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Posted 6/7/09
Writing is one of the best way to express your feeling, here YOU could go wild and write anything you want. From poem to short stories, long stories, monolouge or even plays. It doesn't matter, just be free to your imagination.




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Posted 6/8/09 , edited 6/12/09
Ok here is the last poem I made:

Going To Heaven

I have waited and waited
my patience running thin
I'll do it myself
don't care if its a sin

I stand there and watch
Its too much to bare
I want someone like that
Someone that would care

For this, I'm banished from above
Throw me to the crocodiles
Still I won't change
I'll still be me with smiles
on my face

My wings taken away
Can't fly to cloud nine
Sooner or later I'll get there
and get passed the forbidden cross line

I'll have my happiness
don't need your permission
Saying I'm never going to get it
was on my part fiction

I will find him
that special someone for me
I'm going to heaven
Just wait and see


I'm a bit shy about sharin' soo hope you liked it
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Posted 6/8/09
just something I put together a looong time ago ... So its not very good^^ But I guess there is no right or wrong in literature^^

I dream of a lost childhood dream

I hope against hope for hope

I light a candle in my window

I look at my reflection in the window

I look for fire in my eyes

But all I see is darkness

In my eyes the only light i see is a reflection

the same light that everyone can see in me

the same light that i can not feel

the same light that tent my childhood dream

Will I forever be a prisoner to my dreams?






Posted 6/8/09

hai, i love your poem V 'the name is ambigouse(i loved it^^) i though u really mean heaven (death)^^ it really GOOD and i like ur rhyming very much^^ i really like the fourth stanza.. now i am really hoping to see more of your poems>.<

and dia, i love the ending it very beautidul~~ prisoner to my dreams.~~hehe it has alot of parallelism, which create nice rhyme^
hehe, i never thought u wrote poem though, and on that topic i never write poems too. this will be my second time, i just wrote it now!! hehe just have alot of emotion at the moment^ so go easy on me guys. bad and the good^thanx


there are no tears
eye smear
blocky nose
red as tomatoes

there are no physical pain
or any spraine
no heartpain.

but it hurt
feeding on me
eating inside of me
chewing on each piece
of flesh visible ouside of me

it in every part of me.

feeding in and grabing
each of the sun shinning
lighting inside of me

am falling in that pit of ink
leeking at the bottom sink
swallowing deeper and deeper
into the false hope of despear

sewing in and hiding that fake smiles
tanishing the within beauty
weathering; sleathily slyly

that the jelousey living inside
of me!
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Posted 6/9/09
lol aww thx i saw a picture n it gave me the idea...u know i have countless poems but only a handful have titles becuz of that i dont show my poems

so ya dia i love the endin of your poem as well...i think that endin a poem with a question makes the readers get into deep thoughts...normally a dream is meant 2 be a good thing but u put prisoner in the same sentence which causes readers to wonder why...so ya great job!!

and dear sweet blue, your poem is the first poem i have read that described jealousy in the way u did...i really like the sixth stanza it made me think that once u give up what u see won't be pleasant for anyone n it will hurt u the most...better to accept it n take the time to heal the damage that has been done already in the struggle instead of goin on until u shatter...great job!!
Posted 6/10/09
ARIGATOO^^ i cnt spell but you can feel the gratitude right??? hehe
you know when you are in that feeling everything just came together. It amazing when you could express your feeling on a piece of paper or text^^ yeah!! heheeehe>.<it like when i tries to write poem it never come but when i dnt want to; but feeling really down it just flow out of me. AND that really true, you will be the one that are shatter ^^ it painful~~
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Posted 6/11/09
thx both of u^^
GoddessV: I like the start of your poem :
I have waited and waited
my patients running thin
I'll do it myself
don't care if its a sin But I think u should write "my patience is running thin" because I am guessing u don't mean it as in a person getting medical treatment^^ I might be wrong tough I'm not very good in English^^

And i really like the way u talk about jealousy^^
This: "feeding in and grabing
each of the sun shinning
lighting inside of me" I love this part!!
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Posted 6/12/09
thx dia ill fix it i never noticed it ^_^

ok umm here isanother poem a write like 3 months ago



Envy Not

Everyone craves her
Desires as sharp as razors

They want to taste her passion
not caring in what kind of fashion

Willing to pay any amount
to numbers you can't even count

She stands there smiling
and the meaning known as finally

Her emotionless front
is what started this endless hunt

Giving her a taste of their erections
calling it the ultimate affections

Other can't wait for a chance of 'fame'
Everyone's a player in this twisted game

No way out but to win
and pray to never again be sucked in

She looks at me
willing me to see

She has all the powers
and everyone bows or cowers

A tear falls
and I hear her distant calls

What can be worse
when you believe you have a curse

She smiled at me
There was no spark to see

Nothing at all
and more tears fall

She tries to smile and fails
She died in society's jail

Her glory now a treasure
Next in line will now feel the pressure

Relief at last
but not in the past

Nothing left to see
only that she'll never be free

She disappears into the black
and screams 'I'm never coming back'

^_^
Posted 6/15/09
i really like this one godes(hope u dnt mind me callin u this^)

i like the used of third person pronoun; 'she' it make the story very much more interesting. It very simple but parallel, which make it lyrical but story like. also the ending make me wonder what really going to happen next because if she never be free then i wanna know where she will be; and what she will do. It a very interesting poem. i really hope you will write more!! i also really like the title; this is my type of poem. very free verse, simple but meaningful. ^^
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Posted 6/16/09
lol dont worry about calling me godes....and wow i never really saw my poem in that way...its really interesting to share creations lol its different....THANKS
Posted 6/16/09
hehe, thankz.. i love shorten ppl name. i think V is too short though, hehe~O_oi alsway contradict myself^^

it is, and it really fun too, but i think in a couple of week i will add more creation too, summer is here so there will be more time for creativities^^it will be funn^^
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Posted 6/17/09
lol thats good...i'll probably just read until my eyes fall out
Posted 6/21/09 , edited 6/21/09
hehe, i probs read alot this summer too, and stay up really late, oh well cant help being a night owls!
as i said above that was my second time writtern a poem, so this one is actually my first(it quite old). i wanted to make a series to it. PLEASE help me okeay, thank u godes^___^hehe


PERFECTION

Tears drop down her face
Worthlessly
Her heart is ripped into pieces
Unbroken
The fear is eating her
Silencely
Their ideal of perfection.

Slowly the yanking and
Nagging is torturing her ear.
Faster their delusion and

Fantasy cirling her in argony.
Faster, faster their hand clutchs
Rapidly; sufforcating her
Eating her
In their

Perfection

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Posted 6/23/09
this poem sounds a bit like peer pressure...i like it
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