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NEW [FanFic] Title "Pierced with my Fangs" AMUTO
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Posted 11/29/08 , edited 12/12/08
Let's see how long my first CR amuto fiction goes!
Title: Pierced with my Fangs
Category: Romance/humor/horror
Pair: In general Amuto, more can be added
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Prolog:
Being a vampire wasn't forbidden...It was the innocent blood they stole that was forbidden...But what vampire could live without blood for a long time without being tempted beyond despair?

Our story beginnings, with the beautiful beast, Ikuto, as he makes his journey to the next city in hopes of fitting in with the human crowd, and hiding from the Easter vampire hunters... There Ikuto's throat burns in hungry because of his lack of meals. What will happen when a student at Seiyo Academy, brings his temptation to a whole new level. Amu and her ridiculously creamy throat brings Ikuto to his ruin...

Their fateful tale beginnings, as Ikuto gets out of a taxi and into the burning sun of the city.
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Story Beginnings:
"Darn-it! The weather was suppose to be cloudy today...." Ikuto muttered, shielding his eyes with his palm, and giving the driver the last of his money. He was all on his own now, besides his traveling companion, Yoru.

Yoru was nothing more than a homeless child, that Ikuto couldn't help but feel compassion for. They both had been traveling together for some years now after Ikuto found him in an alley with a bunch of cats when he was going through that city.

Yoru knew Ikuto's secret and his bounty on his head and tried his best to encourage Ikuto through his travels and hunger.

"Ne, Ikuto...what are we going to now, nya?" Yoru asked behind Ikuto's long legs, scanning the passing people on he side walk.

Posted 11/29/08
Again, just as expected from Chappi~ Nice start too...I guess I'll give it a whorl!
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"I don't know...But for now lets find a place to stay-" Yoru's small stomach had just growled, making the small boy chuckle.

"And, some food for you..." Ikuto sighed, patting Yoru's, and taking long strides down the sidewalk with Yoru trying to keep up on his heels.

Ikuto was hungry himself...But it was bearable...At least for now. He would have to find a substitute soon or he could lose his sanity. That wouldn't be good either. Eating a "lot" of food helps a bit. But even its amount seemed to turn to dust in his stomach after a small bit of time. Plus he didn't have any money for a lot or little bit of food....

*sigh* Ikuto groaned at the unlucky future he couldn't see.
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Posted 11/29/08
Hehe =]] Love vampire stories
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Muppie wrote:

Hehe =]] Love vampire stories
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That's nice...You going to add to the story?
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He stopped, smelling a sweet substance.

Blood

Ikuto looked around. There was nobody near the area he was in.

Then, he saw a flash of pink pass by.

(Sorry it`s short..)
Posted 12/1/08
I know I already went, but I want to go again...
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A young girl, about 12 or 13, in a rather punt looking school uniform, rushed by Ikuto's tall form, just brushing his shoulder with her head. Three girls (triples) were in tow behind her, wearing little yellow kindergarten hats, and blue coats. All were complaining to their leader on how they were late.

The bubble-gum haired girl tried to keep a straight face in their distress, but failed as she thought on how much later she was for her school.

Ikuto's let his indigo eyes wonder shamelessly over her petite form. Her honey eyes, sweet pink hair, and flawless pale skin, made Ikuto's insides turn with unwanted desires. His throat already hissed with burning dryness.

This was not good. The lack of blood to his body was sinking in too fast. He had just arrived here, and he was already having lust over a random girl he happened to past. How in the world would he find enough money in time to buy enough food to seizes the burning before he went after her out of instincts?

It was going to be a long day, Ikuto sighed, continuing to walk in the opposite direction of the girl, in hopes of something good to head his way.
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Seriously...This fic. is for everyone, so please feel free to add, even if its really short... I guess I will add more to get things running still...
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"Wow, this is really comfy..." Yoru groaned, trying to find a comfy place on the branch he was balancing on.

"Shut up! It's better than nothing!" Ikuto barked back, leaning against the trunk. The days mission in finding a job, money, and a place to stay failed miserable.

"Whatever..." Yoru muttered to himself, while settling down and forcing his eyes to shut.

A light breeze reached the height of the branches they rested in, giving the evening humidity more bearable.

Ikuto began to hear the shallow breath of his partner as he slowly dozed, as he looked out over the city below and awed at the brightness. Though the sun was down the city still bustled with people and their humanly affairs with great volumes of excitement.

It was useless to sleep for Ikuto. Not because he was an average vampire who usually didn't sleep until daybreak, but the sound of heart pulsating was too much for his sensitive ears to ignore. Especially when his stomach was as empty at a well.

Sigh... Ikuto huffed again in frustration. Trying to distract his attention, Ikuto swung to a branch beside Yoru's small form, in hopes of finding his sleep rejuvenating. But the opposite took affect for the worst. Ikuto found his eyes gazing at his little friends, beating rhythm of red under the thin membrane on his neck. Each breath brought another shot of crimson through each vain.

Tempting.

So tempting. Ikuto could feel his teeth moving in his mouth. This was more than he could bare. But he had too...He would not betray his friend over hunger in his sleep.

Without realizing it he was drawing closer and closer to the warmth inflaming Yoru's neck dispite his will.

Just a taste, Ikuto heard his mind moan. No! Ikuto tried to stop himself by squeezing the branch he was on causing the branch to crack slightly.

Pulling away with force and looking else where, Ikuto clenched his teeth together in an attempt to stop his fangs from showing profusely out of his mouth.

"I'm sorry Yoru..." Ikuto groaned, patting Yoru's head, "will be leaving the city soon if I can't clean things up quickly and property...

"I must hunt and put our safety here in jeopardy again..." And with that, Ikuto bounded out of the tree after wishing his pal a restful sleep, and sought out what smelled the most appealing to his nose.
Posted 12/2/08
I think the picture at the top is scaring everyone away Chappi... Well, I will continue as well until SOMEONE ADDS A PART!!!! *hint hint*
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"God, if you're the least bit on the side of a vampire, then please don't let me suck someones life away, but don't let me be discovered either...." Ikuto said a silent pray, looking down at passing people below him. Though he may be standing on one of the highest buildings around, the ant like people below were quite visible to his sharp eyes.

Bounding to another building top with much speed and uplift, Ikuto continued to almost fly through the air gracefully as he let his nose guild him while he's eye's were shut with no fear.

A shearing smell, broke through Ikuto's senses, bringing himself to a sudden stop (beautifully though). Ikuto opened his wavers eyes, peering out over the suburb neighborhood with his now slivered pupil. Ikuto could feel himself changing more on an animal instinct than his usually up-beat composer. Things were getting serious and tense even before spotting his prey. He hoped he would still having some control when he stole innocent blood.

Moving slyly down to a house ruff, Ikuto hopped silently through the wiving houses in search of the sweet smell that seemed to rule all others.

There!

Ikuto could feel his heart ache for the person about two house away standing quietly on a balcony. He recognized quickly that it was the same bubble gum haired girl as early, who had passed him on the street.

Almost doing a ghostly walk forward, Ikuto felt himself give a low chuckle at how ironic this was. He was barely thinking correctly as he could almost hear the evil greed produce inside of himself as he felt a pang of pity for her.

He knew their was no turning back as he leaped to the ruff in front of her, but he couldn't help but feel a nag of guilt and regret. He didn't want to do it, but he wanted to take it all as well.

Her resting eyes fluttered opened at stared curiously but confused at Ikuto's still form cross the street from her.

He was spotted, but his instincts didn't care, he took one bound across and landed lightly in her balcony ledge.

She immediately stepped back in alarm at what just had play out in front of her. A boy just leaping across the street with no effort and staring at her with emotions she couldn't read was a bit awkward.

Silenced liggered for a moment as both stared intenstly at each other, until the girl spoke with surpised, "Are... You that guy I bumped into early....?"

Ikuto didn't answer until he brought his face dangerously close to her's, "Nice to meet you too," he cooed, enjoying the flush spread across her chins, making his own heart bound.

He was surprised she wasn't already freaking out, but risked more by, standing longer and enjoying her hunched back form and how cute, he would be honest, she was, and her her glowing eyes under the starry sky.

"Tell me you name," Ikuto found his lips almost sing, as he brought a strand of her hair between his fingers, feeling its smoothness as he brought it to his lips. Ikuto was surprised by the way he acted. It was like he had three sides; his "eat her" side, his "dazed" side (currently using), and his "normal" side, which was far to be found.

Ba-Bump, Ba-Bump.

Ikuto could hear her heart beat an unsteady rhythm as she spoke with a squeak, "Amu..."

Ikuto could see his red eyes through her glassy ones, and knew his fangs were starting to stick out as she seemed to lose her shylness and shake.

Fear. He knew...But she just stared, and tried to breath calmly while she let Ikuto grip her bare shoulders.

Ikuto felt himself shake as his eager month neared her glowing red neck, and felt her jerk in slight pain from the grip on her shoulders.

"If I can't see the light of day again, let me know my killers name, vampire," Her voiced quivered as she whispered.

Ikuto's arched form over her frozen. Both stood stunned at the remark.

"Ikuto," Ikuto whispered back, knowing this would mean death for her, and grit opened his dry mouth and brought down his fangs into her soft flesh below her throat.

Ripping flesh sounded, along with a grasp for amount. Then a dreadful silence of sucking and moaning filled the space between them.

Ikuto felt his hand grip into her hair , pulling her neck into and arch. Even as he drank he felt like he was still in the stage before drinking, going insane over his prey. It was an intense flavor that made himself go mad.

Sweet crave~
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Uhhhh......... I'm not good at this so um... yea it may suck alot
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Ikuto' POV
As I sank my teeth into her delicate skin I felt somewhat guilty that she may never wake up- well she might wake up but that's not likely but IF she is going to wake up, she'll probably see people with hallows on them with white clothing bringing her to god or something. But it wasn't my fault it was so good. It tasted of strawberries. Suddenly i had the want to move up from the neck to her lips. What the? OK now there's sopmething wrong with me.
Before i did that, a thought just hit me though. How did she know about the our existince? Our existince is just a myth to these creatures . Only a few should ever know of our kind. the only way to know is to-
a) They are hunters
b) They've known other vampires
c) They are a vampire (which is impossible for this Amu girl since i only taste human blood)
d) Their ancesters was a family of vampires but their powers vanished so they are no longer vampires
e) Their vampire blood is sealed for a time being (OK so it is possible)
or f) They just think that becuase my mouth was near her neck and they love vampires and think they are real (which they are and so are whiches and all those mystical creatures you get scared of) and worships Edward Cullen
Yup! Thoses should be the only reason she knows/thinks i'm a vampire
Amu's POV
I felt pain as Ikuto-san bit me. i mentally sighed. ME?!?! AGAIN?!?!? as if i haven't already been 'accidently' bit enough before! But i felt bad for them but then again, i also hate how when i offer them blood, they just try to suck me lifeless, i mean i got a life you know? And i want to LIVE it. most of the time they always get it wrong and think i'm just some emo person and wants to die a bloody way so they drink untill my blood is, like, almost gone. SHIT! I'm starting to loose alot of blood now.I should stop him now...
Just as i was about to push him away, he stopped himself. I was surprised. Then he asked me something.
Normal POV
Ikuto: Who are you?
Amu: I already told you, it's amu, hinamori amu
Ikuto: *thinks: Where did i hear that name before...?* Why do you know about our kind?
Amu: *smiles a bit* Well.... that's becuse I.......
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Yea ok i'm just gonna leave it like that for the next person to finish cuz i dont know what she really is =o
To truth i wanted to make her a witch but I think that it was just a crappy thought i had... -.- I'm REALLY uncreative so yea I'm just ganna stop typing now D=
Posted 12/3/08 , edited 12/3/08
I know I am being selfish....But I want to rewrite the part where he is in the process biting her...Plus I want to keep this only in Ikuto's prospective.... So animated_Layla I am going to alter yours a bit so its just Ikuto's POV.
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I was careless and released my fang hold on her and blood rolled down her shoulder blades. Licking profusely, then bringing his my month back to the wound, he tried to suck gentle for her knee were shaking and hit his.

Suddenly her knees gave way, and Ikuto impatiently pulled away and support her weight. He had a bit too far, she couldn't even stand.

Gazing down at her pale face, her eyes seemed faded and off somewhere even though she seemed to be looking in Ikuto's direction.

The thought occurred to Ikuto. He could use this advantage for himself. If he could make her fall asleep she could awake and totally forget the incident, besides feeling a bit faint when she a woke.

Swooping her form in his arm, he opened her glass balcony door, and gently rested her down on the bed.

Her lips pulled at the edges and she spoke softly, "Ikuto..." and fell a sleep with Ikuto's palm encouraging her to sleep on her forehead.

Finding himself smiling back, he whispered a "goodnight" in her ear, and slipped out the door and into the night like a light breeze.
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Posted 12/7/08 , edited 12/7/08
---------------------------THE NEXT DAY----------------------------------
(NOTE: AMU IS AT SCHOOL)
Amu's POV
Amu was dazing off
Amu thinking: Was that just a dream? Does Ikuto Really Exist? Did i REALLY get bitten?
Teacher: Himamori-san! Himamori-san!
Amu comes back to reality
Amu: ITS HINAMORI! NOT HIMAMORI!!!!
Teacher: Gomen Himamori-san!
--------------BELL RINGS---------------------------
(NOTE: Amu is now at a meeting)
Tadase: Hinamori-san? Did something happen to your neck? You look like you have a cut. Actually they look like 2 holes!
Amu:.....*shocked* (she stands up making her chair fall to the ground) So it wasnt a dream!
Guardians: Ummmm?
Amu:Ah! Gomen! Lets continue!
Tadase: *worried* O-Ok are you sure ur ok?
Amu: I am fine! Lets just get on with it! *cool and spicy*
Guardians: Yes lets get on with it!
Tadase:BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH
-----------------Meeting ends-----------------------------------------
Amu iswalking when ikuto appears infront of her
Ikuto: hey amu! Thanks for the snack yesterday!
Amu: Snack? I didnt LET you suck my blood. u sucked it on ur own!
Ikuto: I know but it was still a snack! so thank you!
Amu:whatever! *cool and spicy*
(thats all i got! XD can amu be like Yuuki Kuran was in Vampire knight? How her "vampire" part of her is just sealed?)
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I guess you could...I mean everyone can do as they please with this story. Just two pointers you might want to consider. First, this is done in Ikuto's prospective. So trying only keep it in Ikuto's POV. You can twitch it but that post has to be only on one's prospective. I usually do it in third person and first person than second because it sounds more realistic. Also, you don't need too, but you might to not have Amu and Ikuto so quickly on good turns. Ikuto's goal was not to see her after he sucked her blood so he wouldn't feel pity or suck her blood again. Amu shouldn't take this lightly either.
I look forward to more writing from you. If you need tips please ask. Also you can edit your forum too since your the last post so far.

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---------------------------THE NEXT DAY----------------------------------
(NOTE: AMU IS AT SCHOOL)
Amu's POV
Amu was dazing off
Amu thinking: Was that just a dream? Does Ikuto Really Exist? Did i REALLY get bitten?
Teacher: Himamori-san! Himamori-san!
Amu comes back to reality
Amu: ITS HINAMORI! NOT HIMAMORI!!!!
Teacher: Gomen Himamori-san!
--------------BELL RINGS---------------------------
(NOTE: Amu is now at a meeting)
Tadase: Hinamori-san? Did something happen to your neck? You look like you have a cut. Actually they look like 2 holes!
Amu:.....*shocked* (she stands up making her chair fall to the ground) So it wasnt a dream!
Guardians: Ummmm?
Amu:Ah! Gomen! Lets continue!
Tadase: *worried* O-Ok are you sure ur ok?
Amu: I am fine! Lets just get on with it! *cool and spicy*
Guardians: Yes lets get on with it!
Tadase:BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH
-----------------Meeting ends-----------------------------------------
Amu iswalking when ikuto appears infront of her
Ikuto: hey amu! Thanks for the snack yesterday!
Amu: Snack? I didnt LET you suck my blood. u sucked it on ur own!
Ikuto: I know but it was still a snack! so thank you!
Amu:whatever! *cool and spicy*
(thats all i got! XD can amu be like Yuuki Kuran was in Vampire knight? How her "vampire" part of her is just sealed?)


Actually, totally ignore my last post to you. Please continue as you wish!
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Posted 12/13/08
XD ok but i dont really have any ideas now
Posted 12/27/08
Come on people keep writing...This is for everyone. I'm going to add more in the version Chappi and I did together if you want to read our version too. It really good right now!
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