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Posted 11/29/08
I was digging around in my old Word Documents and found this little peice. I, for one, think I should make it a story. How 'bout you guys?

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Immortality. One of the many sinful dreams and goals of mankind in those days. My father was so hell-bent on making it a reality... but really, he was planning much farther. My father was one of those great men who looked far into the future-- much farther than most could even imagine. His real intention was to see something. Something that most would rather do without.

The end of the world. That is what he wanted to see. He wanted to see the demise of the twisted freak mankind had become; something he admitted was his doing as well. He preformed many human experiments, trying to get his formula right... but not one survived past the regular life expectancy. Then... I was created.

Loneliness. That's all I felt. My father was shunned by his jealous colleagues and I as well. I was deemed a monster-- a freak created by a madman. There was nowhere we could run. The news of my creation spread throughout the world like a wildfire. No shelters would let us in and there were countless people hunting us and watching every step we took. Some wanted to use me. Others wanted me dead, along with my father.

Despair. That's what killed him. My father fell ill and died. Even in his last moments, he lamented on how he was unable to see his dream-- the thing he longed to see. So... I decided that in his place, I would see it for him. I would live as a shadow until the end of the world.
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Posted 11/29/08
dude that's like..really good :O
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Posted 11/29/08
great start....
continue on...
i'd be waiting...
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Posted 11/29/08
.... now that I think about it, its starting to sound like Frankenstein. O_o;;

Oh well. Thanks for the opinions, guys. ^_^
Posted 11/30/08
lool my thoughts exactly. Frankenstein. the reference of monster and being created by a "father" i think. :] great intro keep up the good work
Posted 12/4/08
Pretty good for a plot bunny. Of course, I doubt this'll be anything like Frankenstein, knowing you.
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Posted 12/5/08
great discriptions!!^-^ dis one sounds interesting!! u have a good sense of using words in da rite places too!! X3
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