almost every thing/memories to her pet cat..)
the guy defeated the monster...the monster turns into a black shadow and the shadow was suck back to the portal...misuki chant a spell closing the portal...she decided to thank the guy ..the guy is gone!...the morning comes...she goes to school..thinking about the guy who saves her almost the whole day or course she cant forget the handsome/cute face with a strange yellow eyes.(she dont realize that it looks like a cat eye..she only remembers that its strange)..her mind is full of question about him...she went home..the guy was there.(depending on his looks and his height he was19-20 years old.when u compared their height.misuki is only half of his...misuki..was so suprised..(in deep shock..wondering why is he inside the house).the guy said "its been years since i want to talke to you" (she was still frozen in shock)..then he said "ow!..i see ..(half circle eyes)..you dont know who the hell am i.." he turns into a light ;;the light shrinks..turn into a animal figure..he was misuki's pet cat....
(misukireally cant believe wat she saw so she fainted)...when she wakes up...he was sitting next to her..to close her eyes again pretending that she still asleep..she thought..that handsome/cute.guy was my pet!!..and the embarasing thing she remembers, she always take a bath with his pet cat!!

( thats not the all the exact summary/details)
i can make a fanatic...is you really want?..but its time already..im gonna go home..


The storyline is great! :]



its not the full story..( i guess its only a fraction of the details/explanation that i can take out fomr my mind)..some part of my imagination ...i'll explain it like this:..i'll admit my grammar is not that good..but at least you'll get the idea..

i watched a 30 min anime...my friend forgot the watch it.so he ask me wat happened..of course i cant tell him all the exact details of that 30 min anime..i can only tell my friend wat i remember and easy to explain part.got it? if u dont ..dont ask me anymore

this is part of the battle between the guy and the monster

"its okay now" then he turn around his face a little..exposing his cute/handsome face..his eyes are yellow that looks like an eye of a cat..he said " im here" he gave her a smile...making misuki blush..the monster shake his head before standing up.. the guy didnt waist any time..he jump infront of the monster..the monster use its right hand to attack..the guy vanishes into thin air..without knowing the guy is standing on its left arm."woah!..wat a fast dodge!" misuki said.the monster swing its left arm..it make the guy jump so high..the monster opens its mouth..gathering energy particles.."you dont have much energy left.*grin*. thats your last shot" the guy said then he dive towards it..the monster fires the energy blast.. the guy punch the energy blast splitting it into two..he spin (everything becomes slow motion 3 secs.) followed by a left kick (downward) hitting the monster on the head ..the ground collapse around the monster drop to its knees .its was the final blow..the monster slowly dissolve turning into a shadow that headedback to the portal..misuki is so amazed at guy..she ended up staring at his back for a while..the guy turns around "wat are you wating for?..you should seal the portal and close it before other monsters come out .." "ow!" (cut the staring) she ran near it chant a spell and close it..
(while blushing) "by the way..t-thank...you for saving me" when she looked at where the guy suppose to be standing..but he's gone..but she still look around thinking that a tall guy like him is impossible to disapear instantly (tall=easy to find) but she dont see,notice wats below her..a disapointed cat with a big drop of sweat on is head
(disapointed=hey! where at you looking at... im over here)


the part that she finds out that cute/handsome guy is her pet cat
he transformed infront of her...turns into the cat .
(misukireally cant believe wat she saw so she fainted but before that she mention his name "kyosuke?!") ...when she wakes up...he was sitting next to her..so close her eyes again pretending that she still asleep. ..{that guy (diff. angle if his face shows up in her mind)..is kyosuke!...(flashback entered her mind= the time..when she is so sad ..she cries on her bed..after a while."meow!".the feeling of the furr of her cat rubbing her shoulders..she would try to stop crying.wipe her tears hug the cat until she calms down..its started to break..a unexpected flashback that sent chills to her spine = since she was 5-12 years old she always take a bath with her pet ...she realize that..
she suddenly sits up (her pigtail sprouted up,red face) after remembering that..no one in her room ..slowly she get out of the bed (like she was in a haunted house)..out of the her room..she saw her pet cat sleeping at the folded blanket..she sighed "im glad it was a dream..maybe im really tired that time.im having such an impossible hallusination" (impossible=cant accept the fact that guy is her pet cat) ...walking a few inches..she heard his voice "good..your awake..i need to discuss something with you" he said "no!..now im hearing his voice inside my head" (grabbing her head with both hands) "wat are you talking about?! im over here!" misuki look at the left and the right. "down here" she saw her cat staring at her..misuke take a few step backward said it outloud "nooooooo! waaayyyyyyy!" after misuki calms down..the cat start his explaination "im half ayakashi and half human".. "half ayakashi,halfhuman" the words spinning in her mind.."is that posbile?" (drop of sweat shows up on the cats head) "my true form is a human..i can also change into a ayakashi" "so a cat is your ayakashi form!" "ye-yeah" he replied (misuki laugh for a while) "hey!. ." he said looking at her a vein pop out of his vein "im sorry..i never heard of a cat ayakashi" (wiping the her eyes.she almost cry laughing) "they selected me to be your guardian in order to protect and help you"..misuki is looking at him skeptically "why do i need a guardian anyway?".."your inherited power..is already awakened when you were 5 years old..so your granpa gave me to you be your guardian.."he stopped talking, his eyes becomes really serious. like he sense something..misuki sense it too.. " a portal?!" misuki stands up

(a battle is coming up next after that a bath?!!)
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its nice =) add some more chapters plz!


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its not the full story..( i guess its only a fraction of the details/explanation that i can take out fomr my mind)..some part of my imagination ...i'll explain it like this:..i'll admit my grammar is not that good..but at least you'll get the idea..

i watched a 30 min anime...my friend forgot the watch it.so he ask me wat happened..of course i cant tell him all the exact details of that 30 min anime..i can only tell my friend wat i remember and easy to explain part.got it? if u dont ..dont ask me anymore

this is part of the battle between the guy and the monster

"its okay now" then he turn around his face a little..exposing his cute/handsome face..his eyes are yellow that looks like an eye of a cat..he said " im here" he gave her a smile...making misuki blush..the monster shake his head before standing up.. the guy didnt waist any time..he jump infront of the monster..the monster use its right hand to attack..the guy vanishes into thin air..without knowing the guy is standing on its left arm."woah!..wat a fast dodge!" misuki said.the monster swing its left arm..it make the guy jump so high..the monster opens its mouth..gathering energy particles.."you dont have much energy left.*grin*. thats your last shot" the guy said then he dive towards it..the monster fires the energy blast.. the guy punch the energy blast splitting it into two..he spin (everything becomes slow motion 3 secs.) followed by a left kick (downward) hitting the monster on the head ..the ground collapse around the monster drop to its knees .its was the final blow..the monster slowly dissolve turning into a shadow that headedback to the portal..misuki is so amazed at guy..she ended up staring at his back for a while..the guy turns around "wat are you wating for?..you should seal the portal and close it before other monsters come out .." "ow!" (cut the staring) she ran near it chant a spell and close it..
(while blushing) "by the way..t-thank...you for saving me" when she looked at where the guy suppose to be standing..but he's gone..but she still look around thinking that a tall guy like him is impossible to disapear instantly (tall=easy to find) but she dont see,notice wats below her..a disapointed cat with a big drop of sweat on is head
(disapointed=hey! where at you looking at... im over here)


the part that she finds out that cute/handsome guy is her pet cat
he transformed infront of her...turns into the cat .
(misukireally cant believe wat she saw so she fainted but before that she mention his name "kyosuke?!") ...when she wakes up...he was sitting next to her..so close her eyes again pretending that she still asleep. ..{that guy (diff. angle if his face shows up in her mind)..is kyosuke!...(flashback entered her mind= the time..when she is so sad ..she cries on her bed..after a while."meow!".the feeling of the furr of her cat rubbing her shoulders..she would try to stop crying.wipe her tears hug the cat until she calms down..its started to break..a unexpected flashback that sent chills to her spine = since she was 5-12 years old she always take a bath with her pet ...she realize that..
she suddenly sits up (her pigtail sprouted up,red face) after remembering that..no one in her room ..slowly she get out of the bed (like she was in a haunted house)..out of the her room..she saw her pet cat sleeping at the folded blanket..she sighed "im glad it was a dream..maybe im really tired that time.im having such an impossible hallusination" (impossible=cant accept the fact that guy is her pet cat) ...walking a few inches..she heard his voice "good..your awake..i need to discuss something with you" he said "no!..now im hearing his voice inside my head" (grabbing her head with both hands) "wat are you talking about?! im over here!" misuki look at the left and the right. "down here" she saw her cat staring at her..misuke take a few step backward said it outloud "nooooooo! waaayyyyyyy!" after misuki calms down..the cat start his explaination "im half ayakashi and half human".. "half ayakashi,halfhuman" the words spinning in her mind.."is that posbile?" (drop of sweat shows up on the cats head) "my true form is a human..i can also change into a ayakashi" "so a cat is your ayakashi form!" "ye-yeah" he replied (misuki laugh for a while) "hey!. ." he said looking at her a vein pop out of his vein "im sorry..i never heard of a cat ayakashi" (wiping the her eyes.she almost cry laughing) "they selected me to be your guardian in order to protect and help you"..misuki is looking at him skeptically "why do i need a guardian anyway?".."your inherited power..is already awakened when you were 5 years old..so your granpa gave me to you be your guardian.."he stopped talking, his eyes becomes really serious. like he sense something..misuki sense it too.. " a portal?!" misuki stands up

(a battle is coming up next after that a bath?!!)
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its not the full story..( i guess its only a fraction of the details/explanation that i can take out fomr my mind)..some part of my imagination ...i'll explain it like this:..i'll admit my grammar is not that good..but at least you'll get the idea..

i watched a 30 min anime...my friend forgot the watch it.so he ask me wat happened..of course i cant tell him all the exact details of that 30 min anime..i can only tell my friend wat i remember and easy to explain part.got it? if u dont ..dont ask me anymore

this is part of the battle between the guy and the monster

"its okay now" then he turn around his face a little..exposing his cute/handsome face..his eyes are yellow that looks like an eye of a cat..he said " im here" he gave her a smile...making misuki blush..the monster shake his head before standing up.. the guy didnt waist any time..he jump infront of the monster..the monster use its right hand to attack..the guy vanishes into thin air..without knowing the guy is standing on its left arm."woah!..wat a fast dodge!" misuki said.the monster swing its left arm..it make the guy jump so high..the monster opens its mouth..gathering energy particles.."you dont have much energy left.*grin*. thats your last shot" the guy said then he dive towards it..the monster fires the energy blast.. the guy punch the energy blast splitting it into two..he spin (everything becomes slow motion 3 secs.) followed by a left kick (downward) hitting the monster on the head ..the ground collapse around the monster drop to its knees .its was the final blow..the monster slowly dissolve turning into a shadow that headedback to the portal..misuki is so amazed at guy..she ended up staring at his back for a while..the guy turns around "wat are you wating for?..you should seal the portal and close it before other monsters come out .." "ow!" (cut the staring) she ran near it chant a spell and close it..
(while blushing) "by the way..t-thank...you for saving me" when she looked at where the guy suppose to be standing..but he's gone..but she still look around thinking that a tall guy like him is impossible to disapear instantly (tall=easy to find) but she dont see,notice wats below her..a disapointed cat with a big drop of sweat on is head
(disapointed=hey! where at you looking at... im over here)


the part that she finds out that cute/handsome guy is her pet cat
he transformed infront of her...turns into the cat .
(misukireally cant believe wat she saw so she fainted but before that she mention his name "kyosuke?!") ...when she wakes up...he was sitting next to her..so close her eyes again pretending that she still asleep. ..{that guy (diff. angle if his face shows up in her mind)..is kyosuke!...(flashback entered her mind= the time..when she is so sad ..she cries on her bed..after a while."meow!".the feeling of the furr of her cat rubbing her shoulders..she would try to stop crying.wipe her tears hug the cat until she calms down..its started to break..a unexpected flashback that sent chills to her spine = since she was 5-12 years old she always take a bath with her pet ...she realize that..
she suddenly sits up (her pigtail sprouted up,red face) after remembering that..no one in her room ..slowly she get out of the bed (like she was in a haunted house)..out of the her room..she saw her pet cat sleeping at the folded blanket..she sighed "im glad it was a dream..maybe im really tired that time.im having such an impossible hallusination" (impossible=cant accept the fact that guy is her pet cat) ...walking a few inches..she heard his voice "good..your awake..i need to discuss something with you" he said "no!..now im hearing his voice inside my head" (grabbing her head with both hands) "wat are you talking about?! im over here!" misuki look at the left and the right. "down here" she saw her cat staring at her..misuke take a few step backward said it outloud "nooooooo! waaayyyyyyy!" after misuki calms down..the cat start his explaination "im half ayakashi and half human".. "half ayakashi,halfhuman" the words spinning in her mind.."is that posbile?" (drop of sweat shows up on the cats head) "my true form is a human..i can also change into a ayakashi" "so a cat is your ayakashi form!" "ye-yeah" he replied (misuki laugh for a while) "hey!. ." he said looking at her a vein pop out of his vein "im sorry..i never heard of a cat ayakashi" (wiping the her eyes.she almost cry laughing) "they selected me to be your guardian in order to protect and help you"..misuki is looking at him skeptically "why do i need a guardian anyway?".."your inherited power..is already awakened when you were 5 years old..so your granpa gave me to you be your guardian.."he stopped talking, his eyes becomes really serious. like he sense something..misuki sense it too.. " a portal?!" misuki stands up

(a battle is coming up next after that a bath?!!)

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