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wat if there is an anime like this?
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justifiedgrace wrote:

oh..interesting...nice....more of shoujo...it wud be good if ya can continue the story...


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)
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bubblegum-samurai wrote:

Hmm... not bad, but it's sounds a bit like a typical shoujo manga/anime. (No offense)



heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)
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tamsheed3 wrote:

wow.......that just totally blew my mind......


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)
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PinkyBlueClouds18 wrote:

I will like it!!! I like romantic anime shows!!!


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)
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SuperMidgetMan wrote:

it sounds good........ somehow i think that it might turn into a huge harem with like a sporty girl... or his cover is totally blown....


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)
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shegskusanagi19 wrote:


Maou068 wrote:


shegskusanagi19 wrote:



hehe...he'll find some other girls but..it ends up with a love triangle...i mean not only three of them is in the story..there are other characters


I see, I understand a bit on how it ends. I only hope that this story doesn't end with a cliffhanger like most romance stories.

can u explain to me how,why a romance sotry ends with a cliffhanger?


I don't have broad knowledge on romance stories but sometimes, a romance author/mangaka tends to left some of the questions unanswered so that they could make a sequel to that story.


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)
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shegskusanagi19 wrote:


TsukikageTeichou wrote:


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)


hahhahaha! that's sooo awesome! omg....i totally wanna read the entire thing once you're done writing! hehe! you're a great writer!
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jamie416 wrote:

there isnt an anime nor manga...but the elements..i mean the elements of the story of some particular mangas are there..(ive read at least 30-40 shoujo manga, so im really familiar with manga/anime cliche)...overall, i like the story, but i dont like the love triangle thing, try adding another guy, that might be good but too clichy..hehe


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)
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its good.. kinda familiar.. he doesn't need to hide his talent if it's unavoidable.. that's my favorite part.. the main character releases his super abilities that stuns others and make the jaw drop !!! yeah!!!!!!!!!!!!!


oh...i'll make that part where he show his skill

heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)
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shegskusanagi19 wrote:


TsukikageTeichou wrote:


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)


hahhahaha! that's sooo awesome! omg....i totally wanna read the entire thing once you're done writing! hehe! you're a great writer! :)
thanks..well i'll say because some people want to continue it ..so i try my best to do it!! its called inspiration hehehe
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shegskusanagi19 wrote:


SuperMidgetMan wrote:

it sounds good........ somehow i think that it might turn into a huge harem with like a sporty girl... or his cover is totally blown....


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)


sounds pretty good.... are you writing fanfic?..... you should consider sending this in somewhere....
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justifiedgrace wrote:

oh..interesting...nice....more of shoujo...it wud be good if ya can continue the story...


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)


cool, the story's awesome. if u can draw, u might consider making this to a manga. it wud be great.

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it`s good.. very good...
I wish!!! It could be an anime.. It really sounds interesting!!!!
and regarding your question?.. I would watch it!

^_^


but It`s good if you put this in a proper place..
:)

and yeah! I almost forgot! please send me your story to me every chapter!..
please..
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imagination can take you so far
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i think this is a good story. i dont know what every one mean by fanfiction or whatever, but i think the guy was almost typical. it just my opinion. maybe it is just that i am tired of watching or reading the same things over.
anyways ithink this is good so good luck if you are entering this for anything.

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