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Being More

It was her, a step in front of me.
Always better, always more than I could be.
It was her, that got all the envious stares,
The ones I had only dreamed.
It was her, who never strayed from her path;
Getting the best spots in the limelight.
I was never like her.
Later, I thought, I was nothing.

It was her, who made me face my fears,
Because she knew that I could conquer.
It was her, who smiled at me and held my hand,
When I felt that I had nothing.
It was her, who spoke the truth and looked through lies.
Something I new I could do.
I was never like her.
Later, I thought, that didn’t matter.

It was her, who tried to pick up my broken heart.
Sticking it back together when I was too frail.
It was her, who told me I could become big,
And do what I always wanted.
It was her, who gave me confidence,
So that I could go one step further.
I was never like her.
Later, I thought, I didn’t want to be.

It was her, who explored all her possibilities,
And always kept the time for me.
It was her, who watched me grow,
Seeing me shine the way I always wanted.
It was her, who kept holding my hand.
Gripping tightly so that I couldn’t let go.
I was never like her.
Now, I think, I am more.
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Posted 4/11/09 , edited 4/11/09
An Excellent Poem

You could be a poet.

the poem here can be in 4 situations, i Guess.

1. Girl Friends
2. boy and girl
3. teacher and student
4. Very complex 1 - person and shadow person ( the person he wished himself to be)

Let me guess. I use the situation 1 to explain the poem. ( Hope you don't mind my comments)

This poet is about how the person felt overshadow by her best friend in terms of skills, confidence,characters ,looks etc.
She got jealous or envious because of the attention drew by her best friend. Her best friend
best her in everything, making her feel pathetic in the beginning.

After Sometime, through observations, she began to feel less and less inferiority towards herself.
In the end, she realised that she had became more and more like her friend.

Through pushes and encouragements from her best friends, she gained the confidence boost
in order to climb the ladder of society and shine. Her endless support and encouragement
heals the frail heart (having suffer from emotional pains) of the narrator and guide her
slowly to her dreams.

She taught the narrator that a well build character and steadfast attitude in
the adversity of rolling trouble could reap benefits if she is brave to
see it through. The Courage to Dream (It was her, who told me I could become big,)
, The Courage to Stand up Again even suffering bouts of failures
(Sticking it back together when I was too frail.)
AND the Courage to take actions and risks
( It was her, who explored all her possibilities,)


PS: Thank you for the poem, i really felt a lot of emotion in this poem. This poem is very real.
You can be a talented poet, having seeing a few of your works . I think you are Great, Keep up
the good work, Pardon me for the analysis, my poem analysis skill is at low level.
(long time never used alreadly)
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Posted 4/16/09

ligersay wrote:

An Excellent Poem

You could be a poet.

the poem here can be in 4 situations, i Guess.

1. Girl Friends
2. boy and girl
3. teacher and student
4. Very complex 1 - person and shadow person ( the person he wished himself to be)

Let me guess. I use the situation 1 to explain the poem. ( Hope you don't mind my comments)

This poet is about how the person felt overshadow by her best friend in terms of skills, confidence,characters ,looks etc.
She got jealous or envious because of the attention drew by her best friend. Her best friend
best her in everything, making her feel pathetic in the beginning.

After Sometime, through observations, she began to feel less and less inferiority towards herself.
In the end, she realised that she had became more and more like her friend.

Through pushes and encouragements from her best friends, she gained the confidence boost
in order to climb the ladder of society and shine. Her endless support and encouragement
heals the frail heart (having suffer from emotional pains) of the narrator and guide her
slowly to her dreams.

She taught the narrator that a well build character and steadfast attitude in
the adversity of rolling trouble could reap benefits if she is brave to
see it through. The Courage to Dream (It was her, who told me I could become big,)
, The Courage to Stand up Again even suffering bouts of failures
(Sticking it back together when I was too frail.)
AND the Courage to take actions and risks
( It was her, who explored all her possibilities,)


PS: Thank you for the poem, i really felt a lot of emotion in this poem. This poem is very real.
You can be a talented poet, having seeing a few of your works . I think you are Great, Keep up
the good work, Pardon me for the analysis, my poem analysis skill is at low level.
(long time never used alreadly)


I don't mind at all! I really like the analysis! Thank you for all the compliments ^_^ This analysis is very thorough, and i am so glad that you could understand so much that i put in there. I'm writing from experiance here, with me and my friend (ahahaha u got it right) and our complicated relationship. It's true, i've learned to love all her talents and appreciate them, and i've learnt that i can be so great if i just try hard enough. I must admit, though, that sometimes her greatnessness (it's not even a word. She how gr8 she is?) gives my heart a jolt.
I love her dearly.
You are such a good person, to read through all my writing and really try to understand it.
Thank you so much
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Posted 7/10/09
that was beautiful
I truly enjoyed it :]
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YAYdudette123 wrote:

that was beautiful
I truly enjoyed it :]


Thanks, dudette XD I'm glad my poem's able to touch hearts. It gives u a feeling of ... appreciation, i guess
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It's really deep and touching ^_^ I totally agree with the others. You write beautifully and on a high level. For some reason though, it had a feeling that it's got more of a family member feeling when you refer to the "her" then a best friend. Maybe a sibling. Or maybe you see that friend as a member of your family?
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SilveenFox wrote:

It's really deep and touching ^_^ I totally agree with the others. You write beautifully and on a high level. For some reason though, it had a feeling that it's got more of a family member feeling when you refer to the "her" then a best friend. Maybe a sibling. Or maybe you see that friend as a member of your family?


I definatly see her as a sister XD Maybe that's why ...

You see, she's one of the big sisters i never got to know. At least, that's what i think.
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