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As the description says, you can write poetry here. Poetry expresses you. Criticsm would also be nice, to me, and those who will write poetry. Here, I'll do it first:

The Mask I Wear

Is it supposed to feel like this?
A whole in my heart,
never was it filled.
Love, what is it?
To be loved,
to fill that hole.
My heart has been ripped,
leaving a scar.
Day by day a mask is on my face,
Showing a smile
as I cry inside.
I suffer from this,
the loneliness in my heart.
Never known to be filled,
the hole remains there.
So a mask I remain to wear.


I never showed anyone this poem until now. I'm actually new at poetry, so criticize and write poetry all you want.
Posted 4/14/09 , edited 4/14/09
roses are red,
violets are blue
we are loved,
and so are you.

thats all i got sry
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thats ok, at least you replied. I got another poem, but I want others to post, too, should I post it???
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hey hey i've got another one quite similar as tidus'

like this:

r0ses are red
violets are blue
what will u do
if i say i love u?? ^^,

i have another one!

"enemies foreveer"
i tried to make friends
but she shook her head
i guess it's goodbye
coz i want to cut her head

she made fun of my trend
while i thought of something for it to end
she told me i sucked
so i sent her a truck

a truck full of fishes
that made her armpits rock!
i really hated her
from now and forever
until she finally died
and i can say i'm a winner!

-i and my classmate wrote that in our english seatwork! lol. it's just for fun ^^,
Posted 5/9/09 , edited 5/9/09

broken16_25 wrote:

hey hey i've got another one quite similar as tidus'

like this:

r0ses are red
violets are blue
what will u do
if i say i love u?? ^^,

i have another one!

"enemies foreveer"
i tried to make friends
but she shook her head
i guess it's goodbye
coz i want to cut her head

she made fun of my trend
while i thought of something for it to end
she told me i sucked
so i sent her a truck

a truck full of fishes
that made her armpits rock!
i really hated her
from now and forever
until she finally died
and i can say i'm a winner!

-i and my classmate wrote that in our english seatwork! lol. it's just for fun ^^,


DUDE! thats a really good pick up line!!! lol are u gonna put yur's liv???
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xXxtidusxXx wrote:


broken16_25 wrote:

hey hey i've got another one quite similar as tidus'

like this:

r0ses are red
violets are blue
what will u do
if i say i love u?? ^^,

i have another one!

"enemies foreveer"
i tried to make friends
but she shook her head
i guess it's goodbye
coz i want to cut her head

she made fun of my trend
while i thought of something for it to end
she told me i sucked
so i sent her a truck

a truck full of fishes
that made her armpits rock!
i really hated her
from now and forever
until she finally died
and i can say i'm a winner!

-i and my classmate wrote that in our english seatwork! lol. it's just for fun ^^,


DUDE! thats a really good pick up line!!! lol are u gonna put yur's liv???


hahah! thanks bro!
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Posted 5/9/09
Yay!!! someone write somethin'. And yes, tidus I will put mine up:

The Open Door


I see a door
I knock on it, no one answers
I continue going onto other doors,
Waiting for one to open
Why won’t anyone answer?
Will anyone accept me?
I go to a door,
A beautiful golden door,
I knock on it,
The door immediately opened,
The man tells me I am welcome to stay,
This man, he let me in when no one else would,
I walk in, thankfully,
Finally seeing Truth,
This man, He is Christ.
Posted 5/10/09
WOW 0.0 thats deep!
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Posted 5/10/09
kinda makes sense, i either write poems when I am really happy, upset or mad, even random.
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