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[FANFICTION] Can love be found?
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OMG~ths is soo great !! pls update asap ^-^
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me: hi peoples! sorry for the late update!
amu: you weren't busy at all! why didn't you update?
me: i was being lazy...ha...ha...
ikuto: please don't make amu kill me!!
me: hn... i don't know... were you being nice today?
ikuto: yes yes!!! mabye...kind of...
me: o...k... anyway, on with the story!!
iru: appu-chan dosen't own shugo chara! te he he! (she's doing that weird laugh of hers)
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amu's p.o.v.
i calculated everything in my head. if i killed him then i would have to kill everybody in the room, because there could be no witnesses.

i felt a bit of remorse for 1/16th of a second for all the lives that i would take but i quickly shook it off. i decided that i would have to kill all the people in 2 seconds or one of them would try to scream or escape, and i could not allow that.

suddenly, a breath of fresh air came out from the window and cleared my mind.

i thought of kaori and of how dissapointed he would be with me if i destroyed what he had spent so long to achieve. to not kill humans.

i would cause trouble to our family. i remembered the day kaori found me, deep in the forest.

i ran and ran and ran as if i could run away from the pain. i let out blood curling shrieks as the fire found its way to my heart, the only thing it didn't demolish yet.

the fire inside me grew impossibly stronger. how is this possible! the fire and my heart were losing. my heart, galloping toward its last beats. the fire, having destroyed everything.

with one last thump, my heart stopped beating.

the fire was gone.

at that time, i could only think about the absence of pain. i could feel a dull burning at he back of my throat.

then i realized that someone was walking towards me. he was 10.5 feet away. wait, how did i know that?

i felt my instint take over and a hiss found its way out of my throat. i looked up and saw that it was a man.

he was impossibly beautiful with golden eyes and dark hair. he stopped and lifted his hands up, a sign of surrender. "what's your name?", he asked me kindly.
" i don't know!", i screamed, panicked. "i don't remember anything!".

"oh", he said, sounding suprised. "that's interesting", he mused quietly. for some reason, i could hear every word perfectly clear.

"well, come with me to my coven(a group of vampires that live together). you can join us".

" what am i?", i asked getting sidetracked by the beautiful bell-like sound of my voice.

"you are a vampire", he said.


i joined kaori's coven. it turns out that the only thing that i could remember from my human life was my first name, amu.

kaori and the rest of my "family" taught me how to not hunt humans and how to hunt animals instead. we called ourselves "vegetarian".

i didn't have to go through my crazy newborn vampire years where the only thing i would want was blood. i appenently had some super self-control power along with my power of controlling ice. some vampires got special powers after we changed into vampires.

i was extremly special because i had two powers.

pulling my self back together, i straightened out of my crouch and kept thoughts of my family in mind, away from thoughts of the blue-haired boys scent.it was extremly hard.

two seconds had passed. no one had noticed my internal battle.

"i don't have many hobbies", i told the teacher, answering the question he asked what seemed like centuries ago.

"that's okay", he said, a bit dazed from hearing my beautiful voice.

"lets get you a seat", he told me. "hmmm... ahh! the seat next to tyskomi-kun is open", he said pointing to the blue-hair guy. "you can sit there!"

i felt like my world was shattering into a million pieces! i don't know how much longer i can last!

ikuto p.o.v.

amu straightened out of her crouch and answered the teacher's question.

was i just imagening the fire in the eyes? i probally did.

"hmmm... ahh! the seat next to tyskomi-kun is open", said the teacher pointing to me.

amu looked at me and glared, her teeth gritted together.

"yes sensei", she said between her teeth. she walked to me with that inhumanly fast walk of hers and sat down.

nope. i definatlly didn't imagine the anger in her eyes.

this was going to be a long hour.
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me: do you like it???
ikuto: you didn't kill me! yay!
me: mabye i'll kill you later...i don't know... anyway, please R&R!!!!!
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me: hi peoples! sorry for the late update!
amu: you weren't busy at all! why didn't you update?
me: i was being lazy...ha...ha...
ikuto: please don't make amu kill me!!
me: hn... i don't know... were you being nice today?
ikuto: yes yes!!! mabye...kind of...
me: o...k... anyway, on with the story!!
iru: appu-chan dosen't own shugo chara! te he he! (she's doing that weird laugh of hers)
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amu's p.o.v.
i calculated everything in my head. if i killed him then i would have to kill everybody in the room, because there could be no witnesses.

i felt a bit of remorse for 1/16th of a second for all the lives that i would take but i quickly shook it off. i decided that i would have to kill all the people in 2 seconds or one of them would try to scream or escape, and i could not allow that.

suddenly, a breath of fresh air came out from the window and cleared my mind.

i thought of kaori and of how dissapointed he would be with me if i destroyed what he had spent so long to achieve. to not kill humans.

i would cause trouble to our family. i remembered the day kaori found me, deep in the forest.

i ran and ran and ran as if i could run away from the pain. i let out blood curling shrieks as the fire found its way to my heart, the only thing it didn't demolish yet.

the fire inside me grew impossibly stronger. how is this possible! the fire and my heart were losing. my heart, galloping toward its last beats. the fire, having destroyed everything.

with one last thump, my heart stopped beating.

the fire was gone.

at that time, i could only think about the absence of pain. i could feel a dull burning at he back of my throat.

then i realized that someone was walking towards me. he was 10.5 feet away. wait, how did i know that?

i felt my instint take over and a hiss found its way out of my throat. i looked up and saw that it was a man.

he was impossibly beautiful with golden eyes and dark hair. he stopped and lifted his hands up, a sign of surrender. "what's your name?", he asked me kindly.
" i don't know!", i screamed, panicked. "i don't remember anything!".

"oh", he said, sounding suprised. "that's interesting", he mused quietly. for some reason, i could hear every word perfectly clear.

"well, come with me to my coven(a group of vampires that live together). you can join us".

" what am i?", i asked getting sidetracked by the beautiful bell-like sound of my voice.

"you are a vampire", he said.


i joined kaori's coven. it turns out that the only thing that i could remember from my human life was my first name, amu.

kaori and the rest of my "family" taught me how to not hunt humans and how to hunt animals instead. we called ourselves "vegetarian".

i didn't have to go through my crazy newborn vampire years where the only thing i would want was blood. i appenently had some super self-control power along with my power of controlling ice. some vampires got special powers after we changed into vampires.

i was extremly special because i had two powers.

pulling my self back together, i straightened out of my crouch and kept thoughts of my family in mind, away from thoughts of the blue-haired boys scent.it was extremly hard.

two seconds had passed. no one had noticed my internal battle.

"i don't have many hobbies", i told the teacher, answering the question he asked what seemed like centuries ago.

"that's okay", he said, a bit dazed from hearing my beautiful voice.

"lets get you a seat", he told me. "hmmm... ahh! the seat next to tyskomi-kun is open", he said pointing to the blue-hair guy. "you can sit there!"

i felt like my world was shattering into a million pieces! i don't know how much longer i can last!

ikuto p.o.v.

amu straightened out of her crouch and answered the teacher's question.

was i just imagening the fire in the eyes? i probally did.

"hmmm... ahh! the seat next to tyskomi-kun is open", said the teacher pointing to me.

amu looked at me and glared, her teeth gritted together.

"yes sensei", she said between her teeth. she walked to me with that inhumanly fast walk of hers and sat down.

nope. i definatlly didn't imagine the anger in her eyes.

this was going to be a long hour.
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me: do you like it???
ikuto: you didn't kill me! yay!
me: mabye i'll kill you later...i don't know... anyway, please R&R!!!!!


please write more!

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This is AWESOME!!! I was getting sick of Ikuto always being the vampire. Thanks for writing! please update soon!
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Buzzini@: Hey i like Ikuto being a vampire! Hes...well...more suited 2 be a vampire than Amu.

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AWESOME CHAPTER!!! Plz update soon! I can't wait 2 find out wat happens next!!!~ XD
And no offence 2 the top comment cuz its....well...i think its kinda true i mean Amu is the shy & nice type soo picturing Amu as a vampire... Hmmm...ok she still looks COOL!!!!~
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cutekatara wrote:

Buzzini@: Hey i like Ikuto being a vampire! Hes...well...more suited 2 be a vampire than Amu.

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AWESOME CHAPTER!!! Plz update soon! I can't wait 2 find out wat happens next!!!~ XD
And no offence 2 the top comment cuz its....well...i think its kinda true i mean Amu is the shy & nice type soo picturing Amu as a vampire... Hmmm...ok she still looks COOL!!!!~


I like Ikuto as a vampire too, but I think it'll be cool to see Ikuto's reaction to Amu being a vampire.
They make a beastly vampire couple. *imagines* KYAAAAA!
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thankz for the great rewiews everyone!! i feel so happy !!!!! i'm sorry i didn't update in so long ! my internet waz jacked up. i'll write the next chapter tommorow!
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LOVE IT OMG LOVE IT LOVE IT!!! CONTINUE!!!!
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buzzini wrote:


cutekatara wrote:

Buzzini@: Hey i like Ikuto being a vampire! Hes...well...more suited 2 be a vampire than Amu.

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AWESOME CHAPTER!!! Plz update soon! I can't wait 2 find out wat happens next!!!~ XD
And no offence 2 the top comment cuz its....well...i think its kinda true i mean Amu is the shy & nice type soo picturing Amu as a vampire... Hmmm...ok she still looks COOL!!!!~


I like Ikuto as a vampire too, but I think it'll be cool to see Ikuto's reaction to Amu being a vampire.
They make a beastly vampire couple. *imagines* KYAAAAA!


Hmm...true. But i still like Ikuto as a vampire!~ XD
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That was good. I like the style of writing that takes it step by step rather than how they normally write in novels. Although I'm kinda sick of Twilight, the plotline seems good and original! And I'm glad that for once the girl is the vampire and the boy falls in love with the girl, etc. etc.

Oh, two things.
1) Ikuto's last name is Tsukiyomi... did you change it for your fanfic or something?
2) Did you realize that Amu's eyes were already gold before? (lol, just thought I'd point that out... >.>)
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emo527 wrote:

That was good. I like the style of writing that takes it step by step rather than how they normally write in novels. Although I'm kinda sick of Twilight, the plotline seems good and original! And I'm glad that for once the girl is the vampire and the boy falls in love with the girl, etc. etc.

Oh, two things.
1) Ikuto's last name is Tsukiyomi... did you change it for your fanfic or something?
2) Did you realize that Amu's eyes were already gold before? (lol, just thought I'd point that out... >.>)


thankz for the constructive critism! i need ways to improve my writing.
1) no i didn't change it for the fanfic... i just spelled it wrong...
2) yeah i know amu's eyes were already gold. i just wanted to mention it because in twilight, the vampire's eyes got gold if they recently hunted. after a while, their eyes start turning black as they are more thirsty. then they turn gold again after they hunted. so i was implying that amu had just recently hunted.
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update asap !! i adore this story ^-^!!
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me: hi everyone!!! i'm soo happy with the reviews that i got!! also, to explain something, i didn't change ikuto's last name...i just spelled it wrong... sorry about that! i also decided not to put charas in the story. so lets pretend that yoru went back into ikuto when ikuto turned 20.
ikuto: i want to talk to amu already!!
me: you'll get to talk to her this chapter! jeez! you complain too much!
amu: it's okay ikuto. you'll get to talk to me.
ikuto: amu...
me: o...k... this is getting too lovey dovey. on with the story!
ami: appu-chan dosen't own shugoi chara!
me: it's shugo chara ami...
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ikuto p.o.v
she sat down next to me and immediatly turned around and started glaring at me.

what's her problem?! how can she already hate me when we didn't even talk to each other!?

i let my bangs cover my eyes and i started doing my work. all the boys were glaring at me with jealous expressions on their faces.

" he's already the most popular guy in college. it's not fair that he gets to sit by the hottest girl on earth.", one of the boys said. i just ignored them and tried to concentrate on my work.

"h-hananzo-san! will you go out with me?", a boy whispered.

she looked at him and gave him the coldest glare that i have ever seen in my life. if looks could kill, that guy would be so dead. that look answered his question and he quickly looked back down at his paper.

"oh my gosh! she's so cool and spicy!", everyone was screaming.

i looked up, startled. isn't that what everyone had called amu? they called her the cool & spicy girl of seiyo academy.

i started getting goosebumps thinking about how hinamori amu and hananzo amu are so alike. but they couldn't be the same person! even if they sort of looked and acted the same, hinamori amu was gone, presumed dead! i was so confused.

amu p.o.v.
after i sat down i immediately started glaring at him. i wanted to sink my fangs in his skin so bad!

"h-hananzo-san! will you go out with me?", a boy whispered.

i turned around and saw a boy with sandy brown hair. i couldn't risk taking a breath so i just gave him my coldest look, even though i felt bad about it. if that boy knew who i was, he certianly wouldn't have asked that question.

"oh my gosh! she's so cool and spicy!", everyone started screaming.

i felt a sense of deja-vu when i heard that. did i hear that somewhere before? it seems familiar somehow.

then, my attention was focused on tsukiyomi-kun again. he covered his eyes with his bangs, sending his scent floating over to me again. was he trying to provoke me?! i gritted my teeth and clamped my hand down on my side of the table.

with a small grinding sound, a chunk of the table broke off. crap!

i crushed the chunk in my hand, sending the little grains spiraling toward the ground. then i rubbed my hand against the table, sanding down the table so that my hand marks wouldn't be seen.

i put my hands in my lap and tried to focus on the teacher for the rest of the class.

(after class)

ikuto p.o.v.

when the bell rang, amu quickly got out of her seat and walked out of the class in 2 seconds. how did she do that?! it would have taken a normal person at least 5 seconds to get to the door while running!

this was a very weird girl, but i felt a strange longing for her after she left.

i shook that feeling off and went to my next class.

(at lunch)

"dude!", i said giving my best friend, Ryuu, a high-five. "hey did you see that totally hot new family that moved here? they are supposedly all adopted by a mega-rich doctor and his wife", he said.

"i saw one of them.", i answered. Ryuu pointed to a table at the end of the cafeteria. "that's them".

five people sat at the table. there were three girls and two boys. they were all extreamly beautiful.

Ryuu pointed to a short girl with medium length black spiky hair with red streaks at the end. "her name is momoko but she told everyone to call her momo. she is in her first year."

then he pointed to a tall blond guy with lean muscles. "that's kaito. he's really nice. he's in his third year."

then he pointed to a girl with heavy brown hair that reached her waist. "that's ayano. she's beautiful but arrogant. she's also in the third year."

next, he pointed to the other guy. he had big muscles and bronze colored hair. "the other guy is shouta. he seems very intimidating. he's in his forth year."

finally, he motioned to amu. "her name is amu. i think that she is the most beautiful. she is in her second year like us.", he said with hearts in his eyes.

i looked around the cafeteria. all the other guys were staring with hearts in their eyes at the girls (especially amu), and all the girls were staring at the guys with hearts in their eyes.

this was one intresting family.
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me: i finally introduced almost everyone.
ikuto: i didn't get to talk to amu!!
me: sorry sorry! mabye in the next chapter.
amu: please R&R!
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update asap !! i adore this story ^-^!!


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