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Zodiac Fighters
Genre: Comedy, Romance, Action, School life

Prologue: Centered in the city of Okinawa, Japan. A calm place in which all citizens live on normally on a regular basis. They are unaware of the hidden deep of the society are dangerous demonic warriors, waiting to strike. To counter when they would rise, the government allowed a researchers to counter the demon’s rise. Researchers found a way in which humans can combine animals in order to create powerful warriors. Researchers collected and experimented on animals which matched that of the Chinese zodiac. They went to huge resources and did everything possible, to collecting tigers, to even reviving dragons. When it came for the final process of giving them the ability to combine with humans, it took a sudden change during the process. All animals were a different color with each species and were able to transform to human, they were then referred to as CAPS (Collective Animal Protection Squad). Yet, when this occurred all the animals fled into the wild and city. Many are in search for these animals to team up with them to fight the demons. It was then that secret organization known as CLAW (Collective Legion of Animal Warriors) was founded.

Plot: The story follows the life of Kirua Kasuma, a survivor of the Demigod battle, as he attempts to live a regular life in the city of Okinawa. As well as fighting against those whose side with the realm of La Tumba. Doing all this while trying to harness the power within himself and strengthening his relationship with his animal guardian, Sapphire.

Main Characters

Kirua Kasuma: He is 16 years old and Sapphire‘s human partner. He attends Yomogitchi High and in the top of his class. He is in class 1-A. On the outside, he appears to be an average high school student. Kirua is a highly skilled hand-to-hand combat specialist. He is also highly intellect and a tech kid. Despite being all that, Kirua tends to act silly and laidback most of the time. Kirua does not have much of a sense of direction, which is one of the reason that Sapphire enrolled in the same school. He only acts serious when he believes is needed. He is a survivor of the Demigod battle that took place 4 years ago. Not much is known of the battle since he refuses to talk about it. Though he mentions that “I still have something to do” whenever the Demigod battle is mentioned. He trained 7 months with a man named Aerus(who‘s information is unknown). The only person that is aware of the truth and what did happen to Kirua is Sapphire. Three months after it occurred, he moved saying that he will be studying abroad. Though truthfully he left so he can train to become stronger in hand-to-hand combat. Kirua tends to act like a pacifist for the most part, but will rise to fight when it comes to protecting a loved one. Since his encounter with Sapphire, he has been receiving tough love from her, through her “Blue Love Mallet v2”. This has caused him to unconsciously be aware of danger and dodge attacks. Due to his awareness of Sapphire’s fear of being known as the blue snake and her powers, he mostly fights without combining with Sapphire.

Sapphire: She is 16 years old and Kirua’s animal guardian. She is the strongest of the snake category of CAPS and believed to be the strongest of all CAPS. To avoid her powers being known she is always in her human form. She believes that if her powers are to be known, demon will try to use it for evil purposes. To save 2 children, she exposed her identity and transformed to her animal form. Unfortunately, 4 demons were in the area when she transformed. They realized of the transformation and chased after her. Not long after saving them and returning to her human form, she was attacked. Just as the demon’s were to capture her, she was to release her powers to save herself. Before that occurred, Kirua arrives on the scene. Not too long after he defeats the demons. He then prepares to take the injured Sapphire with him, though she refused thinking that he was just going to exploit her powers. Conceding, he does not attempt to take her to his cabin and treats her wounds at that spot. Sapphire then fell in love with Kirua since she soon found out that Kirua was unaware of who or what she was. Kirua treated her no different from normal people, which is what she has been wanting for so long. Later on Kirua finds out about her identity and replies by saying “That…. That is awesome!!!” and treats her no different than before. This leads to Sapphire trusting him to team up with, thus becoming his animal guardian. Sapphire is an overprotective and caring person. Due to her personality, she has a need to hurt Kirua when he does something that he shouldn’t with the “Blue Love Mallet v2”. She becomes very jealous anytime Kirua is around any girls or anyone that spends more time with him than she does. Because of it, she also enrolled Yomogitchi High but is in class 1-B. She is highly skilled in strategy-making and illusionary techniques(Her true powers are only released when combined with Kirua). She is overly obsessed with onigiri, especially Kirua’s onigiri. Sapphire is the only one who is aware of Kirua’s past event and the detail’s of it.

Zero Ruga: He is Ruby’s animal partner. He is 17 years old and captain of the Special Elite Squad. He is the highest rank and pride in CLAW. Despite being 17 years old, he has proven himself the best warrior in CLAW. He acts emotionless, especially in missions. He will do anything to succeed in the mission, even if it means sacrificing others. When that is to happen he responds by saying, “Its all for the success of the mission”. Ruby is the only person that Zero tends to open up to and truthfully cares for, though he shows it in an odd way. Zero is the grandson of the Head director of CLAW. He tends to act very paranoid when it comes to being involved in a situation he is not aware of. He tends to make assumptions with an odd conclusion, such as Karaoke being a form of mind control.

Ruby: She is a red dragon and Zero’s animal guardian. She is 17 years old. Her dream is to be the strongest of all CAPS. One day as she was flying a week of training in the mountains, she noticed Zero on the bottom of the mountain. She remained hidden as she saw his training. Eventually she disguised herself to oversee Zero’s training. She admired his strength and abilities which led her to offer the partnership agreement to Zero. Under the condition that they are never to lose in battle to another human-animal pair. Ruby’s specialty is shape-shifting and defensive spells. Ruby is obsessed with sweets. She will and has bitten a person’s hand off to get it, though she says that, “He managed to live on with no problem”. Ruby is the only person that Zero opens up to and vice-versa. Though Ruby is treated kind of roughly to others, she remains by Zero’s side because he is the only one, who unknowingly, makes her happy.

Marie Kusaki: She is 15 years old and has a photographic memory. Marie is considered to be CLAW’s weakest fighter. She has failed all combat tests and has proven to have no strength in combat. She has been switched from squad to squad to her inefficient ability for fighting. She eventually was transferred to Zero's squad and the squad's medic. Though she lacks fighting abilities, she excels in healing and becomes the squads medic. Her medical abilities are above that of all medics in CLAW and considered her only special trait. Since she's joined Zero's squad, the mortality rate for their mission has moved from 56% to 2%. Her animal guardian is the silver horse,Onix. She tends to overly depends on Onix when it comes to decision making, to the point that it irritates him and causes him to hide. She is oddly attracted to shiny objects and will show a demonic side if someone is to ruin an item's shinyness or if someone does not agree on how great it is.

Onix: He is 17 years old and is marie's animal guardian. he is a silver horse. He was found after a beating in an alley in town. marie found him and treated him back to health. Even though others ignored him in his time of need, marie assisted him. Once he was healed back to health. He made a partnership agreement. He made the agreement with marie to repay her for her kindness in his time of need. He says that he will be there to protect her, even if it means using his body as a shield. He is always seen wearing a dark tuxedo. He says that he feels naked if he is not wearing one. For the most part, he acts like a gentlemen around women. Though around men he acts on his experiences with women and how he rather be with a woman that with the guys. He tends to treat marie as his little sister more than anything. He is annoyed by zero since he shows no sympathy towards marie. Since their encounter with Kirua he has been trying to get him to hook up with Marie at first, its cause marie was in love with him. he then finds it a challenge to get them together and tries to get them together for his entertainment as he watches from a distance. He then also enrolls in the school, though he violates the school dress code for not wearing the uniform but his tuxedo. He is weak against women and has a strong snse of chivalry. His specialties are speed and power enhancement (which he usually uses to enhance his shield or marie's healing abilities)

Hasuma Karuichi: He is 16 years old and is Kirua's best friend. He is also in class 1-A with Kirua. Hasuma is the captain of the track team. He is the #1 runner in the region, yet he hasnt come close to beating Kirua. Kirua says to him everytime he lose that, "You need more training to run with me". Hasuma still treats Kirua as a friend more than anything. Hasuma is a maniac when it comes to women. He becomes extremely jealous when he sees Sapphire with Kirua. He believes he should be with Sapphire since Kirua doesnt make a move. To release his thoughts, he tends to act out what he is thinking with Asuki Hina. He would be either acting as himself or as Kirua when he is trying to prove something to Kirua. At first, he is unaware of the existence of CAPS or of Sapphire's true form. He eventually finds out but does not tell since he isnot supposed to know. He does give hints to Kirua's in metaphor forms that he does know. He cares for Kirua as a brother and is always there to give advice. He admires Onix for having similar thoughts on women. When Onix arrives to school, Hasuma ask him to be his mentor. From time to time, it is seen him trying to flirt with Marie, with a failing result.

Asuki Hina: She is 16 years old and also in class 1-A. She is the captain of the Drama Club and the school class vice-president. She is much into dressing up and cosplay. She is usually with a costume over or under her school uniform. She assists Hasuma when it comes to the role-playing of his enterpretaion of Kirua and Sapphire as the plot. She is the one acting as Sapphire during these acts. Though she is quite childish most of the time, she is incredibly intellect. Back in the past she has been defeated in each test, including the school's entrance exam by Kirua. Though mad at first, she befriended Kirua since she then admired his intelligence. It was revealed that she had a crush on Kirua and confessed to him. Unfortunately for her, it was 2 months after the Demigod battle. She became extremely depressed when Kirua left for the year to study abroad(which was his lie to go train for the year). During this time, she became attracted to Hasuma. She is afraid of expressing her love to Hasuma fearing the same fate will occur. Though by accident, Onix finds out and attempts to get her and Hasuma together.

Supporting Characters

Satou Autsiki: He is 17 years old and in class 2-A. He is the school class president. He is the most popular guy to women. He has is very innocent when it comes to anything ecchi. Due to that, he tends to pop out of unexpected places when something ecchi occurs to prevent it. He is hated by Sapphire and soon Marie, since he tends to intervene when they try to have alone time with Kirua.

Ousuke Zano
: He is class 1-A and soon becomes class 2-A’s homeroom teacher. He tends to act like a teen himself, when not teaching. He has a habit of encouraging relationships, such as Kirua and Sapphire. He encourages everyone to do their best by finishing each conversation by saying "Tackle it with the power of YOUTH!!".

Garp Ruga: He is the current Head Director of CLAW and Zero's grandfather. Much like Zero, he tends to be emotionless when in conversation.He is always seen playing some type of game. Most of the time he is playing Shougi with his animal guardian Oro. His partnership with Oro is unknown. When choosing a squad for a mission, he chooses the one he knows will perform most efficiently. Though sometimes, it may not sound like a logical answer to others.

Oro: he is a golden tiger and Garp Ruga's animal guardian. he is considered to be the strongest CAPS in CLAW's history. He does not talk but communicates telepathically with others. It is seen that he personally trains the new recruits of CLAW. His specialties are speed and strength. He is highly intellectual and is always found either playing shougi or reading a book. He tends to be anti-social, so he does not speak much. The history between him and Garp is unknown.

Mia Zanitchi
: She is 25 years old. She is the head doctor in CLAW and Marie's mentor. Marie came to her in hope of learning medical skills when she was 12. She then accepter Marie after giving her a series of tests. She is always flowing with happiness. She always has a stash of candy in which she uses to reward others. Or just to give out when she finishes a conversation with someone by saying "Its good for your stamina". Not much is known about her except that she loves to dance, watch and collect romantic movies, and has a younger sister in England.

Rai Nagizaki
: Rai is the Owner of Just Heavenly and the head cook. Rai has a feminine appearance which leads him to dress up like a woman and has a female personality. He tends to act more feminine more than anything. He wears a lot of make - up to try to be as feminine as possible. Though feminine, he is an excellent swordsman. But has given up for unknown reasons.

Locations

Yomogitchi High: It is the most prestigious school in the country. Most of the day’s millionaire’s are said to have attended the school. The facility has included all that is to be expected. The largest library in the country is found on the campus, as well as a field for each sport. All faculty members are there within an University level of teaching.

CLAW Headquarters: It is located underneath the city of Okinawa and expands throughout the whole city. Its main entrances are located inside animal store’s at a hidden corner of the store. The CLAW Headquarters is a mini city itself, in the fact that all resources and forms of entertainment are located there. Medical facilities and Academies are also included. Every location will demonstrate futuristic technology. Members of CLAW are to live there in order to be prepared of danger and to be always attend their training session.

La Tumba (The Grave)
: It is the location where demons live. Their entrance and exits to Okinawa and other locations are demonstrated to a inter-dimensional portal that appears as a spiral symbol. It is seen that the community of demons is to resemble that of our perception of the underworld. They are ruled by The demon King and his family, whose identity is not revealed until later in the series.

Kasuma Residence: The house of Kirua Kasuma and his family. His parents are currently located in Egypt doing archaeological studies. Both Kirua Kasuma and Sapphire live here. It’s a two story white house with a maroon colored roof. A sakura tree is being grown in the backyard and the front yard has flowers planted. The parents are aware of Sapphire’s stay in the house. Though they live together, they do not sleep in the same room (Though Sapphire does try from time to time). Their rooms are average and most of the rooms are as well. There is one room at the end of the hallway which is Kirua’s Research room. The door is a booby trap and the real door is located on the wall to the left of the door. The real door is camouflaged to match the walls of the house.

Just Heavenly:
It is the restaurant in which Sapphire, Asuki Hina, Kirua and later on Marie and Onix, work in. Sapphire and Asuki work there as waitresses. While Kirua works there as one of the cooks. Onix later on moves there as a waiter and Marie as a hostess. It is renowned for their desserts to the point in which Ruby becomes addicted to and has made Zero smile. It is owned by Rai Nagizaki. The restaurant is decorated to have the feeling of heaven. Chairs are in a cloud decoration and the waitresses are dressed as angels.

Copyright © 2008 by Adan Pena
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Here is the first chapter of my manga. Hope you enjoy and please leave comments. And don't hold back. i can take it :P

The Day And The Night

Flames are all around. The buildings have been turned to rubble. There are dead bodies of humans and shadow figures lying around the ground. On the front view is a 12-year-old girl that lies on the ground unconscious. A right hand is being stretched out trying to reach the girl. The right hand is shaking, struggling to reach the girl. A mysterious shadow walks pasts the owner of the hand. The shadow then moves his head and stands still, staring at the owner of the hand, with his evil, demonic red eyes. He then begins to continue walking with a maniacal laugh towards the girl. He then reaches for her and begins to carry her within his hands. The boy loudly says, “Leave her alone!” The boy begins to try to stand while having difficulty to breathe being heard. He once again, now stood up and strongly says, “I said…*struggling to breathe*… leave her *struggling to breathe*….Alo- *coughs blood and falls to the ground*”. He falls down to the ground and look behind him to see another shadowy figure. The other shadow figure leaps over to the first shadow figure and the girl. A purple spiral is seen behind the two shadow figures. As they begin to walk towards it, the second shadow turns around begins to charge a red beam from his left hand and says, “You aren‘t even worth being alive”. As the shadow with the beam finishes his quote, the boy yells “Noooooooooo!” and screens goes black.

An alarm begins to go off with a sound that goes like *ding ding ding…ding ding ding* continuously. A boy with black hair and black eyes, urgently rises from his bed panting and place his left hand over his face and says, “*panting* I can‘t believe I had that dream again”. The boy reaches for the alarm with his right hand turns it off while still panting and covering his face. The time is seen to be 6:00 am. The boy gets out of bed, begins a morning stretch, and gives off a big yawn. He is seen wearing a black pair of shorts and a white t-shirt. The boy then begins to narrate “My name Kirua Kasuma. I‘m 16 years old”. He is then seen brushing his teeth for five seconds. From there he transcends to the kitchen and is seen cooking breakfast. While in the kitchen, he is wearing his school uniform. The school uniform consists of a navy blue shirt with a white stripe beginning from each shoulder that goes through the sleeve until the wrist. There is a white line circling the collar. Also a red tie with a white undershirt that has two blue rings around the upper chest area. Also wearing navy colored pant. The school symbol is embedded in the front pocket. The symbol is a gold circle with an eagle on the inner circle. While brushing his teeth and in the kitchen, he is still narrating by saying, “My height is 5’10’’. I live here in Okinawa, Japan. My parent’s job has led them to be living in Egypt until their archaeological research is completed. I‘m a first year student at Yomogitchi High. I’m in class 1-A. I like to cook and create new inventions.” He continues to cook and begins to look out the window. Kirua in his thoughts say, “It seems like it will be a good day today”. At the moment he finishes his thoughts, a girl with blue eyes and blue long hair that extends to her upper back walks in. She is seen wearing a blue pajama shirt (unbuttoned) and pants with designs of sakura petals. As she walks in, she looks at Kirua, and with an innocent tone says, “Hey Kirua. What‘s for breakfast?”. Time freezes and Kirua then continues to narrate, “Her name is Sapphire. She is 16 years old. She is about 5’6’’. She lives here with me. Our history together is an interesting one actually. She is also a first year student at Yomogitchi High. She is in class 1-B. She loves onigiri. Though it may not look like it by appearance, she is, literally, a blue snake.”. Kirua with his back turned responds, “The usual. Miso soup, steamed rice and some fried fish”. As he finishes his last response, he turns to look at Sapphire then responds in a surprised, nervous manner, “*blushing and stuttering*What… what.. WHAT ARE YOU DOING DRESSED LIKE THAT?! I‘VE TOLD YOU TO ALWAYS BUTTON UP!!” Sapphire, in a seductive tone, says “Come on. Are you sure you don’t want to see more?”. She slowly reaches to her shirt when Kirua nervously responds, “ *trying to cover his eyes* IF YOU HURRY AND GO CHANGE, I WILL PACK YOU SOME ONIGIRI TO YOUR BENTO TODAY!!”. Once he finished the sentence, Sapphire was already wearing her school uniform standing in the same spot she was before. She is now wearing a navy blue buttoned up shirt with a white stripe beginning from shoulders that goes through the sleeve till the wrist. There is a white line circling the collar. Also a red tie with a white undershirt that has 2 blue rings around the upper chest area. And a navy skirt which covers till 2 inches above the knees. Also the school symbol is embedded in the front pocket. The symbol is a gold circle with an eagle on the inner circle. Also black shoes with black socks that extends till the 4 inches below her knee. Sapphire happily says, “So can we eat now??”. Kirua responds surprised, “Yeah, just grab a seat…….., Hey, Did you cast an illusion on me again??”. Sapphire innocently says “It’s… a … se-cret, hehe.” and smiles and walks to another room. Kirua then sighs and narrates, “Did I mention she’s an expert in illusions.”. Kirua looks out the window again and in his mind says, “Maybe I spoke too soon *sigh*.”.

The scene transcends to Kirua and Sapphire walking to school. The surroundings is that of a regular community of houses. While walking, Sapphire lowers her upper body forwards while staring at Kirua and nervously while blushing says, “Hey Kirua”. Kirua curiously looks over to her while walking, normally responds, “What is it Sapphire?”. Still nervously she says “*blushing and uniting her index fingers back and forth*What‘s are our plans for today?”. Kirua then places his left hand on his chin, while still walking, and replies “Well, first we go to school. From there we have to do some shopping at the market. Then we go to work. Finally we head back home to rest.”. Sapphire chuckles in an irritated tone, “Don’t u think you‘re forgetting something?”. Kirua looking straight at the road, in a normal tone, “Nothing else comes to mind”. Sapphire then with an evil smile and irritated says, “Are u sure?”. Kirua once again replies, “No. that was everything for today”. He then shifts his head towards Sapphire to notice a furious aura surrounding her. Blue particles are then seen engulfing her hands. The particles then transform into a large mallet. Sapphire then summons her “Blue Love Mallet v2. Kirua is nervously looking at Sapphire and the mallet. The screen goes off screen with a yell from Kirua yelling, “aaaaaaaaaaaaaah!!”. Five seconds later, a guy with short brown hair and brown eyes, wearing the Yomogitchi High school uniform, appears from the corner behind Sapphire. The guy begins to jog over to Sapphire while waving. When he reaches Sapphire, he says in a romantic tone “Good morning Sapphire-san. You are looking as beautiful as the light seen from the aurora light at night”. Sapphire responds in a normal tone “Good morning”. The guy then turns his body the other way and with a depressed face and features begins to say in his head, “ *sulking and deeply depressed* Darn it, I failed again. I stayed up all night watching that movie Lover‘s Travel to master that phrase. I watched it over 25 times and it still failed. I’m a failure at life… *normal face*That reminds me.” He then looks at Sapphire and says in a curious voice “Hey Sapphire, where is Kirua-kun? I need to ask him something.”. Sapphire looks at the guy with a smile and points to the wall up ahead. The wall is with Kirua stuck on the wall with a crater around him from the hit with the mallet. Kirua facial expression seems to be unconscious. The guy then walks until he’s in front of Kirua and in a normal tone says, “Hey, how long are u planning on playing dead”. Time freezes and Kirua begins to narrate, “That‘s Hasuma Karuichi. He is 16 years old and my best friend. He is about 6’2’’. He also attends Yomogitchi High and is in class 1-A with me. He is the captain of the track team. His likes are women and loves to admire them.” Hasuma then peels Kirua off the wall and flaps him to gain his normal feature. Hasuma then looks at Kirua in a challenging voice “Are you ready to lose this time, buddy?” Kirua places his head in front of Hasuma’s face and replies, dominantly “I don’t know, are you, pal?”. Hasuma then, in a challenging tone, “One way to find out”. Both of them take a runner’s position and the view is focused on Hasuma’s face and he says, “1...”. Kirua face is shown and he says “2...”. Then both of their faces are shown and at the same time say “3” and blasts off running leaving a dust trail. Sapphire coughs for a moment cause of the dust as they left. She then angrily say “Man, I can’t believe they had to race today”. She then looks at a bracelet(it is a silver bracelet and engraved on it says “Sapphire” and three charms. One is a crescent moon, next is a rabbit shaped head charm, and then a onigiri charm) she is wearing on her left hand. She then keeps staring at it and says in a disappointed tone, “Kirua, did you really forget what today is?”. Screen then fades and transcends off to the sky.

The setting is now outside the school gate. Many students are seen entering the school. While walking, guys are talking; Girls are giggling and gossiping. The screen is now caught up with Kirua and Hasuma by the shoe lockers. Hasuma is grasping for air. Kirua then looks at Hasuma and with a serious face says "You need more training to run with me". Hasuma then looks at him with a face of rage and fire on his eyes. Two seconds later, both Kirua and Hasuma start laughing at the same time. It is then seen that Sapphire had caught up. She opens her locker to switch her outdoor shoes with her indoor shoes. Sapphire then walks towards Kirua and Hasuma(who are still laughing). Kirua then looks at Sapphire and notices a blue aura surrounding her right hand. Kirua is then shaking with fear and nervously saying, “Sa..Sa…Sapphire, come on! You can‘t do this in school. Please, don’t. I apologize. I won’t do it again.”. Sapphire ignoring Kirua’s apology summons her Blue Love Mallet v2 once again and take’s a batter’s position. She then says, “How many times have I told you *Kirua shaking in fear* to never ditch me?!!”. She takes a big swing towards Kirua’s body and his body breaks the wall and is sent flying. Hasuma from 5 feet behind Sapphire does a thumbs up and says enthusiastically, “Nice!!”.

Frame transcends to the inside of class 1-A and Kirua slides the door open and unmotivated says, “Good morning.”. Then a girl with brown hair in a ponytail style that reaches to the middle of her back neck. The girl hyperactively replies, “*smiles and short wave* Good morning, Kirua-kun!” Time freezes and Kirua begins to narrate, “That is Asuki Hina. She is 16 years old and in class 1-A with me and Hasuma. She is 5’6’’ and captain of the drama club. She really likes to dress up and cosplay. She is also the School’s class vice-president and the smartest female in the school.”. Kirua then continues to walk and grabs a seat in the desk located in the middle row by the window. Once Kirua takes a seat, he places his head face down and sighs. Asuki then walks to the desk next to Kirua. She stands straight while placing her hands of her waists and says “Hey Kirua, what did you do to Sapphire today? You know I won’t forgive you if u make her sad.”. Kirua raises his head, uninterested and with a lazy tone responds, “Please be quiet! I haven’t done anything to her!”. Asuki still holding her hand on her waist tilts her upper body to Kirua’s eye level and with a concerned tone, “Are you sure? She didn’t seem that active this morning.” At that moment Hasuma slides open the door and with a detective’s voice says “I think I can shine some light onto this.”. The screen goes pitch black and one stage light shines on one spot onto Asuki who is now dressed up as Sapphire. Hasuma, now wearing a wig and contacts to imitate Kirua, is seen walking onto the light. Asuki with a shy look and voice says, “Hey Kirua, Can we hold hands today on our way to school.” Hasuma with an uninterested tone looks away from the dressed up and stands in a heroic pose “I can‘t do that. I am not into that since I am cold-blooded. Instead I shall run away from this place.”. Asuki overly dramatic says “Please. Don’t leave me. I want to be by your side to school today, Kirua-kun!!”. Hasuma, in a trying to be cool voice says, “Sorry but the passion of the road is calling me *sprints off*”. The real Kirua pops out and says “Hey, weren’t you the cause for me running off”. Asuki then says, “*pouts* Kirua, you idiot. I wanted to spend time with you. *begins to cry* You big idiot!”. The role-playing ends and Kirua with a lazy tone says, “That‘s not it. I‘m pretty sure it was cause of something else. *points at Hasuma* Otherwise that would happen too much when I race that idiot.”. Hasuma enraged places his forehead on Kirua’s forehead and says, “Who are you calling an idiot? You idiot!”. Both of them grinning their teeth at each other and furiously looking into each other’s eyes. Asuki places one hand on each of their forehead and splits them apart. Asuki then says, “*Stands straight and places her right index finger on her chin and puts on a curious face* Then I wonder what can be wrong with her?”. Hasuma with a concerned face looks at Asuki and says, “It hurts me when my beautiful Sapphire is down like this.”. Kirua place his right elbow on the desks and shifts his head to the window. Kirua stares outside and says, “Try not to worry about it. Sapphire will definitely feel better by tomorrow *small grin*.”. The school bell is then rung and everyone is seen grabbing a seat. A loud “Yahooo!!” is heard and the sliding doors by the front of the rooms are opened. A tall, black spiked haired man wearing heroically leaps towards the podium and says “Welcome back everyone! Hope you all enjoyed the holidays” Time freezes and Kirua begins to narrate, “His name is Ousuke Zano. He is our homeroom teacher. There‘s not much to say about him that can‘t be seen by his acts.”. Ousuke hyperactively says “Now everyone *spreads his arms out in the air* I expect all of you to not slack off for the rest of the year. *retracts the left arm and makes a places his right hand in a fist form in the air* Now I expect you all to tackle it with the POWER OF YOUTH!!”. Everyone in class 1-A enthusiastically raises a fist in the air and say “HAI, Ousuke-sensei!!” All but Kirua who is seen to be in deep thought looking out the window. Asuki with her fist raised up glances at Kirua. Asuki notices him in lost in thought and then starts to look worried.

Lunch time has arrived. Kirua is then seen leaving out of the room through the doors by the front of the room. Ten seconds later, Sapphire enters through the doors by the back of the room. She then happily with her eyes closed yells out, “Kirua, lets have lunch together today?”. Hasuma realizes her happiness attitude and goes to a corner in which he is celebrating in his mind the return of her positivism. Sapphire opens her eyes after hearing no response from Kirua and looks through the room. Asuki then randomly tackles Sapphire and begins to hug her while rubbing her left cheek against Sapphire right cheek. As Asuki rubs her cheek on Sapphire, she dramatically is saying, “I‘m so glad to hear your happiness emotions flowing. This attitude *eyes begin shining and look at Sapphire‘s eyes* Yes, Your positivism is what fuels me. You are the sugar to my coffee. The Peanut Butter to my Jelly. The rice to my miso soup.”. Sapphire then chuckles and trying to escape says “Okay. I understand already. By the way, where is Kirua? I was wondering if he wanted to eat lunch together.” Asuki releases Sapphire from the hug and looks around the classroom. Asuki then says, “He was just here a moment ago. Hey Hasuma-kun! Do you know where Kirua went.”. Hasuma giggling then realizes he’s being talked to and snaps out of it. Hasuma normally responds, “No idea. He just told me that he would be back by the beginning of the next class. He said he needed to fix a projector for the science teacher… I think.”. Sapphire then looks disappointed and says, “*sigh* I see.”. Asuki trying to bring her moral up by saying, “Well that doesn’t mean you can‘t have lunch with us. Right Hasuma-kun?”. Hasuma enthusiastically responds by yelling “Of course not. It would be great to spend some time us three, hahaha!”. Sapphire then regains her happiness and says “Thank you guys!”. Three tables are then united and Asuki and Sapphire are sitting next to each other, while Hasuma is the desk across Asuki. All three at the same time say “Itadakimasu!”. Everyone then open up their bento. Sapphire is then seen slowly opening her bento and notice his filled with onigiri made by Kirua. Sapphire’s eyes begin to shine and her tongue licks her upper lip cause of her favorite onigiri. Sapphire starts to devour the onigiri one by one. She eventually starts choking on one and Asuki hands her a opened can of juice to drink from. Asuki looks at Sapphire concerned “Sapphire-chan, try not to eat so fast. That might be the death of you some day”. Sapphire chuckles and rubs her right hand on the back of her head and says “Sorry. I lose control when I see onigiri.” Hasuma then smartly remarks, “It’s true. There‘s nothing stopping Sapphire-chan from eating onigiri, especially Kiru- *Hasuma quickly covers his mouth with both his hands*.”. Sapphire then stares at her now empty bento and thinks to herself is a sad tone, “Kirua. Why are you avoiding to talk to me today? Did you really forget what is today?”. Hasuma and Akira with a concerned face look at the depressed Sapphire and then they stare at each other to demonstrate both their concerns towards Sapphire.

The bell for the beginning of the next class begins. Sapphire quickly stands up and in a thankful manner say, “Thanks for letting me eat with you guys today”. Asuki happily responds, “That‘s what friends are for. You have other options to eat lunch with. Just remember that.” Sapphire smiles and says, “I will. See you later.” Sapphire then slowly progresses to the door by the back of the classroom. As Sapphire goes to reach for the handle to push the door, the door slides open with Kirua on the other side of the door. Kirua says, “Hey Sapphire! *smiles with his eyes closed* I’m sorry I forgot to tell you that I wasn’t going to be able to eat with you today. *Sapphire is beginning to summon her blue love mallet v2* By the way. Can you remind me to later to buy some potatoes for tonight. They are the key ingredients for tonight, especially since we *Sapphire has just summoned her Blue Love Mallet v2 and releases a dangerous aura around her* are low on them.”. Kirua then opens his eyes and starts to panic. Sapphire furiously yells, “TRY TELLING ME THAT A BIT EARLIER *swings hammer and hits Kirua of the ribs and sends him flying out the window* YOU BIG IDIOT!” Hasuma and Asuki then pop out and look out the window. Hasuma places his right hand by his eyebrows and whistles. After Hasuma’s whistle, Asuki snaps her fingers on her right hand and with an impressed tone says, “As expected from my Sapphire-chan!”. Classes have then begun and everyone is in their seat. Kirua is seen with 3 bandages on his face (one on his left cheek, one on the right upper eyebrow and one by the chin). He then confused and irritated says in his mind, “Seriously, what is up with Sapphire today. I know she is violent sometimes, but three times already. What is she thinking?”. Then Hasuma is seen 2 seats behind Kirua and in his thoughts he is enraged saying “Geesh, look at Kirua. Hurting Sapphire and making her feel like that. *looks to the window and seduced voice* Ooooh, lucky. The girl’s gym class….. What was I thinking about again….. Oh well. Hello ladies.”. Asuki is then seen sitting next to Hasuma and in a judgmental tone is thinking, “Seriously. What is wrong with Kirua today. You would think by now he would learn to treat my Sapphire-chan better. I can‘t wait to give him a lecture after class. Wait a minute *Asuki’s facial expression changes to fantasizing* That’s right. Today, the Drama Club will be rehearsing for the new play. I love the design of my witch costume and my panda *continues fantasizing*.” The final bell is rung and everyone is dismissed. Kirua then attempts to leave the room, but Hasuma and Asuki block the path. Asuki then places a serious face and points her right index finger in front of Kirua‘s face and says, “Listen Kirua. I‘m not sure what you did to Sapphire or what you said. I do know that she’s expecting something out of you today and you better give it to her.” Hasuma with his arms crossed, rationally speaking, says to Kirua, “It‘s true. You should get her something to make her feel better. Something like… *Hasuma just noticed that Kirua has left the room through the other door* Hey, did you listen to what we just said.” Kirua calmly responds, “You said something.” Hasuma angrily says, “Listen to what people say when they are talking to you.” Asuki holds Hasuma back with her left hand and walks in front of him and says “*Asuki places a thumbs up* Just go and make her happy okay.” Kirua and Hasuma looks at each others eyes. Kirua gives of a sigh of relief and says, “Okay. Don’t you don’t have to remind me Asuki-chan *smirks and walks away*.”. Sapphire pops out and hugs Kirua. She innocently says “I missed you Kirua”. Kirua in a reasonable tone says, “I was only next door for a few hours.”. Sapphire innocently replies “I know…. But it felt like it was longer.”. Sapphire then starts walking next to Kirua and begin heading to the shoe lockers. Kirua enthusiastically yells, once he finishes placing his outdoor shoes on, “Yes!! Now we go for some shopping. Let‘s do it Sapphire.”. Sapphire then jogs in front of him, stops and turns back and happily says, “Let‘s go Kirua *giggles*”. The sun is now starting to set. The sunshine is causing to reflect off Sapphire’s hair and the wind around her are in the forms of small blue particles. Kirua then looks at Sapphire and engulfed by her beauty. Kirua smiles, quickly jogs and grabs Sapphire’s left hand and enthusiastically says, “THEN LETS GO, SAPPHIRE!!”. Sapphire happily says, “HAI, KIRUA!! *giggles and begins to think in her mind* This is the Kirua is remember. The Kirua that makes me happy, hehe *smiles*.”. Screen goes pitch black and transcend to the next scene.

Kirua and Sapphire are now seen at the market. Sapphire is still embracing Kirua by his left arm smiling. From a 2 o clock view, an old lady with gray hair and eyes closed, happily responds “My, my. If it isn‘t Kirua-kun and Sapphire-chan.”. Sapphire then notices the old lady and starts jogging while still gripping onto Kirua’s arm. Kirua is jogging with her, though seems like he is beginning to lose balance. Sapphire enthusiastically says, “*big smile* Konichiwa, Baa-chan!!”. Kirua with a smile on his face says, “Konichiwa Baa-chan.”. The old lady bows her head towards Kirua and Sapphire and says “Konichiwa. *smiles* You two seem to be getting along rather well today.”. Sapphire pouts and says, “It’s because Kirua was ignoring me this morning and is making up for it now, *turns to Kirua with a demonic face* right, Ki-ru-a?”. Kirua in fear quickly nods his head up and down. The old lady then starts to laugh softly. Kirua begins to chuckle in nervousness with sweat drops on his face. Kirua then realize why he came to the market and shakes his head sideways to remove the fear. Kirua then ask the old lady, “Hey baa-chan. *the old lady lifts her head to look at Kirua* I just noticed…. *he uses his right index finger and a sparkle in his eyes* that those potatoes are the finest I have ever seen. I must have them.”. The old lady smirks and says, “Hahaha, As expected of Kirua-kun. Your eyes for great quality has not decreased. *The old lady does a backflip summersault to the counter and lands on her feet. Now with fire in her eyes and a raised fists* Yes, these potatoes were grown in the fields of Hajima. They were safely stored to preserve all it delicacy. *crosses her arms together* They are the best potatoes that can be purchased.” The old lady and Kirua start to burst out saying “HA HA HA HA!”. Sapphire comes in between them and unmotivated says, “Hey, are you just going to admire them or buy them. Don‘t forget we have to go to work soon. *Kirua with a surprised face* YOU FORGOT DIDN‘T YOU!!”. Kirua then is seen connecting his two index fingers and pulling them apart intravenously while saying “No. I had it in mind I‘m just trying to have some fun before work.”. Sapphire then in a low voice with a disappointed tone says to Kirua, “So you did forget. *Kirua‘s places his head down in depression and Sapphire sighs* Honestly Kirua, You are the one that reminded me of working today. How could you forget *Kirua is now in a corner drawing a circle on the ground with a dark cloud over his head*.” Seriously, Kirua. There is a limit on how laid back a person can be *Sapphire is then seen paying the old lady for the bag of potatoes she is currently holding*. Sapphire then goes to the corner and grabs Kirua by the back collar, and drags his emotionless, white body out of the store. When Sapphire walks out, she turns back and smiles and says “Have a good day, Baa-chan. See ya later.” Kirua slowly lifts his arm and waves at the old lady, like a zombie says, “See ya Baa-chan.”. The old lady sees them off and says, “*smiles* Take care now you two.”. It is then seen the old lady looking at them as they walk off down the road. Sapphire is still dragging his ghost of a body down the road and enthusiastically raises her left fist in the air and says, “Knock it off already Kirua. We still have work to do, Yeah!”. Kirua un-enthusiastically with his depressed look slowly lifts his fist up and say, “Yeah”. Sapphire annoyed by his attitude is then seen summoning her Blue Love Mallet v2. She then let’s go of Kirua’s back collar and his upper body now falling to the ground. As his body is falling, Sapphire takes a golfer’s position and swings while angrily yells out, “I said cheer up, Kirua!” Kirua is sent flying and a sparkle shines in the area in where Kirua is sent. Scene then goes black and Sapphire giggling is heard as it goes black.

Scene transcends to the outer entrance of Just Heavenly. Just Heavenly outer appearance is white and pink colored walls. Two white pillars by the main entrance with the design white of clouds. All through the inner walls have pictures and designs matching that of harps, wings, angels, etc. The employee entrance is set by the right side of the building in the alley. Kirua and Sapphire are seen walking from the right side from the main entrance. Sapphire is seen hugging onto Kirua’s left arm. Kirua is holding the bag of potatoes in hiss right hand. Kirua looks at Sapphire and tells Sapphire, “We are almost at work already.”. Sapphire responds happily, “Yeah, so?”. Kirua responds “You do have to let go of my arm in order to work.”. Sapphire smiling responds, “I don’t want to.”. Sapphire then places a stronger grip on Kirua’s arm, frown and in her thoughts say, “I don’t want to let go. Especially today. You idiot.”. Kirua notices her silence and the frown she had set on her face. He then looks forward, “Ok, I understand. We are still early so we can stay out for a while longer.”. Sapphire then looks up and does the peace sign “Victory! Yeah!*laughs*”. Kirua replies happily, “Hai. Hai. Lets take a seat then.” At that moment, Asuki appears and runs towards them without slowing down. She is heard running and is screaming “Sa-phi-re!!”. She runs by them, kidnaps Sapphire and runs in by the employee entrance leaving a dust trail behind. As Kirua hears the door being slammed shut, he then realizes that Sapphire is missing. Kirua laughs and says in a positive view, “That‘s Asuki for you. Filled with energy all the time.”. He looks at the bag of potatoes and in his thoughts say, “So much for that plan. We will have to do it later then”.

Now inside the store are Asuki and Sapphire at the female locker room. Asuki is breathing heavily and place a thumbs up to Sapphire and happily says “Got here, just in time. Look Sapphire *shows Sapphire a stopwatch* it’s a new record.”. Sapphire with an evil smile looks at Asuki and with an irritated tone says “That‘s great. But… WHY DID YOU HAVE TO DRAG ME TOO!”. Asuki with a smiling face and closed eyes says “Because you were going to be late.”. Sapphire looks at the clock and responds “There is ten minutes left. How could I be late.”. Asuki looks at her watch and then says, “Woops. Gomen. I forgot that I set my watch ten minutes forward so I can see if I can beat my previous record by making myself believe I was late.” Asuki then places her right knuckle to the to the top of her head and sticks her tongue out. Sapphire sighs and walks to her locker and softly says, “Just when I was going to spend some alone time with Kirua”. Asuki now with a shocked face then is seen bowing down over and over again saying “Gomena-sai. I assumed you two were already coming to work too. I would have dragged him in too but he would have slowed me down.” Sapphire is seen undressing and changing to her work uniform. The work uniform for the waitresses consist of: a white dress with white puff clouds on both shoulders, a red belt, white slippers, 2 small wings on her back, a harp as a pad for the orders and a gold halo over their head. As she dresses to her work uniform she forgivingly tell Asuki “Don’t worry about it. Its probably better off since work would had just gotten in the way *Sapphire now fully dressed and normally closes her locker shut* Now let‘s go out there and work our hardest.” Asuki is now fully dressed as well and yells out “Yeah! *jumps on Sapphire* let‘s GO!!”.

Kirua is now seen in the male locker room. He is just finishing changing to his work uniform. His work uniform consists of a gold halo, a white dress shirt with a black vest, and a black dress pants and indoor black shoes. As he shuts his locker door shuts, a girl with a female work uniform enters the room while doing a ballerina twirl and says “Kirua-kun. Are you ready for today‘s shift, Po~”. Time freezes and Kirua begins to narrate “That‘s our boss, Rai Nagizaki. Rai is also the head chef here in Just Heavenly. He tends to be overly happy about the personal lives and job. You didn’t hear wrong, its true, Rai is a guy. Though he doesn’t much like it.”. Kirua says “Hai, Rai-kun”. Rai leaps in front of Kirua, places his index finger in front of Kirua’s face and moves it left and right three times. Then Rai retracts her finger and in a girly tone says, “Kirua-kun, how many times have I told u to just call me Rai-san, Ba-ka. *Start twirling like a ballerina* I am a majestic lady and expect to be treated as such. *Has a demonic face and pulls out a sword sheath* Right, Ki-Ru-a-kun?” Kirua unaffected by the threat just sighs and walks towards the door, “Hai, Hai Rai-san. *smiles* I‘m heading to the kitchen now.” Kirua closes the door and Rai just stands there, places his right hand on his right cheek and left hand on right elbow and says “oh, oh. Today will surely be interesting *Leaps towards the door in slow motion* I get to work with the happy Kirua *twirls and creates a mini tornado that opens the doors, goes through it and closes it* Wait Kirua-kun, don’t you know its rude to leave a lady by herself.” Work then began. It was a snapshot and snapshot of each character. One of Sapphire serving, another of Asuki taking an order. In the kitchen was Kirua cooking while laughing and Rai just supervising everyone while smiling. The night continued until it finally was over. Kirua and Sapphire are then seen bowing to Rai and both say “Have a good night Rai-san.” Rai with her female personality responds happily “You too. Thank you for your help tonight. Both of you take care now.”. Kirua and Sapphire then walked out the door and left.

Once again, Sapphire is holding onto Kirua’s left arm while Kirua is holding the bag of potatoes. They are quietly walking and Kirua stops to look at the a park on his right side. Sapphire looks curiously at the park entrance and then at Kirua’s face (Kirua’s face is that of determination). Kirua then looks at Sapphire with a smile and say “Shall we sit down for a while.”. Sapphire surprised but happily nods her head to say yes. They walk to the nearest bench. Sapphire is then separated from Kirua’s arm and is nervously sitting next to him. Kirua places the bag of potatoes and starts looking at the sky and tired says “hmmm, What a day. *stare at Sapphire* right, Sapphire?” Sapphire with her hands on her legs and looking down depressed, says “Yeah, it was.”. Sapphire then begins to think, “Did he really forget? *grips skirt* Does he really not remember what today is?”. Kirua notices her grip on her skirt and worried ask her “Is something wrong, Sapphire? You have been acting a bit strange today.”. Sapphire snaps out of her thoughts but with a sad look on her face and responds “Isn‘t there something that you are forgetting today? Anything important?”. Kirua confused responds, “I don’t think so. Am I forgetting something… *Kirua shows a surprised face and Sapphire stands up and becomes enthusiastic awaiting a response* Nothing comes to mind. Sapphire now is annoyed, and reaches into her schoolbag and reaches for a small gift bag. As the gift bag is thrown at Kirua, a pair of blue gloves inside the bag fall out. Sapphire begins to cry and yells out “Idiot! Idiot, idiot, idiot” She attempts to run away from Kirua, but Kirua stands up and grabs her by her left wrist with his right hand. Sapphire annoyed yells out, “Let me go”. Kirua not letting her go, Sapphire turns around to look at him and Kirua kisses her on the forehead. Sapphire is now shocked on Kirua doing that. Once Kirua finish giving Sapphire the kiss, he takes his left hand and reaches for the bag of potatoes. His hand is then seen pulling out a little black box which he gives to Sapphire. Kirua now lets go of her wrist and takes one step back. Sapphire attempting to stop crying, without much success open the box. It is a pink hearted charm that goes along with her necklace. Kirua now smiling and looks at sapphire and says “Happy 4th year anniversary, Sapphire. I told you I didn’t forget anything. Though I’m sorry it was late. I finished it today at lunch and had it hidden from you, so I gave to baa-chan till we came to pick it up *pouts* But then u sent me flying before I could give it to you.” As Kirua was explaining, Sapphire is crying with a smile on her face and holding the charm and in her thoughts saying “I knew he couldn’t have forgotten *stares at Kirua* There would be no way he would forget since he promised me he would always be by my side. Though he‘s not ready for commitment I will wait.” Sapphire jumps at Kirua and in the air says “Kirua, I LOVE YOU!” and tackles him to the ground. Sapphire then starts to kiss in the cheeks and hugging him. Kirua with a shy tone saying, “I‘m glad you enjoy it but can you get off me. We cant do this in public.” Sapphire continuing and says happily, “No way. You are mine Kirua.” Scene moves to the bench where the glove is laying with the heart charm. Sapphire soon stands up and Kirua nor with a sense of relief. He looks at Sapphire and notices that she has her Blue Love Mallet v2 already out. Sapphire looks at Kirua demonically and does a tennis style swing and yells “DON’T YOU *slams him with the hammer* MAKE ME FEEL WORRIED AGAIN!”. Kirua now off in the air and yells out “I’M SOOORRYYY!!”. Kirua now seen as a sparkle in the sky and Sapphire is seen smiling and says “A perfect ending to a perfect day *giggles*”.

END OF CHAPTER 1


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I would love to write another loooooooooooooooooooooong comment on it, but I am scared u'll get bored and fall asleep so I'll keep it short

I really believe this is a great begining to an anime. I think its really drawing and amazing. I loved your details (like I said before ) I think you have created an unique and exceptional world with your words. The personality of your characters (how not similar they are to the always perfect characters from books and how they are like real ppl with supernatural powers and........... with the sense of humor I am so familiar with )

Like I told u before I didnt know you were this talented but I am glad now I know... pls keep writing
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it's like a film. is this supposed to be like a transcript?? i's great. i really like the unique layout of your writing since it creates strong images in my head. love it. great start. can't wait till next chapter!!

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xxuseless-bulletsxx wrote:

it's like a film. is this supposed to be like a transcript?? i's great. i really like the unique layout of your writing since it creates strong images in my head. love it. great start. can't wait till next chapter!!



Exactly. since i'm unable to draw and all my friends who are expert in drawing are occupied, the only thing i can do is write the script for this manga/anime. Glad You enjoyed it . I already started on the 2nd chapter, expect it soon.

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wows!! im soo loaded with kool info!! XD lyke elanra-chan said, dis looks lyke a anime 2 me instead of a manga. nd lyke useless-bullets said, it really really created strong images in my head. when i was reading dis story, in my mind, ii can visualize exactly wat happened X3 overall, a really really great nd unique story dat somehow kinda reminds me of tokyo mew mew nd dis zodiac detective girl (i 4got da name^-^') :]
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lilpurplepanda wrote:

wows!! im soo loaded with kool info!! XD lyke elanra-chan said, dis looks lyke a anime 2 me instead of a manga. nd lyke useless-bullets said, it really really created strong images in my head. when i was reading dis story, in my mind, ii can visualize exactly wat happened X3 overall, a really really great nd unique story dat somehow kinda reminds me of tokyo mew mew nd dis zodiac detective girl (i 4got da name^-^') :]


it is practically an anime. i just say manga/anime cause i'm looking for someone who may be able to draw it. I thank you for ur comment. Hope that you read the upcoming chapter i'm currently writing for it
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lilpurplepanda wrote:

wows!! im soo loaded with kool info!! XD lyke elanra-chan said, dis looks lyke a anime 2 me instead of a manga. nd lyke useless-bullets said, it really really created strong images in my head. when i was reading dis story, in my mind, ii can visualize exactly wat happened X3 overall, a really really great nd unique story dat somehow kinda reminds me of tokyo mew mew nd dis zodiac detective girl (i 4got da name^-^') :]


it is practically an anime. i just say manga/anime cause i'm looking for someone who may be able to draw it. I thank you for ur comment. Hope that you read the upcoming chapter i'm currently writing for it


ohs i c^-^ ur welcome!! :] lolz whenever u post it, i'll read it X3
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Here's the second chapter for my anime.

The Normal and Abnormal

The sounds of swords are clashing. The voice of a man is heard yelling “Attack. We have to get all pedestrians out of here. Hurry we have no time.” The man is then seen sprouting white wings and heads up to the air. Explosions occurring in the surrounding and the view is clouded by a dark smoke cloud in the front view. A black shadow appears in front of the person viewing the scene. The view is seen being shaken from fear just looking above at the shadows red demonic glowing eyes. The man with the white wings comes flying in from the left side and pushes the shadow away. Five feet away from the viewer, the shadow is the seen being slashed by the man with white wings. The man faces towards the person viewing and withdraws his sword. The man with wings walks towards the viewer. The view is shifted toward the shadowed face of the man. The man’s face was now looking at the viewer. He stood there looking at the viewer and says, “What are you doing here? You shouldn’t be here.” The viewer speaks and is heard to be a younger voice of Kirua in a panicked state saying, “I need to find her. I said I would protect her.”. The man with white wings calmly responds, “I don’t care about that *turns around* Get out of here now. I will take care of the rest.” The man with white wings flaps his wings and flies off. The young Kirua teeth are seen grinding and his right hand is tightening to the point that blood is seen dripping out. He faces straight at the battleground and in his thoughts says “There‘s no way I can just abandon her now.”. The young Kirua is seen running towards the battlefield. Dodging explosions and evading demonic red blast from the shadows. He then notices an object falling from the sky. It was another shadow with armor and is then seen crashing in front of Kirua causing an earthquake. Cracks on the ground are seen from the crater reaching the bottom of young Kirua’s feet. A crater then opens up and the young Kirua is seen falling while extending his left arm upward.

A hard thump is heard while viewing the front view of Kirua and Sapphire’s home. Their house is a white walled, red roofed house with a small garden in the front and a sakura tree popping out from the back right corner. Kirua is seen to have fallen off his bed and head landed onto the floor. He is seen with a white undershirt and blue shorts. Kirua soon stands up and is rubbing his head with his left hand. He stops rubbing his head and looks at his right palm and in his thoughts says, “I can’t believe I had another dream like that. I am starting to have a bad feeling about this.”. The scene transcends to Kirua and Sapphire, in their school uniform, sitting down eating their breakfast consisting of steamed rice, miso soup and fried fish. Sapphire is happily eating her breakfast and saying, “I can’t wait till next school year. Wouldn’t it be awesome if we were in the same class? Right Kirua?” Kirua worried is slowly eating and responds with a depressed nod. Sapphire walks towards Kirua and places her forehead on his and says, “Well, you don’t have a fever so that’s not it. *returns to her seat* Well Kirua, do I have to force it out of you or are you going to tell me what’s wrong.” Kirua places his chopsticks down and looks at Sapphire at her eyes. With a serious tone he says, “I had that dream again.” Sapphire shocked quickly stands up, places both hands on the table, and says, “Are you serious, Kirua? Doesn’t that mean *Kirua nods his head to say yes*”. Sapphire now calmly sits back down, shocked places her head down, and begins to grip her skirt. While she is looking down, Kirua then with a determined face responds, “This is where it begins again. I hope you will be by my side Sapphire *smiles*”. Sapphire looks at Kirua eyes (which are shining with determination) and she happily responds “You idiot… Of course I will remain by your side through it all *smiles*”. They both then continue eating their breakfast and continue on the conversation with Sapphire asking “Kirua you didn’t answer yet. Wouldn’t it be great if we were in the same class next year?” Kirua, with an unemotional tone says, “Yeah, it would be. *bites on fried fish*”. Sapphire is already seen with her Blue Love Mallet v2 in her hands *Kirua just realized the Blue Love Mallet v2* and loudly says, “If that’s the case *Kirua begins to panic* ACT MORE EXCITED!” Kirua is seen flying making a hole in the roof and going in a 75-degree angle in which he soon is seen as a sparkling light.

Kirua and Sapphire are now seen walking to school (Kirua on the right and Sapphire on the left). Kirua is seen with whites bandages wrapped around his forehead. Sapphire with an innocent face and upper body leaned forward while looking at Kirua. Sapphire just looking at Kirua saying “Come on Kirua. How many times do I have to apologize?” Kirua looking away just angrily says “There‘s nothing you can say that can make up for hitting me today.”. Sapphire then holds her breath until her cheeks pop out and then says, “That’s not fair Kirua. It’s not like it was different from any other time *curious face* What exactly happened when u landed?” Kirua just freezes in his footsteps a thought cloud pops out of his head. In the thought cloud, is seen Kirua flying in the air and then crashing to the left wall of a house. Kirua rises from the wreck he just caused and witness Baa-Chan walk in with a towel saying “ooh, if it isn’t young Kirua-kun *laughs and towels begin to fall off*”. In the thought cloud all that is heard is Kirua yelling “Isaiah!” and Kirua‘s whole body shakes of Goosebumps. The thought cloud disappears and Kirua places his right arm and places his hand on the wall on their right side. While touching the wall, a purple aura of depression is surrounding him and in a depressed tone just says, “I wish I was never born.” Hasuma is now seen slowly walking waving with his eyes closed saying “Good morning Kirua-kun, Sapphire-san.” He then stands next to Sapphire and notices Sapphire looking at Kirua depressed on the wall. Hasuma now curious and looking at Kirua says “Hey Sapphire-san.” Sapphire then responds still looking at the depressed Kirua by saying “What is it Hasuma-kun?” Hasuma still looking at Kirua says, “So what happened to him?” Sapphire now starts to explain it to Hasuma while also a vivid picture, in the form of elementary school drawing, coming from a thought bubble and says, “Well, *drawing of them eating breakfast in thought bubble*first we were having breakfast at our tables. *drawing of them talking*Then we were talking. I asked him a question and he answered it unenthusiastically. *drawing of sapphire summoning Blue Love Mallet v2*It was then that I pulled out my Blue Love Mallet v2 and *drawing of Sapphire swinging and hitting Kirua* took a swing. *drawing of Kirua being hit to the air* He then flew and the rest is unknown.” Hasuma now is nodding his head with his arms crossed and says, “I understand now. However, it doesn’t seem to be any different than usual. *starts walking towards Kirua and looks back at Sapphire* I’m just going to ask him what happened.” Sapphire places both hand on the back of her head, closes her eyes and looks to the right and says, “You can try but *Kirua is seen whispering something to Hasuma* he wouldn’t tell me. So I don’t think… *Sapphire now looks towards Kirua and Hasuma and drop her Jaw*” Hasuma is now to the left of Kirua, seen depressed with his right hand on the wall and purple depressed aura saying “I wish I was never born.”. After Hasuma speaks, Kirua still depressed says, “If I was reborn, I would be a sea cucumber.” Sapphire annoyed says, “You too Hasuma!? *looks away and begins walking in the opposite direction* Seriously, I wonder what goes on between both you head sometimes.” Kirua and Hasuma are seen not moving at all and a breeze of wind appears blowing leaves behind them.

The scene then transcends to the outer view of the school. Sapphire is seen arriving from the left side of the school gate. Asuki then comes from behind and tackle hugs Sapphire causing Sapphire to lose her balance momentarily but quickly regained. Asuki hyperactively says, “Good morning Sapphire-san. How much have I missed your cheery smile.” Sapphire is trying to separate from Asuki saying “Yes. I get it Asuki but can u get off me please.” Asuki quickly gets off Sapphire, places her right knuckle on the top of her head and stick out her tongue. Asuki then innocently says, “Sorry! *chuckles* I got too excited once I saw you walking.” Sapphire then places both hands on her waists and says, “*sigh* Really Asuki-san, you have to try to restrain yourself on that. *smile* Thank you though for worrying about me.” Asuki grabs Sapphire’s left arm and drags her to the school entrance while saying, “No need to be thanking me. Now lets hurry before the bell goes off. I have some news I have to tell you” The scene then transcends to the inner entrance of the school by the shoe locker area. Sapphire is seen closing her shoe locker door. As she closed her locker door, she looks at Asuki with a surprised face and says, “What do u mean Hisokara Academy was attacked.” Asuki quickly places her left hand over Sapphire and places her right index finger in front of her mouth saying “shhhhh, not that many people are aware of this *Sapphire nods her head in agreement and Asuki removes her hands and now has her arms crossed* Yes, not only Hisokara, but also Yokui and Misaoka. Its unknown but their facility were pretty damaged and several of their students are in the hospitals. I don’t want people freaking out if they knew about this. Since all students who witnessed it are in the hospitals, nothing is known.” Sapphire with a shocked face trembling and looking at the floor in now thinking, “It can‘t be. Then that means that Kirua’s premonition was right. More violence is going to arise again.” Asuki places her left hand on Sapphire’s right shoulder and with a concerned face and tone says, “Sapphire-san, Are you okay?” Sapphire quickly recovers and says “Yeah I‘m fine *smiles* that news was just hard to believe.” Asuki then says, “I know what you mean. I couldn’t believe it when I heard about it either. *looks towards the hallway and raises her right fist* Now lets forget about this and get on with our day *walks off*.” Sapphire slowly follows Asuki. She then stops and glances to the sky on her right and thinks to herself, “I guess this faith just can‘t be avoided that easily.” The scene transcends zooming out of Sapphire looking at the sky.

The scene is transcended to the inside of class 1-A. Asuki is seen talking to two female companions next to Kirua’s seat. The door is slide open and Kirua and Hasuma are seen entering while grasping for air. Kirua (now inside the room) looks towards his left onto Hasuma (also inside the room), raised his right thumbs up and said, “Told you we could make it with the shortcut.” Hasuma then starts yelling, “You nearly got us killed!*thought bubble appears representing Hasuma‘s speech* We were attacked by dogs. Then thugs. Then dogs and thugs. Sometimes I really wonder why I‘m friends with you.” Kirua with his eyes closed and flapping his hands up and down, trying to calm down Hasuma, says, “Forget about the details *turns around and crosses his arms* it’s the conclusion that we should be focusing on. And here we are *nods head*.” Hasuma just sighs and says, “I see this is pointless I’m grabbing a seat *Heads over to his seat and notices Asuki* Good morning Asuki-san.” Asuki cheerfully responds, “Good morning Hasuma-kun *turns to Kirua (who is walking to his seat)* Good morning Kirua-kun”. Kirua happily respond, “Good morning Asuki-san.” Asuki with a happy curious face looks at Kirua and says, “You seem different Kirua-kun. I haven’t seen you this hyper in a while.” Kirua opens his mouth and before he could speak Hasuma pop up in between them and says, “I could bring this matter into perspective.” Scene turns black and a spotlight shines on the now dressed up Hasuma and a dressed up Asuki with the bed behind them. Asuki now dressed up as Sapphire says “*staring at the dressed up Hasuma* Kirua I want you to…” Hasuma places his right hand on the dressed up Asuki’s left shoulder and romantically says “I understand Sapphire.” Asuki looking into Hasuma’s eyes, “Oh Kirua *drawing near to Hasuma‘s face*.” Hasuma also drawing near to Asuki’s face says, “Sapphire”. Then the bed begins to shake sideways and a man pops out and comes in between Hasuma and Asuki now back to their regular clothing. The man says, “I can‘t allow this type of action to go on *points at Asuki* especially from you Asuki-chan.” Scene is just seen him giving off a speech to Asuki and Kirua narrates over him by saying, “That‘s Satou Ausiki. He is the school class president and our sempai. He is in class 2-A and is extremely popular with the women. Though he is ignorant, so he probably hasn‘t noticed it.” Satou is still pointing at Asuki and saying “and that‘s why those types of behavior should not be allowed.”. Asuki is seen sitting on her legs and rubbing the back of her head with her land saying “Sorry Satou-sempai. I guess carried away a bit. It won‘t happen again.” Satou nods his head in approval and says “Now everyone *A circular platform appears under his feet* I hope you learn from this matter *the platform reveals to be an elevator and he is now, slowly, being brought down to the ground*. Have a wonderful day and keep up the great work *disappeared and path has been blocked*.” Kirua and Hasuma are their with their jaws dropped and Kirua says “Do you think that‘s where all the funding is going to.”. Hasuma responds, “If it is, then that would explain why I could never find him to request new items for the track team.”

The bell goes off and everyone is grabbing their seat. The front door is slide opened and Ousuke-sensei walks in professionally. He slowly walks towards the board; he turns his back on his students and begins to write something on the board. He turns to the students and the writing on the board says, “Tackle it with the power of YOUTH.” He slaps the board while looking at the class. A silver aura is surrounding him and he begins to say, “Now everyone… class exams are coming up and it appears to be that the other classes think they can beat us. Now, IS THAT TRUE? *The whole class yells NO! and he raises both is open hands in the air* ARE WE GOING TO PROVE THEM WRONG? *the whole class yells YES! And he places his left hand down and keeps his right fist up* NOW I WANT YOU ALL TO TACKLE IT WITH THE POWER OF YOUTH*The whole class stands up from their seat with a pose of cheering say YES!* NOW THEN… Let me take roll *the whole class falls to the floor of disappointment*.” Hasuma starts staring at Kirua at the floor laughing with other classmates. He just stares at him and places a face of curiosity.

Lunch time has arrived and Asuki just begins stretching while sitting. Hasuma lays out his arms on the desk, places his head on the desk and says, “Finally. I‘m so hungry, I thought for a moment I wouldn’t make it.” Asuki walks over to Hasuma, slaps him on his back and says, “Come on Hasuma. You always exaggerate when it comes to lunch.” Hasuma rises and begins to sit straight with his right elbow on the table and looking at Asuki saying, “I can’t help it. It’s the truth. I see everything fading before my eyes.” Asuki then sighs and says “I bet you do *notices Kirua opening the front door and looks at him* Hey Kirua-kun, come have lunch with us.” Kirua looks back at Asuki and Hasuma, places his right hand in front of his face and then says “Sorry guys. I promised Sapphire I would have lunch with her alone today.” Sapphire is then seen already hugging Kirua’s left arm and innocently saying, “Come on Kirua. Hurry *they both leave and door remain open*”. Asuki places her hands on her waists, looking at the door and she says, “Well it seems we we’ve abandoned today Hasuma-kun.” Hasuma is seen already eating his bento and Asuki punches him in the head and says, “At least wait till I sit down. You idiot.”

Scene moves to Kirua and Sapphire are seen sitting on a bench. Kirua finishes up first, places his chopsticks on top and walks towards the caged fence staring at the town. Kirua just looks at the town and says, “So, they have started to make a move.” Sapphire nods her head in approval; she places her chopsticks on top of her bento, stands up and says, “According to what Asuki told me, the only logical answer is that some demons have come. *places her right hand on her right cheek and left hand on right elbow* What I don’t understand is why I attack innocent people. Would they be looking for something?” Kirua is seen placing his left hand on the fence and gripping it. Kirua then says, “Its not a something, but a someone. *Turns over to Sapphire and looks in her eyes* I don’t know how, but I can feel it. Whoever this demon, he’s looking for someone.” Sapphire then walks to the gate, looks at the city and says “*wind blows causing Sapphires hair to swift off to the left* Then the real question is *wind stops* What is that demon looking for and why here?” Kirua looks out to the city again with his arms crossed and says, “The truth is I have no clue on what the demons think. But one thing is certain *Grins his teeth, lowers his arm and makes his hands into tight fists* I WILL STOP THEM!” Sapphire places her right hand onto his left fists and gently says “Don‘t forget… *Kirua looks at Sapphire‘s face* I will be here to help you too. You don’t have to face them alone. Not anymore.” Kirua lowers his head facing the ground and says, “Thanks Sapphire. That means a lot *Raises his head and looks at Sapphire with a smile* I will be counting on your help then.” Sapphire with a smile and eyes closed says “You got it *hugs his left arm* Well, our lunch time isn’t over yet. So what do we do now?” Kirua lies down on the floor, stares up to the sky and calmly says, “We take it easy now. Just relax and enjoy the beauty surrounding us *smiles*.” Sapphire giggles, holds her skirt as she sit down, lays down to the left of Kirua and says, “You do know that you are way too laid back. That might get you killed one of these days. *Kirua with a smirk, nods his head in approval* As long as you understand. *Draws her body closer to Kirua‘s body* But you are right, the sky is always a beautiful sight.”. Kirua still looking up says, “If you think about it, that’s how we managed to get along.” Sapphire looks at Kirua looking at the sky and says, “Don’t remind me.” They both start to mildly laugh (for 4 seconds) and then remain quiet looking at the sky. The camera then zooms out from them and screen slowly begins to fade.

The scene is now inside the classroom of class 1-A. Kirua is seen, with his right hand on his right cheek and right elbow on the desk, next to an opened book, looking out the window. The camera zooms to his face and begins to think. In Kirua’s thoughts, he says, “hmmm, It‘s been a while since I had to fight. But I get the feeling that its going to be more complex than the previous encounters. *Looks at his left hand and makes his hand into a fist* I just hope I can stop them all so that event doesn‘t occur again.”. The teacher (wearing a navy blue suit and dress pants, white undershirt, a blue tie, and glasses) slams his left hand onto the boards and says, “Kirua-kun! Please answer the mathematical question on the board. *now begins to think and places a smirk on his face* Let see how you fend off against this. *crosses arms* This is one of the toughest university level equation. You will not mock me any longer, Hahahaha.”. Kirua notices he has been talked to and slowly stands up uninterested. He looks straight at the boards for about 20 seconds. The teacher slowly grin believing that he had finally succeeded. Kirua then places a smirk on his face and says “By taking the derivative of that 2x to the 4th power and…*long mathematical explanation* the answer would come to be that of 3x to the third power minus 17.”. The teacher’s jaw drops the toward floor in amazement and says in his head “I can‘t believe he managed to figure this out. *Kirua slowly sits down and begins looking out the window again* Who or what exactly is this kid?”. Everyone then begins to look at Kirua in admiration. Asuki is then seen staring at Kirua and looks over to Hasuma’s desk to see him sleeping and drooling on his desk. Asuki throws an eraser onto Hasuma’s head. That proved ineffective, she then throws several paper balls onto him. Hasuma still remains asleep. The teacher turns his back onto the students and now irritated, Asuki grabs one of her books and with fire in her eyes launches the ball like a torpedo smacking Hasuma’s head and waking him up. Hasuma immediately stands up saying “ooooow, who did that! *the teacher turns around and sees everyone sitting quietly and turns back around*”. Hasuma then looks at Asuki and Asuki looks away from Hasuma and just whistles. Hasuma lays on his desk in disappointment and says, “I was having such a good dream to *begins fantasizing* me with 5 beautiful girls in bikini in an abandoned island *chuckles*” The teacher then appears behind Hasuma and does a fake cough to catch his attention. Hasuma stops fantasizing and slowly shifts his head toward the teacher (with a dark atmosphere surrounding him) behind him. The teacher places his hand on Hasuma’s shoulder and says “You know the punishment for not paying attention in my class, right? Either answer the question or you know what.”. Hasuma looks at the board, smiles and is seen opening his mouth. He is then seen with a bucket on his head and both his hands, filled with water in the hallway. The teacher then says, “If you cant answer the question correctly then you will have to be punished in an fashionable manner *walks back into the classroom and closes the door*”. Hasuma is then seen struggling with them soon after and almost having to sneeze. He manages to hold it in, though now he is depressed at what the situation has become.

Not long after, Sapphire rushes in opening the back door of class 1-A with a panicked face and yells out “KIRUAAAAA!!”. Kirua then snap out of daydreaming and looks at Sapphire and says “What!! I can‘t sense him”. As he finished talking a earthquake occurs and a big explosion seemed to have occurred outside. Hasuma is heard yelling and the sound of water splashing is heard. An announcement of evacuation is then heard of by the students. Near the origin of the explosion, there are several students around it trying to get near it. Sapphire nods her head to Kirua and grabs Asuki and tells her “We have to help evacuate. *Asuki strongly agrees* Let‘s go! *both run off*” Kirua is then seeing running off in the opposite direction. Hasuma is seen looking at Kirua in a confused manner and begins to secretly follow him. Sapphire and Asuki are seen helping others evacuate and keeping them in an orderly fashion.. Satou is also seen around the main school gate assisting in the evacuation.

The scene transcends back to the crash site in which the smoke is starting to clear up. A shadowy figure is seen standing up with a red glare from its eyes looking at the students. Kirua is seen arriving to the scene and Hasuma 2 feet behind him. Kirua looks at Hasuma and irritated says, “What are u doing here? This place is dangerous! You have to get out of here right now!” Hasuma looks angry and says, “Listen to me, I don‘t take orders from you! Anything you can do, I can handle it as well. So I‘m staying whether you like it or not!”. Kirua grabs Hasuma shirt with his right hand and raises his hand upward in anger and says, “Listen to me Hasuma! *stare at Hasuma eyes fiercely* This isn‘t the time to be arguing *A dark cloud begins to slowly cloud over the school area* You have no idea what is going to happen”. The dark cloud has engulfed the school area till near the school gate. The dark cloud then becomes a solid purple transparent wall. The students begin to touch the wall. Sapphire is seen with hers hands together held up and in her mind saying, “Kirua, please be okay.” A loud roar is heard ripping apart the cloud from the explosion and revealing a demon (with a black snake tattoo on his face, black pants, no shirt, dark wings, and a flaming X tattoo on his front and back). Kirua and Hasuma turn to the sound and begin to run to the demon. The demon slowly walks a few feet and loudly yells, “Aaaaaaaaaaaah! *A strong gravitational force is unleashed sending others flying towards the walls* My name is XOL *points left thumb towards himself* and I‘m here to kill all of you.” About 30 students are seen standing and are angrily yelling “What do you mean kill us. You really think that you can beat all of us *seen grabbing equipments from sport storage and weapons from surroundings.*” Hasuma looks at Kirua standing on his left and says “Hey Kirua, is that guy really serious about killing us all.” Kirua with a serious face says, “Most probably. He is the reason why I was asking you to get out of here.”. XOL looks at everyone and with a cocky sense says, “Tell you what, I have a proposition. If any of you can last ten minutes with me, then I will undoubtedly surrender and be at your mercy *places a smirk on his face* Though it will all be over in ten seconds”. All the other students angrily yell, “Ten minutes? You bastard, you won‘t even last two minutes with all of us *loudly yell*”. Kirua grinds his teeth together then slowly walks towards the area where the other students are while followed by Hasuma and says to him, “Now that it has come to it. You have to stay. But before this fight I need to tell you one thing just in case something happens.” The scene is moved towards XOL who summons a winged bat with a clock and camera on its chest and launches it in the air. Once the bat has risen in the air, A screen pops to the outside people showing them the inside of the purple wall. XOL the says, “Let‘s Begin!!”. The timer then starts and all the student rush in yelling after XOL. XOL Then yells out “METEORIC BAAAANG!!!” A white flash is seen covering the entire school area. The flash then begins to fade away and XOL is seen to be the only one standing. All students are seen unconscious with a black fist mark on an area of their body from the hit. Hasuma is seen laying face down and Kirua laying face up. Asuki quickly yells out with tears in her eyes and desperately yells out, “Hasuma-kun! Kirua-kun!” Asuki is then seen on her knees covering her eyes with her hands from the crying. Sapphire is seen gripping her shirt and in her mind saying “Come on Kirua. I know you are stronger than that. *begin to shed tears* Please don’t die on me.”. XOL looks at the clock and looks at the bodies and says, “*smirk* not even ten seconds *turns around and begins to walk away* here I thought that this area would be different. I guess I was wrong”. The sound of footsteps are heard and XOL slowly turns around and is punched by Kirua with his right fist on his left cheek. XOL is seen flying towards the wall of the school 30 feet away on the right. XOL rises up in anger and says “WHO DID THAT?!”. Kirua with a cool mysterious voice says, “My name is Kirua and I will be your opponent.”. Everyone outside yells out in a rejoicing manner, “Its Kirua-kun! There is still hope. Kick his ass Kirua-kun. GO KIRUA-KUN!!”. Sapphire wiping the tears off her eyes just in a low voice says, “Kirua, you idiot *sob* making me worry about you. You big idiot.”. XOL walks out of the building wiping dust off himself and says, “*Happily smiles while cracking his knuckles* Well I‘m the 3rd general of La Tumba. Now tell me Kirua-kun. How did you manage to evade Meteoric Bang.”. The scene moves to the body of Hasuma and Kirua’s voice is heard saying, “My friend got in front of me and took the hit for me. *chuckles* He is a real big idiot. Nevertheless, he is a true friend. *scene moves towards Kirua‘s face and with a glare in his eyes* Now I will be the one to beat the crap out of you.”. XOL maniacally begins to laugh and then says, “You think you can beat me the lets see you try, you roach.”. Both release a gravitational force of equal proportions at each other. They both yell loudly and rush towards each other in a combat position. The timer remains at 9:28.

End of Chapter 2

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ok, here goes a post.
my head is loaded with a bunch of information, so, stepping to the world their in was easy. the sentences are simple yet they created a vivid scene inside my head.
i would love to watch this as an anime.
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Thanks for the comment. I figured if its going to be like an anime its best to describe in short and vividly as possible. I have to make up for the fact that i can't draw it
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After almost a year filled with schoolwork, work & procrastination, i have completed the third part. Please leave comments on this since its the first chapter i have done that introduces combat.

The Strong and The Weak

Kirua and XOL silently face against each other. XOL listens to the outside crowd. XOL chuckles and says “so your name is Kirua then. *elevates head looking down at Kirua* I hope you can keep me entertained then, kukuku”. Kirua then faces XOL and says “Then I hope you‘ll be entertained back in hell”. Kirua then rushes towards XOL *5 feet away and Kirua leaps and launches a side kick with his right leg*. XOL blocks it easily with his left arm *Kirua then lands quickly on the ground and crouches and sweeps XOL legs*…*XOL loses his balance*…*Kirua rapidly rotates up to a normal stance and hits XOL with a joined double open-palm fist attack*… *XOL is sent flying further into the building and breaks through the wall causing him to hit the ground once, leap and regains his stance*. XOL looks across the smoke in joy. He looks at Kirua and says “I guess that first hit wasn‘t luck then. This should be fun!” *XOL quickly moves beyond the eyes of anyone to see*. He then appears behind Kirua and says “Now it‘s my turn to… *kicks Kirua up to the air* return…. *punches Kirua to the ground causing him to collide to the ground* the favor *XOL quickly is centering his body to collide with Kirua*….” .Asuki then shouts “KIRUA!! GET UP!!…..*Kirua quickly gets up and dodges and XOL lands leaving a crater*”. They both start at high speed close-combat against each other in the ground. ~Time left 8:49~.

Asuki nervously watches the fight and becomes concerned of Kirua. She then begins to think {I don‘t get it. Why is this happening? Who is this guy? What is La Tumba…. If I remember correctly, that should be Spanish for The Grave. But what does that mean. *looks at the screen* and how is it that Kirua can fight against him so equally…… *looks at Sapphire* Now that I think about it, Sapphire hasn’t been worried about Kirua since they began fighting. Does she know what’s going on?}. *Sapphire notices Asuki staring at her and stares at Asuki* “What‘s wrong?”. Asuki emotionally asks “Aren‘t you worried about Kirua? I mean… *clunches her fist* he is just one guy facing against someone who knocked out all those other guys in just….” *Sapphire interrupts Asuki* “He’ll win. Because it’s Kirua *Sapphire then looks at the screen of the fight* I know he’ll win.” Asuki then calms down and valiantly looks up and shouts to encourage Kirua.

Sapphire is then seen with her fist tightened looking at Kirua in worry. Sapphire then begins to think {Though I say that. I am worried the most. Generals are in a totally different league than those he has fought on his own before. And that guy is the 3rd General}…. ~Shifts to flashback of them in the roof(refer to ch.2)~ Kirua is looking at the sky calmly says “Sapphire, I don‘t want you to be in this fight when this demon shows up”. Sapphire turn to Kirua “What?! Why not? This demon is probably way beyond what you’re used to.” *Wind gently blows on the roof*. Kirua then stand up and says “That’s probably true. But if this fight is brought along at school. People will find out who you really are. Then word will soon get out about your true form. When we became partners I promised you one thing and I tend to keep that promise *Sapphire then blushes and slowly agrees to Kirua*….”. *Kirua pets Sapphire‘s head* Kirua says “Just trust me on this. I always have a backup plan *smiles*”. ~Returns to the present~. {I hope you were right Kirua because of this barrier… *looks concerned* your on your own}

The two warriors are at a stalemate and the ~time is on 7:03~. Kirua and XOL each land a punch on the other sending them both fly in opposite directions. They both regain control of their bodies and quickly land on the ground. Kirua is then surrounded by a green aura and manages to gain a new speed and appears behind XOL and lands a barrage of punches on him. Kirua quickly punches him XOL to the air and leaps up to land another barrage of punches. Kirua charges his fist with a light green aura and kicks XOL to the ground leaving a massive crater. The crowd outside the barrier start yelling of overexcitement. Kirua slowly lands looking at the crater. Asuki looks at Sapphire and yells in excitement “He did it Sapphire. *looks at the screen of the battle* Kirua won against that monster!”. Sapphire staring at the screen in a concerned voice “No…*Asuki looks at Sapphire* it’s not over yet. That guy is hiding something. *Asuki looks at the screen again*”. ~Time is 6:40~. Kirua looks at the crater from afar with a light green glow in his eyes. Kirua says “How long are you planning on laying there?” The crowd outside the barriers are confused at Kirua’s words. They begin chatting saying stuff like “What is Kirua talking about?”, “That guy should be knocked out with the beating Kirua has been giving him”, “I think Kirua is being too paranoid”. Kirua just stares at the crater and says “It’s fine with me if you don‘t get up. Like you said you‘ll surrender once the time is up with someone still standing. *looks annoyed* Though I know that you‘re still holding back on me. Not sure what exactly is your plan with all this” . XOL begins to stand straight and stares at Kirua. XOL stares at Kirua and starts laughing in a sadistic tone says, “HAHAHAHA!. *XOL places his left hand on his face* Oh man I haven‘t had an opponent like you in a while *XOL raises his left arm straight upward* It’s true that I have been holding back *looks at Kirua with a serious face* you wonder why I battle in this manner. *Starts yelling angrily*It’s because no one places a challenge against me. All those I have faced have disappointed me by losing so quickly with just my base power. *Points at Kirua with his right index finger* But you have given me quite a battle till now. But let‘s see how you deal when I power up some more *looks down with his arm still up* It’s a shame I have to end this with the help of my CAP”. *Kirua and Sapphire appear in shock*

*Dark smoke rises from the ground under XOL and the smoke takes shape onto his left hand and arise a black snake*. Asuki confused turned to Sapphire and asked “Sapphire, What is that thing? It looks… it looks like a… snake.” Sapphire turns to Asuki and says “That’s an animal guardian known as a CAP….. There are a series of CAPS spread all around the world and each grant a special ability when combined with someone. Though I am unaware of each CAP and their abilities”. Sapphire then begins thinking {This is bad for Kirua. That demon was already strong enough as it was. Kirua had to release his wind abilities just to land a few blows on him. But if that guy uses a CAP…. *looks concerned* who knows what level of power he will gain in this battle. I knew I had to be in there with him. I have to help somehow *Sapphire then pictures Kirua in the flashback saying “Just trust me on this. I always have a back-up plan *Smile*”*. I don‘t have much of a choice now but to believe in that idiot} *Sapphire slightly smiles and continues looking at the screen*.

The black snake then begins to talk while behind XOL “Well it‘s about time you summoned me. I have been bored out of my mind”. XOL looks back at the black snake and calmly says “Yeah, sorry about that. It‘s pretty hard to find a good opponent these days. But I finally found someone who we can step up against, Zirconia”. Zirconia states “Do you mean that kid?….. *Zirconia starts laughing*… He‘s giving you a hard time? Hahaha. That’s funny”. XOL faces towards Kirua and says “Laugh it up Zirconia, but he is no normal kid…. ”. Zirconia then stops laughing and says “Fine. If you say so”*Zirconia starts fusing with XOL; a dark smoke engulfs XOL’s body* XOL then begins to shout in enjoyment “Well Kirua this is where you will meet your end with the combined force of me and Zirconia.” XOL comes out of with a dark colored necklace with snake eyes on his neck. The crowd outside the barrier scream yelling things like “He hasn‘t changed at all”, “Beat the hell out of him Kirua”. It seems that there is little over 5 minutes left. That’s too much time. Kirua then starts thinking {Shit, I wasn‘t really expecting him to have a CAPS on his side. *Kirua stares at XOL* The question now is what abilities has he gained with fusing with that snake of his. He doesn’t seem to have gotten much stronger, physically wise. But there must be something that he’s hiding. Best for me to take the defensive now *Kirua extends his left hand out with an open palm facing XOL and a fist on his right hand tucked on the side of his stomach*} ~Time left is 5:02~

XOL leaps into a frontal attack against Kirua and yells “I guess I’ll start things out now”. Kirua confused and thinks {why is he going for a frontal attack? He should know that there is no advantage in that. Since he‘s fused now, its best for me to dodge it}. Kirua moves to the left of XOL *XOL counters by rotating his body counterclockwise and kicking Kirua in the stomach sending Kirua flying through two building*. Everyone, including Sapphire, are now shocked at the sudden attack of XOL. Kirua begins to get up again and starts thinking {what the hell was that? I should have dodged that with no fail. I got away from his attack target. How did he managed to get me? I should stay on my guard.}. XOL appears behind Kirua and says “Here you are *Kirua attempts to dodge but is immediately punched by XOL followed up by a barrage of attacks causing Kirua to be knocked outside the building*”. Kirua quickly stands up but XOL is already in front of him. Kirua launches a green-air charged kick but XOL dodges it easily. Kirua begins to speed up and attack from all direction but XOL is easily dodging every hit and Kirua keeps receiving hits. XOL then begins an attack barrage once again and Kirua prepares to block. Kirua is still punched by the appendix and another barrage of attacks is started again by XOL. ~Time left is 3:58~

Asuki is now panicking and shaking Sapphire saying “Sapphire. Why, why, why? Why is Kirua losing now. They were just equal but it looks like Kirua is not even attempting to block. It looks like he is trying to receive the blows for some reason.” *Sapphire looks at Asuki and grabs her hand to have Asuki stop the shaking* “I know your worried. *Sapphire looks at the screen* The truth is Kirua is trying to dodge but that demon doesn’t allow him to do so. So calm down. Kirua will figure something out.”. Sapphire then begins to think {But what kind of ability did that demon gain that the tide of the battle changed by this much?}. Kirua is blown away by a massive punch to the lung area causing him to hit the ground, bounce, hit the ground again and bounce again till he lands facing down on the ground. XOL begins to slowly walks towards Kirua. He then begins talking in a sarcastic disappointed manner saying “Tsk, Tsk Kirua. I was hoping you put up more of a fight. Where is all that charisma you had earlier in our fight? Maybe calling out Zirconia is too much for you to handle…. *XOL reveals a murderous aura* but don‘t worry, I will finish you nice and quickly as a reward for entertaining me earlier, kukuku”. *Kirua slowly begins to stand up and starts thinking* {What the heck is with this guy. Every punch I try to deal him is dodged. Every defensive measures I take, he is a step ahead and still lands a hit. Every counter-measure I take, he counters those as well *Kirua face is stunned by a realization he had concluded*… *stands all the way completely* no it couldn‘t be that he can…}. XOL is now in front of Kirua with an evil smile on his face and says “That‘s right. Good job on being able to identify it. Zirconia allows me to read the minds of my opponents and thus their next move in battle. *strikes a hole in Kirua’s upper left chest with his right arm* Anything you think about, I can read it *XOL pulls out his hand and Kirua is knocked down on the ground*Though I do commend you of having me miss. I was aiming for your heart, but you purposely just twisted your ankle in order to lose your balance and have me miss my target *starts sadistically laughing* You really are a very entertaining opponent. *stops laughing* But I don’t plan on losing *grabs Kirua and launches him in the air and starts attacking him with a barrage of punches and kicks surrounded by a demonic aura*” ~Time left is 1:36~

The crowd outside the barriers are not at a lost. They silently watch Kirua being beaten to a pulp losing all hope. They all begin to shake and cower thinking that XOL is going to attack them next. Sapphire annoyed by all the negative messages shouts out “ SHUT UP!! KIRUA IS NOT GOING TO LOSE. TIME IS ALMOST UP FOR THAT DEMON SO JUST BELIEVE IN KIRUA, LIKE I DO!”. The crowd is surprised to hear Sapphire’s sudden burst, but came to believe in her words. They all calm down and begin to continue viewing Kirua’s battle in hope of his victory. Asuki is surprised at Sapphire’s belief in Kirua. Asuki then notices Sapphire’s hand shaking as she watches Kirua being beaten. Asuki places her hand on top of her right shoulder. Sapphire looks at Asuki. Asuki nods her head in belief that Kirua will win. Sapphire smiles and looks at Kirua’s battle. ~Time left is 1:19~

*XOL knocks Kirua to the ground causing a massive crater and XOL then lands on Kirua from the air at max speed breaking Kirua‘s ribs and 3 other bones*. *Kirua coughs up blood and is left on the ground*. XOL exit’s the crater worn out from the battle. As he exit’s the crater, he says “I have finally won this battle. That‘s another win for us Zirconia. Though that brat did put up quite a fight even after finding out that I could read his mind *stares at his legs* he managed to hit me twice on each leg. Though he must not have much energy since it doesn‘t hurt.” The demon with the timer shouts out to XOL saying “Master XOL, The timer is still going down. He is still conscious *XOL looks at the timer still counting down with 58 seconds remaining* You must eliminate him quickly”. XOL then turns to the crater behind him and Kirua is now floating in mid-air facing XOL barely conscious. Kirua is bleeding on his right arm, the left hole, and face. He stares at XOL with a massive green aura surrounding him “I told you that I would be sending you back to hell. I hope you‘re ready for an attack you can‘t dodge. AIR EDGE!!!! *Kirua releases the massive green aura as massive supersonic blades of air in all directions*”. XOL receives 7 hits and then is able to dodge. XOL gets close to Kirua and launches an energy blast. XOL then shouts out “COMET BANG!!” Kirua attack is stopped and Kirua falls back to the ground and lays there facing the ground motionless. *All those outside the barrier begin to cry seeing Kirua being defeated. Sapphire is seen trying to not cry and holds her hands together hoping Kirua is ok* XOL is now seen bleeding is several areas of his body and gasping for air but smiles and says “You were a formidable opponent. But it‘s still my win in the end like I told you”. XOL turns to the timer and it is revealed that the timer is still counting down with 28 seconds left. XOL is shocked at the time and at the same time in rage that he might lose.

He quickly hurries to Kirua’s location and shouts in anger “WHY WON‘T YOU DIE *XOL reaches for Kirua and accidentally rips his shirt due to pulling with so much force. XOL is in shock to notice that Kirua has on his back a burn that is received by those who are hit by the Meteoric Bang*”. ~Time left is 0:10~ That means that if he received the hit *comes to realization of his deduction*. 9.…Kirua wakes up and loudly shout out “HASUMA NOW!!!”*All those outside the barrier are shocked to see Hasuma still able to move* 8.…Hasuma quickly rises from laying down and says “It‘s about time. That‘s probably the longest 10 minutes ever” 7.….begins running in the opposite direction. 6.*The students outside are cheering for Hasuma to not get caught*…XOL is now in rage and attempts to catch Hasuma 5.… XOL notices he has lost most of his speed 4.… *XOL then realizes why Kirua aimed at his legs earlier in the battle and realized this was his plan all along* 3.…. Hasuma is now running and looking around his surrounding and starts thinking {Now I know why you didn‘t want me to be here. That battle of your‘s was intense} 2.…. Sapphire then starts thinking {So this was your back-up plan. You really are something else Kirua *reveals tears of relief* I‘m glad that your still safe *smiles as she looks at Kirua on the screen*}1.…. XOL attempting to catch Hasuma yells out “NOOOOOOOO!”. ~Time left is 0:00~. The barrier slowly disappears and XOL is now in despair knowing that he has lost.

The other students who were knocked out are now regaining consciousness. One of them begins to ask “What happen?”. Another one wakes up saying “Weren‘t we fighting against someone”. The other students who were outside the barrier quickly go to Kirua’s location avoiding XOL. One of the recently awakening students notices Asuki and asks “What is going on?”. Asuki happily answers saying “Kirua and Hasuma won *smiles.*”. Hasuma is already seen at Kirua’s location. Sapphire goes to Kirua in concern. Sapphire notices that he is unconscious but in critical danger with so many injuries. The other student’s begins to surround Hasuma and ask him a whole bunch of questions relating to how he is ok. Hasuma quickly responds with a childish face says “Oh , about that, actually…”~Shifts to flashback of them two arguing when XOL first appears~(refer to ch.2). Kirua looks at Hasuma and says “ok, if you‘re going to stick around then I will need your help.” Hasuma confused but agrees and asks “Sure. But what exactly is going on”. Kirua answers, “A battle is going to take place here soon and its going to be too tough for anyone to handle. I heard new that there was a demon who has been fighting against students in schools of different area. Though I have noticed from all the reports that he begins every battle by setting a timer and uses a technique that eliminates everybody on the first hit. Hasuma is confused and asks “What? A demon? I think you’re exaggerating too much Kirua.” Kirua with a serious face “believe it or not is your choice but for now I need you to believe me *Kirua nods his head and continues to listen*” I need you to pretend to take the hit. Truthfully, I will be the one to take the hit. But I‘ll need your shirt and pants afterwards”. Hasuma then backs away and nervously says “My shirt?...and pants too? Kirua I didn‘t know you were that way. That would explain why you don‘t do this and that with Sapphire *Kirua emit’s a dark aura* though I‘m flattered I don’t swing that…”. Kirua smack Hasuma on the top of the head leaving a bump on there. Kirua says “It‘s not for that you idiot. Apparently his first attack tends to leave a burn mark wherever they are hit. I need to have the demon to think that I wasn‘t hit. So if I cover for you and then have your shirt, then it will be like I was not armed. I will battle him and when I give you the signal you run as fast as possible in the opposite direction of my voice. You got that” ~returns to present time~ “And that’s pretty much how it was”. Everybody is amazed that he said that so calmly. Sapphire sits by Kirua and is having his head on her lap. Sapphire then begins to think {I should seal up his wounds. As long as I keep in contact with him I should be able to do that much with my powers}. Hasuma then looks towards XOL and shouts “YO, DEMON PERSON!”. The other students notices Hasuma calling XOL and tackle him to the ground saying thing like “What the heck do you think you‘re doing?! Do you want get us killed! He is still able to beat us all up!”. Hasuma then carelessly says “That maybe so but a deal is a deal. He lost and Kirua told me what to make him do since he now surrenders”. XOL is then heard whispering “I haven’t lost. I haven‘t lost, I haven‘t lost, *Stands up and unleashes a dark energy* I HAVEN’T LOST!!! *stares at the students*I WILL KILL YOU ALL!! *maniacally laughs* HAHAHAHA!!” *a gun shot is then heard and bullet lands in the path of XOL and the students*. A voice is then heard “That’s as far as you go convict #4376, XOL *XOL looks to the top of the building and notices several shadow figures* You will be brought down”.

Who are these shadow figures? Are they friends or foe?

End of Chapter 3

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So i managed to finish up early. I guess i have learned to work quicker. Well here"s chapter 4:

The barrier is now gone and the students are now allowed back into their school. But with their hero down for the count and the enemy free to kill who he wants. Who will save the students from this evil menace?

The One and The Many


XOL begin to scream in anger “I HAVEN’T LOST!!! *stares at the students*I WILL KILL YOU ALL!! *maniacally laughs* HAHAHAHA!!”. XOL begin to rush towards the students in a straight path *a gun shot is then heard and bullet lands in the path of XOL and the students causing XOL to stop in his tracks*. A voice is then heard “That’s as far as you go convict #4376, XOL *XOL looks to the top of the building and notices several shadow figures* You will be brought down”.

The students begin to chatter. Muttering words like “Who are those people?”, “Where did they come from?”. XOL angrily and deeper voice ask “Who are you? IDENTIFY YOURSELVES!!!”. The shadowy group then jumps down from the building revealing 12 people. The main leader lands first in a crouched position while holding 2 modified chrome-steeled, Desert Eagle .50 Hardkick Version. He slowly stands up straight and awaits for the rest to land. All the students stare at the mysterious short razor cut blonde-haired boy as he stood there wielding two guns and wearing a black overcoat with a sleeveless black vest and black pants. Sapphire stared at the guy while still attempting to heal Kirua. She begins to think to herself {Who is this guy? He is definitely not someone normal. More importantly who are al of them?}. The rest of them quickly land at the same time revealing 3 girls and 9 guys including himself. The guy then stares at XOL and says with a cold tone “My name is Zero Ruga(razor cut blonde haired boy with black eyes. About 5’9’’ in height. A pretty muscled yet slim body) and I am the captain of the Special Elite Squad of CLAW. If you wish not to be severely beaten, I would advise that you surrender now”.

Sapphire quickly thinks to herself {CLAW? What the heck is that? Anyhow, it‘s best to get everyone out of here, especially Kirua}. XOL then releases a big humph, “So you guys are just CLAW dogs huh? And here I thought you were here just annoying people *Gives off a big laugh while facing the sky*…. *then lowers head to the ground while slowly stops the laughing*….*then lift his head staring at the CLAW members* Then I hope you can entertain me some more”. Zero stares at XOL and coldly states “Entertain you, you say. You seem to have gotten your ass handed to you as it is, in your own game. *Stares at the students* We are sorry to have gotten here late, due to that inconvenience we couldn‘t enter the barrier in time”. *Stare at XOL* I’ll ask you again, will you surrender now *lifts his left hand aiming the gun sideways at XOL* or do you want another lesson?”. XOL looks at Zero and states “surrender, if I say that you‘ll just kill me on the spot. That is what you do as a Special Elite Squad, aren‘t I correct? *Zero coldly stares back*…*XOL chuckles* well I will just have to take you on to let you know… *releases more dark energy and Zirconia eyes on the necklace begin to glow red* that you don’t have the strength to take me down”

*The students begin to be pushed back by the sudden burst of energy from XOL*. Sapphire is now frozen still thinking {Is this what Kirua had to face off against? This idiot, he definitely should have used my help…*XOL releases more energy causing all students to be flown away* Shit, I need to find a way to hold… *Sapphire is blasted away while Kirua‘s body remain in the crater*}…. *Sapphire stretches her right arm but is blown further away from Kirua*. Sapphire then scream out Kirua’s name in desperation. Zero is then seen elevating his right arm and sending 4 men and 2 women to assist the students. Those members instantly vanish. *Zero then turns around and looks at a girl saying* Marie(a girl with pink eyes and long curled pink hair reaching her waist, about 5’5’’ in height and a very slim body. She is seen wearing a white button-up shirt with a clover with angel wings and a halo as a crest on the upper right chest and a pink skirt and black shoes with white socks to her ankle) , you will stay on stand-by with Onix(Slim guy with silver hair and silver eyes. About 6 feet in height and with a slim body. He is seen wearing a black suit) there until otherwise. Marie responds by saying “Yes sir *stands up straight*. Zero coldly states “Just don‘t get in the way this time” Marie nods her head in agreement. Onix annoyed at the attitude but agrees by nodding his head. Zero and the other 3 guys begin their attack by rushing on a frontal attack towards XOL.

Seconds later are seen catching the students. The 2 women are teamed up together and creating a giant soft mat with their telekinesis abilities for students to land on. Asuki is eventually seen flying to their direction and lands on the mat bouncing once… twice… three times. One of the girls(a long green haired girl and green eyes, about 5’5’’ and an average body with white skin color) then stares at Asuki and says “Ummm, excuse me. Do you mind getting off? There are still students who are going to crash there.”. Asuki then stops bouncing and begins to get off saying “Sure thing. Though that was really fun to bounce on *chuckles* I guess I should look for Sapphire and the others *begins skipping happily*”. The long green haired girl is seen looking at her as Asuki begins skipping along and starts thinking to herself “That sure is one strange girl”. 2 other men are seen checking on those who were previously injured by XOL’s attack and using healing abilities on them. Hasuma’s voice is the heard saying “Don‘t worry about me. I didn’t get injured by that attack, just go treat the others.”. The man who was going to heal him quickly nodded and moved to another person. The sound of school building being destroyed is being heard along with explosions and gunshot are heard. Hasuma then begins to wander off avoiding the school area saying “*whistles*Ok, Not going that way”.

The remaining 2 men are catching the students as they land at an impressive speed. One of these men(a man with short black hair, slim and tanned body skin) then eventually catch Sapphire and try to hit on her by saying “This must be faith of me to have caught such a beautiful falling angel”. Sapphire is then shocked by such a lame pick up-line and is frozen causing her face to go white. The guy continues on saying “I know, you are speechless by my impeccable beauty but I will take care of you very nicely”. The other guy(Spiked-haired black haired, 5’7’’ and average body with a white skin color) then comes from behind and punches the first guy sending him flying. Sapphire safely lands on the ground on her own. The black haired guy gets up and angrily stare at the second guy and begins to yell at him “why the heck did you do that you idiot”. The other guy calmly responds “We have a job to do. So if you don‘t want Zero to punish you I‘d advise to shut up and do your job”. The black haired guy responds “Tsk, tsk. How dare you say I am not doing my job by protecting such a beautiful *points at Sapphire and notices she is not there anymore* girl?”. The second guy slowly walks away annoyed “Now get back to work will ya. I‘d rather not get my butt chewed out by Zero again cause of you”. The black haired guy begins looking around in all directions. The second guy begins to think with a vein showing on his forehead out of anger {Why the heck do I have to keep getting partnered up with this idiot}. After a while the 6 members who had been helping the students spreaded out and began creating a golden clear barrier around the battle area that expand 30 meters wide in all directions.

Hasuma is seen walking around and spots Asuki. He then waves at Asuki while yelling her name. Asuki quickly notices and turns to the left of her. Asuki is shown shedding tears and quickly rushes onto Hasuma, knocking him to the floor. Hasuma confused asked “You okay Asuki?”. Asuki quickly gets up and wipes the tears off her face. She calmly responded by saying “Yeah, I‘m okay. I was just really worried about you is all *notice she gave too much of a direct signal and quickly corrects herself* W-W-Well, I was concerned about everyone of course. *slightly blushing*So don’t take the wrong idea. *Hasuma nods in agreement*But what exactly happened to you that you were just fine after that attack.”. Hasuma in a tiresome manner replies “it‘s kind of a long story, I‘ll tell you later about it *Hasuma spots Sapphire walking and points at her* Hey Asuki, isn‘t that Sapphire over there?”. Asuki turns around and says “Yeah, that is her *shouts out at Sapphire and calls her over* Hey Sapphire. You seem to be doing alright *Sapphires then shows a saddened face while gripping her arms as she has her arms crossed* Hey why, the sad face? Btw, where is Ki-”. Hasuma stops Asuki and has her see that Sapphire is practically shaking. Hasuma looks at Sapphire and asks “He’s still in there isn‘t he Sapphire?”. Sapphire then nods her head in agreement and sadly says “I couldn’t bring him out… I was too weak……*Sapphire then begins to cry and seconds later Asuki hugs her*… Asuki.”. Asuki in a low voice says to Sapphire “Don’t worry about Kirua. You know that he is a fighter till the end. He will be safe.” Hasuma gives a smile of agreement and Sapphire stops crying and gives off a smile as well. They now all observe at the dome and anticipate for their friend to come out safely.

Kirua is seen laying on his back in the crater still unconscious, wounded and bleeding. The sounds of gunshots are then heard and the battle against XOL continues. Zero is seen with a few bruises and breathing heavily. The other three guys are seen on the ground struggling to get up. Zero shoots a barrage of light-beam shots at XOL. XOL easily dodges each while slowly walking up to Zero. XOL then speeds up and hits Zero with an uppercut punch sending him flying upward. Zero regains control and shoots at the ground at XOL for him not get a good powerful jump. A smoke cloud appears where XOL is. Marie looks up at Zero and yells out “Captain, HE’S BEHIND YOU”. Zero surprised by her announcement slowly begins to turn his body and sees XOL at the corner of his eyes thinks to himself {What? That can‘t be…}. XOL lands a powerful punch with a dark aura on Zero’s face. An impact of air is seen and Zero is seen crashing onto the ground. Marie and Onix behind her are seen rushing towards Zero and the others. XOL lands away from them angrily disappointed, looking down on the CLAW members. He states coldly while looking down on them and having both his arms extended to each side. “Is this the best that CLAW has too offer? I thought you would be more fun seeing that you were part of the Special Elite Squad *XOL places his hand on his waist and nods in disappointment* But it seems now that us demons don’t have anything to worry about. And to think *looks at the crater Kirua lays in* that boy put up more of a fight…*looks at the CLAW members* I guess I‘ll just have to kill you to satisfy this rage I have”. Marie then reaches Zero and sees him face down on the ground. Onix manages to quickly run around and gather the other 3 guys. Marie holds Zero and flips him around. Zero is seen struggling and bleeding from his head. Marie turns to Onix and nods her head with a serious face. Onix rubs the back of his head and says “Yeah, I know already *Onix turns into a yellow and engulfs Marie*”. Marie is then seen wearing white roller skate with light blue wheels and pink gloves. XOL whistles by being surprised saying “Well ain‘t that a pretty combination you got *Marie shields all the members with a light transparent barrier and begins to heal them*….*XOL notices their injuries being healed* hahaha, so that‘s why you stayed behind. I‘m not going to let you heal them *rushes towards them and starts smashing on the light barrier*”.

A voice is then heard coming from Zero’s guns talking to Marie saying “Hey Marie, I think you should focus on strengthening the shield first. You idiot, you rushed too quickly and divided the power *Marie shows a depressed face*… *the voice in the gun is then heard with a sigh* Ok, do your best with the healing then. The shield won‘t last much longer.”. Marie nods her and says “Yes ma‘am *continues healing at an increasing rate*”. 4 seconds later XOL breaks through the shield and lands a punch at them. A dust cloud is covering them and XOL begins talking in the dust cloud “So you were able to regain your strength then, I take it *Zero is seen 30 feet away from the dust cloud along with Marie and the other CLAW members* So you ready for round 2 then *XOL cracks his neck by tilting his head to the left… then to the right.*”. Marie happily looks at Zero and says “Captain, you’re ok!”. Zero in a cold tone says “Why did you come in to heal us. I told you to stay back. *Zero looks at XOL* he has the ability to read our movements which is why we can‘t land a hit on him. *looks coldly at Marie * I was going to have you come in later as a surprise attack but now that‘s ruined, tchh”. Marie looks down at the ground and says in a depressed tone “I‘m sorry captain.”. Zero responds while looking at XOL “Whatever. We‘ll try again. Just don‘t screw up with the initial plan. This is all for the success of the mission”. The other 3 members are seen getting up but barely standing. Zero shout out “Lets go Squad”. Zero rushes towards XOL and begins shooting at XOL. The other 3 shout out “YES SIR!” and follow him.

XOL is seen beating up once again the members of CLAW at a hyper speed. Marie just stands there depressed knowing that she has failed the team again. XOL crouches down and punches one of the members in the ribs and sent flying. He then anticipates the next opponent and does a short back flip landing a kick on another member in the stomach causing him to cough up blood and sent crashing and bouncing on the ground. He then appears in front of the third guy and grabs him on the neck and starts choking him. XOL begins laughing with his soon to be victory. Zero’s guns then become 2 Dan Wesson PPC type guns and begins shooting. XOL notices his shots and with a superior voice says “hmmm, so you would shoot even if one of your members was in the line of fire, heh…. Sadly *XOL tosses the guys at Zero’s shot’s*… *Zero‘s shot go from being straight to its own separate directions aiming at XOL* I already knew that you had that trick *pops in front of Zero and creates a dark aura sphere on Zero‘s chest* Have fun in the afterlife Dark Matter Blast *an explosion occurs at Zero, breaking most of his bones, bleeding from his chest and head and is sent flying crashing and landing on the building where he is unable to move*”. XOL then maniacally laughs “I TOLD YOU COULDN“T BEAT ME *stops laughing and looks at them with a murderous eyes* and this is the result of your ignorance”.

Zero attempts to get up but then falls down in struggle to breathe. XOL then begins to slowly walk towards Zero. XOL then speaks in a murderous voice “So you‘re still alive. That‘s ok, won‘t be for long *Marie then grabs XOL from behind and locks her arms by his stomach* What the heck do you think you‘re doing little girl. *tries to shake off Marie*….I can’t move, WHAT IS THIS?”. Marie looks up and in a cocky but heavily breathing manner “*chuckles* it seems you hadn‘t notice…. *heavily breathing* that I set up a reverse barrier on us *heavily breathing* This way you can‘t move”. XOL laughs while trying to stare at Marie and says “That‘s interesting ability… Though it looks like using this ability of yours takes more energy out of you than out of me.” Marie continue to heavily breath “Though its true that I can‘t be like this for long *heavy breathing* But I don‘t have to stay like this… *heavily breathing* Isn‘t that right…. captain”. Zero is seen with a upgraded black double-cannon Predator Mark I looking arm cannon on his right arm. Zero concentrates and coldly stares at them saying “XOL, earlier you said that if i would shoot even if one of my members was in the line of fire. *Laser cannon is seen gathering light energy* Truth is that I will do so if its for the success of the mission. This is a high particled energy radiated cannon. It‘s powers is enough to blow up that of a star. *aims correctly at XOL and Marie* Say your last words”. XOL looks at the cannon and starts to panic. He turns his head to the side and asks Marie “Are you aware that you will die if you stay holding on to me? Are you crazy?” .Marie states in a low voice “The members of the Special Elite Squad will gladly give up their lives for the success of our missions… I am just glad to be able to help my squad out before I go”. XOL is panicking by such idiotic reasoning to die. Zero then coldly says “Good job Marie and Onix. Me and Ruby are ready *Cannon stops gathering energy and a light is seen at the end of the barrel* Rot in hell, you dirty piece of shit.”. Marie then nervously begins to shake as she stands in the cannon’s way. A shadow figure is seen punching XOL onto a building and quickly picks up Marie and moves away causing the cannon to just hit the ground and cause a massive earthquake and huge crater. Zero is outraged and coldly asks “Do you understand what you did, you idiot?”. XOL shakes his head trying to regain his composure. He looks at the mysterious figure and is shocked leaving XOL to mutter happily “It’s… IT”S YOU!!”. Marie opens her eyes and is shocked to be alive as she looks at the crater. She turns her head at her saviors direction and asks him “Who are you”.

The savior is revealed. It’s…Kirua?!! But what is with his blank deep eyes?!!

End of Chapter 4


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hahahaha, isnt that soo true

Alex knows it is true... from me mostly

i am the crazy fan girl...

good job Alex-kun, both for calming me down with a new chapter and for making it such a good one!
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