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This is my 1st fanfic so it might or might not be good. (srry cant think of a title right now)
in my fanfic the JE r just regular rich people....



*A girl "accidentally" dropped Komari(main girl in the fanfic) bento*
~saying it in a sarcastic way~
MOTOKO :ahhh gomen.....i didnt mean.Will you forgive me.
~KOMARI just looks at her kinda like this
KOMARI bends down picks up the food that dropped and when she got up to leave the classroom MOTOKO trips her which makes KOMARI fall and her bento went flying and it landed on top of chinen's brand new shoes.
KOMARI:GOMEN HONTO NI GOMEN (hope i said that part right?) I didnt mean to please forgive me!
MOTOKO: You see what you do you made ur stupid lunch fall on our beloved chinen yuri-sama brand new shoes...now he probably woul-
CHINEN:Why dont you stop motoko-san she probably didnt mean to....ne komari-san
~he bends down to komari smiles and said
CHINEN:Its ok....i forgive you
~komari just stared at him until his friends stood up
YAMA-CHAN:OY chinen lets go we're late
YUTO: yea lets go komari can handle this if we dont hurry akanshi-senpai is going to get mad at us
CHINEN:AHH i forgot ja matta ne komari-san
~komari just sat there looking at them leave
~motoko and her group walks over to her and steps on her food and said
HURRY UP AND LEAVE THIS SCHOOL!!!!!

-school endend and it was komari, motoko and her group's turn to clean up the classroom-

HIBARI:ahhhh i dont like cleaning ryosuke-sama and his friends are practicing and i was planning on watching them. *sigh*
MOTOKO: ne komari i just remembered that sensei told us to pick something up for him would you mind cleaning up until we cum bak
KOMARI:NO! its our turn to clean up so im not going to let you skip just to watch them practice!!!!!!!!If you want to see them why dont you hurry up and finish cleaning
MOTOKO:YOU!!!!!
~she takes her bucket of water dumps it on her and her and her friends took her and locked her in the music room leaving a wet trail behind
~komari just sat there crying
AKANSHI:you guys were great today
YUTO: arigatou
~yuto, chinen, and yama-chan were on there way back to the classroom to get there stuff until they saw the trail of water and some cleaning supply
YAMA-CHAN:wat happened here
CHINEN: IDK,but lets follow it
~while they were following the trail komari was playing the piano while singing sadly
~yuto was trying to open the door but then he figured that it was locked and when he opened he saw komari wet and sad
YUTO :ARE YOU OK....are you hurt?
~komari shakes her head
YAMA-CHAN:here
* hands her a handkerchief*
KOMARI:arigatou
*saying in a shy way*
CHINEN:let me guess motoko and her friends did this...*sigh*those girls would do anything to see us ne....
YAMA-CHAN:cant help it we are the richest and the handsomest people in the school
YUTO:OY stop being so conceited .........lets go komari-san
KOMARI:to where!?
CHINEN:to buy you some new clothes. if you walk home like that you'll catch a cold
KOMARI:its ok ill just-
~before you kno it yuto grabs her hand and bag and all four of them raced out of school


thats where im goin to stop cuz my brother is kicking me off the comp....
i kno its kind of slow right now but ill finish it soon in pt 2

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awwwwwww!
thats cute :3
everyone is so nice to Komari beside that group of girls D:<!!!
eto...if its okies....may i be someone in this fanfic :3?
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kya~
hehehehehe it was nice~
just like my first fanfict~
ur new here right?
heheh keep it up!~
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mochicocoa wrote:

awwwwwww!
thats cute :3
everyone is so nice to Komari beside that group of girls D:<!!!
eto...if its okies....may i be someone in this fanfic :3?


thx .....and yes u can become part of my fanfic
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deen22 wrote:

kya~
hehehehehe it was nice~
just like my first fanfict~
ur new here right?
heheh keep it up!~


thx....im some what new and some what not....cuz i've been in this group for awhile just not that active
Posted 1/2/09
waah~!
i love the scenes! xD
i'll wait for part 2! ^^
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love this cant wait for second part(:
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ooh..keep up the good work ne~..
it's a nice story after all...
and a nice start..
ganbatte ne~
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it's very good so far :P
Keep up the good work!
Can I be someone in this fanfic?
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mochicocoa wrote:

awwwwwww!
thats cute :3
everyone is so nice to Komari beside that group of girls D:<!!!
eto...if its okies....may i be someone in this fanfic :3?


thx .....and yes u can become part of my fanfic


umm wat do u want to be called in my fanfic?
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azn23 wrote:

it's very good so far :P
Keep up the good work!
Can I be someone in this fanfic?


sure wat would u like to be called in this fanfic?
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azn23 wrote:

it's very good so far :P
Keep up the good work!
Can I be someone in this fanfic?


sure wat would u like to be called in this fanfic?


hmmm.. doesn't matter. you can give me any name :P
Is there going to be anyone ending up with Yamada Ryosuke? if there is, i would like to be that person
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azn23 wrote:


xlidovietguhx wrote:


azn23 wrote:

it's very good so far :P
Keep up the good work!
Can I be someone in this fanfic?


sure wat would u like to be called in this fanfic?


hmmm.. doesn't matter. you can give me any name :P
Is there going to be anyone ending up with Yamada Ryosuke? if there is, i would like to be that person


ok np
r u sure u dont have a name u would like cuz im not good with the names i just choose watever pops in my head
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xlidovietguhx wrote:


azn23 wrote:


xlidovietguhx wrote:


azn23 wrote:

it's very good so far :P
Keep up the good work!
Can I be someone in this fanfic?


sure wat would u like to be called in this fanfic?


hmmm.. doesn't matter. you can give me any name :P
Is there going to be anyone ending up with Yamada Ryosuke? if there is, i would like to be that person


ok np
r u sure u dont have a name u would like cuz im not good with the names i just choose watever pops in my head


yes i'm sure. : )
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2nd part of my very first fanfic!
*if you have requested to be apart of my fanfic tell me what would u like to be called cuz im not good with the names*


KOMARI:hey wait its ok i can just walk home.its not that big of a deal!
YAMA-CHAN:to late we reached the shop
KOMARI:sugoii
CHINEN:try this,this,this,and this on.
KOMARI:isnt this too much for a change of clothes
YUTO:well we want to make it up to you since its our fault that you are being bullied
KOMARI:fine,when i get enough money ill pay you guys back
YAMA-CHAN:you dont have to cuz by the time we finish its goin to be hard to pay back, but if you really want you owe us dinner
KOMARI:thats a deal
YUTO:now hurry up and try those on we dont have all day!

~komari went into the dressing room smiling and every time she came out the 3 boys were speechless!
while she was trying on shoes that ryosuke kept on throwing at her to try on MOTOKO saw chinen.she
stopped and was walking toward the shop until she saw komari laughing with them. motoko soon got very
angry and she soon walked into the shop and quietly spied on them
*inside motoko head*
MOTOKO:how dare she laugh with my beloved yuri-sama! she must have tricked them into buying her some new clothes! why that should be me there sitting and trying on shoes that ryosuke-sama picked out! tomorrow she will regret it muahahahahah muahahahahha!!!!!!
~motoko took out her camera and took pictures of her.
YUTO:ne before we went to unlock the door was that you singing?
KOMARI:ah yes
YUTO:well you have a really good voice
CHINEN:he's right you should think about joining a band or something
YAMA-CHAN:yea a talent like that should perform not be locked inside!
KOMARI:arigatou its just that im to shy,and i was thinking about joining the talent show but im afraid that motoko would do something that will humiliate me.
CHINEN:i see, well its ur choice whether you audition or not but i think its a great chance for you,well its time to leave lets go
~as they leave motoko gets more angry at her then she let out an evil smile and left in her limo
*fyi motoko and her friends r rich too*
~yuto and yama-chan went home first and chinen left to drop komari home. when they reached her house she said
KOMARI:arigatou for everything you guys did for me today.i just want to ask y all of a sudden did u help me i mean this isnt my 1st getting bullied by them
CHINEN:its because you seemed different today
KOMARI:wat do you mean by-
~before she finished he left with a smile.komari went straight to bed that day
~the next day komari went to school early smiling. her neighbor was shocked cuz its been awhile since she smiled that much for so long
*in komari's head* KOMARI:its been awhile since ive smiled like this. maybe its becuz of wat happened yesterday
~komari was still smiling until she reached her classroom.when she entered all of the girls were starring at her in a cold way.
HIBARI:what did you do to make them take you out huh
HANA:yea. its not like the guys would just take you out like that!
RIMA:why would they even talk to a POOR ORPHAN WHO THINKS SHE IS A NO IT ALL!!!!!!!
KOMARI:WAT R U EVEN TALKING ABOUT!!!!
MOTOKO:im talking about these *shows her the pics that she took yesterday*
~komari just looked at them shocked that she was being watched by her
~soon the girls started pushing her around until one girl pushed to her desk
~komari began to cry when she saw that they carved "HURRY UP AND LEAVE!!!!!"
~soon the girls started pushing her and yelling at her telling her too leave chinen, yuto ,and ryosuke-sama ALONE!!!
~komari kept telling them to stop until someone accidentally threw a slap at her
~komari fell down to the floor and 2 girls slapped her and when motoko was about to throw one at her yuto grabbed her wrist.



thats where im going to stop cuz once again im getting kicked off of the comp.
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