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Gakuen Alice FANFIC
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this is my very first fanfic!!! ^^ i noe almost nobody's gonna read it anyway..
okkkk theres some things u might notice about mikan..shes not the cheery happy mikan like in the anime and manga shes cold untalkative and doesn't really show any emotions..in here shes 15..her alice isnt nullification or stealing like the series or manga either..shes a dangerous ability and works for persona...her alice is wind and agility...her wind alice is especially strong..and her agility makes her fast and quick..tell me if theres anything else u wanna noe^^ thank u!!!!

heres the first chapter....>_>




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Mikan fell asleep in class as usual. "Okay everyone!! Don't forget to take home your homework today!!" Narumi announced. Hotaru poked Mikan in the head. "Are you gonna wake up?" Mikan groaned. Her mission yesterday was tiring. The announcements came on. "Sakura Mikan please report to the office. I repeat. Sakura Mikan please report to the office." Mikan groaned some more. She got up and walked to the office. Persona was there. "Come here my dear little Mikan." Mikan didn't budge. "What do you want this time?" Mikan said coldly. "I want you to go kill this guy next." Mikan took a good look at the picture. "This guy?" Mikan groaned.
"Yes. Oh yes, and Hyuuga Natsume will be your partner for this mission. Or more like he'll be your partner for the rest of your missions." Persona said smirking as he walked past Mikan. Mikan froze. "N-N-Natsume?! Out of everyone who were Persona's pawns why him?!" She thought, "Asshole!!" She screamed in her mind. Natsume walked in. "Bad luck eh?" Mikan turned back as soon as she heard Natsume. "Oh, what a scary face." Mikan walked out of the office ignoring Natsume's punts. She walked to the dormitory. And slipped on her black clothes. After she got ready she grabbed her two swords and tied them onto her back. She told Hotaru that she has a "job". Then She leaped out the window to Natsume's window on the other side of the academy. "Natsume." She whispered at his window. "Are you ready yet?" She mumbled. "Just about to leave." Mikan groaned. "You better not get in my way."
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this is the first chapter!! i need an editor....T_T
Posted 12/21/08
Hey thereee~
Very nice, add more detail next time! Bring out the writer in yourselff!
Posted 12/21/08
that was goodddd when is the next whon cominggg hehe
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Posted 12/21/08
Sooo good !!!!
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Posted 12/23/08
u noe u can say u copy the um clothes from powerpuffs-z,but just make sure u give her the credit for it.
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Posted 12/23/08
it's great..even though maybe a little more writing to catch more attention
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yah i noe got the inspiration from her..gave me a good idea...luv her chapters though..i still gotta give her credit..dont noe wadda say though...but i still got more 2 say..haha just got 2 sleepy..imma write more..
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Posted 12/24/08 , edited 12/24/08

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it's great..even though maybe a little more writing to catch more attention


thx 4 the constructive criticism!! ^^ arigatou!! and yes i did take the "story" from her..but i didn't mean 2 lol..sometimes i just get so carried away..im an annoying person u see..now i better stop talking 2 u or else im gonna annoy the hell outta u...lawl...i am naturally stupid and annoying though..
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Chapter 2
(Note~~I promise I'll write more for the next chapters...^^ arigatou u guys!)
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"Don't worry I won't." Natsume smirked. "I can't wait to smash this bastard!!" Mikan thought. They leaped from tree to tree. "How much more is it to the area?" Natsume curiously asked. Mikan groaned. "Why the in the universe do you talk so much?" Mikan looked annoyed. "Well it's because you're interesting." Natsume smirked again. Mikan froze at the thought of her being "interesting". "You're just a little girl yet you're so strong and proud. And I admire that." Natsume smiled. Mikan folded a fist. She wanted to kill him. It was as if he was confessing to her. "Just shut the hell up and stop talking to me." Mikan said coldly and calmly, despite what she was thinking. They were only 1 minute until the area that the man was in. Time flew past quickly. They were at a bar near Tokyo. Natsume and Mikan sneaked in from the back door. "Should we take em' head on or ambush?" Natsume said. "We should wait until he exits the bar, and then attack him." Mikan suggested. "As expected of the so-called Shadow Goddess. Always attacking and defending like a shadow." Natsume teased. "Oh just shut up." Mikan growled. "But the part of a Shadow Goddess is true. There are brand new rumors goin' around talking about a girl that's like a shadow." Natsume started. "Sounds juicy." Mikan said. "I know right? But isn't that girl you?" Natsume said. "Sorry but I don't know about these little nicknames that's going around school. More like I don't even talk with Hotaru and the others much anymore." Mikan replied. "Oh? You really are stubborn huh?" Natsume teased. "Stubborn? Stubborn about what?" Mikan's voice got really soft. "What? What's wrong?" Natsume asked. "He's out." Mikan replied. Their conversation ended there. Natsume and Mikan jumped out in sync. They leaped out in a perfect area for an ambush. "You take this side and I take this side." Mikan whispered. Natsume nodded. Mikan and Natsume leaped out in sync again. Mikan pulled out her swords and Natsume pulled out his claws. They both landed on the opposite side of each other. Natsume on the back and Mikan on the front. Their masks hided their faces. The guards ran to Mikan first. She killed them with no hesitation. The man shivered and tried to run away, but Natsume ran to him and interrogated him. Mikan ran after him as well. They asked them all the information they needed and then killed him with no hesitation. As they leaped out they pulled their masks down. "We really are cold and ruthless killers eh? Am I right?" Natsume asked. "I guess you can put it that way." Mikan replied. They went straight back to report to Persona. They took off their shoes and walked in their socks so they made no sound to Persona's den. "It seems that you two are done." Persona declared. Mikan and Natsume nodded. "Return to your dorms." Persona said. It was 12:07 a.m. when they got out of Persona's den. They both couldn't fall asleep. So they decided to fool around for a bit. "So what are we gonna do?" Natsume started. Mikan stayed quiet. "Well if you're not gonna answer," Natsume grabbed her hand. "Hey! Where are you taking me?!" Mikan shouted calmly. "Just come with me." He smirked. Mikan surprisingly herself did what he told her. Soon they came upon a hill. Natsume ran up first and lied down on the soft grass. "Stargazing?" Mikan said. "Yup." Natsume replied. "Not bad." Mikan thought. She liked stargazing pretty much herself. Sometimes she climbs up to the roof to stargaze. She could see the Big and Small Dipper. She could also see lots of other constellations. "If I could I want to be a star and just sit upon the night sky." Natsume started. "What are you? A kid?" Mikan said. "Oh just shut the hell up." Natsume said. "Oh? You stole my line from a few hours earlier." Mikan replied. "Stop teasing me," Natsume said. "I'm so not teasing you." Mikan added. Natsume remained silent for a few minutes. "I've never seen you talk this much. You're always sleeping in class." Mikan's eyes widened. She never realized that fact much herself. Why does she always feel so energetic and more talkative around HIM? She was confused. Though pretty much she didn't focus on that thought much. "He-." She froze. Natsume was holding her hand. And he was SLEEPING! "That bastard!!" She thought. Now she had to carry him to his room. "Woow..extra work." Mikan groaned. She carried him to his room and put him on his bed and threw his covers on. She took one last glance when she left and closed the window. She was glad his roommate didn't wake up. Mikan went to her dormitory and changed. She was just wearing her tank top and her red and black plaid boxers. She was too exhausted to take a shower. The next morning came already. "Mikan, Mikan, wake up!" Hotaru shouted. Mikan groaned. "I won't come to school today Hotaru!" She shouted with all her strength while still 99% asleep. Hotaru looked a little annoyed. "Fine." She got dressed and left. Mikan slept until 12:58 p.m. She got up and looked around. She got up and went to go take a shower. She went down the hallway to the bathrooms. Mikan took off her dirty clothes and put them in her laundry hamper. Then she went to the tub. She sat in the tub relaxing. She thought about Natsume. "Did he go to school today too?" She thought. "Wait! Why am I thinking about him?" She paused for a minute. "I'd better hurry before I overheat myself." She said to herself. She got out of the tub and scrubbed herself. Then she rinsed. She put on her bath robe then grabbed her laundry hamper. She went back to the room and got dressed. She grabbed her other dirty clothes including the black ones and put them in her hamper. She went to the laundry room and inserted two coins. She luckily brought a manga. A person walked in.
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hiya!! did u enjoy it? if u noticed (DUUUH) i extended the story a lot further than be4.. thx 4 reading...^^ ARIGATOU!!! ALL OF U R LIKE GODDESSES 2 ME!!!
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Razumi wrote:

it's great..even though maybe a little more writing to catch more attention


thx 4 the constructive criticism!! ^^ arigatou!! and yes i did take the "story" from her..but i didn't mean 2 lol..sometimes i just get so carried away..im an annoying person u see..now i better stop talking 2 u or else im gonna annoy the hell outta u...lawl...i am naturally stupid and annoying though..

don't wrry and i do talk alot and annoy people a lot...especially wen i'm hyper.
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this is so good...wrote more and became more catchy...i love it..it's so interesting.
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thx....the chapters will come out every 2 days ^^!! yaay..banzai banzai banzai!!
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thx....the chapters will come out every 2 days ^^!! yaay..banzai banzai banzai!!

how cool can that be...u are so great..if u want i can help u with ideas of my own...you and me have the same idea about mikan and natsume being partners..i just never told anybody

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Posted 12/25/08

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MythicalButterfly wrote:

thx....the chapters will come out every 2 days ^^!! yaay..banzai banzai banzai!!

how cool can that be...u are so great..if u want i can help u with ideas of my own...you and me have the same idea about mikan and natsume being partners..i just never told anybody



omg u r like soo awesome!! thx! sure u can pm me!
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MythicalButterfly wrote:


Razumi wrote:


MythicalButterfly wrote:

thx....the chapters will come out every 2 days ^^!! yaay..banzai banzai banzai!!

how cool can that be...u are so great..if u want i can help u with ideas of my own...you and me have the same idea about mikan and natsume being partners..i just never told anybody



omg u r like soo awesome!! thx! sure u can pm me!

okay I'll pm u!I don't i'm awsome...Ur Awsome not me!!!!!!!!!

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