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Posted 1/31/09 , edited 1/31/09
This is my first fan fiction so please take it easy on me and tell me if there is something you don't understand and sorry if you think it sucks
Okay this is contestshipping (May and Drew)


After the trip to the Sinnoh region, May was on her way to Petalburg city. But first she made a pit stop at LaRousse city. "Hmmm... LaRousse city If I remember correctly this is where Drew lives" May said "You remembered huh?" a voice called. May faced back. It was Drew. "Drew? So your visiting your home town" "what does it look like I'm doing?" "You could just answer yes or no" May said pissed off. "So what are you doing here?" Drew asked. "Well I kinda stopped by" "yeah I can see that" "Than why did you ask" May said pissed off again "No reason" Drew said facing back. "Hmph I can't waste my time always chatting with you" then May left. When May was walking around the city she looked at shops and the people around. Then she reached the hotel and checked in. After going to her room she went outside training in a near by river but she didn't notice the weather she just trained her glaceon some moves to win the contests. Then suddenly she suddenly heard lightning. She was surprised and accidentally fell down the river. It began to rain and the river flowed very fast, and she couldn’t swim properly, luckily a pokemon saved her from. She fainted and was unconscious. When she woke up she saw Drew. “Drew did you…?” “Yeah well my pokemon helped good thing I saw you floating in the river” Drew said “Thanks. Where are we?” “Isn’t it obvious were in a cave” “oh” She said feeling sick. Drew touched her head. His eyes widened “May you have a fever” Drew said surprisingly. He took off is jacket and gave it to May. “It’s cold” May said “Don’t worry May you’ll be okay” Drew said comfortingly “Thanks Drew” Then May slept Drew made fire and got some water from the rain and got a handkerchief , he made the handkerchief wet and put it in May’s head. Then May talked in her sleep and said “Drew…. I ……. I” Drew froze “I …… I …… I really like you” Drew blushed and he said “Thank you……. May” Then the rain stopped. The next morning May woke up in her room “Was it all a dream?” Then she saw a handkerchief “So it wasn’t a dream” She prepared her stuff, groomed herself and went downstairs. She was at the pier waiting for the ferry. She sat down patiently then she saw Drew. “Drew!!!” She called “Oh hey May” Drew responded “Thanks for last night” “No problem and you might want’a keep your dream talks to yourself” “uh! What did I say?” she said surprisingly. “Oh nothing really”
Then the ferry arrived “ oh no the ferry’s here see ya Drew” “see’ya May” Then May ran to the ferry and Drew was walking away smiling. “I like you too, May” Drew whispered.
Fin.

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Posted 1/30/10
that was like romantic!!!!!!!!!!!
i thought it was awesome!!!!!!!
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Posted 2/28/10
Ditto!
Posted 5/1/10
omg that was adorable!!! >.<
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Posted 5/3/11
Pretty good, keep it up!

Here's a quick tip, when you have the dialogue smushed on the same line like that it's confusing to read. Try creating a new line each time a different character talks. Like:
"This is an example," Emily pointed out.
"Duh," Tom said "I know that."
"Well, I have to put something in these quotations!!!"
"Okay..." Tom gave in.

Anywho, you should definitely write another fanfic here! I'd love to see what other stories are floating around your head. (:
Posted 1/18/16
Well at least it's not yaoi.
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