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Fanfict Darkness alone is not enough
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A girl named hinamori amu had been born one day and her mom died the same day.
her father blames her for what happened and abused her when she was only six years old
and kicked her out of the house. six years later it is now her 12th bday.
She gets an egg with little cats on it. she does not know it but the egg that she
sees now has been helping her since that day. she would go into parks at night
and sing to the moon and when she was not looking people that were looking would
give her money and pity her.

One day when she was running from a drunken man she ran into the one they call

Ikuto Tsukiyomi

should i keep going this would be i first fanfict but i was just bored i can keep going just tell me
i can even make a tadamu if you want but this is a amuto
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Its a GOOOOD fanfic... AMUTO PLEASE ^^...

PleaSE c0ntinue :]]
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sounds really good!!!!!!!!!! i recommend u write it
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Sad. But I like it! Keep on writing! AMUTO!!!
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chapter 1

Come here little girl the man said, i looked at my options. Well i guess i dont have any mom please help me. i ran as fast as my feet could
take me. Leave me alone, i said crying. what did i do to deserve this...

Flash back XDDD

AMU YOU DID THIS, UR MOM WOULD HAVE STILL BEEN A LIVE U KILLED HER.
papa i was shaking im sorry for give me please. NO GET OUT OF THIS HOUES I NEVER WANT TO SEE UR FACE AGAIN.
where will i go,i was crying now why does he hate me, why? I DONT GIVE A D*** WHERE U GO BUT UR NOT WANTED HERE.
FINE I WILL LEAVE, I HATE YOU.

end of flash back

why can't i just die now i mumbled into something i thought it was a wall. But it was a teen. Yo girly the druken guy called don't you wanna
have some fun. i won't hurt ya. i looked up at the boy he looked at me with intence eyes and pulled me in his chest. its ok, he patted my head. i fliched help me, i started to cry i don't want to be alone any more. The drunk man cought up there you are little girl i hid behind the mans back. The drunk guy said, who are you get your own girl, she's mine. The tall boy looked at the man with discust what the hell did you do to her, shes crying. Nothing, he said...........yet the boy looked up. yet the teen chuckeld you won't even touch her.
in one moment all i heard was a gun shot i fell on the floor. STOP!!!!!!!!!!! please stop no more fighting, mom help me. i fainted.
All i could here were groans. of pain

2 hours later

Amu' POV

I woke up in a black painted room the lights were off and i heard someone comming out of the shower.
Glad to see your ok, he said smiling. Are you hungry? He sat on the bed next to me. N~No i'm fine. He looked at me and patted my head
if you need some thing ill be in the kitchen. W~w~well i said blushing. I need some cothes. Really he said i think you looked cute like that. I blushed, you pevert i yelled. He smirked (did i mention is was a sexy smirk ) well i changed you any way he said
and you have a chest as flat as a bord. You have nothing to show. Oh and whats your name little kid you should have not been out that late. You could have been raped by that guy, if i was not there. Hinamori Amu i said. Ahh well my little pinkett i just saved you, he said
dont you want to say any thing to me he said in a husky voice . My head went down so i was looking at my hands. T~thank you.
What was that he said teasing. THANK YOU, happy? i yelled. He chuckled, quite. so why were you on the streets? Dang he turns serious fast i thought. Hello he said waving his hand in my face. EHH! oh im sorry. i spaced out well i thought that the boys said so whats ur name i said a bit happy. He brought his face near mine and gave me a peck on the lips. I blushed.... WHAT WAS THAT FOR I yelled.
he smiled. For being so cute. Then he bit my ear. PEREVRT. an my name is Ikuto Tsukiyomi
WHAT so your the one they call

Ikuto Tsukiyomi


done

chapter 2 will be wayyyyyy longer i just got lazy
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Nice! I loved it. Not to be like a critic or anything, but can you put some quotes when the characters are speaking. I couldn't at first tell who was speaking... Other than that, it was a well written story. Man I feel like a teacher when I say those kind of things...
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animeluver713 wrote:

Nice! I loved it. Not to be like a critic or anything, but can you put some quotes when the characters are speaking. I couldn't at first tell who was speaking... Other than that, it was a well written story. Man I feel like a teacher when I say those kind of things...


lol sure my bad teehee
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chapter 2 preview

Ikuto's POV

"she really is a cute one, smile an all." "So your ikuto Tsukiyomi? she said" "Thats my name, so where do you live i asked?"
"where you found me, she said" with a sad smile on the dark streets of japan." I looked at her with lustful/caring eyes. Why dont you live with me, I could use some company "N~N~N~no i could never barge in like this. she said with a cute little blush" I looked at her, oh but you can why you say becuase your MY little kitten.

End of POV

Amu's POV

His kitten? Wait did he say i can stay? Whats with the lustful/caring eyes?

find out on the next ep of DBZ
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chapter 2 meeting kukai

Ikuto's POV



"she really is a cute one, smile an all." "So your ikuto Tsukiyomi? she said" "Thats my name, so where do you live i asked?"
"where you found me, she said" with a sad smile on the dark streets of japan." I looked at her with lustful/caring eyes. Why dont you live with me, I could use some company "N~N~N~no i could never barge in like this. she said with a cute little blush" I looked at her, oh but you can why you say becuase your MY little kitten.

End of POV

Amu's POV

His kitten? Wait did he say i can stay? Whats with the lustful/caring eyes? ikuto are you ok? You look abit sick. i said as i placed my hand on
his head. "Im fine he said. Would you like to go shopping for some clothes monday? I have to meet a friend over here later today so you
can stay in here or talk with us, your choice." Ikuto can you come here real quick? "sure he said with a grin. What do you need? his grin turned into a smirk." EH W~well where do i sleep? "You sleep with me. I thought you knew he said in a cute voice." No i did not, you pervert you can go now i said. "Amu he said picking me up" What are you doing? i yelled put me down! "Your going to sit on the couch with me he said smirking" DING DONG DING DONG Stupid door bell i heard him mutter. "Hey ikuto its me kukai open up its cold out here man." I was still on ikuto's back. Ikuto opened the door. It was a guy with brown spiky hair and was dressed in a short sleave shirt.
"Yo, who this little cutie." He said messing up my hair. "Ikuto sighed this is amu kukai. amu this is kukai" Hey he said with a wide grin,
and hugging me really tight. I felt a dark aura coming from ikuto, i could tell kukai felt it too because kukai was hugging me tighter.
"Amu, save me he said hugging me. ikuto's going to kill me for hugging you" I laughed, kukai really was funny. I was happy this was the first real laugh i'v had on six years. "Awww did i make amu laugh. he said laughing him self"

End of pov

KUKAI POV

This girl was hot. ikuto said that she had a flat chest he lied. all i could do was hug her shes so cute. i felt a dark aura around ikuto
so i held amu tighter omg amu ikutos going to kill me for hugging you. I joked. well not really he will kill me for this later. Trust Me.

Ikuto's POV

oh kukai is so dead i grabbed amu from kukai and cuddled her in my chest. i gave kukai the back~off~she's~mine~look
he just gave me the ikuto~i~thought~we~were~friends~look i smirked amu was just blushing in my lap she is so cute.
kukai started to talk. "oh look at the time ig2g kukai said ill be back amu he said pecking her cheek"
oh he did not just....what ever. Amu was cherry red. "bye kukai she yelled".

amus pov

Kukai is a really nice person ikuto is luck i wish i had some one like that that cared about me that much. I started to cry
"Amu ikuto said are you sleepy cause i have the bed made if you are" I got it i said im going to sleep now good night.
Ikuto got in bed next to me and kissed my neck up to my head i blushed. After a whlie i fell asleep.

chapter 3 nightmare
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here's a preview of chap 3

AMU'S POV

stop i didn't do it i did not kill mama why do you hate me?
"AMU I HOPE YOU DIE FROM THIS GUN her father said "
AHHHHHHHHH when i woke up ikuto was holding me in his arms i was sweating
an crying im so sorry so sorry i did not mean to kill her it just happend
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Aww...nice story so far...
I agree with the person about quotation marks and all, but maybe you could also drop a line when someone different is talking like in books. then i'd be easier to read, no offense or anything. =)
good story though, so far!
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its a great fanfic so far and i agree with the quotes you keep randomly puting them in places but not to be mean or anything im just saying this to help you get better with the quote problem
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meow! lol ok ill keep trying

chapter 3 the nightmare

Hi amu, how are you? I'm fine but who are you? amu asked a bit confsued.
Well amu, thats mean you don't remeber your own father. I mean you killed your mom the least you can do is rember me.
Amu blinked what the hell are you talking about i don't have a father....anymore.
WELL YOU SHOULD, IF YOU WEREN'T BORN YOUR DAMN MOTHER WOULD BE ALIVE. He raised his voice abit.
I never killed her no one trust me. I never even had a clue what was going one damn it. amu said.

Then every thing went dark. All you could here was the wind and screams of amu when she was a child.
"Daddy look what i made. Do you like it? Amu said". (its kid amu btw)
No, I hate it its almost as ugly as you. amu's father said in a cold voice.
I'm sorry, i'll go to my room now. Amu said in a heart broken tone. I'm sorry I can't make you happy dad.
No, your not going to you damn room. I'm done with you, he said throughing a glass bottle at her face.
Amu just cryed, her cheek was bleeding big time what could she do fight back? No, she just a little girl.
Amu's dad pulled out a knife, You can die no......

AHHHHHHHHHH amu screamed in the dark room. Ikuto was beside her.
What happend, are you ok? he said with a worried look.
I'm sorry for this she said in a scared voice. she got up and ran out the door. Amu ran until she found her self in a black ally.
Amu, whats up, why are you crying?
Amu fliched who's there? what do you want?

And egg came from amu chest. Hello, my name is ichigo your shugo chara!
shugo chara? amu said.
Yes, shugo chara. amu chan you will never die as long as you beleive, its not your fault your mom died. She just wanted to have her very own kid one that she could care for. Now i want you to sing to the moon like you always did ok.
Amu just nodded.

I so do not own this song...

Evey heart inuyasha english

Tell me babe, how many do I shed my tears?
EVERY HEART, every heart is not a gentle yet
Shall I do, I can never say my loneliness
EVERY HEART, doesn't know so what to say or what to do

Was afraid of darkness cause I felt that I was left alone
So I prayed for help to distant million stars

Round and round the planets revolve around the sun
And we always seek after love and peace, forever more
Growing, growing, woe baby we can work it out
Look up at the sky, every heart is shining on today

Show me now, what kind of smile do I come across
EVERY HEART, every heart can take a step towards dreams
All of us, what to take a lasting happiness
Whenever you feel sad, I wanna hold you and give you a sound sleep

Someday every heart's gonna be free and easy
We have peace of mind
Someday all the people find the way to love

Goes and goes, the time goes on we are not alone
We live on together and we will find some precious things
Sometime we will smile sometime we will cry somehow
Don't forget believe in yourself, tomorrow's never die

There are the warm heart places on my mind
In my earlist day's there and it's SO SWEET,
There are many stars they have talk with me so kind
They say yes always time's a friend of mine, so shine

Round and round, the planets revolve around the sun
And we always seek after love and peace forever more
Growing, growing, woe baby we can work it out
Look up at the sky every heart is shining all today

Goes and goes, the time goes on we are not alone
We live on together and we will find some precious things
Sometimes we will smile sometime we will cry somehow
Don't forget believe in yourself, tomorrow's never die

When amu was done. she sat down

Ikuto's pov

Why did she do that? I ran out with her I lost her damn it. But then i heard wonderful singing i ran towards it hoping it was
amu. Amu i called. It was her all i could do was stare I could see tears fall down her face as she was singing.
When she was done. I ran and held her in my arms. The wind was making her shiver but all i could do was look at her the moon
shined off her face. I wanted to kiss her but i knew i could not she's 12 i'm 17. I would feel like an ass if i did that.

Done man i suck
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chapter 4: school

Amu im going to enroll you in seyo high.Ikuto said.


LOL sneek peek
This chap will have some tadamu

tadase is so gay
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i agree no offense tadamu fans wait they wouldnt be here bcuz they were scared off by chapter 1 x]
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