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Have you ever wished you had a different personality? You can make your wish come true with Dream Eggs!

It's part of human nature to look for somethign you do not have. Take Amu, a 4th grade transfer student who is considered a lone wolf. She's fashionably cool, tough and independent. She's a girl who seems unapproachable both at home and school.

But it's just a role she is playing, unconsciously and unwillingly. In fact, like most other girls, Amu is childish, timid and romantic. Desperate to behave the way she really feels, one night she goes to bed praying for a miracle to happen. Next morning, she wakes up and finds three decorated eggs on her bed. Did she produce them herself? From that morning on, Amu is shocked to find herself starting to behave the way she really feels. When each egg hatches, a little Guardian Character emerges to help Amu express her different selves.

To Amu's further surprise, she is invited to join the pupil's council of the school. Amu discovers that the council, considered by many to be another world, is made up of students who all have eggs similar to hers. What on earth are they up to? Amu's adventure has just started!

For starters, the word "something" is spelled wrong.(Who ever heard of somethign?!) Anyway, why does the description sound like a video game description that makes you want to play?!
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Have you ever wished you had a different personality? You can make your wish come true with Dream Eggs!

It's part of human nature to look for somethign you do not have. Take Amu, a 4th grade transfer student who is considered a lone wolf. She's fashionably cool, tough and independent. She's a girl who seems unapproachable both at home and school.

But it's just a role she is playing, unconsciously and unwillingly. In fact, like most other girls, Amu is childish, timid and romantic. Desperate to behave the way she really feels, one night she goes to bed praying for a miracle to happen. Next morning, she wakes up and finds three decorated eggs on her bed. Did she produce them herself? From that morning on, Amu is shocked to find herself starting to behave the way she really feels. When each egg hatches, a little Guardian Character emerges to help Amu express her different selves.

To Amu's further surprise, she is invited to join the pupil's council of the school. Amu discovers that the council, considered by many to be another world, is made up of students who all have eggs similar to hers. What on earth are they up to? Amu's adventure has just started!

For starters, the word "something" is spelled wrong.(Who ever heard of somethign?!) Anyway, why does the description sound like a video game description that makes you want to play?!


This is the original description from about a week and a half ago:


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omg Karin-chan!! I WANT A DREAM EGG!! *_*
(sarcasm)
seriously, who thought of 'dream eggs'? -.-;
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Have you ever wished you had a different personality? You can make your wish come true with Dream Eggs!

It's part of human nature to look for somethign you do not have. Take Amu, a 4th grade transfer student who is considered a lone wolf. She's fashionably cool, tough and independent. She's a girl who seems unapproachable both at home and school.

But it's just a role she is playing, unconsciously and unwillingly. In fact, like most other girls, Amu is childish, timid and romantic. Desperate to behave the way she really feels, one night she goes to bed praying for a miracle to happen. Next morning, she wakes up and finds three decorated eggs on her bed. Did she produce them herself? From that morning on, Amu is shocked to find herself starting to behave the way she really feels. When each egg hatches, a little Guardian Character emerges to help Amu express her different selves.

To Amu's further surprise, she is invited to join the pupil's council of the school. Amu discovers that the council, considered by many to be another world, is made up of students who all have eggs similar to hers. What on earth are they up to? Amu's adventure has just started!

For starters, the word "something" is spelled wrong.(Who ever heard of somethign?!) Anyway, why does the description sound like a video game description that makes you want to play?!


Yes, not trying to be mean to the one who made it, but this sounds like an advertisement for a 6-year-old product. It's embarrassing all of the Shugo Chara followers by making them look like the 6-year-olds.
Amu isn't even in 4th grade in the whole series! She's in 5th grade in the beginning, and about to be in 7th. I think someone who didn't know much about Shugo Chara wrote it.

I'm very sorry to the creator if you are reading this... No offense.
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Have you ever wished you had a different personality? You can make your wish come true with Dream Eggs!

It's part of human nature to look for somethign you do not have. Take Amu, a 4th grade transfer student who is considered a lone wolf. She's fashionably cool, tough and independent. She's a girl who seems unapproachable both at home and school.

But it's just a role she is playing, unconsciously and unwillingly. In fact, like most other girls, Amu is childish, timid and romantic. Desperate to behave the way she really feels, one night she goes to bed praying for a miracle to happen. Next morning, she wakes up and finds three decorated eggs on her bed. Did she produce them herself? From that morning on, Amu is shocked to find herself starting to behave the way she really feels. When each egg hatches, a little Guardian Character emerges to help Amu express her different selves.

To Amu's further surprise, she is invited to join the pupil's council of the school. Amu discovers that the council, considered by many to be another world, is made up of students who all have eggs similar to hers. What on earth are they up to? Amu's adventure has just started!

For starters, the word "something" is spelled wrong.(Who ever heard of somethign?!) Anyway, why does the description sound like a video game description that makes you want to play?!


Yeah I was like what the...? Hey it's making fun of God in a way. "Have you ever wished you had a different personality?"
God made us like this >:C Don't tell me you don't appreaciate what God has given us! Making fun of Amu in a way too! "Take Amu, a 4th grade transfer student" 4th Grader? She started at 5th Grade! "Desperate to behave the way she really feels, one night she goes to bed praying for a miracle to happen." :O Between those two sentences something is missing!! Amu was so despo? It should be:

Desperate to behave the way she really feels, She watches a reality show one night and it convinced her to go to bed, praying for her to change herself.
"You can make your wish come true with Dream Eggs!" Really? OMG I WANT ONE!!! [Sarcasm]. Hello? do you take us as a 6-year-old? "Did she produce them herself?" Common sense: No DUH!! You think a fifth grader can be pregnant? So who's the father? Even if she was, she'd had cancer >:C!! "...pupil's council..." I know it isn't wrong BUT doesn't it sound wrong? It should be: Student's Council What is this based on???!!!
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Karin55 wrote:


Have you ever wished you had a different personality? You can make your wish come true with Dream Eggs!

It's part of human nature to look for somethign you do not have. Take Amu, a 4th grade transfer student who is considered a lone wolf. She's fashionably cool, tough and independent. She's a girl who seems unapproachable both at home and school.

But it's just a role she is playing, unconsciously and unwillingly. In fact, like most other girls, Amu is childish, timid and romantic. Desperate to behave the way she really feels, one night she goes to bed praying for a miracle to happen. Next morning, she wakes up and finds three decorated eggs on her bed. Did she produce them herself? From that morning on, Amu is shocked to find herself starting to behave the way she really feels. When each egg hatches, a little Guardian Character emerges to help Amu express her different selves.

To Amu's further surprise, she is invited to join the pupil's council of the school. Amu discovers that the council, considered by many to be another world, is made up of students who all have eggs similar to hers. What on earth are they up to? Amu's adventure has just started!

For starters, the word "something" is spelled wrong.(Who ever heard of somethign?!) Anyway, why does the description sound like a video game description that makes you want to play?!


Yeah I was like what the...? Hey it's making fun of God in a way. "Have you ever wished you had a different personality?"
God made us like this >:C Don't tell me you don't appreaciate what God has given us! Making fun of Amu in a way too! "Take Amu, a 4th grade transfer student" 4th Grader? She started at 5th Grade! "Desperate to behave the way she really feels, one night she goes to bed praying for a miracle to happen." :O Between those two sentences something is missing!! Amu was so despo? It should be:

Desperate to behave the way she really feels, She watches a reality show one night and it convinced her to go to bed, praying for her to change herself.
"You can make your wish come true with Dream Eggs!" Really? OMG I WANT ONE!!! [Sarcasm]. Hello? do you take us as a 6-year-old? "Did she produce them herself?" Common sense: No DUH!! You think a fifth grader can be pregnant? So who's the father? Even if she was, she'd had cancer >:C!! "...pupil's council..." I know it isn't wrong BUT doesn't it sound wrong? It should be: Student's Council What is this based on???!!!


Yeah, I know! I agree with everything you said. I'm gonna freaking edit this to the old one. I'm sorry, creator of the new description, but I strongly agree with it... D:
Wish me luck that the moderators will accept it, and Shugo Chara won't look as horribly convincing as it does now!
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UGH! I don't think they accepted it. Does anyone know who's in charge of this group...?

lol, I just make a cute little picture of a person xD
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