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wat if there is an anime like this?
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aLecXz wrote:

its good.. kinda familiar.. he doesn't need to hide his talent if it's unavoidable.. that's my favorite part.. the main character releases his super abilities that stuns others and make the jaw drop !!! yeah!!!!!!!!!!!!!



SAME goes here XD

i liked it - really even i want to read\watch such a mang\anime
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wow nyc... i would like a anime like that....haha nyc work...
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looks nice.. ^_^
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the girl is a tsunder then? ^_^
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there isnt an anime nor manga...but the elements..i mean the elements of the story of some particular mangas are there..(ive read at least 30-40 shoujo manga, so im really familiar with manga/anime cliche)...overall, i like the story, but i dont like the love triangle thing, try adding another guy, that might be good but too clichy..hehe


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)


nice!!! im starting to love it, i like the sister and butler thing so their family is like perfect with weird personalities or something?
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it sounds good........ somehow i think that it might turn into a huge harem with like a sporty girl... or his cover is totally blown....


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)


sounds pretty good.... are you writing fanfic?..... you should consider sending this in somewhere....


basically its not really a fanatic..its just my imagination..its kinda like im making a anime in my head when i dont do anything else. hehe..im gonna make the other parts
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oh..interesting...nice....more of shoujo...it wud be good if ya can continue the story...


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)


cool, the story's awesome. if u can draw, u might consider making this to a manga. it wud be great.



thanks..yeah i also wish i can draw its so dat i dont have much problem explaining
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AnimeEmo wrote:

it`s good.. very good...
I wish!!! It could be an anime.. It really sounds interesting!!!!
and regarding your question?.. I would watch it!

^_^


but It`s good if you put this in a proper place..
:)

and yeah! I almost forgot! please send me your story to me every chapter!..
please..


thanks!!..i'll try to make the other parts..i'll do wat ever i can *thumbs up*
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Tazai wrote:

i think this is a good story. i dont know what every one mean by fanfiction or whatever, but i think the guy was almost typical. it just my opinion. maybe it is just that i am tired of watching or reading the same things over.
anyways ithink this is good so good luck if you are entering this for anything.



hehehe...thanks..ill try to make it diff..in anyway
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aLecXz wrote:

its good.. kinda familiar.. he doesn't need to hide his talent if it's unavoidable.. that's my favorite part.. the main character releases his super abilities that stuns others and make the jaw drop !!! yeah!!!!!!!!!!!!!



SAME goes here XD

i liked it - really even i want to read\watch such a mang\anime


hehe...even i make it..me too..i want to read/watch it hehehe
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wow nyc... i would like a anime like that....haha nyc work...


thanks!!..even im the one who make it ..me too want to read/watch it
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trutel wrote:

looks nice.. ^_^


thanks
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the girl is a tsunder then? ^_^


yeah...all the types of character is in this story hehehee
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erm...wats d rich girl's name??



do u think it will be funny...
teacher:"class i'll introduce your new classmate."
*enters* "hi im miyu sakamoto...." (she stopped) she saw kasuya "omg!...theres already a nerd/geek in the class!.." *she thought *heavy atmosphere* (she pretend to be like one but she neverthought theres 1 in the class,in her mind she drops into a blackhole )

"omg!..theres another nerd besides me" kasuya thought *expression*--> (-_-III)

teacher:"wats wrong" *tapping miyu's shoulder with a big beads of sweat on the head*



lol....erm...is thr any others character tat will b frenz wit kasuya or miyu??


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)


its funny^^...but i think d attack from his sister was ...ermm too long...n her sister was stay at japan.rite??
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dude I would read/watch it if became an anime or manga! Good Job!!XD


heres some part ... ( ) words inside the parenthesis means im explaining,,, * * means expression/looks that the character had just made ..get it?!. oh sometimes face expression are like this (-_-III) (0_0) (0_-)

sorry but i'll work on his 1st day..but this part the 1st day has ended

kasuya had just arrived home, kasuya:"this place havent changed" **smirk*(in japan)..not as big as their house in america but its still bigger than a normal house.he reach in his pocket,pull out the key and opened the door.. "im home" he said, (a girl reading a manga on a room heard it) ..(before kasuya take off his shoes..the ground started to shake..the sound gets louder and louder)..*1 bead of sweats apear in kasuya's head* "its sounds like a stampede?" he whispered to himself ...a black figure suddenly appeared leaping towards him...
."ooooooooooooniiiiiiiiii-chaaaaaaaaaann!" (tight hug).. [Kasuya]:"kiruru?!"...(introduction: kiruru is his little/younger sister..a middle schooler that have a brother complex)...[Kiruru]:"oni-chan..i miss you so much!" (rubbing her face in his brother's chest..she stopped and finally look up...she sees a nerd wearing geeky glasses *shines*..her jaw drop..her hug became like a bear hug that almost brake kasuya's ribs..a little fountain (saliva/blood) came out from his mouth 1 sec.. [Kiruru]:"your not my oniiii-chaaaaaaaaaaann!!"
she threw him like a wrestler (bear hug-front suplex)..(kasuya remembered that he's not in school anymore so he dont need to pretend his weak.so he twist in the mid air and landed with his feet) [Kiruru]:"help!..some geek barge into our house!!" [Kasuya]:" wait!.." (before he could say anything..kiruru throw the flower base to him)
(his glasses shine for a sec..dodging the flower base and catching it at the same time) "now listen" he said gently..(>_>)!! <--(he saw kiruru is goind to throw a huge guitar case..he has no choice but to stop her..by using 1 feet to dash to her..grabbing her wrist) [Kasuya]:"kiruru..calm down" (kiruru panic stopped) [Kiruru]:"that voice?!" *stares* (kasuya slowly smiled..suddenly they were interupted by a voice) [Kiruru's butler]:"dont worry milady!!" [Kiruru]:"no!" (to late he kicked kasuyas face) [Kasuya]:"ugggh" (slowmotion)


This is really good! Do you know anyone who can draw because if they can you should start making this into a manga. This story has real potential as a romantic comedy anime!!! Keep up the good work!
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