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konnichiwa minna-san! well, u can post ur own stories in here..... and it shud have a banner.

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Illusion

by mitzushi

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Chapter I
-- The day before

Me and brother were walking to shop when he suddenly stops. "Brother?" I asked while he looks so amazed to the limosine in front of us, as well as everybody. I heard them saying, "The princess is here!" "hey Yasuo, did u heard the rumor, that the princess was lame? but she's so beautiful!" said brother in amazement. Then a man spread a carpet, as the princess get down. It's true! the princess was lame! she have lots of maids around her. "Brother, why did she go in a place like this?" "According to them, the princess go here to shop once a year...and we're lucky that we're here!" When I saw her face, I remember....a year before....

My mom scold me of breaking her most precious vase. And everytime I want to cry, I'll run to my secret place. It was full of trees, grassy surface, red roses and a river. I also love watching the sunset in there. While I was running, I suddenly stopped and saw a girl..... and she's crying too! How did she find this place? "You're crying?" I asked but when she saw me, she hides at the tree and looks scared. "Are you scared? I'll not hurt you, see? I'm crying too..." I said gently that she slowly get out of the tree. "I--I'm lost..." she said gently while wiping her tears. "Where are u from? are u a princess?" I asked seeing her elegant dress. "I hate riches" She said as she bow her head. "Really? but u dressed like a princess?" "Why did u care too much of my dress?" She asked as I bow my head ..."It's that, I hate riches too..." I said as my tears flow again, remembering what had happened to my family. Suddenly, I heard her crying out loud. "Why?" I asked as she stops and looked at me with teary eyes, "I hate--my father..." she said and cry again. She hates her father is the opposite of me-- I love my father...I miss him. Then I get near to her and lend a hand. "Can we be friends?" I asked as she slowly hold my hand. "Do u want to play?" I asked that she agree. On that day, we play and I saw the enjoymnet on her face. "Are you tired?" I asked. "Not so" she said with a smile. "Hmm....let's have a sit first ok?" I said and held her wrisk as we sit down. "Look! the sunset was pretty gud right?" I asked but she looks so amazed that I guess she didn't heard me. "Is it your first time to saw a sunset?" "It's my first time....to go outside..." "Huh? maybe that's why you're lost..." I said as I stand and pick a rose. "Here" I hand a rose to her as she slowly accept it. "Thank you,.." she said softly while still looking at it. "By the way, where did u live?" "Unwanted place" she answered that makes me shocked and confused. "Unwanted place....I'm living there too..." I answered whjen I saw her tears flowing. "You're my first friend..." she said. "Yea, me too..." I answered with a smile. "Sorry! I have 2 go!" she said as she stood up and run. "Huh! wait!" After that, I didn't see her anymore. Unwanted place... I wonder if where it is...


==End of Chapter I==


Gomene if my english is not that good..
huh.. a bit tired... well, if u have any questions just ask me in any way u want
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Chapter II
-- A sudden feeling

"Yasuo? Yasuo...... are you alright?" asked brother seeing me out of mind. "Ah--brother?" "Look there's a careless little boy who suddenly poured a tea on the princess' dress...poor little boy...." I saw the princess' body guards scolding at him....while the maids are trying to wipe the mess. "Do u want to change clothes?" asked a maid. "No.." she just move her wheel chair then the little boy bowed at her. "Sorry!" he said, still apologizing. I hate...riches... I do hate rich people! I can't stop myself to shout, that, "I hate riches! I hate u all!!" They all looked at me, except for the princess. That I used to run. "Yasuo!" brother shouted. "I apologize!" He said and just follow me.

On the other hand, Kaiya knew that the boy a while ago, and her one and only friend....is the same.

I finally met him...But can he accept me? "Ms. Hiroshi, I guess we better go home now." said Ciara, my favorite maid who always care for me. "Yea.." I agreed and just take me home., as we reached the palace. "Do u ahve something u want to eat?" asked Ciara. "I want to rest... can u take me in front of the window?" I requested as she did. "Anything else?" "Ciara, I want to study.." "Oh, will I call ur tutor?" "In school." I said straightly. "Ah--Ms. Hiroshi, guess home study is better fro u.. since school is not gud 4 ur health.." "Can u, find the boy who shouted? and know his school?" "Huh?" "Please?" I really want to meet him again. "Ms. Hiroshi...." "If u'll not, I'll do it on my own..." I said and move my wheel chair. "Ah--Ms. Hiroshi--uhm, okay...just stay here..." She said and walk away. "Ciara...please?" I pleaded as I saw her pity on her face. "I will..." she answered and just leave. I looked at the window and remembered averything. Then I get the rose that was given by that boy. It's still alive..I took care of it for a long time, and will take care, until we'd meet again. "I waited u for so long... my friend..." He's the only one who gave me a happiness that couldn't explain. Everytime, I was thinking of him...and stiil hoping, that someday, I could play with him again...but I want 2 play with him, with two legs. I hope that he'll accept me... as his friend.

I was at the front of the window, and still thinking of the princess--and thye girl that I met--or, my friend...But we both hate rich people. It's still fresh in my mind, when father leaves us...
"You're fired!" shouted the owner of the company where my father works. "Please! it's just my only job! Infact, I have two sons..." he pleaded. "Don't waste my time! I don't need a stealer employee!" "I told u I didin't do it!" I saw it on my two naked eyes, how the man push and kick my father like a trash. They said, that my father stole a money from the company. But my father is a good employee...I know that...Days past, mom and dad always having their arguments 'cause of money. Until one time, he used to leave us. "Father!" I cried and wanted to follow him. But brother was holding me. On that day on, mom doesn't care 'bout us anymore. Until the day comes that I break her most precious vase, and met the girl. I hope, that someday....we'll meet again.


==End of Chapter II==

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Well written. I could understand everything, so your English is not bad.(And I'm not good in English)
I hope that you write Chapter 3 also
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veendey wrote:

Well written. I could understand everything, so your English is not bad.(And I'm not good in English)
I hope that you write Chapter 3 also


ahaha~ ok.. ok.. arigatou gozaimasu!!

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the italic words are just at the minds of the characters.

Chapter III
--Opposite hearts

"Yasuo!!" called brother seems nervous, as I run and saw the maid of the princess! I admit that i'm scared and nervous....that maybe they'll punished me of what I did. I just breathe deeply and walk into them. Then I saw my brother bowed down to them. "We apologized of what happened before!" Then he pulled me to bow too. "Ah-hehe.. there's no need to apologize, well I'm here to to ask some informations about this cute little boy." "Ah-c'mon! let's have a tea first!" said brother and prepare some tea. "Thank you." said the maid. "Uhm, does the princess got mad?" asked brother. "No....actually she got interested in him, I guess." said the maid pointing at me. "So what informations that the princess want to know?" asked brother seems so excited. "Your name is Yasuo right?" she asked. "Yasuo.....answer.." Brother sighed, but I'm still silent. "Ah-- yes! It's his name!" "Can I know if where's ur school?" she asked again but I still didn't answer. "TCR academy!" answered brother that I stood up. "Why?! why did she want to know?! to treat me like a trash? we're not your slaves! and not an animals!" I just run to my room and lock it. I'm sweating.. I did it again... It's just that, I don't want to lose another member again, which is my brother. After a while, I heard brother knocking at the door. "Yasuo, let me in." I opened the door while wiping my tears. "I know what u feel... u still can't forget the past." Said brother as m tears continue to flow. "The maid said that they have no intentions to hurt u." "They're still the same! rich people are still the same!" I shouted and look at him with teary eyes. "Yasuo..." "Sorry...brother--give me a rest." I said and just close the door." I know how hard for brother to work, for us to live...that's why, to pay back--I need to protect him...

I saw the car at the window. I hope that Ciara got the informations that I need. After a while, "Ciara!" I said in excitement. "ms. Hiroshi, the boy named Yasuo, he's living in the spring village, and was studying at TCR academy." "Thanks...by the way, how did he reacts?" I asked when I suddenly saw her worried face. "Ciara?" "Ah-- he apologized and-- he's happy to meet u.." said Ciara that makes me calm. "Really? uhm... can u accompany me to go to his house?" "Huh? ah-- u need to rest Ms. Hiroshi..." She said as she carry me to bed. "But I want to se him.." "May I ask if what is he to u?" "Did u remember my story when I was 5 yrs. old?" I asked while she's fixing the bed. "Oh...is he the boy who gave u a rose?" "yhea.. I want to -- meet him again... Ciara," "Yes?" "I want to study at TCR academy." I said as she stops and a bit shocked. "Ms. Hiroshi..." "Please?" I asked with tears. "Are u doing that to convince me?" she asked but I still continue crying. "Huh, ok.. but I'll call ur dad first.." "No!" I shouted. "but--" "He won't agree... besides, he don't really care for me..." "Ms. Hiroshi, u shouldn't say that...." But I just cry again to convince her. "Huh, for the sake of Ms. Hiroshi...even though, I know what might happen to me...okay, I will.." "Really? thank u!" I said full of happiness" "ok, ok.. but for now, just have a rest ok?" She said with a smile and leave. Huh, I can't wait for that time to come...

==End of Chapter III==
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well, I'm not going to continue this story (illusion) anymore since I'm really lazy !!! but I'll post a new which is also my new story entitled: 'Yumi' just hoping that u'll read it huh, gonna give u the details tomorrow. And, I just hope u post ur own story too !
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