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[Fanfiction] Bloodstruck Brothers
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Okay since a few people wanted to see my fanfiction i thought it was time to bite the bullet and post it! But i should warn you that it is TadaseXMe (in a kinda not way read it to find out what i mean!) and that it will have blood, horror, vampires(no, not like the ones in twilight and.........ummm..........I dont know! I am still writing this and i will try to update it as often as possible!
Oh! and Kiri-K does not own anything of shugo chara and probably never will( ) the only thing i own is my character and all that stuff!


Prologue(i think):

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=^-^= ooooooooh creepy anyway the next chapter is mainly funny....I hope.......anyway enjoy!


Chapter 1: Not the greatest start to the morning

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I finally finished this chapter at last! since You hadto wait for so long for me to finish this chapter I'll post up chapters 2 and possibly 3 today! So please dont hate me! But I should warn you that this could be a very long story!



Chapter 2: Blood (thanks to Aimz for the title!) : WARNING:blood (yeah duh!)


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I actually had this dream before which is what inspired me to write this story! And I'm a emo(but i dont slit my wrists) gothy type person so i like vampires and stuff! But i am still really girly so to be fair vampires kinda creep me out.........agh! I confused myself!


Chapter 3: Colour in a black and white world (Thanks to Aimz for the title)


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I'm sorry that it is taking so long to get to the action! But it WILL have action! Ugh! I suck, dont I ?!
BTW I do NOT slit my wrists I just thought that it would make a cool part of the story. And Kiwi is actually real and she wants me to say hi to you so..... " HI!"


Chapter 4: Scars (yay I came up with my own title! =^-^= )

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Okay I found my pink book but it had suffered extreme water damage, so there may be some parts that dont make sense or are written badly. Please don't blame me, blame my stupid cat!But yeah, cliffy! And BTW the song in the beggining is called "Oh Oh Oh Sexy vampire" by Fright ranger! I DID NOT WRITE IT AND ALL RIGHTS GO TO THE OWNERS!



Chapter 5: Confusion (thankies to Kimmie for the title!)



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YAY! I finally managed to finish this chapter! Just a little shoutout to anyone reading this: PLEASE COMMENT!
I've decided that if I don't start getting more comments then I won't update!
So, if you like this fanfic, then please COMMENT! Thankies! ^_~
Oh! And, the action is finally here! Read the next chapter to find out! But you'll have to comment!
I only want 5 comments! Thats it! And I'll write more!


Chapter 6: Surprise Encounter


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Sorry that this was a short chapter! And sorry that it took so long to update lol enjoy it anyway!
And please comment! because there is more action in the next chapter, and it would be a shame for you to miss out on it! lol jks but please comment


Chapter 7: Flames


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Lolz the description of the outfit sounded kinda slutty didn't it? whoops


Chapter 8:

No-one's POV


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lol should I make this chapter longer, (add in more of the story) it's kinda short


Chapter 9:




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okies! sorry it took me so long to update, but my life is starting to slow back down now (really difficult time) so I should be able to update more!

Chapter 10: Golden Saviour (lolz)


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Lol Hi Everyone! This is Kiwi! Kiri couldn't be bothered to update so I did it for her! Which may be why it might sound a bit different! whoops gtg Kiri is about to update her version of this chappie! I won't tell if you don't! C YA PEEPS!
(Ignore this, Kiwi was hyper *facepalms*)

PLEASE SKIP TO PAGE 10 FOR CHAPTER 11 AND ONWARDS
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Hmmm...good starting. I would suggest longer chapters, but you said this isn't the end of the chapter, so I can't wait to keep on reading! ^_^
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great!

i would suggest seperating into more paragraphs tho because sometimes after a long continued reading in ONE BIG PARAGRAPH i lose my place =P happened about 5 times when i read ur first *incompleted* chapter

BUUUT THATSS ALL AND IT WAS GREATZERS!

gotta go back into hiding*swings out the window*
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great!

i would suggest seperating into more paragraphs tho because sometimes after a long continued reading in ONE BIG PARAGRAPH i lose my place =P happened about 5 times when i read ur first *incompleted* chapter

BUUUT THATSS ALL AND IT WAS GREATZERS!

gotta go back into hiding*swings out the window*


Pfft.....HAHAHAHAHAHA! Are you on a sugar rush or something HAHHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Any way Thanks for saying it was GREATZERS! (HAHAHAHAHAHAHA) I tried to seperate it into different paragraphs so its easy to read. sorry about that!
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I've added chapter 2 but i might not be able to post chapter 3 up for awhile due to exam season, LOTS of homework,writers block and my 13th birthday on sunday. Sorry guys ! That is if anyone actually reads this fanfic!
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Title ideas for Chapter 2:
Blood

Title ideas for Chapter 3:
Colour in a Black and White World
Scarlet

(Advice: If you can't think of a title for your chapters, stick with one-worded titles)

(I'm guessing Tadase is a vampire in this right? If so, I'm begging you, please don't make him another carbon copy of Edward from Twilight! *shudders* lolz)
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Title ideas for Chapter 2:
Blood

Title ideas for Chapter 3:
Colour in a Black and White World
Scarlet

(Advice: If you can't think of a title for your chapters, stick with one-worded titles)

(I'm guessing Tadase is a vampire in this right? If so, I'm begging you, please don't make him another carbon copy of Edward from Twilight! *shudders* lolz)


I have no intention of that in any way! Yeah tadase AND ikuto are vampires in this...... is the title starting to make a bit more sense now?
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aimzstar24 wrote:

Title ideas for Chapter 2:
Blood

Title ideas for Chapter 3:
Colour in a Black and White World
Scarlet

(Advice: If you can't think of a title for your chapters, stick with one-worded titles)

(I'm guessing Tadase is a vampire in this right? If so, I'm begging you, please don't make him another carbon copy of Edward from Twilight! *shudders* lolz)


I have no intention of that in any way! Yeah tadase AND ikuto are vampires in this...... is the title starting to make a bit more sense now?


Ah, I get the title now... to tell you the truth, I didn't even think that Ikuto would be in this. sorry bout that earlier. I have a bit of an inner and intense hatred for Twilight lolz Maybe it's because of too much exposure to the TxA game, but when I first read the title I thought "Keen's in this!" even though I know he won't be. Damn OC creations (even though I didn't create him in the first place) lolz
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aimzstar24 wrote:


kiri-k wrote:


aimzstar24 wrote:

Title ideas for Chapter 2:
Blood

Title ideas for Chapter 3:
Colour in a Black and White World
Scarlet

(Advice: If you can't think of a title for your chapters, stick with one-worded titles)

(I'm guessing Tadase is a vampire in this right? If so, I'm begging you, please don't make him another carbon copy of Edward from Twilight! *shudders* lolz)


I have no intention of that in any way! Yeah tadase AND ikuto are vampires in this...... is the title starting to make a bit more sense now?


Ah, I get the title now... to tell you the truth, I didn't even think that Ikuto would be in this. sorry bout that earlier. I have a bit of an inner and intense hatred for Twilight lolz Maybe it's because of too much exposure to the TxA game, but when I first read the title I thought "Keen's in this!" even though I know he won't be. Damn OC creations (even though I didn't create him in the first place) lolz


Dont worry about it! I hate twilight as well. I actually fell asleep in the movie and while i was reading the book
Hmmmmm......I may have to put keen in there now! thankies for the idea!
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Okay Guys! I am really sorry to anyone that actually reads this fanfic but I have a little pink book that I write in, It has got the fanfic in. It has gone missing and I cant find it! ( I fail at life ) so there will be a delay on updates until i find that book! AND It's bluddy typical because I left it with ANOTHER unfinished chapter! Sorry! But i will find that book and i will update!
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why does it have to be about you
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Well its my OC(kiri's my nickname not my real name!) just like other stories. And It's my first fanfic and I'm only 13 so I didnt really have many ideas
yeah I know I fail!
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All chapters up to 5 are up!
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Aw Yes That was some Good Chapters you put on. I wish i had mine up but yet it was both a sucess and a failure cause i used to post chapters of my recent post "Grand Theft Chara" but some chapters had been deleted and there were going up to 12 full chapters but it stop at 7 cause Chapters 4,5,6,and 7 has been deleted mysteriously and its unknow of why. but yet there were pretty good chapters i made up and people did like it and of course were complaints of paragraphs splits and make words abit big to fit the screen. anyway you did a great job here ^^ really impressed
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Aw Yes That was some Good Chapters you put on. I wish i had mine up but yet it was both a sucess and a failure cause i used to post chapters of my recent post "Grand Theft Chara" but some chapters had been deleted and there were going up to 12 full chapters but it stop at 7 cause Chapters 4,5,6,and 7 has been deleted mysteriously and its unknow of why. but yet there were pretty good chapters i made up and people did like it and of course were complaints of paragraphs splits and make words abit big to fit the screen. anyway you did a great job here ^^ really impressed


Yay! Thank you! =^-^=
I was one of the people that read grand theft chara! It's a really good story, and you did a much better job than I could ever do!
Thanks again!
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