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Posted 12/16/08
poems don't need to rhyme to be good ;3
ah you're too kind >.<
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Posted 12/16/08
lol i know poems dont need to rhyme and im not too kind! im evil >:D jk jk haha anyway your poem is awesome. talk to me in rp chat forum. we need to talk about full moon!! >< im still waiting for it lol
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Posted 12/16/08 , edited 12/16/08
Ready i'm enter into the contest too. :P
OMG I have so many I don't know which to post. >.< about who many should I post?
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Posted 12/16/08 , edited 12/16/08
I love all my poems but theses are the ones that i'm entering into the contest.
All uneidted work so there's either some and or a lot of errors lol
Walk
By: Manny Pacheco
Walk with me my children
Through the forest of ash and brimstone
Where echoes of suffering and malice ring so clearly
Clawing not only at your ears but your soul’s will
Quiver if you must but keep your soles ahead of you
And linger not outside of my shadow
For you my children; are envied by those in the light
Those who receive not what they desire most
The chance to slumber in eternal bliss.

Valley of Death
By: Manny Pacheco
When I take that first step into the Valley of Death
I can not think of the life I have lead
But only the fear of what's beyond and the sorrow of
What's left behind
When I take that second step into the Valley of Death
The shadows of the valley walls tower over my soul
Pulling me from the warm light of the living
To the rotting corpses of lost souls
When I take that third step into the Valley of Death
I realize that this is Death.

Scents
By: Manny Pacheco
If you wanted to
You could smell the roses
But they reek of death
Their red petals fall
Like blood pouring from a wound
Thorns... causing pain to those who try and help
If you wanted to
You could smell the ocean
But the air is heavy and stagnate with depression
The waves crashing on shore are like the horrible memories
That one never forgets
Rip currents drown those who try
To pull you back to sanity
If you wanted to
You could smell the spring air
But it stinks of putrid unwanted emotions
It's the last breath your friend took
The breeze is full of death everyone's last breath
And for those who want to save you from this
They are suffocated and claimed by the souls of the dead.

Creeping In
By: Manny Pacheco
That black robe like waves of the ocean
Wash in through the hospital doors
The sharp blade that hang above your head
Is menacing and taunting like the crescent moon
His bones play an eerie, but peaceful lullaby
To send you off to that eternal slumber
As you take your last breath staring in awe
He reaches up, plucking the moon from the sky
Using it to reap your soul
Much like the farmer who collects his wheat
By severing it from its roots with his dull sickle
To be feed to the belly of the beast
Much like your soul
But that black robe will only carry you so far
For the trip to hell is a long fall

Four Horses
By: Manny Pacheco
It flows so elegantly out of the flesh
With the reflection of the half moon hanging above
The one who’s stricken utters no words
But joyful screams of praise
All ring the first bell,
The bell of the First Horse who Conquers all
Sweet melodies rumble from the pits of the people
Happy are they to receive bountiful fests
But their hunger does not fade
All ring the second bell
The bell of the Second Horse who Devours all
Warm are the flames that blaze in the house of men.
They spray the red wine of their brothers to douse the flame
Only to feed what brings the crimson brimstone of hellfire
All ring the third bell
The bell of the Third Horse who Destroys all
Sleeping now are those not yet faded
Their beds comfortable and warm
Yet no thoughts swim within the sea of slumber
All ring the fourth bell
The bell of the Fourth Horse who brings eternal rest to all
Four bells now toll sounding the end,
Mans cities are silent, and all that remains is the forth

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Posted 12/16/08
*claps hands*
amazing...i really liked "Scents" and "Valley of Death"
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Posted 12/16/08

miysui wrote:

blah here goes...making these up on the spot! x]

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i dont think i'm very poetic but im really bored ._.;


You sound like you would write very good shorts, so give it a shot and write your very own original story.
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lol i have written my own story before...but i gave up on it years ago. its all deleted in that stupid old computer >.<;
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*secretly confirms that mine is horrible*
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Posted 12/16/08
yours isnt! *shakes Sparkle*
Posted 12/16/08 , edited 12/17/08
Funnily I can't write long poems xd.
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Posted 12/17/08
i sorta could but i havent written a good poem in awhile. i had written about 3 a couple months ago but the poems vanished...one of the was sooo good!! i wouldve posted it for this one. Dx
Posted 12/17/08 , edited 12/17/08
I don't write much poems.Anyway I can't find any grammar mistakes it's little different though.:p
Just got repriminded from my parents for writing bad poems......
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Posted 12/17/08
you guys are putting down your poems too much ><
i read every single one of them and they're all great! -except for mine (yes, i know im contradicting myself)
but keep it coming ppl >3
Posted 12/17/08 , edited 12/17/08
Oh rly?Some1 when I log in tis morning told me my poems was bad.Im not stating who but u know yourself.In my inbox.I swear I cld have killed that person.jk jk.I don't think it's that bad though
Posted 12/17/08
what?! they're definately just an @ss >_>
who has nothing better to do then write useless crap

hey, it's good and that's that
who cares what other people say

lol i would've loved to strangle that person too
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