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[Fanfic] Deep Abyss
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Posted 3/26/09 , edited 6/26/09
Hi Everyone! Welcome to my first fanfic Deep Abyss. I've been thinking of doing this for quite sometime but I'm scared of harsh complements so you can give me constructive comments to help me make this fanfic exciting. So here goes nothing

-*-Summary-*-
This story is about Utau's life that became worse when her mom got married to Kazuomi Hoshina (Utau & Ikuto's stepfather) because of this Utau & Ikuto is forced to work for Easter to compensate her father's irresponsibility to the company. The peopel who worked for Easter thought that Utau was like a dummy following every order but they didn't know that Utau was hurting inside and wishing for someone who could get her out of this mess. One day Utau was walking on her way home to ease her troubled mind but then a thief snatched Utau's bag, Utau chased after the theif but she couldn't catch up, she fell down and so her tears fell. While Utau cried Kukai wiped her tears and helped her. Will Utau change for the better? Will Kukai clear her deep abyss? Read the chapter to find out.. ^_^

Chapter 1- A Smile at the End of the Rainbow


Chapter 2 - Beautiful Mistake
I edit Utau's Disguize



Chapter 3-Picturesque Night



Chapter 4- Our Unveiled Nature



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Posted 3/26/09
this is a good beginning it will help if you put a summary and the pairing u r starring. unless u want to keep it as a secret ^^ but i'm guessing it's Kutau right?

and there are some grammatical and spelling errors.

other than that, good job
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Posted 3/26/09

Natsuya801923 wrote:

this is a good beginning it will help if you put a summary and the pairing u r starring. unless u want to keep it as a secret ^^ but i'm guessing it's Kutau right?

and there are some grammatical and spelling errors.

other than that, good job


Yeah! It is Kutau and thanks for the advice
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wat song was she singing?
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Ohh nice story!! I like! xDD lol you put Dancing in the Velvet Moon right? I love that song!! xDD
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pokegirl21 wrote:

wat song was she singing?


It's "Dancing in the Velvet Moon". It's really good! I love that song! xDD
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Nice Chapter ^^

But if you added more detail, it would really get the reader into the storyline and will get the reader a better understanding of the story =D

I'm going to publish a UtauXKukai story soon x]

Great Work!
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Nice Chapter ^^

But if you added more detail, it would really get the reader into the storyline and will get the reader a better understanding of the story =D

I'm going to publish a UtauXKukai story soon x]

Great Work!


Thank you and good luck on your next fanfic
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Posted 3/27/09
nice. good. great. perfect. ITS SUPERB!! great idea you had there!!
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itchypeachy wrote:

nice. good. great. perfect. ITS SUPERB!! great idea you had there!!


Thank you. I was afraid that you might think that my idea was lame becuase I used Utau.
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itchypeachy wrote:

nice. good. great. perfect. ITS SUPERB!! great idea you had there!!


Thank you. I was afraid that you might think that my idea was lame becuase I used Utau.


I wont. How could i feel that someone's idea was lame when i seriously couldnt think of any ideas myself?
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I'm sorry my next fanfic may take long becuase I'm really busy in doing projects. But don't worry I'll post the next chapter as soon as I have free time.
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blueicegem84 wrote:

I'm sorry my next fanfic may take long becuase I'm really busy in doing projects. But don't worry I'll post the next chapter as soon as I have free time.


YOU BETTER. OR ELSE THOSE WHO LIKE YOUR FANFIC IS GONNA KILL YOU!


(jkjk. )
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itchypeachy wrote:

YOU BETTER. OR ELSE THOSE WHO LIKE YOUR FANFIC IS GONNA KILL YOU!

(jkjk. )


*Scared* Ha-Hai! I will! I will.
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itchypeachy wrote:

YOU BETTER. OR ELSE THOSE WHO LIKE YOUR FANFIC IS GONNA KILL YOU!

(jkjk. )


*Scared* Ha-Hai! I will! I will.


good girl.
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