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Posted 5/9/09
I accept a serious critique, but I hope you won't post any flames!!!

Please tell me if I need to improve or anything, cuz it will help me realize my strengths and weaknesses in my style of writing!!!

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Posted 5/10/09
good job the more critical comments would come after you developed the plot but for now everything's looking good xD
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Posted 5/10/09 , edited 5/10/09
It was very nicely done! I really can't wait for the next chapter/update/post (whichever you call it)! Since it's only the Prologue and the first chapter, I don't really have much to say. It's just that you use past and present tenses both which makes it a bit confusing for me. But that's just a minimal thing. I'm glad you chose Writers Block to post your story! Keep up the good work and God Bless!

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Posted 5/17/09
awesome story ! as expected from you .. well it's a bit confusing for me xP but it seems os interesting please send mroe more xD hahahah
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