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what do you think about my story so far?
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Posted 4/19/09 , edited 4/19/09
If you have not read my story it is called Ryosuke's high school life and you cn find it on my pages!!! and it is completely fictional.

BE HONEST if you are going to comment or vote!!! its for school not because i want to become a writer!!!!

cus i dont want to be writer!!!!! ever!!!!! (no offence to those who do)
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Posted 4/19/09
cool story hansel
Posted 4/19/09
I'm going to break it to you nicely.

You're not supposed to make threads like this =[
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Posted 4/19/09 , edited 4/19/09
That was nice!

I will break it harsh~

YOU %$%*(#)$ YOU CANT POST #&#@*( LIKE THAT YOU #@@ F*(@#$
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26 / M / Tokyo-3
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Posted 4/19/09
u guize iz mean
Posted 4/19/09 , edited 4/19/09
No Personal Thread, please.
If you want your Story to be rated or
to be criticized. Go to sites like
fanfiction.com ..

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Posted 4/19/09
Here come's the verdict, before that, kindly correct this part:


whot ehy were. Our closest friends from our childhood


I thought the story was long enough for me to make a proper decision. At first I thought this was a cliche manga inspired love triangle between two best friends and the newcomer girl, at least you made a sudden twist at the end. At this time all I can say is that it's ok. Please continue to write more coz your story can spark an interest.
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Posted 4/19/09
Things you fail at
-grammar
-Capitals,commas, etc
-cliche story


sorry
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Posted 4/19/09
-_-
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Posted 4/19/09 , edited 4/20/09
There's lots of grammar and spelling errors.
=_=
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Posted 4/19/09
uhm...
there are lots of grammar and spelling errors...
anyways...you can't make threads like this...no personal threads please...
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Posted 4/19/09
yeh soz about that...I only just registered to fanfiction.com so i can't upload anything yet...so i decided to upload it here...really soz about the spelling and things...wasn't really paying attention...anyway if people can wait or want to read more I will put it up on fanfiction.com soon!!! so read it there!!!
Posted 4/19/09
But im too lazyyy AHHHHH im sorry
Posted 4/19/09
"I swear I saw black things coming out of her body..."

that line made me lol
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Posted 4/19/09
why the hell is this thread not closed yet >_>


oh yea btw, about ur story.... i was too lazy to read it
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