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Posted 12/6/08
nice one again Jas
Posted 12/7/08
Thanks everyone.

I'm extremely sorry AnimeLover0199!!!! I miss-understood the story. You didn't go out of point. So sorry again!!!

Is anyone gonna contiune the story? You wouldn't mind if i do right? Er...is it ok?
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go for it jas, lets keep em rollin
make it a bit like improvisation for drama. If you see that it is a story that you can add, just jump in and write (unless you did the last one, or the one before that) and we can keep it going like that
Posted 12/7/08 , edited 12/7/08
When Tsubasa left, Naomi tried to use her other senses to feel her surrounding.

There was a wall and the place she's at was rather quiet. That boy who's name was Tsubasa, was a human. Naomi realised that she was truly in the human world. She had never been onto earth before. Hold on! Except for once. Last night when her brothers were in a meeting, she had flown down and met another boy, a much older and more mature boy than Tsubasa who claimed himself to be Night.

But it doesn't matter. Naomi didn't feel safe in a world she didn't belong to. To make matters worse, she can't see and she doesn't know the way home. In her haste to leave her house as far as possible, she had flew blindly. Even if she could see, she still wouldn't have remembered the way home either. Naomi wanted to go home. But at the same time, she was still angry at her brothers and didn't want to go home just yet. Naomi sighed. Why did life have to be so difficult for her?

In the end, Naomi stood up and tried to spread her wings but she couldn't. It seemed that her right wing was injured when she crashed into the wall. It's most probably an internal injury - fracture of bone of something - since angels are able to heal outer wounds faster than any other beings on earth. Great! Just another bad thing had to happen to her. If only someone a nice as Tsubasa and Night would come to her help again...

Naomi stood there feeling helpless as she folded her wings. She had never felt so helpless and lonely in her life before. Her brothers have always been beside her for as good as 24 seven. NO! Tsubasa had told her to be strong and she will! She's will proof her brothers wrong. She not a sick, pathetic child. She's just blind but she can fend for herself.

Instead of just standing there at such a quiet place where no one would hardly come, Naomi decided to roam around. Keeping close to the wall, she grope her way along. As she moved further she started to hear more noise - humans. The street that she was walking to sounded busy. With her other sharp senses, she could hear humans talking, shouting and laughing. There were other undetecteable sounds which Naomi had never heard before. The smell of food made her mouth watery and her stomach growled. She hadn't had her breakfast yet and she was hungry.

The wall which was guilding Naomi, stopped connecting, bringing Naomi to an utter stopped. Now, she was helpless but she had to go on! She took a brave gulped of her saliva that her gathered due to hunger and nervousness and took her very first independent step out into the human world...
Posted 12/7/08
Sorry! I wrote it down already... But i don't exactly get what you mean by 'improvisation for drama'.

You mean, more events happening and less explaining or more explaining but less event happening
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no i meant just jump in and write the next bit. like if someone posted 3 hrs ago, and you've just got on, go for it and post the next thing, whether you have a concrete idea or not. just let the creativity flow
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clap clap wow wow bravo
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ok. I get it now^-^ I luv the picture Ginann! the girl is so cute!!!
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clap clap clap!! that was awesomeness even when you didnt have a clue what sunny meant!! good jobs!!
Posted 12/7/08
ok, i'm not gonna contiune the story until someone does. Unless you want me contiune...
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Posted 12/8/08 , edited 12/8/08
Naomi held the napkin in her hand she dryed her tears and took a few deep breaths
and once she calmed down she started to listen.

She felt the cold air against her bare skin and shiverd,it was a really cold and as there was few sounds around her she knowed it was still early morning. .

She got up on her feets and brushed herself of
incase she by any chanse would have gotten dirty while she was passed out.

:-And that voice i heard in my head..the person calling me..I wounder if I can find it

she said to herself and pulled her hands through her hair.

:-If you tell anyone that you hear voices they're gonna think you're mad and lock you in

Naomi yellped in surprise,she had not felt his presence at all.

The voice was kind of dry and a bit raspy...like if the person had cried alot or was really old.

She cursed her eyes and started to walk in the direction were the voice came from.

:-you're an angel

It was not a question he said it like it was a establish a fact ..

she stopped as he utterd the words.
the way he said it..
it was something about it..

One single feeling went through every part of her body...
yelleing desperate
calling..
screameing...

DANGER!!!!!!!!
Posted 12/9/08
Finally!!! Someone wrote something!!! YAY!!! Thank you Bara_Hime! But i don't quite catch a few parts(meaning, a little out off subject from the story.) No offence! Just noticing the mistake. That's all.


...there was few sounds around her...


and


She got up on her feets and...


Anyway, i'll contiune the story now^-^
Posted 12/9/08
RUN! Every part of Naomi was screaming at her. Fear seeped deep into her bones causing Naomi to lose her footing, stumble backwards and fall away from the wall and the voice. She could hear him stepping closer to her but Naomi couldn't run. She couldn't see and that cause her to be at an disadvantage.

"S-stop..." Naomi stammered in fear.

Will someone safe her? she heard stories from her brothers when she was young that not all humans are good. In fact, most of them are bad, leaving only a few with good souls. Naomi tried to swallow the fear stuck at her throat.

"Finally. I have waited so long. You wouldn't know how long would you? Angel?" The voice growled.

"Shall i give you the perfect home since you can't go back to heaven now?" He added ironically.

Wait! Can't go back?! What does he mean? Naomi asked herself puzzledly while the fear was just growing stronger.

"My darling, don't tell me you do not even know?" The voice asked when he saw her lost expression.

"Yesterday was halloween. The day where the linning between every world is the thinest, thus you were able to get out of heaven. But now that the linning is back to normal, you can't go back till next year..." The voice said, sounding pitful - for Naomi.

Naomi was shocked to hear such news. Her brothers had told her something like this but she had totally forgotten. The worse is, she has to learn to live in a human world for ONE YEAR?! That's something close to 100% of impossible and it's utter maddness!!! Naomi's only source of hope resembling a fire, blew out.

"Come now." The voice said and she felt him pull her arms and it hurt alot.

"Ouch! Stop it! Let me go! Let me go!" She yelled at him while using her other hand to try and push him away but he was awfully strong and he grabbed her other hand.

"LET ME GO!" She screamed.

Suddenly, there was a blinding light illuminating from Naomi and the hands holding her immediately let go.

'Ahh! Stop! Stop the light!" He screamed with his hands over his eyes.

Naomi found a sudden surge of bravery and she got to her feet running away from the man. Her hands stretched out in front of hand, moving thought the air to make sure that there were no objects blocking her way. She ran through the street, passing the humans and shops and Occasionally, bumping into things and humans. Naomi ran blindly till she felt as though her lungs were about to blurst before she slowed her steps and soon, she stopped, breathing hard.

"LOOK OUT! " Someone suddenly screamed.

There was a series of events that happened so quickly. There was screeched of something big. There were sounds of horning, another awful screeching sound and naomi felt her leg being hit by something. There was a rushed of air and she finally felt the world stopped moving, however, there was no ground under her. To be exact, she felt herself being carried.

"Are you alright?!" Asked an extremely familiar and worried voice.

Naomi was speechless for a moment. She though of what had happened but she couldn't comprehend anything.

"I-I'm fine...Tsubasa...?" Naomi's voice was shaky yet it sounded relief.

"That's good..." Tsubasa sighed in relieved and continued, "You should be more careful in the future. Stopping in the middle of the road? What were you thinking?!" He asked as though scolding Naomi.

But Naomi wasn't listening. She was so glad. She felt so safe in Tsubasa's arm. She had never experience anything so scary before. First, it was that creepy man who wanted to take her away and next, there were so many awful noise that scared Naomi.
she felt so relieved that she cried on again and found herself hugging Tsubasa, but it didn't matter anymore. Naomi felt so safe now.

Tsubasa on the other hand was so shocked by Naomi's sudden action - crying again and hugging him - that he found himself blushing for no reason what-so-ever.

"H-hey hey. It's alright now. You don't have to cry." He said, feeling a little helpless.

He saw Naomi crying just now and she was crying again. He had never made any girls cry before and the same girl just cried in front of him twice-in-a-row.

"It hurts..." Naomi muttered.

"It hurts?" Tsubasa asked, wondering what she meant.

"My leg hurts." Naomi said, sniffing.

"oh! we had better take care of it." He said and carried her to the park nearby to put her on the bench.
Posted 12/9/08
Ahh! Sorry it's so long! I got sweeped away a.k.a too absorbed by the story to stop. hehe...SORRY!
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Tsubasa didnt want to leave her there but what other opinion did he have?
It would be pretty weird if he walked into the store with the most beautiful girl he had ever seen in his arms,
asking for a first aid kit...

It was way to embarassing he blushed just thinking of it..
He really couldnt possibly do that.

when he got back he felt relieved, she was at the same place he left her.
He walked over to her and gently hold her foot.

"Itai!!!" Naomi yelled and tried to pull away.
"dont be such a baby I need to take care of it and then we'll go to the hospital" he scolded her.

Naomi pouted irritated as he sounded like her oldest brother as he said that.
"You really should look were you're going" he said as he carefully wrapped her leg.

Naomi blushed at his touch..

"well I'd gladly look were i'm going, there's just a few problems for me to be able to do that"

Tsubasa heard that she was irritated and looked up.
She was really cute pouting and blushing at the same time.
Still he couldnt figure out why there was a problem.

"what's the problem? " he asked and put down her leg.
He was finished wrapping it with bandages.

Naomi was surprised he didnt notice at all?

"my eyes" she said tired
she really didnt want to tell him..
it made her feel naked letting him know.

"what about them they're realy pretty" he said and lifted her up.

Normaly naomi would protest and demand him to put her down..
but everything was catching up on her now and she was embaressed by his touch.

she couldnt go back to heaven,she hurt her leg,she was tired and just let him carry her this time.

"It stinks" she said to herself after thiking of it all.

"sorry" Tsubasa said *I dont smell that much do I?* he thought worried.

"No..I didnt mean you..you smell..NO..i mean it's nice..I mean you dont stink...I think i'll be quiet now" she said red as a tomato hiding her face in his shirt embaresed.

*I cant belive I just said that* she thought scolding herself.

Tsubasa smiled and tried not to laugh at her cuteness.

They or rahter he walked in silence and they soon reached the hospital.
As they enterd Naomi put both her hands over her nose.
It smelled horrible..

"were the hell did you take me? are you trying to suffocate me?"

she asked angry coughing as she inhaled the air there.

Tsubasa looked at her surprised.

did it smell that bad here??
sure hospitals wasnt famous fo smelling nice ..but was it that bad??

Naomi felt her throut burning this was torture.

"Get me out of here"

she couged and to Tsubasas fear she was becomming really pale.

*I cant leave with her. she need to get her leg treated..but i cant let her chok to death*

Naomi was getting paniced

"Tsubasa GET ME OUT NOW"

she said paiced and then she went limp in his arms as she passed out.....


((outside of story note: I'm leaving what tsubasa will do and what's gonna happen next to you))
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