Post Reply [TRAINING] Entrance exam for Writers
Posted 5/23/09 , edited 6/19/09


Before PMing a Master/Mistress for a request(See, the Masters and Mistresses page first to see the Artist and the Writers), Please do this simple test. This test will enable your inner self to speak, to hear, to comprehend.

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First, look at these three pictures closely and look at the genre given

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Second, think of a short story about these pictures

3. Lastly, post it down here. Make it your greatest idea!!!

4. Have fun and goodluck!


**NOTE: THIS CHANGES EVERY 2 WEEKS**

Genre: Tragedy







I'll come back here in a while and see results. If your grade is exactly/higher than 75% you may request for me.


RESULTS:
1.lai- 87.9%
2.purpleskye- 88.9%
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Posted 5/25/09 , edited 6/3/09

. REVIEWED .
Posted 5/25/09

Iai wrote:
Your short story:


JUDGEMENT:
Very good! Decent work! Very imaginative and flowing. The only flaw to your work was lack of information about the two main characters. The best grade I can give you is..... 87.9%
I'm sorry if you think this grade isn't fair.. I felt that there was something missing to your work but you proved your worth and done well.
You have my gratitude and my Congratulations.....
You are now a Novice of Writing~ I accept your request for Training. Good luck!


Posted 5/25/09

Misha-chan wrote:


Iai wrote:
Your short story:


JUDGEMENT:
Very good! Decent work! Very imaginative and flowing. The only flaw to your work was lack of information about the two main characters. The best grade I can give you is..... 87.9%
I'm sorry if you think this grade isn't fair.. I felt that there was something missing to your work but you proved your worth and done well.
You have my gratitude and my Congratulations.....
You are now a Novice of Writing~ I accept your request for Training. Good luck!




arigatou!!! and i think its fair enough.
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Posted 5/29/09 , edited 6/3/09

. REVIEWED .
Posted 5/30/09

PurpleSkye wrote:


Very imaginative and unpredictable however, this story is meant for a 'manga' not a 'book'. There were a few grammar errors and a few repetitious words but the story was good though I found it.... somewhat optimistic in a way. Maybe you should try being a mangaka than a writer. It felt more an anime than a book really... sorry... but my most honest and highest score I can rate this is 88.9% .
(P.S. do try to improve your manner of describing and try not to use 'damn' always...)
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Posted 5/30/09

Misha-chan wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:


Very imaginative and unpredictable however, this story is meant for a 'manga' not a 'book'. There were a few grammar errors and a few repetitious words but the story was good though I found it.... somewhat optimistic in a way. Maybe you should try being a mangaka than a writer. It felt more an anime than a book really... sorry... but my most honest and highest score I can rate this is 88.9% .
(P.S. do try to improve your manner of describing and try not to use 'damn' always...)


At least I didn't fail! XD Anyway, I would have loved to be a mangaka but I can't draw. At all. So I'm stuck trying to be a good writer. XD Maybe reading all that manga is getting to me. And what do you mean by optimistic? Do you mean to say stories are supposed to be so tragic it sends readers into a flurry of tears? I don't know what to make of your comment but looking at the pictures you gave, I see some sort of a happy atmosphere (you know, blooming Cherry Trees; the seasons thing; and the quiet house [ or village or whatever that last one was]) so I thought it would make a good romance story. Anyway, about using 'damn' too much, I only used it twice and I know it was on the same paragraph but I was describing an irritated guy who just woke up late, so I figured curses would definitely be said. I'll work on my descriptions anyway, so thanks for the grade!
Posted 5/30/09

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Haha~ Okay~ It was meant for a manga not a book~~~Wat do u mean u cant draw!!?? That's impossible!!! Everyone has a way of drawing!!! I wanna see ur drawings skye!!
Posted 5/31/09 , edited 5/31/09
"Seasons may change like people do but remember that I'll always be beside you."

Lies. All lies. Don't tell me promises you can't keep.

"The victim has been identified to be a sixteen year old boy, with bleached blond hair and brown eyes. He died because of blood loss after the hit-and-run incident. We have yet to find the culprit and any witnesses who can help us find it, please come forward and call us..."

I froze. My heart fell into my stomach, and the living room felt so hot, too hot that I began to sweat, cold sweat. Fear and dread crawled through me. Please not him.. not him...

"The boy's family has come forward, and it seems that his name is.."

No...Please God..

"Ryan Connors."
______________________________________________________________________

It's been almost a year since his death, but it's still affecting me. Surprising, how in one blink of the eye, a life you love can be snatched away from you. He told me that he'd always be beside me, but where is he now? A lie. I should've known.
I fingered the locket still hanging around my neck, bringing back flashes of memories.

"I'm surprised with you Rhynn. You've changed so much. Where's that fighting spirit of yours that I love so much?"

"Who are you? How did you get into the house?" I glanced around and saw nothing. The window was open, and a cool May breeze flooded the house.

"Well getting into the house was easy. Being translucent and all that. Makes it easier to float through walls."

My eyes widened. "Ry? Is that you?"

"Technically yes it is me. It's harder for you to see me than for me to see you, but I'm here."

"I'm hallucinating now. It's gotten so bad. I'm dreaming that I can hear your voice."
Hearing his voice again felt so surreal. I pressed my two fingers on my forehead and tried to force myself to realize that it was impossible for me to hear his voice when he's beyond the grave.

"They warned me something like this might happen. Let's go to that place, our place and I'll prove to you that I am here, I've always been here."

____________________________________________________________

We went to the park, where we used to always hang out and tell each other stories. The park was beautiful, it was complete with a little brook running through it and a row of cherry blossom trees lining up the path.

"I need to prove to you that I still exist."

We went to the brook and he asked me to look into it.
I gasped. It was impossible, I could see him in the crystal clear water, my reflection.. and his.

"You didn't dye your hair blonde like you threatened me you'd do."

He said it jokingly, trying to tempt laughter from me. But I still felt so sad.

"No, I kept it because I remembered that you liked me with my auburn hair long."

"Yes. I do." I saw his glassy eyes in his reflection like he was the one who wanted to cry. Well he wasn't the only one.

"I need to go soon."

"What? No! Don't! Why can't you just stay here?" I demanded on the verge of tears.

"This was a one-time deal. I was worried, because you looked so depressed. I had to come back and tell you to cheer up, and move on. Be happy okay? Everyone else around you is as anxious about you as I am."

"But I love you. I can't just forget you and replace you with someone else."

Tears fell down my cheek. I felt his icy touch caressing my cheek, tracing the tired lines below my eye. "Don't be stuck in the past with me forever. I demand that. "

I stayed silent, and we walked side by side through the cherry blossom row. The flowers were in full bloom and proud in all its pink splendor, for a moment both of us just watched the cherry blossom sway side to side, surrendering itself to the spring breeze. I sighed.

"When are you going?"

"In a minute."

"I didn't think you'd be able to see the cherry blossoms again."

"It's beautiful this time of year isn't it? It brings the colour back to this park."

I didn't know what to say anymore. It was all too overwhelming.

"You're still wearing the locket."

Instinctively, I touched it tenderly. "Yes, it's one of those dear, special things that I still have from you."

"I'm still wearing mine as well."

Thinking about it for a minute, I realized that I probably look like a lunatic talking to herself.

He laughed. I was confused for a second but it dawned on me that I said the thought out loud. It got me giggling as well.

"I have to go now."

"Don't."

"I'm sorry. Remember, I'll always be with you, watching you and keeping you safe. So smile okay? Promise me that. I love you. "

I nodded, and fresh tears appeared, but I smiled. For his sake, I smiled like I've never smiled before.

"That's better." Then, a gust of strong wind seemed to blow him away, into the heavens.

"I love you too. Forever and now."

A/n



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Posted 5/31/09

Misha-chan wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:




Haha~ Okay~ It was meant for a manga not a book~~~Wat do u mean u cant draw!!?? That's impossible!!! Everyone has a way of drawing!!! I wanna see ur drawings skye!!

Maybe I could get someone else to turn it into a manga for me. XD Well, I CAN draw but you know it's so bad that I feel that it's not really drawing at all. It's weird really, since I have an uncle who's an artist. >.< LoL. I can draw stick people pretty well though if I do say so myself! XD Other than that I'm hopeless as an artist. XD
Posted 5/31/09

PurpleSkye wrote:


Misha-chan wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:




Haha~ Okay~ It was meant for a manga not a book~~~Wat do u mean u cant draw!!?? That's impossible!!! Everyone has a way of drawing!!! I wanna see ur drawings skye!!

Maybe I could get someone else to turn it into a manga for me. XD Well, I CAN draw but you know it's so bad that I feel that it's not really drawing at all. It's weird really, since I have an uncle who's an artist. >.< LoL. I can draw stick people pretty well though if I do say so myself! XD Other than that I'm hopeless as an artist. XD
Nothing is hopless~ Stick people is okay! At least its still A DRAWING!^^ I'll help you! I promise~~ Do you want to see how I draw? I can give u a tutorial!~

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Posted 5/31/09 , edited 5/31/09

Misha-chan wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:


Misha-chan wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:



A few tips would be nice. Ohhh... I wanna see! XD
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