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[FanFic] And you were here..
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the story was freakin'.....AWESOME!!!!when's the next chap comin out???????
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the story was freakin'.....AWESOME!!!!when's the next chap comin out???????


I AGREE!!! UPDATE!!!!!!!
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here's chappie 5~
its not as long as the other chappies n i kinda added more space between paragraphs
hope by doin that u guys can read it less confused +_+"

oh and thx for all the comments u guys gave! im so motivated in makin upcoming chappies >_<~

enjoy




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summary:
The stair which took Amu and the companions’ interests led them to a place which represents much alike a gigantic sized dollhouse with a yellow flower field as the garden.
After observing and questioning the place much, Amu decided to search for Ikuto whose shadow haven’t been seen since the minute they reached the place.
She found Ikuto who had just took a quick shower in a pool behind a passage way and was teased by him for a moment.
Soon, Amu found herself relaxing in the pool while thinking about Tadase
Later on, she saw an odd view of a girl in white, watching closely at her all this time.


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CHAPTER 5 – The Painful Past





I felt the sunray’s warmth crept unto my eyelids, disturbing my peaceful sleep. I pulled the white sheet to cover my face in order to avoid the annoying flashy light’s further contact with my facial part. I don’t feel like waking up in any circumstances.


Clack, clack



I heard footsteps coming closer to me as it gets louder and louder and finally stopped right in front of my bed. I had no idea who’s there and I’m not planning to know either. All I want right now is to continue my sleep and my sweet dream of Tadase-kun proposing me.


“Wake up my dear,” a soothing voice of a lady trying to wake me up as she gave me gentle shakes so I would wake up.


My mind was definitely not clear on that time.Hence, I threw my hand on hers and groped my pillow tighter, “Five more minutes…” I demanded with a sleepy voice and eyes still tightly closed.


As if not listening to me, she kept on shaking my shoulder with the repetitive words used and tone. “Wake up my dear. Wake up my dear. Wake up my dear,” was the only thing she could say while adding the shaking’s level until I could feel an earthquake inside my stomach.


I threw my blanket aside angrily and opened my eyes wide to search who’s actually in charge in waking me up. But just as I was about to shout in tremendous anger, I was first shocked by another change in scenery.


Everything was dark and dull. No living creature was found. Not even the anonymous lady who tried to wake me up just now. I don’t even see myself standing on the ground like what I would do… I mean I’m SUPPOSED to do every time I wakes up. I couldn’t even tell whether I’m floating or standing or sitting or whatsoever. All I could tell is the sudden sadness and heavy feelings which conquered my heart as soon as I opened my eyes.


“Wh-Where am I?” I asked myself while aching at the pain on my chest.


“Help me…”


That voice! It belongs to that emerald-eyed girl! But this time there’s something different about it. It’s somehow sadder… weaker… and… more real?


I turned my head to my right and felt a huge amount of heat being sprayed to my face. My hands were waving like crazy; hoping by doing that the heat will cools down. But I heard a pitiful cries instead not far from where I am.


I tried to open my eyes while fighting with the heat to see what happened and found a tragic view: A flaming house. There stood a lot of bulky yukata-clothed women screaming for their children to jump down from the building while the men went inside to rescue the kids.


“Lilia! My child! Where is she?!” A woman cried in terror as her blonde hair shined outstandingly by the fire’s light, attracting the whole crowd’s attention.


“She’s a white!” a woman finally cried in hatred, “A white is in our village!”


The panic voices and the tearful moments changed to hatred and uncontrollable anger of the villagers as their eyes were crawling unto the woman’s figure. Green eyes, white skin, upturned nose, golden hair; none of her physical features contain an Asian’s blood.


The eyes of the people burnt wilder than the fire as they stood up against her. ‘She won’t survive,’ was the only words the villagers muttered.


“No, please. You got it all wrong!” the woman tried to defend herself while her thin legs trembled in fear, “Please help my daughter first! She’s trapped there!” She begged with an eerie voice.


“Hush you white! Why should we help a white’s daughter?!” a man protested while holding up a metallic pole, “All white should be banished from this land!”


“You got it all wrong!” the woman repeated herself while looking at the flaming building turning to ashes by seconds. Her eyes were fixed to the second floor of the building when she saw the moving tiny shadow of a girl by the furthest window with the same appearances as hers.


“Mommy!” the squealing voice of the girl was calling unto the woman.


“Lilia!” she replied but doesn't know what to say next; asking her to jump down or stay. None of the situation right now benefits both her or her one and only child.


“Kill that woman first before she runs away!” a tall tanned skin man commanded the whole army. It has become an unfair war between a white lady versus one hundred twenty three of Japanese citizen. The woman burst into tears when her daughter screamed at the savage ember. The fire had definitely become one of the villagers’ allies.


“NO! DON’T! I BEG YOU!” the woman kept on screaming and screaming until she was drowned into the crowd’s cold-blooded men as her voice weaken and finally nothing to be heard. The girl kept on screaming. My face could stand no more heat.


“No! No more! I don’t want to see it anymore!” I cried helplessly as the flickering flame crouched unto my body up to my neck, consuming me joyfully. I gave my last strength to glance at the girl in white who was suddenly there, saying nothing as her tears strolled down her pale cheek.


I couldn’t resist the ambush of the fire that has my body half swollen by it. My body’s melting. Please, anybody, somebody. HELP ME!!


“AMU!”



I wrenched upright out of my bed, huffed and puffed; frightened to what all the things I saw. Cold sweat leaked from my forehead as my body shivered and trembled uncontrollably. I was scared. I was truly scared.


“It’s all right,” Ikuto’s big arms hold me tightly as I was still frozen by the view, “It’s just a nightmare. Everything’s alright now,” he whispered as I clutched to him tightly, letting all his warmth filling into me. I looked through the opened gap in front of me; it was bright. The dusts of light were lurking into the shelter secretly. Its morning already.


Ran, Miki, and Suu were looking at me in concern. I must have been screaming all night.


I let Ikuto calmed me down. I really need someone right now to hold me, and he did. His fingers were brushing my messy cherry hair which made my heart beat went slower and finally to its normal pace.


I sighted in relief when my mind’s state is finally clear. I laid my head to Ikuto’s shoulder since my body was still too weak to be moved. But then that’s when my eyes caught the cursed item. The item which will haunt me through day and night. The item which was ignorantly placed on the darkest, corner of the place.



The diary.



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im kinda saving all the amuto moments for the upcoming chappies >_<~
so i apologize if u guys r not happy w/ this chappie since its oso not as long as the others T^T
this chappie is 2 tell u guys more about the girl in white's past
so....

yea u got what i mean ;D [please +_+]

chappie 6 on goin


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yay!!!!!that was awseome!!!hahah ikuto!!!saw amu!!and yoru!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!hahahah i just love ur fanfic!!!pls make the next one!!!!!


chappie 5 is here >_<~
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I love it!! xP Great New Chapter ^-^ Cant wait for the next
~Me will be waiting! lol x3


chappie 5 is here >_<~
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I LOVE UR FANFIC!!! WRITE MOREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE IM DYING..............


thx alot xD~

btw chappie 5 is here >_<~

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omg, i love it! please please please!!! update soon!! WRITE MORE BEFORE I GO INSANEEE! i have my own fanfic too, called 'the setup'! of course !!!!!! AMUTO ALL THE WAY!!!!!

WEEEEEEE

WHAAT? I DON'T HAVE A PROBLEM!


o my goat dont go insane 1st

*shoves chappie 5* here chappie 5!! dont go insaneeeeeeeeee

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Jasminelym_1 wrote:

the story was freakin'.....AWESOME!!!!when's the next chap comin out???????


its here xD~

arigatouuu >_<~
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sweettara10 wrote:


SilverStarmist wrote:


sweettara10 wrote:

omg, i love it! please please please!!! update soon!! WRITE MORE BEFORE I GO INSANEEE! i have my own fanfic too, called 'the setup'! of course !!!!!! AMUTO ALL THE WAY!!!!!

WEEEEEEE

WHAAT? I DON'T HAVE A PROBLEM!


lol.. hyper... But, shes a gd writer YAY!!!!!! WEEEEEEEE


hyper, and proud of it!! LOL, but seriously, i need this to be updated! I'LL GO INSANEE OR I'LL DIE!!! HELP! *CHOKES* h-help... xD


ME TOO UPDATE!!!!!! I'm random and I'm prooud of it@



hyper ppel rawks xD~

i cud only b hyper when im really in the mood >_<~

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...ENCORE !!...(sorry...^^'l"l...I'm too hyper now since I juz bath ^^'l"l...hehe) I like your story...It was SOOOO good ^^...and I mean it !!! ...hehe...there are juz SO many amazing writers online...this is why I keep telling my mum :" Online is for my good...u see...I can always get essay ideas...and also gain knowledge ^^..." LOL...whenever I tell her that...she'll juz shake her head and ignore me ^^'l"l...hehe...well...I DID say the truth...right ?? ^^...hehe....anywayz...I REALLY LIKE this story (though I'm 50% Tadamu fan and 50% Amuto fan ^^'l"l)PLEASE continue...>.<...and that girl drawing was REALLY GREAT !!! ^^...though it REALLY gave me the creeps...'cus I was reading that part when I was alone at home...and I really mean 1child in this house ...^^"l"l...but it was ALL great ^^...juz a bit of grammar&spelling error here and there..but other than that...the plot was good and there was enough action ^^...so..rating is 10/10 ^^ GO!GO!GO! You can do it !!!! XD


thx for the comments xD!!

*writes down*

all set for chappie 6's work xD~

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YAY! I DIDN'T GO INSANE! xD thank you for making a new chappie! omg, i dont think i'll go insane anymore...(I think...) xD


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that was great im gettin addicted to ur fanfics!!!ur sooo good!!
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trumpace wrote:


SilverStarmist wrote:


sweettara10 wrote:


SilverStarmist wrote:


sweettara10 wrote:

omg, i love it! please please please!!! update soon!! WRITE MORE BEFORE I GO INSANEEE! i have my own fanfic too, called 'the setup'! of course !!!!!! AMUTO ALL THE WAY!!!!!

WEEEEEEE

WHAAT? I DON'T HAVE A PROBLEM!


lol.. hyper... But, shes a gd writer YAY!!!!!! WEEEEEEEE


hyper, and proud of it!! LOL, but seriously, i need this to be updated! I'LL GO INSANEE OR I'LL DIE!!! HELP! *CHOKES* h-help... xD


ME TOO UPDATE!!!!!! I'm random and I'm prooud of it@



hyper ppel rawks xD~

i cud only b hyper when im really in the mood >_<~



BUT RANDOM RULES!!!!!!!! YAY!!!!!!!!!
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here's chappie 5~
its not as long as the other chappies n i kinda added more space between paragraphs
hope by doin that u guys can read it less confused +_+"

oh and thx for all the comments u guys gave! im so motivated in makin upcoming chappies >_<~

enjoy




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summary:
The stair which took Amu and the companions’ interests led them to a place which represents much alike a gigantic sized dollhouse with a yellow flower field as the garden.
After observing and questioning the place much, Amu decided to search for Ikuto whose shadow haven’t been seen since the minute they reached the place.
She found Ikuto who had just took a quick shower in a pool behind a passage way and was teased by him for a moment.
Soon, Amu found herself relaxing in the pool while thinking about Tadase
Later on, she saw an odd view of a girl in white, watching closely at her all this time.


::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::

=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-



CHAPTER 5 – The Painful Past





I felt the sunray’s warmth crept unto my eyelids, disturbing my peaceful sleep. I pulled the white sheet to cover my face in order to avoid the annoying flashy light’s further contact with my facial part. I don’t feel like waking up in any circumstances.


Clack, clack



I heard footsteps coming closer to me as it gets louder and louder and finally stopped right in front of my bed. I had no idea who’s there and I’m not planning to know either. All I want right now is to continue my sleep and my sweet dream of Tadase-kun proposing me.


“Wake up my dear,” a soothing voice of a lady trying to wake me up as she gave me gentle shakes so I would wake up.


My mind was definitely not clear on that time.Hence, I threw my hand on hers and groped my pillow tighter, “Five more minutes…” I demanded with a sleepy voice and eyes still tightly closed.


As if not listening to me, she kept on shaking my shoulder with the repetitive words used and tone. “Wake up my dear. Wake up my dear. Wake up my dear,” was the only thing she could say while adding the shaking’s level until I could feel an earthquake inside my stomach.


I threw my blanket aside angrily and opened my eyes wide to search who’s actually in charge in waking me up. But just as I was about to shout in tremendous anger, I was first shocked by another change in scenery.


Everything was dark and dull. No living creature was found. Not even the anonymous lady who tried to wake me up just now. I don’t even see myself standing on the ground like what I would do… I mean I’m SUPPOSED to do every time I wakes up. I couldn’t even tell whether I’m floating or standing or sitting or whatsoever. All I could tell is the sudden sadness and heavy feelings which conquered my heart as soon as I opened my eyes.


“Wh-Where am I?” I asked myself while aching at the pain on my chest.


“Help me…”


That voice! It belongs to that emerald-eyed girl! But this time there’s something different about it. It’s somehow sadder… weaker… and… more real?


I turned my head to my right and felt a huge amount of heat being sprayed to my face. My hands were waving like crazy; hoping by doing that the heat will cools down. But I heard a pitiful cries instead not far from where I am.


I tried to open my eyes while fighting with the heat to see what happened and found a tragic view: A flaming house. There stood a lot of bulky yukata-clothed women screaming for their children to jump down from the building while the men went inside to rescue the kids.


“Lilia! My child! Where is she?!” A woman cried in terror as her blonde hair shined outstandingly by the fire’s light, attracting the whole crowd’s attention.


“She’s a white!” a woman finally cried in hatred, “A white is in our village!”


The panic voices and the tearful moments changed to hatred and uncontrollable anger of the villagers as their eyes were crawling unto the woman’s figure. Green eyes, white skin, upturned nose, golden hair; none of her physical features contain an Asian’s blood.


The eyes of the people burnt wilder than the fire as they stood up against her. ‘She won’t survive,’ was the only words the villagers muttered.


“No, please. You got it all wrong!” the woman tried to defend herself while her thin legs trembled in fear, “Please help my daughter first! She’s trapped there!” She begged with an eerie voice.


“Hush you white! Why should we help a white’s daughter?!” a man protested while holding up a metallic pole, “All white should be banished from this land!”


“You got it all wrong!” the woman repeated herself while looking at the flaming building turning to ashes by seconds. Her eyes were fixed to the second floor of the building when she saw the moving tiny shadow of a girl by the furthest window with the same appearances as hers.


“Mommy!” the squealing voice of the girl was calling unto the woman.


“Lilia!” she replied but doesn't know what to say next; asking her to jump down or stay. None of the situation right now benefits both her or her one and only child.


“Kill that woman first before she runs away!” a tall tanned skin man commanded the whole army. It has become an unfair war between a white lady versus one hundred twenty three of Japanese citizen. The woman burst into tears when her daughter screamed at the savage ember. The fire had definitely become one of the villagers’ allies.


“NO! DON’T! I BEG YOU!” the woman kept on screaming and screaming until she was drowned into the crowd’s cold-blooded men as her voice weaken and finally nothing to be heard. The girl kept on screaming. My face could stand no more heat.


“No! No more! I don’t want to see it anymore!” I cried helplessly as the flickering flame crouched unto my body up to my neck, consuming me joyfully. I gave my last strength to glance at the girl in white who was suddenly there, saying nothing as her tears strolled down her pale cheek.


I couldn’t resist the ambush of the fire that has my body half swollen by it. My body’s melting. Please, anybody, somebody. HELP ME!!


“AMU!”



I wrenched upright out of my bed, huffed and puffed; frightened to what all the things I saw. Cold sweat leaked from my forehead as my body shivered and trembled uncontrollably. I was scared. I was truly scared.


“It’s all right,” Ikuto’s big arms hold me tightly as I was still frozen by the view, “It’s just a nightmare. Everything’s alright now,” he whispered as I clutched to him tightly, letting all his warmth filling into me. I looked through the opened gap in front of me; it was bright. The dusts of light were lurking into the shelter secretly. Its morning already.


Ran, Miki, and Suu were looking at me in concern. I must have been screaming all night.


I let Ikuto calmed me down. I really need someone right now to hold me, and he did. His fingers were brushing my messy cherry hair which made my heart beat went slower and finally to its normal pace.


I sighted in relief when my mind’s state is finally clear. I laid my head to Ikuto’s shoulder since my body was still too weak to be moved. But then that’s when my eyes caught the cursed item. The item which will haunt me through day and night. The item which was ignorantly placed on the darkest, corner of the place.



The diary.



=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-

im kinda saving all the amuto moments for the upcoming chappies >_<~
so i apologize if u guys r not happy w/ this chappie since its oso not as long as the others T^T
this chappie is 2 tell u guys more about the girl in white's past
so....

yea u got what i mean ;D [please +_+]

chappie 6 on goin




I don't really get this thing... BUT WAITING EAGERLY FOR AMUTO
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