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hmm i think that hes a complex person to start with....i think that hes more of a cool person but has some cowardness ever since his parents died and so he hides himself from other people.

ohh!! his hair must be black =D it'll help shape his characteristics through the story. It also makes him more of a cool person
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heis name was already announced ... its Zell (but its for the time beeing)

i can tell the personalitys i would like him to have

he would be short tempered
he is mostly stupid but sometimes when its needed he says really smart things
he is actually cold to people because they have normal lives (most)
he doesnt talk much about his past ...
hes cool .... he uses black clothes
he understands people very well .... even through he doenst show it often
he is very cares really for the mouse Adrian ( adriantothemax the mouse was you idea so i think we should name it like that)
He is seeking revenge because someone killed his family

well i would like someone to think about the settings and the others

i am going to think about it aswell


how about...

all of the above, but with a little twist:

he's short. so he suffered from short people syndrome. he feels the need to make up for this lack of height in acting tough to other people. and this is natural, given that he grew up with no parents, there's nobody but himself to stand up from other people belittling him. but he doesn't realize this. he's too defensive to make any real friends. and too sensitive as well. when somebody says something about him, he'll take it as a personal criticism and lash out in return.
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as the story later progress though, he learns how to tone down this false sense of pride, and appreciate what real friendships are, and learn how to trust people
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No double post.. -- what is wath
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thats good supermalv

you shouldnt forget thats his lazy aswell .... because it ironic ... because he hasnt much time because of his ageing and still ... hes lazy.

and he is actually a coward thats looks tough .. and acts tough towards other people

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wait a minute...how old should he be? o.o
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Zell doesn't know that his parents were killed at first but one day Adrian the Mouse starts acting strange....
So when Adrian is still in his strange mood Zell comes along, Adrian suddenly mentioned Zell's parents name...this made Zell upset so right when he was about to leave Adrian says that they were murdered
This really made Zell angry so he starts shouting out questions to Adrain but all he could get from him is try Zon...try Zon...

Of course Zell is worried about Adrian so he goes to his instructor (later on he goes to another one(the one who has crazy powers)) and asks him about Adrian. He says that Adrian isn't a normal mouse...it was rumor that he was summoned by a power named Zon. So in order to find out about his parents' murder and to help Adrain he finds out how to do Zon.


i personnaly think its better when Adrian comes after he loses his parents ,
he apperas while Zell is sleeping beause zell summoned him because of his sadness
when zells wakes up Adrian is besides him
Zell doesnt know where Adrian comes from
and Adrian doenst tell him where he comes from
............ and so on
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well because of his ageing problem he should be 40 - 50
who looks like 15
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why do you guys write something very long, but make it shounen genre, if not then add in some action
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AngelTakaiX wrote:

well because of his ageing problem he should be 40 - 50
who looks like 15


lol and these girls are like chasing him but they don't know that hes like 40-50 xD (of course becasue of his cool looks =P)

Well if Zell wants to suceed Zon he must have some kind of power...what should it be? Like should the entire town have powers or like they all have individual specail powers (fire, ice, etc. )

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the name of the mouse could be Yuki
Edit - I just saw that you had already named the mouse...
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reckon = think.. hehe sorry it's a slang thing here on new zealand

ok how about this, guys...

When zell was about 6, he came home from a normal day of school, and find that his parents are murdered. before the reality sink in though, he felt somebody grabbed him from behind and chloroformed him.

Then, the story begins from this point. he suddenly wake up. in the middle of the street. confused and hungry, it was raining hard, but he didn't even feel cold. He starts to search for his house, but the area is very unfamiliar to him. At this point, fear is beginning to drive him insane. He didn't sleep that night, he kept running and running, asking people along the way where his house might be.. But nobody even turned and give him a second glance. He kept running until he feels his stomach is killing him. He tried to beg for food in the nearast food place (bakery, fast food/whatever you guys choose). But they told him to piss off. Every single shop told him to piss off. He falls off from exhaustion in a pile of bag of trashes in a random alleyway.

A wild disowned city dogs creeped closer on his sleeping body. It was a large ass doberman looking for food. A pack of them. without a warning one of them bit zell on the ankle. after groggilly wake up to a sudden realization he is about to die, his power manifest for the first time...
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TheFullEclipse wrote:


AngelTakaiX wrote:

well because of his ageing problem he should be 40 - 50
who looks like 15


lol and these girls are like chasing him but they don't know that hes like 40-50 xD (of course becasue of his cool looks =P)

Well if Zell wants to suceed Zon he must have some kind of power...what should it be? Like should the entire town have powers or like they all have individual specail powers (fire, ice, etc. )



wath about the power Zon which all people can use

and each person has an individual special abilty aswell

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lol
i dunno any ideas
but
more action and funny parts that make ppl laugh
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supermalv wrote:

reckon = think.. hehe sorry it's a slang thing here on new zealand

ok how about this, guys...

When zell was about 6, he came home from a normal day of school, and find that his parents are murdered. before the reality sink in though, he felt somebody grabbed him from behind and chloroformed him.

Then, the story begins from this point. he suddenly wake up. in the middle of the street. confused and hungry, it was raining hard, but he didn't even feel cold. He starts to search for his house, but the area is very unfamiliar to him. At this point, fear is beginning to drive him insane. He didn't sleep that night, he kept running and running, asking people along the way where his house might be.. But nobody even turned and give him a second glance. He kept running until he feels his stomach is killing him. He tried to beg for food in the nearast food place (bakery, fast food/whatever you guys choose). But they told him to piss off. Every single shop told him to piss off. He falls off from exhaustion in a pile of bag of trashes in a random alleyway.

A wild disowned city dogs creeped closer on his sleeping body. It was a large ass doberman looking for food. A pack of them. without a warning one of them bit zell on the ankle. after groggilly wake up to a sudden realization he is about to die, his power manifest for the first time...


and Adrian a mouse appeas and tell zell to run he will take care of the dog

Zell runs away but after a while he stopps and looks back

when he searchs for the mouse and the dog he cant find them

Suddenly Adrian talks to him from his shoulder
"where are you looking at?"

Zell scared falls on his bottom

... and so on
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