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man, i will tell you right now, it sounds interesting. I just have one tip, ok, maybe 2. One, i didnt see it to often, might have only been once, but u switched tenses on us. it was in the first episode somewhere, sorry but to lazy to find it, lol. and another, i just ask of u not to follow in the footsteps of all the other mech mangas/animes. Not saying that u are in danger of doing so or anything, but yeah, those are my only two critical things. But very good, you got me very interested. going to read the second part now.


Oh man, thanks for the feedback. I'm a little confused by what you mean on tenses? So get back to me about what you mean by that, because if it's something I can improve on I'd like to hear it so I can get on it right away.
Also thank you very much for pointing out the whole Mech stereotype. I was hoping somebody would eventually bring it up. You can rest easy with no worries, I generally hate stereotypes in most animes. ESPECIALLY THE MECH ANIMES. Mech Animes tend to stick to the same stereotype all of the time. (This stereotype often includes evil aliens from another planet trying to take over the world with ridiculous clashes of overly sized and out of proportion mech suits that defy gravity and logic, with an often special chosen person who has some kind of weird magical connection to his mech suit, yeah I know most of these.)
I like to take stereotypes and then completely change them around. I will (this is a vow to myself) try to keep this story as far away from it's active stereotype as best as I can. I want this story to be light at certain times with silly humor and some cuteness, and at other times be Dark and maybe even throw in some tragedy in there if I can (I have some ideas on how I will accomplish that... Muahahaha! Just wait and see.). If there's anybody who really does not like Stereotypes, you can count me as one f those people.
I have the basic idea of where I'm going to take this but I'm still out on a few ideas, for example I'm still unsure if I'm even going to have a real main bad guy for the story. The reason why is because just like I said, I don't want to jump into the stereotype. I have some Ideas about what I can do to generally stay out of that without making it boring.
I think my main idea is to play around more with the idea that the earth is basically a nuclear wasteland and with that problem, people play out with desperation in mind. So I'll tinker around with that a bit more before I get to the next episode, but don't worry about the wait, I'll get it out as soon as I can.

This is so fun! I love doing this, and please people that read this, belt out more criticism! I greatly appreciate it, and I'll try my best to reply and see if I can apply what you say to my way of thinking for the writing of this.
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man, i will tell you right now, it sounds interesting. I just have one tip, ok, maybe 2. One, i didnt see it to often, might have only been once, but u switched tenses on us. it was in the first episode somewhere, sorry but to lazy to find it, lol. and another, i just ask of u not to follow in the footsteps of all the other mech mangas/animes. Not saying that u are in danger of doing so or anything, but yeah, those are my only two critical things. But very good, you got me very interested. going to read the second part now.


Oh man, thanks for the feedback. I'm a little confused by what you mean on tenses? So get back to me about what you mean by that, because if it's something I can improve on I'd like to hear it so I can get on it right away.
Also thank you very much for pointing out the whole Mech stereotype. I was hoping somebody would eventually bring it up. You can rest easy with no worries, I generally hate stereotypes in most animes. ESPECIALLY THE MECH ANIMES. Mech Animes tend to stick to the same stereotype all of the time. (This stereotype often includes evil aliens from another planet trying to take over the world with ridiculous clashes of overly sized and out of proportion mech suits that defy gravity and logic, with an often special chosen person who has some kind of weird magical connection to his mech suit, yeah I know most of these.)
I like to take stereotypes and then completely change them around. I will (this is a vow to myself) try to keep this story as far away from it's active stereotype as best as I can. I want this story to be light at certain times with silly humor and some cuteness, and at other times be Dark and maybe even throw in some tragedy in there if I can (I have some ideas on how I will accomplish that... Muahahaha! Just wait and see.). If there's anybody who really does not like Stereotypes, you can count me as one f those people.
I have the basic idea of where I'm going to take this but I'm still out on a few ideas, for example I'm still unsure if I'm even going to have a real main bad guy for the story. The reason why is because just like I said, I don't want to jump into the stereotype. I have some Ideas about what I can do to generally stay out of that without making it boring.
I think my main idea is to play around more with the idea that the earth is basically a nuclear wasteland and with that problem, people play out with desperation in mind. So I'll tinker around with that a bit more before I get to the next episode, but don't worry about the wait, I'll get it out as soon as I can.

This is so fun! I love doing this, and please people that read this, belt out more criticism! I greatly appreciate it, and I'll try my best to reply and see if I can apply what you say to my way of thinking for the writing of this.


tenses, like u went from past to present at one point, or something like that, but i think i only saw it like once, so no biggy. but just watch out for that while u keep writing. and im so glad to hear you say all that, i am greatly relieved. but yeah, i must say your writing is very well done. Kinda put me to shame there u did, lol
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man, i will tell you right now, it sounds interesting. I just have one tip, ok, maybe 2. One, i didnt see it to often, might have only been once, but u switched tenses on us. it was in the first episode somewhere, sorry but to lazy to find it, lol. and another, i just ask of u not to follow in the footsteps of all the other mech mangas/animes. Not saying that u are in danger of doing so or anything, but yeah, those are my only two critical things. But very good, you got me very interested. going to read the second part now.


Oh man, thanks for the feedback. I'm a little confused by what you mean on tenses? So get back to me about what you mean by that, because if it's something I can improve on I'd like to hear it so I can get on it right away.
Also thank you very much for pointing out the whole Mech stereotype. I was hoping somebody would eventually bring it up. You can rest easy with no worries, I generally hate stereotypes in most animes. ESPECIALLY THE MECH ANIMES. Mech Animes tend to stick to the same stereotype all of the time. (This stereotype often includes evil aliens from another planet trying to take over the world with ridiculous clashes of overly sized and out of proportion mech suits that defy gravity and logic, with an often special chosen person who has some kind of weird magical connection to his mech suit, yeah I know most of these.)
I like to take stereotypes and then completely change them around. I will (this is a vow to myself) try to keep this story as far away from it's active stereotype as best as I can. I want this story to be light at certain times with silly humor and some cuteness, and at other times be Dark and maybe even throw in some tragedy in there if I can (I have some ideas on how I will accomplish that... Muahahaha! Just wait and see.). If there's anybody who really does not like Stereotypes, you can count me as one f those people.
I have the basic idea of where I'm going to take this but I'm still out on a few ideas, for example I'm still unsure if I'm even going to have a real main bad guy for the story. The reason why is because just like I said, I don't want to jump into the stereotype. I have some Ideas about what I can do to generally stay out of that without making it boring.
I think my main idea is to play around more with the idea that the earth is basically a nuclear wasteland and with that problem, people play out with desperation in mind. So I'll tinker around with that a bit more before I get to the next episode, but don't worry about the wait, I'll get it out as soon as I can.

This is so fun! I love doing this, and please people that read this, belt out more criticism! I greatly appreciate it, and I'll try my best to reply and see if I can apply what you say to my way of thinking for the writing of this.


tenses, like u went from past to present at one point, or something like that, but i think i only saw it like once, so no biggy. but just watch out for that while u keep writing. and im so glad to hear you say all that, i am greatly relieved. but yeah, i must say your writing is very well done. Kinda put me to shame there u did, lol


lol Well thank you very much for the compliment! I just want to say (cause I think you are one of the moderators on here right?), that I love this group, it kinda gives me a comfortable place to bounce ideas and themes off of people. I also love all the constructive criticism that goes into it. I actually plan on doing writing for my future career, not necessarily this style, but nonetheless stuff sort of like this.
So I just appreciate all the work that goes into this particular group, and even though it's kind of inactive right now, I plan to be here, I check in here all the time to see if anything's going on.

Okay well enough of my lame praising. I think I know what you're talking about for tenses. If you're speaking about how part 1 ended with the main character in school and part 2 began with him walking from school, then yes, I do admit that was a bit sloppy on my part, but that's only because I didn't see the main character being able to accomplish much at the school after that one event, so I just decided, skip through the school stuff and go directly to him walking home.
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man, i will tell you right now, it sounds interesting. I just have one tip, ok, maybe 2. One, i didnt see it to often, might have only been once, but u switched tenses on us. it was in the first episode somewhere, sorry but to lazy to find it, lol. and another, i just ask of u not to follow in the footsteps of all the other mech mangas/animes. Not saying that u are in danger of doing so or anything, but yeah, those are my only two critical things. But very good, you got me very interested. going to read the second part now.


Oh man, thanks for the feedback. I'm a little confused by what you mean on tenses? So get back to me about what you mean by that, because if it's something I can improve on I'd like to hear it so I can get on it right away.
Also thank you very much for pointing out the whole Mech stereotype. I was hoping somebody would eventually bring it up. You can rest easy with no worries, I generally hate stereotypes in most animes. ESPECIALLY THE MECH ANIMES. Mech Animes tend to stick to the same stereotype all of the time. (This stereotype often includes evil aliens from another planet trying to take over the world with ridiculous clashes of overly sized and out of proportion mech suits that defy gravity and logic, with an often special chosen person who has some kind of weird magical connection to his mech suit, yeah I know most of these.)
I like to take stereotypes and then completely change them around. I will (this is a vow to myself) try to keep this story as far away from it's active stereotype as best as I can. I want this story to be light at certain times with silly humor and some cuteness, and at other times be Dark and maybe even throw in some tragedy in there if I can (I have some ideas on how I will accomplish that... Muahahaha! Just wait and see.). If there's anybody who really does not like Stereotypes, you can count me as one f those people.
I have the basic idea of where I'm going to take this but I'm still out on a few ideas, for example I'm still unsure if I'm even going to have a real main bad guy for the story. The reason why is because just like I said, I don't want to jump into the stereotype. I have some Ideas about what I can do to generally stay out of that without making it boring.
I think my main idea is to play around more with the idea that the earth is basically a nuclear wasteland and with that problem, people play out with desperation in mind. So I'll tinker around with that a bit more before I get to the next episode, but don't worry about the wait, I'll get it out as soon as I can.

This is so fun! I love doing this, and please people that read this, belt out more criticism! I greatly appreciate it, and I'll try my best to reply and see if I can apply what you say to my way of thinking for the writing of this.


tenses, like u went from past to present at one point, or something like that, but i think i only saw it like once, so no biggy. but just watch out for that while u keep writing. and im so glad to hear you say all that, i am greatly relieved. but yeah, i must say your writing is very well done. Kinda put me to shame there u did, lol


lol Well thank you very much for the compliment! I just want to say (cause I think you are one of the moderators on here right?), that I love this group, it kinda gives me a comfortable place to bounce ideas and themes off of people. I also love all the constructive criticism that goes into it. I actually plan on doing writing for my future career, not necessarily this style, but nonetheless stuff sort of like this.
So I just appreciate all the work that goes into this particular group, and even though it's kind of inactive right now, I plan to be here, I check in here all the time to see if anything's going on.

Okay well enough of my lame praising. I think I know what you're talking about for tenses. If you're speaking about how part 1 ended with the main character in school and part 2 began with him walking from school, then yes, I do admit that was a bit sloppy on my part, but that's only because I didn't see the main character being able to accomplish much at the school after that one event, so I just decided, skip through the school stuff and go directly to him walking home.


actually im the creator, lol i thought it was a good idea for a group, and no, for the tenses, i actually meant like, (just an example) lol... now i cant think of it. but u went using present tense to past tense from 1 sentence to the next.. and i am completely at a loss, lol. if it comes to me, i will tell u
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Rezzy64 wrote:


Ichigo-bankai wrote:


Rezzy64 wrote:


Ichigo-bankai wrote:

man, i will tell you right now, it sounds interesting. I just have one tip, ok, maybe 2. One, i didnt see it to often, might have only been once, but u switched tenses on us. it was in the first episode somewhere, sorry but to lazy to find it, lol. and another, i just ask of u not to follow in the footsteps of all the other mech mangas/animes. Not saying that u are in danger of doing so or anything, but yeah, those are my only two critical things. But very good, you got me very interested. going to read the second part now.


Oh man, thanks for the feedback. I'm a little confused by what you mean on tenses? So get back to me about what you mean by that, because if it's something I can improve on I'd like to hear it so I can get on it right away.
Also thank you very much for pointing out the whole Mech stereotype. I was hoping somebody would eventually bring it up. You can rest easy with no worries, I generally hate stereotypes in most animes. ESPECIALLY THE MECH ANIMES. Mech Animes tend to stick to the same stereotype all of the time. (This stereotype often includes evil aliens from another planet trying to take over the world with ridiculous clashes of overly sized and out of proportion mech suits that defy gravity and logic, with an often special chosen person who has some kind of weird magical connection to his mech suit, yeah I know most of these.)
I like to take stereotypes and then completely change them around. I will (this is a vow to myself) try to keep this story as far away from it's active stereotype as best as I can. I want this story to be light at certain times with silly humor and some cuteness, and at other times be Dark and maybe even throw in some tragedy in there if I can (I have some ideas on how I will accomplish that... Muahahaha! Just wait and see.). If there's anybody who really does not like Stereotypes, you can count me as one f those people.
I have the basic idea of where I'm going to take this but I'm still out on a few ideas, for example I'm still unsure if I'm even going to have a real main bad guy for the story. The reason why is because just like I said, I don't want to jump into the stereotype. I have some Ideas about what I can do to generally stay out of that without making it boring.
I think my main idea is to play around more with the idea that the earth is basically a nuclear wasteland and with that problem, people play out with desperation in mind. So I'll tinker around with that a bit more before I get to the next episode, but don't worry about the wait, I'll get it out as soon as I can.

This is so fun! I love doing this, and please people that read this, belt out more criticism! I greatly appreciate it, and I'll try my best to reply and see if I can apply what you say to my way of thinking for the writing of this.


tenses, like u went from past to present at one point, or something like that, but i think i only saw it like once, so no biggy. but just watch out for that while u keep writing. and im so glad to hear you say all that, i am greatly relieved. but yeah, i must say your writing is very well done. Kinda put me to shame there u did, lol


lol Well thank you very much for the compliment! I just want to say (cause I think you are one of the moderators on here right?), that I love this group, it kinda gives me a comfortable place to bounce ideas and themes off of people. I also love all the constructive criticism that goes into it. I actually plan on doing writing for my future career, not necessarily this style, but nonetheless stuff sort of like this.
So I just appreciate all the work that goes into this particular group, and even though it's kind of inactive right now, I plan to be here, I check in here all the time to see if anything's going on.

Okay well enough of my lame praising. I think I know what you're talking about for tenses. If you're speaking about how part 1 ended with the main character in school and part 2 began with him walking from school, then yes, I do admit that was a bit sloppy on my part, but that's only because I didn't see the main character being able to accomplish much at the school after that one event, so I just decided, skip through the school stuff and go directly to him walking home.


actually im the creator, lol i thought it was a good idea for a group, and no, for the tenses, i actually meant like, (just an example) lol... now i cant think of it. but u went using present tense to past tense from 1 sentence to the next.. and i am completely at a loss, lol. if it comes to me, i will tell u


Oh! lol Well hi there oh great master of the wonderful writing group.
Well then in that case I'm guessing that you are talking about my transitions between Dreams/Past and reality. Yeah... They're a slight bit off from everything else that goes on in the story... but it looked good in my head. I guess i could edit it later and create something like a separation key or something to make the understanding of the transitions a bit less awkward.
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man, i will tell you right now, it sounds interesting. I just have one tip, ok, maybe 2. One, i didnt see it to often, might have only been once, but u switched tenses on us. it was in the first episode somewhere, sorry but to lazy to find it, lol. and another, i just ask of u not to follow in the footsteps of all the other mech mangas/animes. Not saying that u are in danger of doing so or anything, but yeah, those are my only two critical things. But very good, you got me very interested. going to read the second part now.


Oh man, thanks for the feedback. I'm a little confused by what you mean on tenses? So get back to me about what you mean by that, because if it's something I can improve on I'd like to hear it so I can get on it right away.
Also thank you very much for pointing out the whole Mech stereotype. I was hoping somebody would eventually bring it up. You can rest easy with no worries, I generally hate stereotypes in most animes. ESPECIALLY THE MECH ANIMES. Mech Animes tend to stick to the same stereotype all of the time. (This stereotype often includes evil aliens from another planet trying to take over the world with ridiculous clashes of overly sized and out of proportion mech suits that defy gravity and logic, with an often special chosen person who has some kind of weird magical connection to his mech suit, yeah I know most of these.)
I like to take stereotypes and then completely change them around. I will (this is a vow to myself) try to keep this story as far away from it's active stereotype as best as I can. I want this story to be light at certain times with silly humor and some cuteness, and at other times be Dark and maybe even throw in some tragedy in there if I can (I have some ideas on how I will accomplish that... Muahahaha! Just wait and see.). If there's anybody who really does not like Stereotypes, you can count me as one f those people.
I have the basic idea of where I'm going to take this but I'm still out on a few ideas, for example I'm still unsure if I'm even going to have a real main bad guy for the story. The reason why is because just like I said, I don't want to jump into the stereotype. I have some Ideas about what I can do to generally stay out of that without making it boring.
I think my main idea is to play around more with the idea that the earth is basically a nuclear wasteland and with that problem, people play out with desperation in mind. So I'll tinker around with that a bit more before I get to the next episode, but don't worry about the wait, I'll get it out as soon as I can.

This is so fun! I love doing this, and please people that read this, belt out more criticism! I greatly appreciate it, and I'll try my best to reply and see if I can apply what you say to my way of thinking for the writing of this.


tenses, like u went from past to present at one point, or something like that, but i think i only saw it like once, so no biggy. but just watch out for that while u keep writing. and im so glad to hear you say all that, i am greatly relieved. but yeah, i must say your writing is very well done. Kinda put me to shame there u did, lol


lol Well thank you very much for the compliment! I just want to say (cause I think you are one of the moderators on here right?), that I love this group, it kinda gives me a comfortable place to bounce ideas and themes off of people. I also love all the constructive criticism that goes into it. I actually plan on doing writing for my future career, not necessarily this style, but nonetheless stuff sort of like this.
So I just appreciate all the work that goes into this particular group, and even though it's kind of inactive right now, I plan to be here, I check in here all the time to see if anything's going on.

Okay well enough of my lame praising. I think I know what you're talking about for tenses. If you're speaking about how part 1 ended with the main character in school and part 2 began with him walking from school, then yes, I do admit that was a bit sloppy on my part, but that's only because I didn't see the main character being able to accomplish much at the school after that one event, so I just decided, skip through the school stuff and go directly to him walking home.


actually im the creator, lol i thought it was a good idea for a group, and no, for the tenses, i actually meant like, (just an example) lol... now i cant think of it. but u went using present tense to past tense from 1 sentence to the next.. and i am completely at a loss, lol. if it comes to me, i will tell u


Oh! lol Well hi there oh great master of the wonderful writing group.
Well then in that case I'm guessing that you are talking about my transitions between Dreams/Past and reality. Yeah... They're a slight bit off from everything else that goes on in the story... but it looked good in my head. I guess i could edit it later and create something like a separation key or something to make the understanding of the transitions a bit less awkward.


why thankyou pupil, haha, just disregard my current critisicm until i can figure out what i was trying to say
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why thankyou pupil, haha, just disregard my current critisicm until i can figure out what i was trying to say


lol It's all good, It's just I recognize some of the mistakes I've put in there, so I'm trying to see if any of those kind of jog your memory. I'm always trying to improve this kind of stuff so that people can find it more understandable and enjoyable for people to read.
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why thankyou pupil, haha, just disregard my current critisicm until i can figure out what i was trying to say


lol It's all good, It's just I recognize some of the mistakes I've put in there, so I'm trying to see if any of those kind of jog your memory. I'm always trying to improve this kind of stuff so that people can find it more understandable and enjoyable for people to read.


for sure, i know what you mean. reading your stuff makes me want to get back onto mine, but it was all on my dad's laptop which crashed and i lost it all. so i am trying to find something new to do. i want to think of something completely originial you know? but i doubt that is rlly possible. i dont know, maybe my inspiration hasnt hit me quite yet, lol
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why thankyou pupil, haha, just disregard my current critisicm until i can figure out what i was trying to say


lol It's all good, It's just I recognize some of the mistakes I've put in there, so I'm trying to see if any of those kind of jog your memory. I'm always trying to improve this kind of stuff so that people can find it more understandable and enjoyable for people to read.


for sure, i know what you mean. reading your stuff makes me want to get back onto mine, but it was all on my dad's laptop which crashed and i lost it all. so i am trying to find something new to do. i want to think of something completely originial you know? but i doubt that is rlly possible. i dont know, maybe my inspiration hasnt hit me quite yet, lol


Oh dude, I know exactly what you mean. I normally get inspired by stuff that I'm interested in or sometimes I'll get inspired by something that I want to make better.

This story was thought up when I combined "Fallout 3" and Line Barrels of Iron". Here's what I suggest. Look at your favorite Video Games, Tv Shows, and even books. Think about the reasons why you like them, then use that as an idea. Then start coming up with other ideas that can push out that one idea. Also don't worry about ideas conflicting. As an example of something I plan to work on later as a book, It's a story that combines Fantasy and Science Fiction. Often those two don't work so well together but if the thinking and development that go into it are well thought out and detailed it can work.

Here, I want to help! Start throwing some ideas at me. What are your favorite kind of plots? What Genre do you generally like. What kind of Character personalities do you find entertaining and why?
See now I'm all excited and in a constructing mood. I'm sure I can push some kind of inspiration into you. lol.
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Ichigo-bankai wrote:


Rezzy64 wrote:


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why thankyou pupil, haha, just disregard my current critisicm until i can figure out what i was trying to say


lol It's all good, It's just I recognize some of the mistakes I've put in there, so I'm trying to see if any of those kind of jog your memory. I'm always trying to improve this kind of stuff so that people can find it more understandable and enjoyable for people to read.


for sure, i know what you mean. reading your stuff makes me want to get back onto mine, but it was all on my dad's laptop which crashed and i lost it all. so i am trying to find something new to do. i want to think of something completely originial you know? but i doubt that is rlly possible. i dont know, maybe my inspiration hasnt hit me quite yet, lol


Oh dude, I know exactly what you mean. I normally get inspired by stuff that I'm interested in or sometimes I'll get inspired by something that I want to make better.

This story was thought up when I combined "Fallout 3" and Line Barrels of Iron". Here's what I suggest. Look at your favorite Video Games, Tv Shows, and even books. Think about the reasons why you like them, then use that as an idea. Then start coming up with other ideas that can push out that one idea. Also don't worry about ideas conflicting. As an example of something I plan to work on later as a book, It's a story that combines Fantasy and Science Fiction. Often those two don't work so well together but if the thinking and development that go into it are well thought out and detailed it can work.

Here, I want to help! Start throwing some ideas at me. What are your favorite kind of plots? What Genre do you generally like. What kind of Character personalities do you find entertaining and why?
See now I'm all excited and in a constructing mood. I'm sure I can push some kind of inspiration into you. lol.


well i am glad you are in such a constructive mood, and thats a good idea. well i have always liked fiction and scifi kinda stuff. Ender's Game was amazing, and i really like Eragon, (the movie was terrible, but lets not get into that, lol) and umm... hmmm... the Lightning thief was pretty good if you know what that is. involves roman/greek gods and it is actually rlly interesting. Nothing else comes to mind though. But some favorite games would be.... Ninja Gaiden, Mass Effect, Jade Empire... dont know if that helps at all though
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well i am glad you are in such a constructive mood, and thats a good idea. well i have always liked fiction and scifi kinda stuff. Ender's Game was amazing, and i really like Eragon, (the movie was terrible, but lets not get into that, lol) and umm... hmmm... the Lightning thief was pretty good if you know what that is. involves roman/greek gods and it is actually rlly interesting. Nothing else comes to mind though. But some favorite games would be.... Ninja Gaiden, Mass Effect, Jade Empire... dont know if that helps at all though


Okay, So what I see is you got some Ideas for science fiction and some ideas for some mythical stuff. So here's the real fun part. Those two types of things generally don't seem compatible with each other so that's why you find a fun way to make them compatible. So I already got a fresh idea that you can try using if you want. You can either take this idea directly or you can look at it and get some inspiration to do something like it.

So Here's the background I came up with just now.
You got some time in the far future where technology is highly advanced and people use it to the full advantage and can even do things that they never thought they would be able to do. People have given up on the idea of spiritualism and Gods and such like that. In response to this certain Gods are not to pleased about this. Soon small gods begin to appear in various places to try and put people back in there place and to show that not everything is all about technology and it's various ability's. Soon things begin to get a little more heated and Chaos begins to erupt between the two perspectives. Gods vs. Machines.
So there's some background. Try playing around with it a bit and tell me what you think. I have faith in you!
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Ichigo-bankai wrote:


well i am glad you are in such a constructive mood, and thats a good idea. well i have always liked fiction and scifi kinda stuff. Ender's Game was amazing, and i really like Eragon, (the movie was terrible, but lets not get into that, lol) and umm... hmmm... the Lightning thief was pretty good if you know what that is. involves roman/greek gods and it is actually rlly interesting. Nothing else comes to mind though. But some favorite games would be.... Ninja Gaiden, Mass Effect, Jade Empire... dont know if that helps at all though


Okay, So what I see is you got some Ideas for science fiction and some ideas for some mythical stuff. So here's the real fun part. Those two types of things generally don't seem compatible with each other so that's why you find a fun way to make them compatible. So I already got a fresh idea that you can try using if you want. You can either take this idea directly or you can look at it and get some inspiration to do something like it.

So Here's the background I came up with just now.
You got some time in the far future where technology is highly advanced and people use it to the full advantage and can even do things that they never thought they would be able to do. People have given up on the idea of spiritualism and Gods and such like that. In response to this certain Gods are not to pleased about this. Soon small gods begin to appear in various places to try and put people back in there place and to show that not everything is all about technology and it's various ability's. Soon things begin to get a little more heated and Chaos begins to erupt between the two perspectives. Gods vs. Machines.
So there's some background. Try playing around with it a bit and tell me what you think. I have faith in you! :P


hmmm, that is for sure an interesting idea, i see how that might be able to work. hmmm.. i will play around with it, and i hope your faith isnt poorly placed
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Ichigo-bankai wrote:


Rezzy64 wrote:


Ichigo-bankai wrote:


well i am glad you are in such a constructive mood, and thats a good idea. well i have always liked fiction and scifi kinda stuff. Ender's Game was amazing, and i really like Eragon, (the movie was terrible, but lets not get into that, lol) and umm... hmmm... the Lightning thief was pretty good if you know what that is. involves roman/greek gods and it is actually rlly interesting. Nothing else comes to mind though. But some favorite games would be.... Ninja Gaiden, Mass Effect, Jade Empire... dont know if that helps at all though


Okay, So what I see is you got some Ideas for science fiction and some ideas for some mythical stuff. So here's the real fun part. Those two types of things generally don't seem compatible with each other so that's why you find a fun way to make them compatible. So I already got a fresh idea that you can try using if you want. You can either take this idea directly or you can look at it and get some inspiration to do something like it.

So Here's the background I came up with just now.
You got some time in the far future where technology is highly advanced and people use it to the full advantage and can even do things that they never thought they would be able to do. People have given up on the idea of spiritualism and Gods and such like that. In response to this certain Gods are not to pleased about this. Soon small gods begin to appear in various places to try and put people back in there place and to show that not everything is all about technology and it's various ability's. Soon things begin to get a little more heated and Chaos begins to erupt between the two perspectives. Gods vs. Machines.
So there's some background. Try playing around with it a bit and tell me what you think. I have faith in you! :P


hmmm, that is for sure an interesting idea, i see how that might be able to work. hmmm.. i will play around with it, and i hope your faith isnt poorly placed


Naw Don't worry about that. From one writer to another writer, I'm sure you can take that idea, or something like it, and make it fly!
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Rezzy64 wrote:


Ichigo-bankai wrote:


Rezzy64 wrote:


Ichigo-bankai wrote:


well i am glad you are in such a constructive mood, and thats a good idea. well i have always liked fiction and scifi kinda stuff. Ender's Game was amazing, and i really like Eragon, (the movie was terrible, but lets not get into that, lol) and umm... hmmm... the Lightning thief was pretty good if you know what that is. involves roman/greek gods and it is actually rlly interesting. Nothing else comes to mind though. But some favorite games would be.... Ninja Gaiden, Mass Effect, Jade Empire... dont know if that helps at all though


Okay, So what I see is you got some Ideas for science fiction and some ideas for some mythical stuff. So here's the real fun part. Those two types of things generally don't seem compatible with each other so that's why you find a fun way to make them compatible. So I already got a fresh idea that you can try using if you want. You can either take this idea directly or you can look at it and get some inspiration to do something like it.

So Here's the background I came up with just now.
You got some time in the far future where technology is highly advanced and people use it to the full advantage and can even do things that they never thought they would be able to do. People have given up on the idea of spiritualism and Gods and such like that. In response to this certain Gods are not to pleased about this. Soon small gods begin to appear in various places to try and put people back in there place and to show that not everything is all about technology and it's various ability's. Soon things begin to get a little more heated and Chaos begins to erupt between the two perspectives. Gods vs. Machines.
So there's some background. Try playing around with it a bit and tell me what you think. I have faith in you! :P


hmmm, that is for sure an interesting idea, i see how that might be able to work. hmmm.. i will play around with it, and i hope your faith isnt poorly placed


Naw Don't worry about that. From one writer to another writer, I'm sure you can take that idea, or something like it, and make it fly!


again thanks for the confidence. what do you think of this idea? not rlly too sure about the time period, or the weaponry to be honest, but that is aside from the point for the plot. So there is a war going on, and the enemy decides to break the rules and bring in biological war fare. But they never thought to test it on children when they tested it. But it pretty much turned all the adults into veggies because it messed with their neurology. however, it effected the kids by making them stronger, faster, increased vision and hearing, and made a bigger threat to themselves. So then a kid, (no name for now, i am terrible, absolutely terrible with names) decides to take up the mantle of leader for their small town. And when the enemy comes in to exterminate the villages they thought helpless, the kids retaliate and blah blah.... i think u get jest, what do you think? i thought it was originial, but i dont know, the idea might have been used before
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again thanks for the confidence. what do you think of this idea? not rlly too sure about the time period, or the weaponry to be honest, but that is aside from the point for the plot. So there is a war going on, and the enemy decides to break the rules and bring in biological war fare. But they never thought to test it on children when they tested it. But it pretty much turned all the adults into veggies because it messed with their neurology. however, it effected the kids by making them stronger, faster, increased vision and hearing, and made a bigger threat to themselves. So then a kid, (no name for now, i am terrible, absolutely terrible with names) decides to take up the mantle of leader for their small town. And when the enemy comes in to exterminate the villages they thought helpless, the kids retaliate and blah blah.... i think u get jest, what do you think? i thought it was originial, but i dont know, the idea might have been used before


Hey you know that's a real good start. (Don't worry about names, I suck at them too, I mean come on, my Main character is named Nick.) See that can be a lot of fun to play around with. Like besides the idea of your basic outline and plot, you get to play with a lot of fun stuff using that. For instance that plays with, well The city is run by kids only, so is there order amongst the kids or maybe there are lots of kids with super powers having fun and causing havoc throughout the town. That can be really fun. Another thing that you get to play with, that is one of my personal favorites, is the science. You can come up with the chemical composition of this disease, you can explain how it's effect manifests in children and how it creates ability's in which the kids may adapt to.
So that sounds like a really fun idea you got there. Play around with it a bit and when you think you really got something, start writing it, cause it sounds like you got a fun idea there. lol I hope to see it as a new Story on this group soon.
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