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A poem that i wrote about a year ago. I'm proud of it; it shows what i was thinking then, somehow. Let see who can uncover my thoughts.

If Only
If only I could see the time of day again.
Then things in life wouldn’t seem so insincere.
If only I could just open my eyes,
To this new and strong and dishonest world.
If only the black would turn to white;
My blindness fading with every breath.
If only I could reach out my hand,
To touch the fingertips of your smile.

If only laughter were so contagious.
So that I could laugh with all my heart.
If only time were easily stopped,
Its hands exposed from the clouds and boundaries of our humanity.
If only your caress didn’t feel so warm.
Maybe it would be that much easier to ignore.
If only hurt would turn to heal,
So the raw holes in my heart would disappear.

If only delusions could start a reality;
Someplace in which the truth did not scar.
If only you had nothing to lose,
So that I could leave the doors of your world without anguish.
If only we all knew what to do.
Make the right decisions – go forth, no pretenders.
If only muttering ‘no’ meant ‘yes!’
Maybe, we could still look through the curtains; see the hidden meanings of it all.

If only you understood.
If only I didn’t.
If only I could ignore the threats bubbling up inside me.
It aches;
Unbearably ripping through me.
Torturing.
But I do not mind it …
Because I know that, ‘if only’ is wrong.
Silent night, shinning star, my sun, you are my answer.
The one who rids ‘if only’.
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Let see

Let assume that the situation 1

1.Regrets
2. reflecting the pasts/ Reliving the past

The narrator had suffered some unhappy past with that of regrets that
if only she had those experience previous, the narrator would be more
prepared to face the outside world with a more positive outlook than
being tainted or confused by the real working world whereby the unwritten
rules are followed with fail.

Fair is foul and foul is fair
(means that white can become black and black can be white)

By growing with the realms of the reality, the narrator has been
disillusioned with friendship or relationship.

The narrator wished that he/she could be dose with more happiness
and laugh more openly with her/his heart.Also, the writer wished for time
to be stopped so more things that wanted to be done can be done.

It is easy to get hurt when deep in a friendship or relationship.
The narrator wishes to be a dream where the fantasy holds a better memory than
in the reality , so she/he would not be hurt again.

The narrator understand the laws of nature in friendship/relationship and wishes
that she/he could have the knowledge earlier so as to live a more happier life.
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Thank you for yet reading another of my poems ^_^
Yes, you're very right. The writer (me) has gone through a lot. I've learnt about things i wish i knew beforehand, i've seen things i wish i've never seen, and i have wished for a better reality.
But the thing is, even with learning so much, there's even more to be learnt, and i've recently been doing so. It's been hard, but i'm getting through it.
You missed something, though.
The last line, actually. 'you are my answer' really refers to more than one person; all my friends, really. Also, 'touch the fingertips of your smile' is referring to my friends, me not seeing their smiles for a while. It feels kinda weird analysing this poem; like i'm going back in time.

Maybe this is the key to teleportation.

Anyway, thanks for being so thorough. Again.
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The last line, actually. 'you are my answer' really refers to more than one person;n; all my friends, really. Also, 'touch the fingertips of your smile' is referring to my friends, me not seeing their smiles for a while.

The above 2 lines making me unsure for a moments, hehe, Your poem is good. My Suggestion is
that if you can get a real time poet who write poet to read it , he/she may be able to grasp everything
in perfect synco although sometimes some poems I wrote, my teachers don't understand some.
(PS; maybe i was using too much broken grammar).

Your comment of English is good.Thats make you easier to write better poems.It's a pity
not many people like literature and appreciation arts and poems.
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Posted 5/3/09

ligersay wrote:

The last line, actually. 'you are my answer' really refers to more than one person;n; all my friends, really. Also, 'touch the fingertips of your smile' is referring to my friends, me not seeing their smiles for a while.

The above 2 lines making me unsure for a moments, hehe, Your poem is good. My Suggestion is
that if you can get a real time poet who write poet to read it , he/she may be able to grasp everything
in perfect synco although sometimes some poems I wrote, my teachers don't understand some.
(PS; maybe i was using too much broken grammar).

Your comment of English is good.Thats make you easier to write better poems.It's a pity
not many people like literature and appreciation arts and poems.


Don't worry; me and u do XD Glad i culd help u.
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