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Naomi is getting tired of her brothers babying her all the time.
She's not sick she's blinde for heavens sake.
And they are way to overprotective since their parents died.

One stormy night she feels someone calling and she feels how every single part of her screams
GO hurry GO GO GO
and she gets the chanse when all her brothers suddenly are called to a meeting at the mainhouse.
She opens her window and spread her wings.
Look out earth.. here I come.


The story is about Naomi a tomboy angel that is blinde.
She ends up on earth and finds a friend in a boy.
and they have some kind of adventure.. there's many possibilitys for what the main story can be...

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This story was written by Bara_Hime, and this will be out first group story. ^_^ Anyone can write as much as they want, you can add twists and different elements to the story, Have Fun!
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Posted 12/4/08 , edited 12/4/08
hi this is ginann im the lilustor and here is ur pic


Posted 12/4/08 , edited 12/4/08
*I like the pic! So, is anyone gonna write? If not, I'll be the first to start! *

"Naomi, it's dinner time." A gentle voice said.

"Ok brother. I'll come in a while." Naomi replied back softly.

She was standing on the balacony under the moon's pure cold light. A breeze was blowing and her soft silver hair was flying along with it. Naomi was blind. She knew that she had been blind ever since she was born, thus, she's use to it. However, even though she's blind, her other senses were very sharp. Much sharper than a normal human or angel. Yes, She's an angel. A very beautiful angel who's skin is pale, soft and flawless. Her brothers always told her that she looked like her mother and Naomi had always wanted to know how she look, but she couldn't. Not when she's blind.

Naomi was waiting for her brother to leave while enjoying the breeze at the same time but her brother didn't. He just stood by the sliding door waiting for her and watching her. Every part of his bone were aching with concern for Naomi. She's 15 this year and have already reached the age of maturerity however, when Naomi was very young, she kept throwing a great temper. Throwing things and slamming doors, yelling why she's blind and different from other angels.

Even thought Naomi doesn't throw a fit anymore and has accepted the reality relunctantly, her brothers were still worried that Naomi contiuned to have the mindset that she's different from other angels.

"You can go first you know? You don't have to wait for me." Naomi said.

"I...er...I'll wait for you." Her brother said, hesitantly.

"You don't have to. I'll be fine by myself. I'll be at the dinning room in a while." Naomi said, trying persuade her brother.

"It's ok. I'll be wait for you. Besides, it's a really beautiful night tonight. I don't mind staying here a little longer to look at the starry sky." Her brother replied gently but firmly.

Naomi started to get angry. She hated it when her brother always treats her like this. She's not some sick child! She's just blind for heavens sake! Why does her brother always have act as though she's a fragile child? Babysitting her, pampering her and being WAY over-protective!
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"Brother," Her voice dangerously low, "Please go down to dinner, i will be down there in a minute, i just want to spend that minute out here,"
He stood stock still, stunned from his sisters harsh words
"I will sister, see you in a moment, if your not down in a few minutes i will come back and get you," he replied quietly, his last words angering naomi even more, it was lucky for him that he left quickly.

Naomi leant against the balcony again and felt the cool night breeze against her face, it was quite refreshing, but a great sadness was filling her up inside. Why couldn't she just be normal? she just wanted to see the beautiful world she lived in, and is that to much to ask? SO many people take sight for granted she thought, imagine if they traded places with her for a day, how would they feel then??

Naomi sighed and decided to go down to Dinner. She knew her way around her house extremely well, and knew where everything was on the stairs. as soon as she walked through the dining room door, she heard her brothers voice.
"Oh good, time for dinner then"
He helped her sit down at the table and then they said grace quickly. They practically ate in silence until....
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Naomi dropped her fork. "I'll get it for you!" her youngest brother reacted clumsily.
"I'm okay... I'll just use my spoon, I'll get the fork later," Naomi said in a gentle manner, searching for her spoon.
"I'll get the fork for you, okay?" Naomi's second brother said in a forceful way, half way to the fork on the floor.
"Won't you guys stop already?"She asked gently and softly.
"What was that? Can you repeat it?" her third brother said in a serious deep voice but playful face.
"Nothing..." Naomi replied back. After that conversation, they continued to eat in silence. Then after they had went to get ready for bed.
"Why do they baby me so much?" Naomi asked herself, "Asking myself won't solve anything..."
"Naomi, are you sleeping? Can you find your way to your bed?" her eldest brother asked.
"Yes, I'm already in bed!"She replied, although she was feeling the wind go across her face imagining what it would have looked like if she wasn't blind.
Then it was when she heard a voice in the wind, but it turned out to be her brother practicing a song on his piano and the other brother singing.
"Na-o-mi! Are you okay? Did you catch a cold?" the youngest brother asked staring at her closely.
"I'm fine! Why don't you just go to sleep already? Stop worrying about me already!" Naomi yelled with no control over what she was saying.
"O-okay! I'll go to sleep, but first, which way is your bed?" He asked half-seriously. Responding with no words, Naomi pointed south from the window. Her brother knowing she wanted, himself out, went out with no words.
"Huh? Why is it raining? I guess it's going to be a storm tomorrow...." Naomi thought listening closely to the rain. The next day, Naomi was right, there was a storm.
"NAOMI!!" every one of her brothers yelled, "Don't go by the wall today! If you do you might get a cold!"
"Of course," Naomi thought to herself,"It's going to be cold inside though..."
"Let's eat first...." her second brother said with a growling stomach.
"Agreed!!" the youngest cheered. After they ate many hours past. It was night and Naomi was taking a nap.
"Go! Hurry! GO! GO! GO!" She felt as if the breeze of the wind that sneaked in her house was calling her. Naomi immediately woke up. Every part of her screamed.
"Naomi, we're going to a meeting at the main house, will you be alright if you are alone?" Naomi's brothers asked about two hours later.
"Yes, I will be fine! Leave already, you'll be late!" Naomi scolded.
"Okay, okay, if you aren't FINE then just call us," the oldest of the four sons snapped back. And then they went off to the meeting.
"Hurry!"Naomi felt once again, every part of her still screaming,"Go to Earth this instance!" She felt as if it was saying that.
She spread her wings wide on the ledge of the window and took off,"Look out Earth... Here I come!"

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totally awesome!!! and ginann you did do a graet job with the pic. im the second illisrator: Sakura I , < you guys do your best!!!!
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The gentle raindrops pelted her wings as she descended below. She could still hear that voice, the soft beckoning of what sounded like a child, so innocent and tender. As she got closer and closer to earth she could see a figure in her minds eye. but it was only a blurred image.

"Who are you?" She called into the night.

"Why are you calling for me?"

She kept flying lower and lower each minute the voice getting louder and more steady. Finally the voice, now as loud as a siren came to a screeching hault. Her only sense of direction dying with it. All was black again, but now she wasn't in the comfort of her home, she didn't know where she was.
The gentle rain was the only thing that was still there, and it was the last thing she remembered after flying straight into a tree and passing out.
Posted 12/6/08
"Where am i?"Naomi said to herself.She remembered that she suddenly passed out.

"Come here...Naomi." a voice said.

Naomi was scared,yet brave.She wondered of stepping up to a stranger would be a good thing.

"W-why?"Naomi asked frightened.

"Come Now."the starnger once said again.

Naomi did a thing and stepped up to the stranger inside a dark-yet bright cave.The stranger pulled off his hood and said,"My name is Night.Dont be Frightened.Im here to help you."Naomi didnt know what or who to trust anymore.She was confused of the words.
"W-why are you here to help me?"Naomi finally said.

Night stared at her deeply.His deep staring turned into anger."I see you dont remember"Night said.
"Did you hit yourself somewhere?"

Looking shy,Naomi nodded.Night was annoyed."Now you know to be careful."he said.
Naomi suddenly got comfortable around night.she was actually enjoying it!"You better go back home."Night said,disturbing all the silence."Y-yes"answered Naomi.

BUT-when Night was going to let Naomi go,the cave started shaking,the wind was blowing hard!!!
Then she heard that HORRIBLE scream again.But this time it was a voice.A calm one.
She suddenly headed back home.;and went inside the house.

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"Where am i?"Naomi said to herself.She remembered that she suddenly passed out.

"Come here...Naomi." a voice said.

Naomi was scared,yet brave.She wondered of stepping up to a stranger would be a good thing.

"W-why?"Naomi asked frightened.

"Come Now."the starnger once said again.

Naomi did a thing and stepped up to the stranger inside a dark-yet bright cave.The stranger pulled off his hood and said,"My name is Night.Dont be Frightened.Im here to help you."Naomi didnt know what or who to trust anymore.She was confused of the words.
"W-why are you here to help me?"Naomi finally said.

Night stared at her deeply.His deep staring turned into anger."I see you dont remember"Night said.
"Did you hit yourself somewhere?"

Looking shy,Naomi nodded.Night was annoyed."Now you know to be careful."he said.
Naomi suddenly got comfortable around night.she was actually enjoying it!"You better go back home."Night said,disturbing all the silence."Y-yes"answered Naomi.

BUT-when Night was going to let Naomi go,the cave started shaking,the wind was blowing hard!!!
Then she heard that HORRIBLE scream again.But this time it was a voice.A calm one.
She suddenly headed back home.;and went inside the house.



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Posted 12/6/08
yea im sorry!

sorry sorry sorry.

i just coulsnt figure anything else

well i could,but than,ill have to edit it
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maybe just make it that she can sense "night" with her other senses, such as hearing and smell(?)
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Hmmm it seem kinda conclusive...atleast to me it does...maybe not xp
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"What's wrong?" Naomi screamed as she barging into the house.

"Naomi!" Her youngest brother called out loud and ran to hug her.

"Where have you been?! We've been finding for you!" Her eldest brother half scolded her in both anger and relieved.

Naomi just stood there with her head blent down towards the ground.

"You made us worried so much!" He replied back, his words filled with spears of pained of worried that piecered deep into Naomi's heart making her feel both guilty and angry at the same time.

"We promised mum and dad to protect you." He voiced shook with every word he said as he tried to control himself.

Naomi clenched her fist.

"I'm sorry..." She said softly, barely audible.

Her brother sighed and said, "never mind. It's ok. Just don't go running off on your own anymore." He replied back, his voice full of forgiveness.

But that only triggered anger in Naomi and she couldn't control it anymore.

"Why? Why do you keep restricting my action?" Naomi asked, her voice low as she tries to control her anger.

"Not allowing me to do things by myself? Why do you always act as though I'm sick?!" Naomi's voice started to raise louder and she screamed "WHY?!".

Even though Naomi was blind, she could still cry and she was doing it now. Dissappointed and angry tears were now streaming down her face but she ignored it.

"W-we..." Her eldest brother tried to said, shocked by her sudden outburst.

"We just want to help you and protect you." Her third brother cut in to help.

"Help me!? You're pampering me and treating me like a KID! I'm not a kid anymore!" Naomi was shrieking and going on and on and she couldn't stop herself now that she has exploded from all the feelings that has been welling inside her.

"You aren't protecting me either! You're just be over-protective and dramatic because you think your little sister is blind and pathetic and can't help herself!...'

Suddenly, there was any awful sound and Naomi's left cheek was hot and red. Her eldest brother had slapped her hard across her face.

"Don't say that Naomi!" He was angry and hurt by her words. "We have never thought that you were pathetic or anything of that sort!"

But Naomi wasn't exactly listening. She didn't understand why her brother had slapped her and she was extremely angry and hurt.

"YOU LIERS!" She screamed and ran out to the balcony, spreaded her wings and soar into the still-storming night, down from heaven to earth.

The last thing she heard was her brother yelling her name. Naomi was blind and she couldn't see where she was going, thus, she banged into a wall and lost consiousness the second time that night.

It was morning when she woke up again. She quickly gathered the events that happened last night and felt bitter towards her brothers which soon cause her to cry on the spot.

"Why are you crying?" Asked an extremely worried voice.

Even though Naomi couldn't see, she raised her head to the sound of that voice and felt a napkin dapping lightly on her wet eyes.

"You shouldn't cry. You wouldn't look pretty anymore." The nice, kind and gentle voice replied back.

"W-who are you?" Naomi asked.

The voice gave a hearty laugh that cause Naomi to smile and feel better.

"I'm Tsubasa. Here!" Tsubasa said and pushed the napkin onto Naomi's hand.

"I'm giving this to you. Don't cry and stay strong alright? See you!" He said and ran away.

Naomi smiled and found her tears drying up.

*Sorry. I know this story has sort of gone a little of track cause AnimeLover0199 went a little out of point from the story(I'm not blaming her or anything.) just hope that you can contiune it! Thanks*
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YAY good job jasmint
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that was so good!! XD
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