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Posted 3/13/09
Forgiving and Grieving
A sanctuary veiled from the sight of others.
Unseen.
Untouched.
Unheard of.
Where cries of aspiration balance tears of grief,
And tremors from guilt are unfelt.
A place to keep your head in the clouds,
Feet never aching for the ground…

So tomorrow feels far away;
Non-existent and timeless.
Thinking of things involved in tremendous misery,
You ask, why not take your time away as well?
And for contemplating things of complete annihilation,
You scream out to the heavens that you feel so alone,
And curse the holy place for taking everything away…

Crystal stars turn to whitewash dull,
Forever more the moon glares down at you,
Angry and scared and helpless beyond belief you stare,
And the heavens shout down to you,
‘You are not to think of misery and pain, guilt and despair,
For wrong actions are parts of life! And to make up for such things,
You are too live life at its full potential,
So you can see your triumphs and downfalls without regret!’…

You whimper, unheard, a distance away a cry of memorable shrieks.
And the angels and voices dim down and depart.
As thoughts swim with depression aloft,
You think why the world has done you wrong,
And why wrong has extended its ice-cold hand to you.
Against all will you jump feet first.
Into the ocean depths of another all-bound light:
Blocking out the crimson rain …

Stung and scared may you be, you float drenched and cold thinking –
Why?
Temper and rage only harm.
Regret achieves nothing; tears bring tiredness and anguish;
Making things seem worse then as thought.
And feelings are bitter when hatred arises;
Though blood always tastes bitter.
You smile to yourself: the heavens are always right…

As you live life with no regrets, seeing downfall after downfall,
Triumph after triumph,
And dream after lasting dream,
You realise how right the heavens were.
Thanking them with leaps of praise and joy,
You laugh and cry as nature had intended,
Thinking of those who you have lost with no hopes of returning,
And those you have yet to find…

Tomorrow today; yesterday passes by on clouds of pure white.
And you leave the place that helped you so, to see and act as the heavens said.
Recalling lost time as bounds of metallic chains;
A memory as a pointed spear,
A future thought used to see what you have not foreseen,
And to tell what you need to yell out.
Scream, with all your might! Revive yourself,
Wake up! ...

Lest you do not wake, young one,
I ask thee what it is you said -



“I won’t smile for a while, but I promise you … I’ll wake up from the crimson blooded night, so I can live all my days to ask for forgiveness. And, with the Lords almighty power, I will see my only life taken from me again. And they will smile, as I shall in return.”
Posted 3/15/09
wow~~
so...
deep~~
I can feel-ish relate-ish
specially the scream part~~~
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Posted 3/24/09

hyuuganeji11 wrote:

wow~~
so...
deep~~
I can feel-ish relate-ish
specially the scream part~~~


Ahahaha, i'm glad u cn relate-ish to my poem, but i truly hope that u haven't lost ur husband to a murderer to leave u lusting 4 death, which is what this poem is about ...
Though i cn c how u relate 2 the screaming at the heavens; i think we've all done it once b4.
Posted 3/24/09

Kujin-jump wrote:


hyuuganeji11 wrote:

wow~~
so...
deep~~
I can feel-ish relate-ish
specially the scream part~~~


Ahahaha, i'm glad u cn relate-ish to my poem, but i truly hope that u haven't lost ur husband to a murderer to leave u lusting 4 death, which is what this poem is about ...
Though i cn c how u relate 2 the screaming at the heavens; i think we've all done it once b4.


well no... not that dramatic...
but well, I've lost someone to natural forces...
rite in front of me too...
so well, yeah
xD
Screaming really helps letting out the stress
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Posted 4/3/09

hyuuganeji11 wrote:


Kujin-jump wrote:


hyuuganeji11 wrote:

wow~~
so...
deep~~
I can feel-ish relate-ish
specially the scream part~~~


Ahahaha, i'm glad u cn relate-ish to my poem, but i truly hope that u haven't lost ur husband to a murderer to leave u lusting 4 death, which is what this poem is about ...
Though i cn c how u relate 2 the screaming at the heavens; i think we've all done it once b4.


well no... not that dramatic...
but well, I've lost someone to natural forces...
rite in front of me too...
so well, yeah
xD
Screaming really helps letting out the stress


Lost someone ... ? I'm sorry ... i hope u've been able to cope. .... And right in front of you ... I really am so very, very sorry. Please forgive me. I shouldn't have brought that up.
Posted 4/3/09

Kujin-jump wrote:


hyuuganeji11 wrote:


Kujin-jump wrote:


hyuuganeji11 wrote:

wow~~
so...
deep~~
I can feel-ish relate-ish
specially the scream part~~~


Ahahaha, i'm glad u cn relate-ish to my poem, but i truly hope that u haven't lost ur husband to a murderer to leave u lusting 4 death, which is what this poem is about ...
Though i cn c how u relate 2 the screaming at the heavens; i think we've all done it once b4.


well no... not that dramatic...
but well, I've lost someone to natural forces...
rite in front of me too...
so well, yeah
xD
Screaming really helps letting out the stress


Lost someone ... ? I'm sorry ... i hope u've been able to cope. .... And right in front of you ... I really am so very, very sorry. Please forgive me. I shouldn't have brought that up.


xD
no worries
there's no point in being sad
just missing them is enough...
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Yes, i agree entirely. You don't need 2 b sad.
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Very good written poem.

I can imagine the scene with eye -close.

A piece of well written work which is excellent in bringing about how a person feels the love one he/she lost and the regrets that he/she
should have done and what happened , picking up pieces and the trauma and the standing up to face reality.

Can really imagine with eyes closed by reading the words.
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Posted 4/9/09

ligersay wrote:

Very good written poem.

I can imagine the scene with eye -close.

A piece of well written work which is excellent in bringing about how a person feels the love one he/she lost and the regrets that he/she
should have done and what happened , picking up pieces and the trauma and the standing up to face reality.

Can really imagine with eyes closed by reading the words.


Awww, thank u I really apreciate ur comment. U new 2 CR?
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Nope. Old Just too lazy to spam for CR, anyway Last time i use CR for anime, now i only use for groups and stuffs mostly forum.
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ligersay wrote:

Nope. Old Just too lazy to spam for CR, anyway Last time i use CR for anime, now i only use for groups and stuffs mostly forum.


Ah okies i c XD I try 2 b as active as i can, but i sometimes fail caus i don't exactly have the best download ...
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You know what i just realised? I don't moderate any forums ... Dx I better ask if i can, caus i'd lyk that.
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Wow that is so deep
it really well written XD
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Kujin-jump wrote:

You know what i just realised? I don't moderate any forums ... Dx I better ask if i can, caus i'd lyk that.




Kujin jump , if you wanna moderate forums u should be a mod to do so... give us mods a little more time to know you, cus allowing member access to art works which belongs to someone else is an action of trust. And we also need to be sure you'll be online often, cus we already have mods who arent around much if ever!! And its pretty annoying. Sometimes its all left to me



PS: just read ur poem... we were right to choose u as the winner of the december poetry contest
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elanra_moonlight wrote:


Kujin-jump wrote:

You know what i just realised? I don't moderate any forums ... Dx I better ask if i can, caus i'd lyk that.




Kujin jump , if you wanna moderate forums u should be a mod to do so... give us mods a little more time to know you, cus allowing member access to art works which belongs to someone else is an action of trust. And we also need to be sure you'll be online often, cus we already have mods who arent around much if ever!! And its pretty annoying. Sometimes its all left to me



PS: just read ur poem... we were right to choose u as the winner of the december poetry contest


Naw, thanks =D Poetry is really the only way i can express myself (besides, of course, in acting, but it's not like i can do that on a regular basis, you know?).

Anyway, yeah, i should prove myself worthy =P Ima be more active (especially when i get my UNLIMITED DOWNLOAD OH YEEEAH! XP). No longer will my computer and it's bandwidth hold me back. Or something.

Yeah, i wouldn't want someone who wasn't trustworthy to be able to handle my poetry. I'd be pretty irked.

No, i lie. I'd be scared =)

Anyway, yeah. I understand completely =D Thanks.
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